【公開課課件】建議信講評公開課

昨天已經(jīng)過去，明天還沒到來。只有今天是一份禮物。Yesterday

ishistory,tomorrowisamystery,buttodayisagift.Welcometoourclass建議信寫作講評

假如你是李華，你的美國筆友James來信告訴你，他打算明年到你所居住的城市游玩一個星期，并向你請教相關事宜。請你就此給他回信，提供一些旅游建議。要點如下:出行的最佳時間；值得游覽的景點；適宜住的酒店。其他。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；2.可恰當增加細節(jié)，以適全文連貫。3.開頭語和結束語已為你寫好。

典題例練開門見山，表明寫作意圖。在本段中，寫信人應該先簡單介紹自己，然后陳述事由，表明寫信的目的及原因。委婉地提出建議及改進措施，或提出忠告。禮貌地總結并期盼對方的回復。

佳句賞析Inaddition,youaresupposedtotakemoreclothesincasetheweatherisgood.

---劉錦莉AsfarasIamconcerned,threelanesandsevenalleysisworthytobevisitedandsomefamouspeoplelivedthereatonetime.

----楊瓊Whatcallsforspecialattentionisthatyoushouldtakesunglassesandsunscreencream.

---楊瓊Finallyandmostimportantly,sinceyouwanttocomehere,Irecommendyoutotakethedeliciousfoodhere.Itwilldefinitelymakeandeepimpressiononyou.

---陶京

Step1典型錯誤1.Youareworthvisiting.Theplaceisworthvisiting.2.Theweatherisnothotandcold.Theweatherisneitherhotnorcold.3.Herearesomeadvicestoyou.Herearesomesuggestionstoyou.4.Youmusttakesomethickclothes.Youmusttakesomewarmclothes.5.Therehaveverygoodenvironmentandservice.Thereisaverygoodenvironmentandservice.Step2典型錯誤6.YoumusthavefuninFuzhou.YouwillhavefuninFuzhou.7.Itwillcoldatnight.Itwillbecoldatnight.8.Idobelievethatyouwilllikethiscityandhaveagoodtimeinhere.Idobelievethatyouwilllikethiscityandhaveagoodtimethere.9.Thespringisoftenrains.Itoftenrainsinspring.10.Finallyandmostimportantlyisthat…Finallyandmostimportantly,Whatmattersmostisthat…常用句式Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbeofhelptoyou.Itisagoodideatodosth.Youhadbetterdo…Whynot?Istronglyadviseyoutodo.Isuggestthatyoushoulddo.Iholdaviewthat…Itisnecessary/importanttodo.Step3重點短語既不。。。也不。。。值得做某事給。。。留下深刻印象名人參觀來自國內(nèi)外在于，位于對某人來說做某事是方便的。對。。。高度評價我堅定地認為玩得開心景點名勝古跡Neither…norBeworthdoingMakeadeepimpressiononCelebrityPayavisittoFromhomeandabroadLieinItisconvenientforsbtodosth.ThinkhighlyofIdobelievethatHaveagoodtimeScenicspotsPlacesofinterestStep4看圖說話

neither…norStep5Beworthdoing,celebrity

fromhomeandabroad

makeanimpressiononLiein

itisconvenientforsb.todosth.Localdishesthinkhighlyof謀篇布局Iamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbeofsomehelptoyou.Firstofall,_____________comehereinspringorautumn,foritisneithertoocoldnortoohotatthistime.Besides,____________________payavisittoThreeLanesandSevenalleys,whichiswellworthvisitingandhasattractedmanypeoplefromhomeandabroad.Manycelebritiesusedtolivethere.Itslonghistoryanduniqueculturewillcertainlymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Whatismore,______________livein

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.Itliesinthecitycentersoitisconvenientforyoutogoeverywhere.Finally,____________trysomelocaldishesinFuzhou.Youwillthinkhighlyofthem.Iamfirmlyconvincedthatyouwillhaveagoodtimeinmycity.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.YouhadbetterIstronglyadviseyoutoitisagoodideatoWhynotStep6

如何算是一篇好文章？－覆蓋了所有的要點－應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯－有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊，行文連貫，條理清楚。要點全詞匯,句型（高級）和語法多樣化（較復雜）語言地道連接詞自評互評

AWelcometomycity.IhopethatIcanhelptoyou.Tobeginwith,ourFuzhouisverygood.Itisverycool.IthinkyouwillcometoFuzhouinspring.Whatismore,ifyoucometoFuzhou,youwillstayin…h(huán)otel.Finally,youshouldvisittheThreelanesandsevenalleys.IwilltakeyoutothexiLake.Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Goodluck！(74words)6Step7_______________________________________________________________BIamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.SoIwillgiveyousometipsthatIhopethefollowingsuggestionswillhelpfultoyou.Firstofall,theweatherisveryimportant.IthinkOctoberisthebest.Becauseitneithercoldnorhot.Inaddition,Irecommendsomescenicspotsforyoutovisit,suchasthethreelanesandthreealleys,MountGu.Theseplacesareworthvisiting.Finallyandmostimportantly,acomfortablehotelisthekey.Ithinkmycitywillgiveyouadeepimpression.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.Iamlookingforwardtoyourarrival.(90words)13__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________CIamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillhelpyou.Fuzhouisasuitablecitytovisit.Theweatherhereisgood.Andyoucanchoosespringorfalltocome.Thesetwoseasaren’ttoohotortoocold.Besides,Fuzhouhassomanyplacesofinterest,SuchasThreelanesandsevenalleys.Itisworthvisiting.Longtimeago,thereweremanypeoplelivingthere.Itcanhelpyoutoknowaboutthelocalculturehere.Third,Fuzhouhasmanyhotelstochoose,eachofthemcanofferyouthebestservice.Sodon’tworryaboutit.Finallyandmostimportantly,sinceyouwanttocome,Irecommendyoutotastethedeliciousfoodhere.Itwilldefinitelymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.(125words)20_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________最后檢測

Iamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbesomehelptoyou.Firstofall,youhadbettercomehereinthespringorautumn,foritisneithertoocoldortoohotatthistime.BesidesIstronglyadviseyoutopayavisittoThreeLanesandSevenalleys,whichare

wellworthvisitingandhadattractedmanypeoplefromhomeandabroad.Manycelebritiesusedtolivingthere.Itslonghistoryanduniqueculturewould

certainlymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Whatismore,itisagoodideaforyoutolivein

Shangri-laHotel

Hotel.Itliesinthecitycentersoitisconvenientforyoutogoeverywhere.Finally,WhynottrysomelocaldishinFuzhou.Youwillthinkhighlyofthem.IamfirmlyconvincedthatIwillhaveagoodtimeinmycity.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasusefully.__nor__is___has__live—will——dishesuseful—you∧of﹨———Step8T4今天你學會了什么？

Iamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbeofsomehelptoyou.Firstofall,youhadbettercomehereinspringorautumn,foritisneithertoocoldnortoohotatthistime.BesidesIstronglyadviseyoutopayavisit