淡化痕跡,把模板變成自己的作文

1、.淡化痕跡，把模板變成自己的作文一、分析真題：In some countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Somepeople regard this as pletely wrong, while others consider it as valuablework experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss bothviews and give your opinion.以上是劍橋中的考試真題，相信大家都已經非常熟悉了。我們

2、就一起結合此題，對雙邊結構的整體文章結構和遣詞造句做一個簡單的對比。1.引言段引言段是通篇作文的開篇之作，對于它的寫法多種多樣。但是無論怎樣書寫，切忌出現(xiàn)以下模式性的語句樣式：模板語言：Nowadays, the discussion about is a very controversial one. Those whocriticize. argue that, but people who advocate, on the other hand,maintain that這樣的模板相信大家不會陌生，它曾經受到無數(shù)考生的青睞。但是我們說過，這樣過于機械的語言，很難體現(xiàn)出考生對考題文字的理解

3、，更為糟糕的是，你的開頭有可能和無數(shù)人是重復的!下面我們就做一個簡單的對比：非模板語言：No matter in which country, children are, without any exception, regardedas the protected in society, not to mention making them involved in any forms ofpaid-work(調用背景知識，引出話題).The necessity of allowing them to make money with theirown hands is indeed worth

4、 discussing(結合對考題文字的統(tǒng)一轉換，自然流露雙邊討論傾向)2.主體段模板語言：1. The benefits of can be perceived in many aspects.In the first place, 分論點一. For instance, 例證 / 語言論證。In the second place,分論點二. 論證.2. However, has also given rise to a lot of problems.For one thing,For another, Finally,在傳統(tǒng)的模板里，雙邊結構的主體段只是簡單地分段論證兩方面的觀點，雖然將

5、兩種對立觀點展現(xiàn)的非常清晰，但是也難免落入模式化的俗套。做一個簡單的對比：非模板語言：a.讓步分析Admittedly, hardship and bitterness of life could drive people to beemature. Under working pressure, children think about finishing their tasksbefore the deadline instead of concerning how to kill their seemingly limitlessfree time. Work may be the on

6、ly priority of their life. It is fairly differentbetween taking a dollar from their parents and earning one by themselves. Onlythe tough reality can force them to get rid of selfishness and dependence ontheir parents, which is exactly one of the most urgently needed cures inparental education.雙邊結構的一

7、個重要特點就是雙邊論證兩種觀點，在這篇文章里可以先讓步論證一個觀點，這樣可以為后一個觀點的論證提供很好的對比。b.轉折過渡+提出觀點However, everything is mixed blessing. Employing children to work should beviewed as a harsh treatment and abuse to them. Kids, after all, unlike adults,are immature both physically and psychologically. They are extremely vulnerableto

8、 both occupational hazards and social evils. More importantly, children are atthe golden age for learning not only due to their brain structure but also theircuriosity and desire for knowledge. It goes without saying that the silly actionpermitting children to work for financial reasons is ridiculou

9、s.雙邊結構的第二段要論述對立面的觀點，但是不同于上一段的是，此段不僅要充分的客觀陳述一種觀點同時還要帶有觀點傾向，因為要完成文章的第二個任務-提出自己的觀點。筆者認為這樣的觀點提法比較自然，不需要另起一段提出而顯得比較呆板。3.結尾段模板語言：In the final analysis, I concede that to some extent whether the ultimateeffect of phenomena is good or not, one thing is certain that phenomenon initself is neither good nor ba

10、d. And it is the uses to which it is put thatdetermine its value to society. I am convinced that_.做一個簡單的對比：非模板語言：In conclusion, although there lies various excuses for letting the youngchildren work for salary, it is pointless that this way could benefit them interms of accumulating work experience and learning the meaning ofresponsibility. (自然流露觀點傾向)作為雙邊結構作文的結尾，需要總結全文，即主體段兩段的大意，同時要結合題目本身的特點提出鮮明的個人觀點。二、總結和上篇文章一樣，衷心建議各位考生：不要盲目追求所謂模板，要注重靈活度。筆者