讀后續(xù)寫真題解析講義 高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫高考真題全解全析---2021年6月浙江卷閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Mydad,

George,

onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman(父親沉默寡言，這個(gè)人設(shè)要立住，后面最好別寫父親講了一大對(duì)話),

hedidn't

understand

myworldofschool

activities(父親不理解我的校園生活是我的看法，但是實(shí)際上父親真的不理解我嗎).Fromage14,

heworked.Andhis

dad,

Albert,

tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.(父親年級(jí)不大就出去打工補(bǔ)貼家用，而且爺爺拿走作者爸爸所以賺的錢，說明了：一是作者一家生活很艱苦，二是作者家庭傳統(tǒng)，賺錢上交幫助家庭開支，三是父親與后面自己打工掙錢但是不想上交形成鮮明對(duì)比)

Ididn'treally

understand

hisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker，andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超過)anythinghehad

accomplished

bythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschool

graduation.(我眼中的父子不同：為什么要特地提到父親是牲畜運(yùn)輸司機(jī)？立志要超過父親，隱隱約約中有種對(duì)父親的不屑，覺得父親平凡普通吧)

Summersinthemid-70s

werespentathomeshootingbaskets,

hittingabaseball,

orthrowinga

footballer,

preparingformyfutureasa

quarterback

onafootballteam.Inpoorweather,

Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(長號(hào)).

(夏天的時(shí)候，我都是在家里投籃、打棒球或扔足球，為我將來成為足球隊(duì)的四分衛(wèi)做準(zhǔn)備。天氣不好的時(shí)候，我讀一些體育方面的文章，或者練習(xí)我的長號(hào)。作用：1.點(diǎn)明了我與父親的不同，父親是司機(jī)而我有自己的夢(mèng)想。2.通過恰當(dāng)使用一連串的節(jié)奏動(dòng)詞，生動(dòng)具體地描述了主人公對(duì)體育的酷愛，展示了極強(qiáng)的畫面感。）

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthat

a

neighboring

farmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,

thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,

ridingdownthefieldlookingforweekstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,

thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,

butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslike

cockleburs,lamb's

quarters,footails,andthekingofweeds,

theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiring

work,

butIlookedforwardtothepay,

eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.(通過beganagain及happenedoverandover，加上情緒的形容詞tiring來體現(xiàn)作者為了掙錢而努力勞作)

Athome,

mydadsaid,“Ajob's

abigsteptogrowingup.

I'mgladyouwill

becontributing

tothehousehold.”

Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.(父親眼里打工意味著長大成人，意味著責(zé)任，但是在我眼里打工就是能獲得我能隨意支配的錢。這里的沖突很明顯，注意主題：growth)

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,

andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,

butIwasn't

interested.

IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadto

contribute

mymoney.（我因?yàn)橐奄嶅X交給爸爸，感覺工作起來沒有動(dòng)力，襯托了作者極不情愿交錢給爸爸的心理活動(dòng)描寫）Paragraph1:WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome-itwas$119-mydadwantedtotalktome.Paragraph2:IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.PART.01分析步驟步驟一：對(duì)所給出的兩個(gè)段首句提出問題第一段：1）帶著薪水回家，父親為啥要跟我聊天？2）根據(jù)第二段我很吃驚父親居然讓我支配我自己的薪水，說明了第一段我以為父親會(huì)跟我要我的薪水。3）父親要跟我聊天，我的反應(yīng)是什么？第二段：1）我為什么吃驚？2）我可以支配自己的薪水了，那接下來我會(huì)怎么做？帶著這些問題來看材料的時(shí)候要分析文章的人物性格，找出情感線的走向，為續(xù)寫做好鋪墊。1.

父親：沉默寡言，能吃苦，有家庭責(zé)任感，還有我以為的父親不理解我2.

我：有夢(mèng)想，為夢(mèng)想付出行動(dòng)，生活豐富，未能理解父親，家庭責(zé)任感不強(qiáng)情感線：作者與父親最初互相不理解→作者打工掙錢，滿懷期待能自己擁有這筆錢→父親的話讓作者認(rèn)為父親想要用這筆錢補(bǔ)貼家用，他感到失望和不公?！ɡm(xù)寫第一段首句提示）領(lǐng)了薪水回家后，父親要與作者談話→（續(xù)寫第二段首句提示）但在得知父親讓我支配我的薪水后，作者又感到驚喜答案有很多種，言之有理即可！Paragraph1:WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas

$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.Myheartsank!Aninnervoicetoldmethathewouldforcemetoturninmyhard-earnedpaycheckforthehouseholdashehaddone!Aflushofgrievancefloodedoverme.WhyIcouldnotkeepthemoneyIstruggletoearnformyself?HowIwishedIcouldusethemoneytobuyapairofnewsportsshoesI’ddreamedofforages!Reluctantly,

Itookoutthepaycheckandlaiditonthetable

withtearsblurringmyeyes.

Beyondmy

expectation,

mydadlookedconfused,“No,

no,

Ijustwantyouknowiamproudofyouandkeepitforyourself”

headded,

andataponmyshoulder.Paragraph2:IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Excitedandoverjoyed,

I

jumpedupanddown,wavingthesalaryintheair.Iwassoexcitedinside,likearoughsea.Butsuddenly,inoticedmyfatherhadaheadofgrayhair,aweatheredface,roughhandsandraggedclothes.Mysmilefadedaway.IfeltashamedanduneasyandrealizedhowselfishIwas

andhowharditwasformydadtofeedthewholefa