(新高考)高考英語二輪復習課時精煉考向40 讀后續(xù)寫之動作心理對話描寫(解析版)

考向40讀后續(xù)寫之動作、心理與對話描寫在英語讀后續(xù)寫中，利用恰當的動詞進行符合特定情境的動作描寫，真實準確地描述動作過程，以“動”傳神，可以增強續(xù)寫語篇的靈動性。與此同時可以適當利用契合人物性格特點的心理描寫和對話描寫，使續(xù)寫部分更為生動。第一部分動作描寫一、動作描寫的3個原則①要準確：表現一個動作可以利用許多動詞，但應恰當利用最準確的動詞，刻畫對應的動作。②有過程：展示人物個性的動作時，應通過細節(jié)描寫展示出動作的過程，在續(xù)寫時，應按動作的先后順序敘述整個過程。③用修飾：在描寫動作時，可利用各種狀語，說明時間、地點、原因、伴隨等情況，使動作描寫更豐富。二、動作描寫常用的高分素材與肢體語言相關的動作描寫素材(1)head①Sheturnedandheadedforthedoor.她轉身朝門走去。②Heburied/put/heldhisheadinhands,greatlyannoyed.他雙手抱頭，非常生氣。③Manypeopleintheaudiencenoddedinagreement.許多觀眾點頭表示贊同。④Ifellasleepassoonasmyheadhitthepillow.頭一碰枕頭我就睡著了。⑤Hehung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowedhisheadinshame.他羞愧地低下了頭。(2)face①Herfacepaledwithfright.她嚇得臉都白了。②Abrightsmileappearedon/spreadacross/crossedhisface.他的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。③Herfacelitup/brightened/glowedwhenIgaveherthepresent.我給她禮物時，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩。(3)cheek①Colorrushed/flooded/rosetohercheekswhensherealizedshewasbeingwatched.意識到有人在看她，她頓時漲紅了臉。②Hefelthischeeksburningwithshame.他因為羞愧而感到臉頰發(fā)燒。③Hercheekswerewetwithtears.她淚流滿面。(4)eye①Heturnedhiseyestothedoorwhenheheardthehandleturning.聽到門把轉動的聲音，他向門那邊看去。②Tinasqueezedhereyesshutandbitherlip.蒂娜閉上雙眼，咬了咬嘴唇。③Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.她直視父親的眼睛，誠實地回答了他的問題。④Shetriedtositup,hereyesfixedonJoan'sface.她試圖坐起來，雙眼緊盯著瓊的臉。⑤Ifelttearswellupinmyeyes.我感到淚水在眼里涌出來。(5)mouth①Ourmouthsdroppedopeninsurprise.我們驚奇地張大了嘴。②MymouthstartedwateringwhenIsmelledthefood.聞到食物的香味，我開始流口水了。③MyheartwasinmymouthwhenIwalkedintoheroffice.我走進她的辦公室時，緊張得心都提到嗓子眼了。(6)hand①Shetookthechild'shandandhelpedhimclimbthesteps.她拉住孩子的手牽著他爬上臺階。②Hereachedforherhandandheldittightly.他伸手抓住她的手并緊緊握住。③Sheshruggedandspreadherhands.“That'sallIcantellyou.”她聳聳肩，攤開雙手說：“我只能告訴你這么多了。”④Sheshivered,rubbingherhandstogetherfiercely.她一邊顫抖，一邊使勁搓著雙手。⑤Herhandsshook/trembledassheliftedtheglasstoherlips.她的手顫抖著把杯子送到唇邊。(7)arm①Hewasrunningforward,wavinghisarms.他揮舞著胳膊向前跑著。②Hestoodtherewithcrossedarms,lookingangry.他交叉著雙臂站在那里，看上去怒氣沖沖。③Shefoldedherarmsandstaredathim.她交叉著雙臂注視著他。第二部分心理描寫一、心理描寫的2種方法心理描寫可以揭示人物的內心世界，表達人物的性格、特點、感情和思想等。心理描寫可以運用直接描寫和間接描寫兩種方法。①直接描寫：直接寫主人公的想法、感受、打算等，在具體寫作時，可用“Ifelt”“shethought”“hewould”等句式。②間接描寫：人物的性格不同，情緒不同，其所表現出的動作和神態(tài)也就不同，因此可以利用人物的動作和神態(tài)體現其心理，也可以利用語言描寫表現人物心理。二、心理描寫的高分素材(1)表“害怕”的心理①Mythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.我喉嚨發(fā)緊，雙膝發(fā)軟。②Ifrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.我嚇呆了，一動也不動。(2)表“憤怒”的心理①Herfacecloudedwithanger.她滿臉怒氣。②Hisvoicetrembledwithanger.他氣得聲音發(fā)抖。③Heletoutcriesofanger.他發(fā)出憤怒的喊聲。(3)表“悲傷和絕望”的心理①Hisheartsankatthenews.聽到這個消息，他的心一沉。②Overcomewithbitterdisappointment,helockedhimselfupinhisroom.由于極度失望，他把自己鎖在房間里。③Hewasabruptlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.他突然被拋進一個黑暗的世界，陷入絕望。(4)表“尷尬、緊張”的心理Sweatwaspouringdownmyface.汗水從我臉上滾落下來。(5)表“震驚”的心理①Shefrozewithshock,asifrootedtothespot.她吃驚得呆住了，就像在原地生了根似的。②Hereyeswidenedfurtherandhismouthopened.她的眼睛睜得更大了，他的嘴張開了。第三部分對話描寫一、對話描寫的3種表現形式①提示語在前，如Afewminuteslater,shesaid,“Grandmother,Iamfinishednow.”②提示語在后，如“HereisSusan！”thegirlscried.③提示語在中間，如“I'dliketogowithyou，”repliedSusan,“butIcannotfinishthetaskgrandmothersetmetodo.”二、對話描寫的3個原則在進行續(xù)寫時，應根據故事情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物特征靈活運用對話描寫優(yōu)化續(xù)寫部分的語言。利用對話描寫時，應注重3個原則。①控制對話的比重。對話雖有助于推動故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，但不能代替故事情節(jié)。讀后續(xù)寫的對話部分所占比重不應高過敘事部分的比重。②對話內容應符合人物特點。不同的人物有不同的身份和性格，因此他們的話語應與原文人物特點吻合。③對話內容應緊扣原文主旨。所寫對話應圍繞某一中心或話題，且應與原文主旨一致，這樣續(xù)寫部分的思路才是清晰明朗的，才能契合故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展。如果沒有一個固定的中心，隨意對話，就會顯得不知所云，偏離故事的主題。例如攻略3中的例題第一段中可利用母親與父親的簡短對話體現母親健忘的性格?！镜淅纠块喿x下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數應為150左右。(2020·浙江1月高考改編)“I'mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy，”saidthetall,thinteenager.Heeq\a\vs4\al(bentdown)tohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Heeq\a\vs4\al(stoodup)，eq\a\vs4\al(hugged)hisparents,andeq\a\vs4\al(smiled)，tryingnottolethisemotions(情緒)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyeq\a\vs4\al(hugged)andeq\a\vs4\al(smiled)throughmistyeyesandtheneq\a\vs4\al(laughed).Theboyeq\a\vs4\al(lifted)thelastbagontohisshoulder,andeq\a\vs4\al(flashed)abrightsmile.“Iguessthisisit.”hesaid.“I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay？”Hisparentseq\a\vs4\al(nodded)，andtheyeq\a\vs4\al(watched)asheeq\a\vs4\al(walked)outofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried,“WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup？”askedDad.“We'vetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy，”smiledMom.“Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy.”Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhensheeq\a\vs4\al(saw)thebox,sheeq\a\vs4\al(stopped).Sheeq\a\vs4\al(puthernoseon)it.Hertailbeganeq\a\vs4\al(wagging)(擺動)eversoslowly,thenfasterassheeq\a\vs4\al(caught)thesmell.Paragraph1Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Paragraph2Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.【描寫刻畫】1．細讀原文，明確敘述意圖原文敘述要去上大學的男孩和父母和小狗Poppy依依不舍地告別。Poppy自小主人走后便悶悶不樂，對自己愛吃的食物也不感興趣。男孩的父母決定找一個小狗陪伴Poppy。不難推斷出文章旨在描述Poppy是否又開心起來。2．根據段落開頭語，圍繞原文主旨，確定續(xù)寫情節(jié)確定敘述意圖后，定位續(xù)寫段落開頭語關鍵信息分別是“asweetlittledogappeared”和“Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhome”可推斷第一段續(xù)寫部分應敘述Poppy看到小狗后的反應和她的心情變化——是否轉憂為喜？而續(xù)寫部分第二段應敘述男孩回到家時渴望見到Poppy的心情和動作，以及見到小狗后的反應。3．體會原文動作、心理和對話描寫①eq\a\vs4\al(具體的動作描寫)：原文在前三段中利用了大量的動作描寫(具體動作在原文中已加灰底)描寫一家人道別時的依依不舍，同時利用多次出現的hugged和smiled暗示這一家人濃濃的親情。原文最后一段中的一系列動作(加灰底單詞)生動地描述Poppy見到小狗前的反應。②心理描寫：原文前三段中的“tryingnottolethisemotions(情緒)getthebetterofhim”和“notquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol”及“mistyeyes”體現男孩和他的父母在離別之際的依依不舍。第4～5段中的形容詞quiet,interested,sad,worried具體地描述出男孩不在家時這家人對男孩的思念以及男孩父母對Poppy的關心。③eq\a\vs4\al(對話描寫)：原文出現四處對話描寫，前三段在男孩離開之前的對話描寫，體現了男孩舍不得離開父母和Poppy的心情。原文最后三段中的對話描寫表現了男孩的父母想方設法想讓Poppy高興起來的迫切心理。4．沿用原文語言特點，完成讀后續(xù)寫原文在動作、心理和對話描寫方面不吝筆墨，因此續(xù)寫部分也應著重使用動作、心理和對話描寫?！緟⒖挤段摹縋aragraph1Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Poppyjumpedwithjoyatthesightofthelittledog.Sheloweredherheadtowatchitcuriously.Thenshebecamesoexcitedthatsheaccidentallyknockedovertheboxinanattempttogetcloser.Withtheboxtippingover,outcamethelittleone,whowasnotshyandinstantlygotfamiliarwithPoppy.Itdidn'ttakelongbeforethetwoplayedaroundthehouse,cheerfullyrunningaftereachother.Paragraph2Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.Hehadbeenmissinghisparentsandthedogsinceitwasthefirsttimethathehadbeenawayfromhomeforsuchalongtime.WhentheboycaughtsightofPoppy,hewentrushingtowardthedogandbentdowntogiveherabighug.Suddenly,theboynoticedthelittledog.“Ohmygod,whoisthis？”Hisparentslaughedatthelookofsurpriseonhisface.“It'sPoppy'snewcompanion.”saidMom.【檢測訓練】1.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Anelderlymanhadcollapsedwhilecrossingthestreet,andanambulancesenthimtothehospitalimmediately.Whenthemancametohimselfnowandagain,herepeatedlycalledforhisson.Fromawornletterfoundinhispocket,anemergencyroomnurselearnedthathissonwasasoldier.ThenursecalledtheRedCrossofficeinBrooklynandmadearequestforthesoldiertoberushedtothehospital.Soon,theyoungmanwasfoundandrushedtotheairportintimetoreachhisdyingfather.Itwasmid-eveningwhentheyoungmanwalkedintothehospital.Anurseledtheanxiousmantothebedoftheelderlyman.“Yoursonishere,”shewhisperedtotheelderlypatient.Theoldpatient'seyesopenedonlyaftersherepeatedthewordsseveraltimes.Theoldmanwastooweaksoitwasreallyhardforhimtostayawakeandhecouldvaguelyseetheyoungmanstandingbesidehim.Theoldmanreachedouthishandwithallhisstrengthandtheyoungmanrealizeditandimmediatelyheldit.Thenursebroughtachairfortheyoungmantositbesidethebed.Theyoungmansatholdingtheoldman'shandofferinghimwordsofloveandhope,allthroughthenight.Thedyingoldmansaidnothing.Thenursesuggestedthattheyoungmanmoveawayandrestforawhile,butherefused.Nowandthen,sheheardhimsayafewgentlewords.Thedyingmansaidnothing,onlyholdinghisson'shandtightlythroughoutthenight.Asdawnapproached,theoldmanpeacefullydied.Theyoungmanplacedhislifelesshandonthebedandinformedthenurse.Whilethenursedidwhatwasnecessary,theyoungmanwaited.Whenshefinishedhertask,thenursebegantosaywordsofsympathytheyoungmanneeded.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150詞左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Buttheyoungmanshookhishead.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Hereplied,“Iknewrightawayhewasnotmyfather."_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:Buttheyoungmanshookhishead.“Thankyou,butwho’sthatman?”heasked.Witheyeswideopen,thenursecouldn’tgetovertheshockbutstaredattheman,andtherewasadeadlysilenceforafewseconds.Seeingherpuzzledlook,themanshruggedhisshoulders,shookhishead,castuphiseyes,andsaid,“Maybetheyhavegotthewrongman.Actually,itiscommonforpeopletosharethesamename.”Noddingherhead,thenurseaskedwhyhedidn’tsayanythinginthebeginning.Paragraph2:Hereplied,“Iknewrightawayhewasnotmyfather.”Then,afteraquickglanceattheoldman,heturnedbackandadded,“ButIalsoknewthatheneededhissonsomuch.Ididn’tknowhowlonghehadn’tseenhisson,butIknewhemustmisshimalot.Assoldiers,wehavetopartourlovedonesforlongtosafeguardourcountry.Althoughheisnotmyfather,Iamhappytoserveashissonforthetimebeing,satisfyinghisfinaldesirebeforeleavingthisworld.”Theroomwassilentagain.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一位老人在過馬路時暈倒，被送到醫(yī)院，護士從他口袋里發(fā)現的一封破舊的信中得知他的兒子是一名士兵，于是通知士兵前來見自己的父親，士兵一直陪伴著老人直到他去世，最后護士才知道士兵并不是老人的兒子，士兵說自己希望滿足老人離開這個世界前的最后愿望?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內容“年輕人搖了搖頭?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽o士得知士兵不是老人兒子后的反應。②由第二段首句內容“他回答說：‘我馬上就知道他不是我父親了?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫兒子對自己的行為做出的解釋是希望滿足老人離開這個世界前的最后愿望。2.續(xù)寫線索：年輕人否認自己是老人的兒子——護士吃驚——護士詢問為什么一開始不說實話——士兵回答希望滿足老人離開這個世界前的最后愿望3.詞匯激活行為類恢復：getover/recover擔任：serveas/actas回答：reply/respond情緒類困惑：puzzled/confused快樂：happy/pleased【寫作亮點】[高分句型1]Noddingherhead,thenurseaskedwhyhedidn’tsayanythinginthebeginning.(運用了why引導賓語從句)[高分句型2]Althoughheisnotmyfather,Iamhappytoserveashissonforthetimebeing,satisfyinghisfinaldesirebeforeleavingthisworld.(運用了although引導讓步狀語從句)2.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Itallbeganwhenmyyoungerbrother,Chris,andIwentovertoAuntBarbaraandUncleHoward’sforThanksgiving.MyauntanduncleliveonafarmandChrisandIlovegoingthere.Oneday,UncleHowardhandedmetwoturkeyeggs.“Youkidsputthoseunderasettinghen,”hesaid,“andintwenty-fivedays,you’llhaveacoupleoffineturkeys!”Chriswassoexcitedthathenearlydroppedhiseggonthewaytothehouse.Webothstuffedourselvesatdinnerandthencouldn’twaittogohomeandtendtooureggs.Twenty-fivedaysseemedlikeforever.Finally,onthetwenty-sixthday,ChrisandIwalkedintothecoopafterschoolandspottedtwoballsoffluff,fallingovertheirfeetandlookingsortofconfused.Itwasn’tlongbeforethechickslosttheirfuzzandbegangrowingfeathers.ChrisnamedoneBill,andInamedtheotherTimothy.Idon’tknowwhathappened,butonedaywefoundBilldeadbesidethecoop.Chrisfeltterrible.Itoldhimthatfromnowon,Timothybelongedtohim,too.MomkepttellingusnottogettooattachedtoTimothy,becauseweweregoingtohavehimforThanksgiving.Butweneverpaidtoomuchattentiontowhatthatreallymeant.Then,onedaytowardtheendofOctober,DadpennedTimothyupandgaveChrisandmeinstructions.“Iwantyoutostartgivinghimcornalongwithhisregularfeed,”hesaid.“Wewantanice,fatbirdforThanksgiving.”AfterDadturnedandwalkedaway,Chrisbegantocry.“Don’tworry,Chris,”Isaidcomfortingly.“WellsaveTimothy,somehow.”“Whydon’twegivehimaway?”Chrissuggested.“No,”Isaid.“Ifwedo,he’lljustenduponsomeoneelse’sThanksgivingtable.”“Whatifwetakehimoutinthewoods?”“Healwayscomesbackatnight,”Isaid.Webothsighed.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按照如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:SuddenlyIhadanidea.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Toourastonishment,Timothywasgone!____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:SuddenlyIhadanidea.“Hey,Chris,youknowthatsmallcaveinthewoods?”Chrisnodded.“WecantakeTimothythere.We’llhidehimtillThanksgivingisover.”Feelingsoexcited,wejumpedupandgaveeachotherhigh-fives.Thenextdayafterschool,weleftTimothyinthecavewithanoldpeanutbuttercanfilledwithwater,andplentyoffood.Wepiledbrushovertheopeningtohidetheentrance.Paragraph2:Toourastonishment,Timothywasgone!Chrisbegantocry.Wesatthereforawhilewonderingwhathadhappenedtohim.ThoughIhatedtoadmitit,mythroatsuddenlyhurt.WhenwewentbackandMomsawIwasabouttocry,shecalmedusdown,andwetoldhereverything.Asspringapproached,onedayChrisandIwereplayinginsidewhenweheardMomscreaming,“Lookatthat!It’sTimothy.Heisback!”【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者的叔叔給了作者和弟弟兩只小雞，小雞孵化后，弟弟的小雞卻死了，于是作者把自己的雞交給弟弟飼養(yǎng)。十月底的一天，父親告訴作者他們要把那只雞殺死做感恩節(jié)晚餐，他們不愿意，于是作者他們把雞藏到了山洞里，結果雞卻跑了，作者和弟弟非常傷心，最后在一個春天雞又回到了家里?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內容“突然我有了一個主意?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者想出了什么方法來救這只雞，以及他們是如何做的。②由第二段首句內容“令我們驚訝的是，Timothy不見了！”可知，第二段可描寫雞走后作者和弟弟的反應，以及雞最后回到了家里。2.續(xù)寫線索：作者想出辦法——作者和弟弟藏雞——雞不見了——作者和弟弟傷心——作者和弟弟回到家里告訴真相——雞回來3.詞匯激活行為類隱藏：hide/conceal開始：beginto/startto裝滿：filledwith/fullof情緒類驚訝：toone’sastonishment/toone’ssurprise激動：excited/thrilled【寫作亮點】[高分句型1]Feelingsoexcited,wejumpedupandgaveeachotherhigh-fives.(運用了現在分詞作狀語)[高分句型2]ThoughIhatedtoadmitit,mythroatsuddenlyhurt.(運用了though引導讓步狀語從句)3.閱讀下面材料,根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。UnlikemostU.Snationalparks,Evergladesnationalpark,locatedinsouthFlorida,wascreatedtoprotectafragileecosystem(生態(tài)系統(tǒng))insteadofsafeguardingauniquegeographicfeature.Itisaheavenforawiderangeofwildlife,suchasturtles,snakes,lizards,theGrassfrog,Wadingbirdsandsoon,amongwhicharefierceAmericanalligators(鱷魚).Itissaidthatsomeofthealligatorsoftenappearintheareaswherepeoplelive,causingmuchdamage.Aterribleincidenthappenedonahotsummerday.Itwassohotadaythatnearlyeveryonefeltlikejumpingintothecoolwater.Alittleboysimplycouldn’tputupwiththeheat,decidingtogoforaswimintheoldswimmingholebehindhishouse.“Mum,itbeingsohot,Iwanttohaveaswim.”theboytoldhismotherwhilewalkingout.“No,Honey,therehasbeenawarningthatanalligatorfromtheparkhasappearedinthesurroundingarea.Itisdangerous!”saidhismotherinaloudvoice.Butthelittleboyrushedoutofthebackdoorlikeagustofwindbeforehismothercouldstophim.Hewasinsuchahurrytodiveintothecoolwaterthatheleftbehindshoes,socks,andshirtasheleft.Heflewintothewaterandenjoyedthecomfortablefeelingthatthecoolwaterbroughthim,notrealizingthatasheswamtowardthemiddleofthelake,analligatorwasswimmingtowardhim.Hismotherwaspreparingdinnerinthekitchenwhensuddenlyshecaughtthetwogettingcloserandclosertoeachotherasshewaslookingoutofthewindow.“Oh,MyGod!”shecouldn’thelpcryingloudly,gettingintoagreatpanic.Andtheningreatfear,sherantowardthewater,shoutingtohersonasloudlyasshecouldalltheway,“Alligator,Alligator!”Hearinghervoice,thelittleboybecamealarmedandmadeaU-turntoswimtohismother.However,itwastoolate.Somethinghorriblewashappening.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在在答題卡的相應位置作答。Justasheapproachedher,thealligatorreachedhim.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Remarkably,afterweeksinthehospital,thelittleboysurvived.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Possibleversion1：Justasheapproachedher,thealligatorreachedhim.Fromtheshore,themothergrabbedherlittleboytightlybythearmsjustasthealligatorsnatchedhislegs.Itseemedasifitwereanincredibletug-of-warbetweenthetwo.Thealligatorwasmuchstrongerthanthemother,butthemotherwasmuchtoodevotedtoletgo.Fortunately,afarmerhappenedtodriveby.Hearingtheirscreams,heracedfromhistruck,tookaimandshotthealligator.Seriouslywounded,theboywasrushedtothehospital.Remarkably,afterweeksinthehospital,thelittleboysurvived.Hislegswereextremelyscarredbytheattackoftheanimal.Andonhisarmsweredeepscratches,wherehismother’sfingernailsdugintohisfleshinherefforttoholdontothesonsheloved.Whenaskedtoshowhisscars,theboyliftedhislegsandthenwithobviouspride,hesaidtopeoplecomingtoseehim,“Butlookatmyarms.Ihavegreatscarsonmyarms,too.Ihavethembecausemymomwouldn’tletgo.”Possibleversion2：Justasheapproachedher,thealligatorreachedhim.Deeplyshockedbytheterriblescene,motherrushedtoherson,catchingholdofhimtightly,withallhermight.However,thealligatorwasmuchstrongerthanthemother.Inspiteofthis,motherwassodeterminedthatshewouldn’tletgoofherson,screamingforhelpatthesametime.Hearingthefrighteningcry,aneighborrushedout,withaguninhishand,tookaimandthenshotthealligator.Theboygotsaved,butseriouslyinjured.Remarkably,afterweeksinthehospital,thelittleboysurvived.Seeinghismotherandtheneighborsittingbesidehim,theboyhuggedhismother,withtearsinhiseyes,feelinggreatlyregretfulthathedidn’tlistentoher.Bothofthemexpressedsinceregratitudetotheneighbor.Withouthim,thesonwouldhavelosthislife.Andthentheneighborsuggestedputtingupawarningsignatthesideofthelaketoinformothersofthedanger.Theboyunderstoodthesignificanceofsafetyfromthenon.【寫作分析】本文是一篇記敘文。文章主要講述了在一個炎熱的夏天，一個小男孩不顧媽媽的反對和警告，到房子后面的一個舊水潭里去游泳，被一條鱷魚追擊，媽媽看到這一幕后，恐懼地跑向水邊，邊向小男孩大喊，邊盡力去救他。在與鱷魚的拉鋸戰(zhàn)中，媽媽沒有放棄，并在過路的人的幫助之下，救下了小男孩，將他送往醫(yī)院。【寫作步驟】范文一1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內容“Justasheapproachedher,thealligatorreachedhim.(當他游近她的時候，鱷魚已經靠近了他。)”可知，第一段可描寫媽媽與鱷魚在爭奪小男孩之間的“拉扯”，一個出于母愛，一個出于“饑餓”，不相上下，最終有人幫助救下小男孩。②由第二段首句內容“Remarkably,afterweeksinthehospital,thelittleboysurvived.(經過幾周的住院治療，小男孩竟然活了下來。)”可知，第二段可描寫這次鱷魚攻擊對于小男孩留下的傷疤，以及他的感受。2.續(xù)寫線索：媽媽拉住小男孩——鱷魚抓住小男孩的腿——媽媽和鱷魚的拉鋸戰(zhàn)——有人幫助——小男孩獲救送往醫(yī)院——鱷魚攻擊后的傷疤——男孩對于媽媽極力救自己的感受3.詞匯激活行為類①.抓?。篻rab/snatch/catch/holdonto②.奔跑：run/race/rush③.（使）受傷：wound/scar情緒類①.深愛：devoted/love程度類①.緊緊地：tightly/firmly②.非常/竟然：incredible/remarkably/extremely/much【寫作亮點】[高分句型1].Fromtheshore,themothergrabbedherlittleboytightlybythearmsjustasthealligatorsnatchedhislegs.(媽媽在岸上緊緊地抓住小男孩的手臂，而此時鱷魚也死死地咬住了小男孩的腿。)句子中使用了“(just)as”引導時間狀語從句。[高分句型2].Andonhisarmsweredeepscratches,wherehismother’sfingernailsdugintohisfleshinherefforttoholdontothesonsheloved.(他的手臂上有深深的抓痕，那是他的媽媽為了抓住她深愛的兒子而用指甲摳進他的肉里的地方。)句子使用“where”引導非限制性定語從句。4.閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。WhenIwas19,IspentpartofmysummeratanadventurecamponVancouverIsland,supervising(照料)agroupof10-year-oldgirls.Towardstheendofthefirstweek,Itookthemonacamping.Bysixintheevening,we’dclimbedasmallmountain.Thepeakhadtreesononesideandbaldrockontheother.IletthegirlsplayinthewoodedareawhileIarrangedthingsfordinner.Whenthescreamingstarted,Iwasn’ttooalarmed-Icouldseemygrouptearingthroughthebushandthoughtthey’djustdisturbedabees’nest.Asthefirstgirlappeared,Iaskedwhatwasgoingon.“Wildcat!”shegasped.Theimageinmyheadwasofahousecatgonewild,butwithhernextbreathsheadded,“It’sattackingAlyson.”Itoldthegirlstoclimbontotherocksandthenrantowherethey’dbeenplaying.Alysonwaslyingbybush.Shewasonherback,eyeswide,staringatahugecatbesideher.Thecatwaswatchingme.Anyonefamiliarwithwesternswillhaveseenacougar(美洲獅)—themountainlionthatspringsfromtherockfaceontothepasserby.We’dbeentoldhowtodealwithbears:“Keepstill,backup,makeyourselflookbig.”Butwehadn’tcoveredcougars.Igrabbedastickandswungitintotheanimal’sface.Startled,ittookoffintothebushes.SeeingthatAlysonwashurt,Isetoffforthefirst-aidbox,buthadn’tgonefourstepswhenIheardamoan.Turningback,Isawthecougarcrouched(蹲伏)byAlyson’shead.Itappearedtobeeatingher.ThistimeIusedabiggerstick,hitharderandheldon.Onceagain,itdisappeared,andIkneltbyAlyson.“There’snowaysomeonecanlivethroughthis,”Ithought.Thecathadtorndeepintoherneck.Shehadlongcutsonherface.“AmIgoingtodie?”sheasked.Herheartbeatwasracingbutweak,thesignofahearttremblingfromshock.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:“You’renotgoingtodie,”Isaid._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:FrommybranchIcouldseesomepeoplemovingonanearbymountain._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:“You’renotgoingtodie,”Isaid.ItookoffmyT-shirtandgotAlysontoholditagainstherneck,thenranforthefirst-aidkitandasleepingbag.Theothergirlsstared