專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件

TopicRecentlysomebanksextendtheirbusinesstouniversitycampusandoffercreditcardstostudents.Alotofpeopleworrythatcreditcardsmaybringharmtostudents,whileothersdon'tthinkso.Whatisyouropinion?WriteonANSWERSHEETTHREEacompositionofabout200wordsonthefollowingtopic:WillCreditCardsBringHarmtotheStudents?TopicRecentlysomebanksexten1InstructionsYouaretowriteinthreeparts.Inthefirstpart,statespecificallywhatyouropinionis.Inthesecondpart,supportyouropinionwithappropriatedetails.Inthelastpartbringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.Failuretofollowtheinstructionsmayresultinalossofmarks.InstructionsYouaretowritei2WillCreditCardsBringHarmtotheStudents?

Recently,inordertoextendbusinesstouniversitycampus,somebanksoffercreditcardstocollegestudents.Manypeopleworrythatcreditcardsmaydoharmtostudents,whileothersdon'tthinkso.Inmyopinion,creditcardsaregoodforstudentsiftheyareusedappropriately.

First,whenastudentusescreditcards,heneedn'tbringmuchcashwithhimeveryday.Andthelesscashhebrings,thelessheneedstoworryaboutbeingstolen.Second,usingcreditcardscanminimizethechancesofreceivingforgednotes.Studentsarenotquitegoodatdistinguishingforgednotes,andthusoftenbecomevictimsofcoiners.Iftheyusecreditcards,itwillbeverypossibleforthemtoavoidreceivingforgednotesbecausetheydon'tneedtogetthechanges.Third,usingcreditcardscanhelpstudentstoknowmoreabout"credit".Iftheydon'trepaytheircreditaccountintime,theywillhavetopaymoreinterestsandwhat'sworse,theywillgetabadcreditrecordwhichwillbringinconveniencetotheminthefuture.

Therefore,Ibelievethatcreditcardswillnotbringharmtostudentsifusedreasonably.

WillCreditCardsBringHarmt3評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)滿分15分，分五個(gè)等級(jí)，14分、11分、8分、5分和2分，可以酌情加一或減一分，但不得加或減半分。具體標(biāo)準(zhǔn)為：14分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性較好，基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。11分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。8分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想比較清楚，文字上連貫，但語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，其中有少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。5分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文字連貫性差，有較嚴(yán)重的語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。2分：條理不清，思想紊亂，語(yǔ)言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，且多數(shù)為嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。交白卷，或作文與題目毫不相干，或只寫幾個(gè)單詞，以0分計(jì)算。評(píng)分對(duì)于字?jǐn)?shù)的要求：累計(jì)字?jǐn)?shù)在150-170之間，扣1分；130-150之間，扣2分；110-130之間，扣3分；90-110之間，扣4分；90以下，至多給5分。若照抄提示中原句，均不得計(jì)入所寫字?jǐn)?shù)。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)滿分15分，分五個(gè)等級(jí)，14分、11分、8分、5分和414-15分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)法正確,語(yǔ)言通順恰當(dāng),句式用詞富有變化,基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。11-13分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理較清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)言比較通順恰當(dāng),少量語(yǔ)法，拼寫錯(cuò)誤。8-10分內(nèi)容基本切題,完整,條理基本清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)基本嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)言基本通順恰當(dāng)，少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤,一些詞使用不當(dāng)。5-7分內(nèi)容基本切題,完整,條理不夠清楚,較明顯的母語(yǔ)痕跡，較多語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤,許多詞使用不當(dāng)。2-4分內(nèi)容偏題,不完整,思路混亂,語(yǔ)句不完整,只有少數(shù)句子可以理解,詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤嚴(yán)重。

14-15分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),5TEM-4作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分

2006年TEM-4作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分

6TopicRecentlyaBeijinginformationcompanydidasurveyofstudentlifeamongmorethan700studentsinBeijing,Guangzhou,Xi’an,Chengdu,Shanghai,Wuhan,NanjingandShengyang.Theresultshaveshownthat67percentofstudentsthinkthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitwhiletherestbelievethatusingtomorrow’smoneytodayisbetter.Whatdoyouthink?TopicRecentlyaBeijinginform7InstructionsWriteacompositionofabout200words.Youaretowriteinthreeparts.Inthefirstpart,statespecificallywhatyouropinionis.Inthesecondpart,supportyouropinionwithappropriatedetails.Inthelastpart,bringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.Youshouldsupplyanappropriatetitleforyourcomposition.InstructionsWriteacompositio8Sample1TheGoodHabit

Nowadays,moreandmoreyoungpeoplethinkthatitisbetterthatusingtomorrow’smoneytodaythansavingmoney,

whileinmyopinion,Ithinkit’sright.

Forthefirst,ourcontrairhastodevelop.Soitcallsustousemoremoneytoletthenationdevelop.

Andthen,thatmaymakeourlifemorecomfortable.Forexample,Iheardastory.Therearetwoman.Ausetomorrow’smoneytobuyanewhouse—ashehastopaymoneytothebankeverymonths—whileBstart

keepingmoney.

Sample1TheGoodHabit

9Twentyyearslater,Bfinallykeepingenoughmoneytobuyanewhouse,butAhasbeenlivedinitfortwentyyearsandpay

enoughmoneytothebank.

Attheend,ifwehavetheabililetopaythelist,whywe

don’tusetomorrow’smoneytoletourlifemorewonderful?So,that’swhatIthink.Twentyyearslater,Bfinally105-6分。結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合，但語(yǔ)言過(guò)于簡(jiǎn)單，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，內(nèi)容模糊不清，題目不正確，字?jǐn)?shù)少于170。舉例不可信。舉例應(yīng)該真實(shí)可信，比如親身經(jīng)歷、朋友體驗(yàn)或者名人軼事等。文章結(jié)尾太簡(jiǎn)單。5-6分。結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合，但語(yǔ)言過(guò)于簡(jiǎn)單，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，內(nèi)容模糊11Sample2：SavingMoney

isaGoodHabit

Ithinksavingmoneyisagoodhabit.Becausesavingmoneycanmakeyoulearnhowtouselessmoneytobuymorethings.Savingmoneycanmakeyoubecomearichman.Ifsomething

happenoneday,youmustusesomemoneytosolvetheproblem,butnobodycanlendtoyouthemoney.Yoursavingmoneycanhelpsolvetheproblem.

Sample2：SavingMoney

isaGo12

Nowdays,somestudentsusetheirparents’moneytobuyalotofunnessarythings.Suchas,Somestudentschangetheirmobilphoneeverymonth.It’snotagoodhabit.Althoughtheirparentshavealotofmoney,theycan’tusemoneyinthatway.It’swasteofmoney.

Ifyousavemoneyasahabit.Youcanthinkcarefullybeforeyoubuyeverything.“Thisthingisnecessaryforme?CanIbuythecheaperone?”Allthosequestionscanbeaskedbyyourself.專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件13Ifyouwanttobuyaveryusefulthing,butyoudon’thaveenoughmoney,youcansavemoneyforit.Aftersometime,youcanbuyitforyour-self.Savingmoneyisagoodhabit.Itmakeyoubecomerich.Itmakeyoulearnhowtouselessmoneytobuymorethings.專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件14本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切題，結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確。但語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，重復(fù)動(dòng)詞，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多。開(kāi)始段沒(méi)有引入主題，而是直接提出作者觀點(diǎn)，太突然。而且有許多非完整句。文章沒(méi)有深度，思考膚淺。本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切題，結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確。但語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，重15Sample3:Savingmoneyis

agoodhabit

Theotherday,Iheardaconversationbetweenaboyandagirl.“Whyareyoualwayslackofmoney?AsfarIknow,yourparentsgiveyouamplemoneyforyourdailylife”.saidthegirl.“Yes,Ialwaysusetomorrow’smoneytoday”.Saidtheboy.“It’sabadhabit,andyoushouldyourmoney!”thegirlshouted.Thisisaverycommonphenomenonamongtheuniversitystudents.Owingtotheirargument,certainly,Iaminfavorofthegirl’sview.

Sample3:Savingmoneyis

ag16

Whatpossiblycontributestothepreferencecanbelistedasfollow.Inthefirstplace,moneyisveryimportantforus.Weusemoneybuyfood,buyclothesandsoon.But,moneyisveryprecious,becauseit’sveryhardtomakemoney.Somoneyshouldbeusedwhenit’snecessary.

Inthesecondplace,therearesomanypoorchildrenwhoquitschoolforlackofmoneyinpoorreligion.Soit’sverysignificanttosaveourmoneytohelpthosepoorchildren.Andtheyarelookforwardtoyourhelp!Thelastbuttheleastimportantisthatifyoualwaysusetomorrow’smoneytoday,youwillformabadhabit.

Butyourmoneyislimited.Soyoumayrobothersofmoney.Whatpossiblycontributesto17

Inshort,Iholdafirmbeliefthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitandweshouldkeepitforever.It’sthehightimethatwetooksomemeasurestosavemoney!Inshort,Iholdafirmbeli189-10分。文章切題，結(jié)構(gòu)正確，有內(nèi)容，有句式變化。但語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，隨意，粗心漏詞。說(shuō)理缺乏邏輯。比如很多小孩失學(xué)不是我們需要節(jié)約用錢的理由，再比如錢不夠用就會(huì)去搶別人的錢嗎？文章的入題不錯(cuò)，但故事交代很馬虎，語(yǔ)言也很平凡，且不夠簡(jiǎn)練。文章結(jié)尾主題被簡(jiǎn)單重復(fù)，思想沒(méi)有升華。9-10分。文章切題，結(jié)構(gòu)正確，有內(nèi)容，有句式變化。但語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)19Sample4

Thereisnoconcensusamongthepeopleontheissueofthechoicebetweensavingmoneyandusingtomorrow’smoneytoday.Theattitudestowardthisproblemvaryfrompersontoperson.Andinmyhumbleopinion,itisessentialforustosavemoremoneytodayinsteadofusingtomorrow’smoney.Therearemanyreasonsthatmayaccountformypoint,andthefollowingarethemostconspicuousaspects.Sample4Thereisnoconcensu20

Tostartwith,weChinesepeopleboastagoodtraditionofbeingeconomical.ThetraditionalChinesecultureregardswasteasapoormoralstandard.Asauniversitystudent,weneedtokeeponcarryingforwardournation’sfinemoralstandard,i.e.saving.Andsavingmoneyisconducivenotonlytothecultivationofagoodmoral,butalsotoreleasetheheavyburdenresultingfromsomeaccidentsinthefuture.Inotherwords,savingtoday’smoneycouldmeetoururgentneedofitinthefuture.Tostartwith,weChinesepe21

Lastbutnotleast,thefiercecompetitionwe’llfaceafterwegraduateisfullofuncertainties.Oncewecouldnotfindajobwhichoffershighsalaries,itwillbeimpossibleforustoreturnthemoneytothecreditors.

Toputitintoanutshell,Iamagreatbelieverthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitbecauseitreallyexertspositiveimpactsonboththepresentandthefuture.

22本卷得分12分。語(yǔ)言通暢，詞匯豐富，觀點(diǎn)明確，條理清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)正確。但有少量語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤和拼寫錯(cuò)誤。沒(méi)寫題目（如果有題目可給13分）。本卷得分12分。語(yǔ)言通暢，詞匯豐富，觀點(diǎn)明確，條理清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)23

TEM4便條評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及樣卷

2007專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件24NoteWritingWriteanoteofabout50-60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation：Yourclassmate,Jimmy,isheadoftheuniversity’sswimmingclub.Hehasinvitedyoutojointheclub,butyoulikesomeothersport.Writeanote,declininghisinvitationandexplainingwhy.

Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.NoteWritingWriteanoteofab25Sample1:(8分)

April22,2007DearJimmy,Ireceivedyourshortmessage,andI’mgladtolearnthatyouhavebeenpromotedasheadofouruniversity’sswimmingclub.Congratulations!Youdeservethat.Astoyourinvitationformetojoinyourclub,I’mafraidIcan’tmakeit.Asyouknow,Iamunabletoswimandstayinginwatermakesmeuneasy.Funny,right?What’smore,Ijoinedourschool’sbasketballteamtwoweeksago.AndIguesswe’llexercisealotforthecompetitionheldnextmonth.Sothereisprobablynotimeformetolearnswimming.Well,maybeyoucoulddropinandwatchourcompetitionnextmonth.Yours,SherrySample1:(8分)26Sample2:(9分)

April22,2007DearJimmy,Thankyousomuchforinvitingmetojointheswimmingclub.I’dliketobutI’mafraidIcannot.

Tolearntennishaslongbeenmydreamandthebesttennisteacherwillbeleavingnextyear.SothisisthelastchanceformeandIwouldlikeverymuchtoseizeit.Bestwishes.Yours,TomSample2:(9分)27SectionBNote-Writing(10points)

April28,DrSmith,AnEnglishspeechcontestinhonorofthe70thanniversaryoftheuniversitywilltakeplaceontheeveningofMay12(Saturday).Theorganizingcommitteewouldlikeyoutoparticipateasoneofthefivejudgesandtogivethefirstprizeaward.Pleaseletusknowifyou'llbeabletocome.We'demailyoutheparticularsifyouacceptourinvitation.Bestregards,LiPingChairmanoftheOrganizingCommitteeoftheContestSectionBNote-Writing(10po28一.格式：（占3分）包括日期，稱呼，和結(jié)尾三部分，各占一分。1.日期(date):正確：April24th,2007/April24,2007/April24/24April2007/4/24/200724/4/2007(Apr.也可以，任何一個(gè)日期都可以)2.稱呼（Heading）:正確：(Dear)Mike:(,)/(Dear)Hilda:(,)(缺逗號(hào)或冒號(hào)，扣0.5分)位置在日期下面一行左側(cè)。3.結(jié)尾（Ending）:正確：Yourssincerely,/Yours,/Sincerelyyours,/Sincerely,(缺逗號(hào)，扣0.5分)Sincerely,Mike,Hilda(若在一行扣0.5)Yourssincerely（兩個(gè)單詞的首字母都大寫扣0.5）若名字沒(méi)寫或人名XXX扣1分。凡不符合上述正確格式或表達(dá)均要扣分。錯(cuò)一部分扣1分。最多扣3分。一.格式：（占3分）29二.內(nèi)容（占2分）本便條必須包括如下內(nèi)容：1.拒絕（1分）2.理由（1分）三.語(yǔ)言（占5分）1．首句需用自己正確的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)，若完全抄提示扣1分。2．5分中有一分是語(yǔ)言的得體性。語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格與情景不一致，扣1分（如：Yourstruly,Trulyyours,Ifyouconsent,etc）.只有語(yǔ)言較好才得分。四．評(píng)分總體要求：1．語(yǔ)言沒(méi)有嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤，格式對(duì)，內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言得體，字?jǐn)?shù)符合要求（<80,>40）,可給9—10分。2．便條總字?jǐn)?shù)（包括三部分格式在內(nèi)），要求在50—60字；不到40或超過(guò)80字扣1分。3．請(qǐng)寫出三部分的小分，如2+2+4（格式+內(nèi)容+語(yǔ)言）4．不要出現(xiàn)0.5分。5．要求大家閱卷時(shí)做到認(rèn)真仔細(xì)，不漏改卷，漏填分?jǐn)?shù)或漏簽名。請(qǐng)?jiān)诿糠菥碜拥腻e(cuò)誤部分劃線，以便復(fù)校。6．便條總分為10分，6分為及格線。二.內(nèi)容（占2分）30TopicRecentlysomebanksextendtheirbusinesstouniversitycampusandoffercreditcardstostudents.Alotofpeopleworrythatcreditcardsmaybringharmtostudents,whileothersdon'tthinkso.Whatisyouropinion?WriteonANSWERSHEETTHREEacompositionofabout200wordsonthefollowingtopic:WillCreditCardsBringHarmtotheStudents?TopicRecentlysomebanksexten31InstructionsYouaretowriteinthreeparts.Inthefirstpart,statespecificallywhatyouropinionis.Inthesecondpart,supportyouropinionwithappropriatedetails.Inthelastpartbringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.Failuretofollowtheinstructionsmayresultinalossofmarks.InstructionsYouaretowritei32WillCreditCardsBringHarmtotheStudents?

Recently,inordertoextendbusinesstouniversitycampus,somebanksoffercreditcardstocollegestudents.Manypeopleworrythatcreditcardsmaydoharmtostudents,whileothersdon'tthinkso.Inmyopinion,creditcardsaregoodforstudentsiftheyareusedappropriately.

First,whenastudentusescreditcards,heneedn'tbringmuchcashwithhimeveryday.Andthelesscashhebrings,thelessheneedstoworryaboutbeingstolen.Second,usingcreditcardscanminimizethechancesofreceivingforgednotes.Studentsarenotquitegoodatdistinguishingforgednotes,andthusoftenbecomevictimsofcoiners.Iftheyusecreditcards,itwillbeverypossibleforthemtoavoidreceivingforgednotesbecausetheydon'tneedtogetthechanges.Third,usingcreditcardscanhelpstudentstoknowmoreabout"credit".Iftheydon'trepaytheircreditaccountintime,theywillhavetopaymoreinterestsandwhat'sworse,theywillgetabadcreditrecordwhichwillbringinconveniencetotheminthefuture.

Therefore,Ibelievethatcreditcardswillnotbringharmtostudentsifusedreasonably.

WillCreditCardsBringHarmt33評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)滿分15分，分五個(gè)等級(jí)，14分、11分、8分、5分和2分，可以酌情加一或減一分，但不得加或減半分。具體標(biāo)準(zhǔn)為：14分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性較好，基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。11分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。8分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想比較清楚，文字上連貫，但語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，其中有少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。5分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文字連貫性差，有較嚴(yán)重的語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。2分：條理不清，思想紊亂，語(yǔ)言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，且多數(shù)為嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。交白卷，或作文與題目毫不相干，或只寫幾個(gè)單詞，以0分計(jì)算。評(píng)分對(duì)于字?jǐn)?shù)的要求：累計(jì)字?jǐn)?shù)在150-170之間，扣1分；130-150之間，扣2分；110-130之間，扣3分；90-110之間，扣4分；90以下，至多給5分。若照抄提示中原句，均不得計(jì)入所寫字?jǐn)?shù)。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)滿分15分，分五個(gè)等級(jí)，14分、11分、8分、5分和3414-15分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)法正確,語(yǔ)言通順恰當(dāng),句式用詞富有變化,基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。11-13分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理較清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)言比較通順恰當(dāng),少量語(yǔ)法，拼寫錯(cuò)誤。8-10分內(nèi)容基本切題,完整,條理基本清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)基本嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),語(yǔ)言基本通順恰當(dāng)，少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤,一些詞使用不當(dāng)。5-7分內(nèi)容基本切題,完整,條理不夠清楚,較明顯的母語(yǔ)痕跡，較多語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤,許多詞使用不當(dāng)。2-4分內(nèi)容偏題,不完整,思路混亂,語(yǔ)句不完整,只有少數(shù)句子可以理解,詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤嚴(yán)重。

14-15分內(nèi)容切題,完整,條理清楚,文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),35TEM-4作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分

2006年TEM-4作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分

36TopicRecentlyaBeijinginformationcompanydidasurveyofstudentlifeamongmorethan700studentsinBeijing,Guangzhou,Xi’an,Chengdu,Shanghai,Wuhan,NanjingandShengyang.Theresultshaveshownthat67percentofstudentsthinkthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitwhiletherestbelievethatusingtomorrow’smoneytodayisbetter.Whatdoyouthink?TopicRecentlyaBeijinginform37InstructionsWriteacompositionofabout200words.Youaretowriteinthreeparts.Inthefirstpart,statespecificallywhatyouropinionis.Inthesecondpart,supportyouropinionwithappropriatedetails.Inthelastpart,bringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.Youshouldsupplyanappropriatetitleforyourcomposition.InstructionsWriteacompositio38Sample1TheGoodHabit

Nowadays,moreandmoreyoungpeoplethinkthatitisbetterthatusingtomorrow’smoneytodaythansavingmoney,

whileinmyopinion,Ithinkit’sright.

Forthefirst,ourcontrairhastodevelop.Soitcallsustousemoremoneytoletthenationdevelop.

Andthen,thatmaymakeourlifemorecomfortable.Forexample,Iheardastory.Therearetwoman.Ausetomorrow’smoneytobuyanewhouse—ashehastopaymoneytothebankeverymonths—whileBstart

keepingmoney.

Sample1TheGoodHabit

39Twentyyearslater,Bfinallykeepingenoughmoneytobuyanewhouse,butAhasbeenlivedinitfortwentyyearsandpay

enoughmoneytothebank.

Attheend,ifwehavetheabililetopaythelist,whywe

don’tusetomorrow’smoneytoletourlifemorewonderful?So,that’swhatIthink.Twentyyearslater,Bfinally405-6分。結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合，但語(yǔ)言過(guò)于簡(jiǎn)單，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，內(nèi)容模糊不清，題目不正確，字?jǐn)?shù)少于170。舉例不可信。舉例應(yīng)該真實(shí)可信，比如親身經(jīng)歷、朋友體驗(yàn)或者名人軼事等。文章結(jié)尾太簡(jiǎn)單。5-6分。結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合，但語(yǔ)言過(guò)于簡(jiǎn)單，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，內(nèi)容模糊41Sample2：SavingMoney

isaGoodHabit

Ithinksavingmoneyisagoodhabit.Becausesavingmoneycanmakeyoulearnhowtouselessmoneytobuymorethings.Savingmoneycanmakeyoubecomearichman.Ifsomething

happenoneday,youmustusesomemoneytosolvetheproblem,butnobodycanlendtoyouthemoney.Yoursavingmoneycanhelpsolvetheproblem.

Sample2：SavingMoney

isaGo42

Nowdays,somestudentsusetheirparents’moneytobuyalotofunnessarythings.Suchas,Somestudentschangetheirmobilphoneeverymonth.It’snotagoodhabit.Althoughtheirparentshavealotofmoney,theycan’tusemoneyinthatway.It’swasteofmoney.

Ifyousavemoneyasahabit.Youcanthinkcarefullybeforeyoubuyeverything.“Thisthingisnecessaryforme?CanIbuythecheaperone?”Allthosequestionscanbeaskedbyyourself.專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件43Ifyouwanttobuyaveryusefulthing,butyoudon’thaveenoughmoney,youcansavemoneyforit.Aftersometime,youcanbuyitforyour-self.Savingmoneyisagoodhabit.Itmakeyoubecomerich.Itmakeyoulearnhowtouselessmoneytobuymorethings.專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件44本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切題，結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確。但語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，重復(fù)動(dòng)詞，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多。開(kāi)始段沒(méi)有引入主題，而是直接提出作者觀點(diǎn)，太突然。而且有許多非完整句。文章沒(méi)有深度，思考膚淺。本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切題，結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確。但語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，重45Sample3:Savingmoneyis

agoodhabit

Theotherday,Iheardaconversationbetweenaboyandagirl.“Whyareyoualwayslackofmoney?AsfarIknow,yourparentsgiveyouamplemoneyforyourdailylife”.saidthegirl.“Yes,Ialwaysusetomorrow’smoneytoday”.Saidtheboy.“It’sabadhabit,andyoushouldyourmoney!”thegirlshouted.Thisisaverycommonphenomenonamongtheuniversitystudents.Owingtotheirargument,certainly,Iaminfavorofthegirl’sview.

Sample3:Savingmoneyis

ag46

Whatpossiblycontributestothepreferencecanbelistedasfollow.Inthefirstplace,moneyisveryimportantforus.Weusemoneybuyfood,buyclothesandsoon.But,moneyisveryprecious,becauseit’sveryhardtomakemoney.Somoneyshouldbeusedwhenit’snecessary.

Inthesecondplace,therearesomanypoorchildrenwhoquitschoolforlackofmoneyinpoorreligion.Soit’sverysignificanttosaveourmoneytohelpthosepoorchildren.Andtheyarelookforwardtoyourhelp!Thelastbuttheleastimportantisthatifyoualwaysusetomorrow’smoneytoday,youwillformabadhabit.

Butyourmoneyislimited.Soyoumayrobothersofmoney.Whatpossiblycontributesto47

Inshort,Iholdafirmbeliefthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitandweshouldkeepitforever.It’sthehightimethatwetooksomemeasurestosavemoney!Inshort,Iholdafirmbeli489-10分。文章切題，結(jié)構(gòu)正確，有內(nèi)容，有句式變化。但語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，隨意，粗心漏詞。說(shuō)理缺乏邏輯。比如很多小孩失學(xué)不是我們需要節(jié)約用錢的理由，再比如錢不夠用就會(huì)去搶別人的錢嗎？文章的入題不錯(cuò)，但故事交代很馬虎，語(yǔ)言也很平凡，且不夠簡(jiǎn)練。文章結(jié)尾主題被簡(jiǎn)單重復(fù)，思想沒(méi)有升華。9-10分。文章切題，結(jié)構(gòu)正確，有內(nèi)容，有句式變化。但語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)49Sample4

Thereisnoconcensusamongthepeopleontheissueofthechoicebetweensavingmoneyandusingtomorrow’smoneytoday.Theattitudestowardthisproblemvaryfrompersontoperson.Andinmyhumbleopinion,itisessentialforustosavemoremoneytodayinsteadofusingtomorrow’smoney.Therearemanyreasonsthatmayaccountformypoint,andthefollowingarethemostconspicuousaspects.Sample4Thereisnoconcensu50

Tostartwith,weChinesepeopleboastagoodtraditionofbeingeconomical.ThetraditionalChinesecultureregardswasteasapoormoralstandard.Asauniversitystudent,weneedtokeeponcarryingforwardournation’sfinemoralstandard,i.e.saving.Andsavingmoneyisconducivenotonlytothecultivationofagoodmoral,butalsotoreleasetheheavyburdenresultingfromsomeaccidentsinthefuture.Inotherwords,savingtoday’smoneycouldmeetoururgentneedofitinthefuture.Tostartwith,weChinesepe51

Lastbutnotleast,thefiercecompetitionwe’llfaceafterwegraduateisfullofuncertainties.Oncewecouldnotfindajobwhichoffershighsalaries,itwillbeimpossibleforustoreturnthemoneytothecreditors.

Toputitintoanutshell,Iamagreatbelieverthatsavingmoneyisagoodhabitbecauseitreallyexertspositiveimpactsonboththepresentandthefuture.

52本卷得分12分。語(yǔ)言通暢，詞匯豐富，觀點(diǎn)明確，條理清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)正確。但有少量語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤和拼寫錯(cuò)誤。沒(méi)寫題目（如果有題目可給13分）。本卷得分12分。語(yǔ)言通暢，詞匯豐富，觀點(diǎn)明確，條理清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)53

TEM4便條評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及樣卷

2007專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析課件54NoteWritingWriteanoteofabout50-60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation：Yourclassmate,Jimmy,isheadoftheuniversity’sswimmingclub.Hehasinvitedyoutojointheclub,butyoulikesomeothersport.Writeanote,declininghisinvitationandexplainingwhy.

Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriateness.NoteWritingWriteanoteofab55Sample1:(8分)

April22,2007DearJimmy,Ireceivedyourshortmessage,andI’mgladtolearnthatyouhavebeenpromotedasheadofouruniversity’sswimmingclub.Congratulations!Youdeservethat.Astoyourinvitationformetojoinyourclub,I’mafraidIcan’tm