2020屆高考英語作文評(píng)講教學(xué)課件

作文評(píng)講

---應(yīng)屆高三英語組

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往城郊的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

1書寫圓、直Evaluation書寫圓、直Evaluation2書寫飽滿Evaluation書寫飽滿Evaluation3修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除Evaluation修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除Evaluation4段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母3—4段Evaluation段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母Evaluation5字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右Evaluation字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右Evaluation6空一至兩排Evaluation空一至兩排Evaluation7EvaluationEvaluation8Brainstorm:

whatmistakesdoweusuallymakewhenwritingacomposition?ReflectionBrainstorm:Reflection9EvaluationEvaluation10_,Evaluation標(biāo)點(diǎn)_,Evaluation標(biāo)點(diǎn)11organize_______villageEvaluation拼寫organize_______villageEvaluati12_______________havetakenplaceinrecentyears__時(shí)態(tài)___Evaluation_______________havetakenplac13________________________________________________________Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures._______________________________________Wewillgatherandsetoffat8…andcomeback_________takingthe語法正確___Evaluation_________________________________14____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Evaluation體裁：決定首尾段要點(diǎn)：充實(shí)、顯眼______________________________15____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Evaluation連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)__________________________________________16DearDavid,

Howiseverythinggoing?OurschoolwillorganizestudentstovisitHongxingvillage.Iamwritingtoinviteyou.Outtopicis“thenewvillage,newchanges”.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatgreatchangeshavetakenplaceinrecentyears.Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures.Itisworthvisiting.Somedetailsareasfollows.Wewillgatherandsetoffat8a.m.infrontoftheschoolgateandcomebackat5p.m..Dopayspecialattentiontothetime.Itisessentialtoobserveruleswhentakingtheschoolbus.Idobelieveitwillbeanunforgettabletrip.Wewillbemorethandelightedifyoucouldcome.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.yours,LiHuaDearDavid,17Conclude:

Howtogradeacomposition?Reflection寫段子(作文)，

才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法的！Conclude:Reflection寫段子(作文)，18Quiz:Whocangradebest?ReflectionProcedure:1.Correctandimproveyourclassmate’scompositioningroupsoffour,usingtherule:寫段子(作文)，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法的！2.Gradeitandsignyourname;3.Chooseoneclassmateinyourgrouptopresenthiswork.Quiz:Whocangradebest?Refl19Yes,ICan!CreationYes,ICan!Creation20修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？21Discuss:

Howtowritesuchagoodcomposition?CreationDiscuss:Creation22寫作步驟：寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法A.審題：a.體裁(首尾段)、人稱、時(shí)態(tài)、b.要點(diǎn)、段落(以要點(diǎn)和體裁定段)B.落實(shí)：要點(diǎn)的確立和拓展：1+1/2C.連接：連詞和美化

Creation寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法A.審題：a.23(Homework:2015年全國(guó)卷二)

假如你是李華，計(jì)劃和同學(xué)去敬老院（nursinghome）陪老人們過重陽節(jié)（theDoubleNinthFestival）。請(qǐng)給外教露西寫封郵件，邀她一同前往，內(nèi)容包括：1.出發(fā)及返回時(shí)間；2.活動(dòng)：包餃子、表演節(jié)目等。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3.結(jié)語已為你寫好。CreationCreation24外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);B.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；C.段落(首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母;3—4段)D.字?jǐn)?shù)(120左右,只能留空一至兩排);寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法修改要求：內(nèi)在：A.體裁B.人稱；C.時(shí)態(tài)；D.要點(diǎn)(顯眼、充實(shí))；E.拼寫F.標(biāo)點(diǎn)G.連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)H.語法(正確第一，高級(jí)第二)外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)25相互批改作文的流程：1.修改：外在和內(nèi)在；2.賞析：好的/不好的及提升的地方；3.打分/簽名；4.評(píng)講：每組選擇一篇具有典型錯(cuò)誤的文章來講解相互批改作文的流程：26修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？27

2018年綿陽一診考試

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往成交的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。2018年綿陽一診考試28

DearDavid,Howiseverythinggoing?I’mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinourfieldstudyprojectthisweekend.

(ThisSaturday,thestudentsofourschoolwillmakeaone—dayfieldtriptoHongxingVillage,whichliesinthesuburbofthistown).Thepurposeofthisprojectistoseewithourowneyeswhat’sgoingonoutthereandhowthevillagersaredoingwiththeirlives.(Iknowyouarecuriousaboutthedevelopmentofourcountry,andIamsureyoudon’twanttomissit).Wearegoingtomeetattheschoolgatebefore8a.m.andthentakeourschoolbustogotothevillage,whichwilltakeusbackat5pm.

Idohopeyouwillgowithus.

Yours,LiHuaDearDavid,29修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

怎樣寫出這樣一篇作文？修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？怎樣寫出這樣一篇作文？30

2019年綿陽一診考試

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往成交的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。2019年綿陽一診考試31DearDavid,Howiseverythinggoing?I’mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinourfieldstudyprojectthisweekend.ThisSaturday,thestudentsofourschoolwillmakeaone—dayfieldtriptoHongxingVillage,whichliesinthesuburbofthistown.Thepurposeofthisprojectistoseewithourowneyeswhat’sgoingonoutthereandhowthevillagersaredoingwiththeirlives.Iknowyouarecuriousaboutthedevelopmentofourcountry,andIamsureyoudon’twanttomissit.Wearegoingtomeetattheschoolgatebefore8a.m.andthentakeourschoolbustogotothevillage,whichwilltakeusbackat5pm.Idohopeyouwillgowithus.Yours,LiHuaDearDavid,32DearLucy,I’dliketoinviteyoutojoinusforavisittothenearbynursinghomenextSaturdayfortheDoubleNinthFestival.Itisthedayfortheelderlyinourculture.We’llgoandmakedumplingswiththeelderlypeoplethere.We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames,whichwehopewillmakethemhappy.Weshouldbebackaround4o’clockintheafternoon.Ifyouareabletocomewithus,pleaseletusknowandwe’llwaitforyouatthegateat9inthemorning.

Lookingforwardtoyourreply.YoursLiHuaDearLucy,332020屆高考英語作文評(píng)講教學(xué)課件34內(nèi)在：A.人稱；B.時(shí)態(tài)；C.要點(diǎn)(顯眼、充實(shí))；D.拼寫E.標(biāo)點(diǎn)F.連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)G.語法(正確第一，高級(jí)第二)外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);B.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；C.段落(首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母;3—4段)D.字?jǐn)?shù)(120左右,只能留空一至兩排);才(裁)寫段子，人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法寫作要求：內(nèi)在：A.人稱；外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);才(裁)寫段子，35外在：A.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；B.段落(首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母;3—4段)C.字?jǐn)?shù)(120左右,只能留空一至兩排);外在：A.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；36外在：A.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；B.段落(首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母;3—4段)C.字?jǐn)?shù)(120左右,只能留空一至兩排);外在：A.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；37書寫圓、直書寫圓、直38書寫飽滿書寫飽滿39修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除40字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右41空一至兩排空一至兩排42段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母3—4段段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母43內(nèi)在：A.體裁B.人稱；C.時(shí)態(tài)；D.要點(diǎn)(顯眼、充實(shí))；E.拼寫F.標(biāo)點(diǎn)G.連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)H.語法(正確第一，高級(jí)第二)內(nèi)在：A.體裁44內(nèi)在：A.體裁B.人稱；C.時(shí)態(tài)；D.要點(diǎn)(顯眼、充實(shí))；E.拼寫F.標(biāo)點(diǎn)G.連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)H.語法(正確第一，高級(jí)第二)內(nèi)在：A.體裁45organize_______________havetakenplaceinrecentyears___________________________________________Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures.___,______________________________________Wewillgatherandsetoffat8…andcomeback_________takingthe標(biāo)點(diǎn)拼寫語法正確時(shí)態(tài)_______________________________體裁：確定首尾段________過渡：連接詞organize_______________haveta46organize_______________havetakenplaceinrecentyears___________________________________________Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures.___,______________________________________Wewillgatherandsetoffat8…andcomeback_________takingthe___villageEvaluation____________________________organize_______________haveta47ThankYouforYourGuidance!ThankYou48

作文評(píng)講

---應(yīng)屆高三英語組

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往城郊的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

49書寫圓、直Evaluation書寫圓、直Evaluation50書寫飽滿Evaluation書寫飽滿Evaluation51修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除Evaluation修改同改錯(cuò)的刪除Evaluation52段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母3—4段Evaluation段落：首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母Evaluation53字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右Evaluation字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右Evaluation54空一至兩排Evaluation空一至兩排Evaluation55EvaluationEvaluation56Brainstorm:

whatmistakesdoweusuallymakewhenwritingacomposition?ReflectionBrainstorm:Reflection57EvaluationEvaluation58_,Evaluation標(biāo)點(diǎn)_,Evaluation標(biāo)點(diǎn)59organize_______villageEvaluation拼寫organize_______villageEvaluati60_______________havetakenplaceinrecentyears__時(shí)態(tài)___Evaluation_______________havetakenplac61________________________________________________________Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures._______________________________________Wewillgatherandsetoffat8…andcomeback_________takingthe語法正確___Evaluation_________________________________62____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Evaluation體裁：決定首尾段要點(diǎn)：充實(shí)、顯眼______________________________63____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Evaluation連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)__________________________________________64DearDavid,

Howiseverythinggoing?OurschoolwillorganizestudentstovisitHongxingvillage.Iamwritingtoinviteyou.Outtopicis“thenewvillage,newchanges”.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthatgreatchangeshavetakenplaceinrecentyears.Theenvironmentimprovesalot,sodothevariouscultures.Itisworthvisiting.Somedetailsareasfollows.Wewillgatherandsetoffat8a.m.infrontoftheschoolgateandcomebackat5p.m..Dopayspecialattentiontothetime.Itisessentialtoobserveruleswhentakingtheschoolbus.Idobelieveitwillbeanunforgettabletrip.Wewillbemorethandelightedifyoucouldcome.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.yours,LiHuaDearDavid,65Conclude:

Howtogradeacomposition?Reflection寫段子(作文)，

才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法的！Conclude:Reflection寫段子(作文)，66Quiz:Whocangradebest?ReflectionProcedure:1.Correctandimproveyourclassmate’scompositioningroupsoffour,usingtherule:寫段子(作文)，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法的！2.Gradeitandsignyourname;3.Chooseoneclassmateinyourgrouptopresenthiswork.Quiz:Whocangradebest?Refl67Yes,ICan!CreationYes,ICan!Creation68修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？69Discuss:

Howtowritesuchagoodcomposition?CreationDiscuss:Creation70寫作步驟：寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法A.審題：a.體裁(首尾段)、人稱、時(shí)態(tài)、b.要點(diǎn)、段落(以要點(diǎn)和體裁定段)B.落實(shí)：要點(diǎn)的確立和拓展：1+1/2C.連接：連詞和美化

Creation寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法A.審題：a.71(Homework:2015年全國(guó)卷二)

假如你是李華，計(jì)劃和同學(xué)去敬老院（nursinghome）陪老人們過重陽節(jié)（theDoubleNinthFestival）。請(qǐng)給外教露西寫封郵件，邀她一同前往，內(nèi)容包括：1.出發(fā)及返回時(shí)間；2.活動(dòng)：包餃子、表演節(jié)目等。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3.結(jié)語已為你寫好。CreationCreation72外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);B.書寫(圓、直和飽滿；修改斜劃)；C.段落(首行縮進(jìn)兩個(gè)字母;3—4段)D.字?jǐn)?shù)(120左右,只能留空一至兩排);寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)活法修改要求：內(nèi)在：A.體裁B.人稱；C.時(shí)態(tài)；D.要點(diǎn)(顯眼、充實(shí))；E.拼寫F.標(biāo)點(diǎn)G.連接詞(活動(dòng)詞)H.語法(正確第一，高級(jí)第二)外在：A.體裁(開頭結(jié)尾);寫段子，才(裁)人是(時(shí))要拼點(diǎn)73相互批改作文的流程：1.修改：外在和內(nèi)在；2.賞析：好的/不好的及提升的地方；3.打分/簽名；4.評(píng)講：每組選擇一篇具有典型錯(cuò)誤的文章來講解相互批改作文的流程：74修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？75

2018年綿陽一診考試

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往成交的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。2018年綿陽一診考試76

DearDavid,Howiseverythinggoing?I’mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinourfieldstudyprojectthisweekend.

(ThisSaturday,thestudentsofourschoolwillmakeaone—dayfieldtriptoHongxingVillage,whichliesinthesuburbofthistown).Thepurposeofthisprojectistoseewithourowneyeswhat’sgoingonoutthereandhowthevillagersaredoingwiththeirlives.(Iknowyouarecuriousaboutthedevelopmentofourcountry,andIamsureyoudon’twanttomissit).Wearegoingtomeetattheschoolgatebefore8a.m.andthentakeourschoolbustogotothevillage,whichwilltakeusbackat5pm.

Idohopeyouwillgowithus.

Yours,LiHuaDearDavid,77修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？

a.書寫美觀b.體裁正確c.語言正確流暢d.要點(diǎn)充實(shí)顯眼

怎樣寫出這樣一篇作文？修改作文的時(shí)候，我最看重的是什么？怎樣寫出這樣一篇作文？78

2019年綿陽一診考試

假定你是李華，本周六你校將組織學(xué)生前往成交的紅星村參觀學(xué)習(xí)一天。請(qǐng)給你校的學(xué)生朋友David寫一封電子郵件邀請(qǐng)他一同前往。信件內(nèi)容包括：1.活動(dòng)主題：新農(nóng)村、新變化；2.集合時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)：上午8點(diǎn)前、校門口；3.交通方式、返回時(shí)間：校車、當(dāng)天下午5點(diǎn)。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。2019年綿陽一診考試79DearDavid,Howiseverythinggoing?I’mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinourfieldstudyprojectthisweekend.ThisSaturday,thestudentsofourschoolwillmakeaone—dayfieldtriptoHongxingVillage,whichliesinthesuburbofthistown.Thepurposeofthisprojectistoseewithourowneyeswhat’sgoingonoutthereandhowthevillagersaredoingwiththeirlives.Iknowyouarecuriousaboutthedevelopmentofourcountry,andIamsureyoudon’twanttomissit.Wearegoingtomeetattheschoolgatebefore8a.m.andthentakeourschoolbustogotothevillage,whichwilltakeusbackat5pm.Idohopeyouwillgowithus.Yours,LiHuaDearDavid,80DearLucy,I’dliketoinviteyoutojoinusforavisittothenearbynursinghomenextSaturdayfortheDoubleNinthFestival.Itisthedayfortheelderlyinourculture.We’llgoandmakedumplingswiththeelderlypeoplethere.We’llalsospendsomefuntimetogethersinging,dancingandplayinggames,whichwehopewillmakethemhappy.Weshouldbebackaround4o’clockintheafternoon.Ifyouareabletocomewithus,pleaseletusknowandwe’llwaitforyouatthegateat9inthemorning.

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