高一英語作文 【核心考點(diǎn)+能力提升】讀后續(xù)寫課件

讀后續(xù)寫高一（1）/(4)班讀后續(xù)寫試題說明提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，原文多是情節(jié)豐富的記敘文，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。

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讀后續(xù)寫文章題材選擇以記敘文為主。文章信息完整，既可以提煉出要點(diǎn)，又要給續(xù)寫留出余地，此類文章故事性強(qiáng)，情節(jié)有起伏，內(nèi)容連貫，邏輯性強(qiáng)，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，結(jié)尾處有結(jié)局或者感慨、總結(jié)等。段落要求：給定的段落開頭能引導(dǎo)故事延續(xù)，又防止天馬行空的想象。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofthescoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?””“Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“Comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”O(jiān)nthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.______________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback._______________________________Task:acontinuation(續(xù)寫)ofthestoryReadwhathappened____in__thestoryWritewhathappened______thestoryParagraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________afterWhat/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhyThekeyelementstoexploreinastory“4321”模式下的讀后續(xù)寫思維“4321”Method4Reads-Readforelements

,emotionalchange,conflict,theme3Principalsaction-responseconflict-solutionnegative-positive2Givensentences1Goodending研讀文章意識(shí)-細(xì)節(jié)+大意情節(jié)推進(jìn)意識(shí):結(jié)局反推情節(jié)意識(shí)show,don’ttell意識(shí)銜接意識(shí)主題意識(shí)寫作方法三大原則原文一致原則正能量原則曲折性原則寫作小技巧1.雙線并行情節(jié)線情感線寫作小技巧2.巧用過渡?地點(diǎn)過渡?邏輯過渡因果：thus、therefore?時(shí)間過渡atfirst/earlyinthemorning/when.../onarrivingat...(一到...)/withouthesitation(沒有遲疑)/havingdone...(做完...)/finally/intheend02、寫作方法寫作小技巧3.換詞大法簡單詞→高級(jí)詞see--catchsightofhappy--delightedsad--depressedsay--murmur/interrupt/insist/whisper/add/shout...02、寫作方法寫作小技巧4.萬能句式過渡詞，with/without...+介短/doing(主動(dòng))/done(被動(dòng)),人did...,doing...,feeling...eg:After10minutes,withabookinherhand,enjoyingherfavoritesongs,shesteppedintotheclassroom,feelingdelighted.5.記敘性語言與描述性語言結(jié)合，避免流水賬。02、寫作方法兩個(gè)雷區(qū)×太過離奇×對(duì)話、長句過多Step1ReadingFastreadingWhat'sthestyleofthepassage?Narration(記敘文)B.Exposition(說明文)C.Argumentation(議論文)

講述人物經(jīng)歷、事物變化FastreadingWhichoneistrueaccordingtothepassage?Theauthortellsthestoryinthefirstperson.Theauthortellsthestoreinthesecondperson.Theauthortellsthestoryinthethirdperson.

YouHeSheItinthefirstperson.IWeWhattenseshouldweuseifwewillcontinuetowrite?Thesimplepasttense一般過去時(shí)B.Thesimplefuturetense一般將來時(shí)C.Thesimplepresenttense一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)

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whyIDavidthedayofthebigcross-countryruntheracespot(aplacewiththickevergreenforest)Davidhesitatedandsaidhedecidednottorun.BecausethecoachwasafraidhewouldbelaughedatbythekidsfromotherschoolsaspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolaten-year-oldboywithabraindisease;unabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids;rockfromsidetosidewhilewalking

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Thoughunabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids,Davidwastreatedequallyasaregularkidandusuallylivedahappylifeintheschool.Hedecidedtotakepartinthecross-countryrunandpracticedveryhard,nevermissingasinglepractice,thoughhewasalwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheothers.Hewasaskedtodecidebyhimselfwhethertorunornotontherundaybecausethecoachwasafraidhewaslaughedatbythekidsfromotherschools.

Hewasstandingbyhimselfoffthesidebyafencebuthisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent.HappyDeterminedHesitantDepressed/LostanddownPlot&EmotionsAsaspecialeducationteacher,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.IfoundDavidstandingalonebyafence,notwarmingupandwalkingtheroutelikeotherrunnersbeforetherace.Iaskedhiscoachandlearnedthereason.

AftermakingsureDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme.AdmiredSurprisedFrustratedDetemined讀故事Step2Writing兩種構(gòu)思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應(yīng)”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應(yīng)“兩法六句”第一步依據(jù)首句，構(gòu)思框架兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)讀懂兩段首句第一段首句后的銜接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的銜接句。即第二段的尾句——能體現(xiàn)故事圓滿結(jié)局的句子或故事給我們啟示的句子。(2)寫好三個(gè)銜接句(3)寫好一個(gè)升華句動(dòng)作描寫增加細(xì)節(jié)所見所聞、所說所思所做環(huán)境描寫人物描寫語言描寫心理活動(dòng)描寫第二步增加細(xì)節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫續(xù)故事Conflicts1.最終David參加比賽了嗎？是什么讓他改變了主意？2.比賽過程中，其他學(xué)校的孩子嘲笑David了嗎？為什么有或沒有嘲笑他？Theme讀后續(xù)寫一般都用正能量結(jié)尾。所以其他學(xué)校的孩子們應(yīng)該沒有嘲笑David，反而會(huì)很敬佩他，會(huì)為他的身殘志堅(jiān)和不畏困難堅(jiān)持到最后的精神而鼓掌。-----所以根據(jù)事情的發(fā)展順序和所給的首句，Conflict1就是第一段要解決的內(nèi)容，第二段就解決Conflict2.續(xù)故事Clues----首句線索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?續(xù)故事Clues----原文線索1.