讀后續(xù)寫(三)-人與自然之野外入困讀后續(xù)寫

高中英語讀后續(xù)寫滿分突破主題專練人與自然之野外入困續(xù)寫讀后續(xù)寫（continuationwriting）是新高考的亮點，也是廣大考生的痛點，重點考查學生的批判思維和創(chuàng)造性思維，讓學生運用邏輯思維，綜合運用語言表達一個完整的故事線。要求考生對文章進行深入閱讀，整合處理信息并進行獨立的思考判斷，最終表現(xiàn)在語言輸出表達方面，能夠綜合運用符合語用習慣的語言表達，正確使用較復雜的句式和詞匯來表達自己的思想，同時續(xù)寫可體現(xiàn)考生的知識素養(yǎng)積累和價值觀取向，從而實現(xiàn)知識的外化遷移。新高考讀后續(xù)寫具有以下主要特點。體裁以記敘文為主，故事情節(jié)具有曲折沖突性。主題多樣，內(nèi)容積極向上，基本都是人與自然，人與社會，人與人之間的關(guān)系。本專題主要涉及野外陷入困境的主題，屬于新高考中考查學生在面對人生困境如何應對的題材，非常能體現(xiàn)考生的創(chuàng)造社思維，未來高考中必須高度重視，并掌握相關(guān)的高頻詞匯、短語和句式。2.文章傳遞真善美價值觀。讀后續(xù)寫高分寫作，傳遞真善美，力求立德樹人，知識雖重要，但是道德思想不達標，分數(shù)一樣不能得到高分。文章價值取向應當弘揚社會正氣，與社會主義核心價值觀的宏觀目標保持一致。面對人生困境，要積極傳遞正能量和樂觀的心態(tài)。3.考查學生的批判思維和創(chuàng)造性思維。讀后續(xù)寫是新高考的寫作的重要改變，對學生的思維力和思想性有較高的要求?？忌鷳斪龅接袟l理的表達一件事情或經(jīng)歷，能夠精準描述事件中的情感和觀點，照應段首語篇，并能夠完成續(xù)寫任務。希望考生通過學習我給大家高度概括的讀后續(xù)寫的寫作模式，輕松實現(xiàn)高分續(xù)寫作文。1.先看提示句，確定故事內(nèi)容。但凡是有續(xù)寫的地方，就存在套路。精準審題，多寫，多練，形成自己的寫作思路。首先，根據(jù)所給提示句，確定大概寫作內(nèi)容框架。如野外陷入困境的寫作中，首先梳理文章的人物、時間、地點、事件的原因，并對結(jié)果走向進行預測。用運用框架式寫作，套用模板。讓大家做到續(xù)寫，有話可說，寫出合“法”的句子，真正打動閱卷人，感動閱卷人，展現(xiàn)自己的語言綜合運用能力。要進行框架式寫作。一定框架思路，二代入式寫作。讀后續(xù)寫的框架一般分為困境類和救助類（自救/他救）。要積累相關(guān)語料，如面對野外遇險，一般是表達陷入困境時的動作描寫、心理描寫和面部表情，解決困境時的意志心態(tài)，到最后文末升華的思想高度。考生只有經(jīng)過專項的寫作訓練才能在高考的考場上，從容應對，爭取達到滿分寫作。3.認真書寫，把握時間，完成寫作。卷面的整潔，第一印象，字體的工整，都會影響到閱卷人的對考生平時學習的主觀判斷和心理感受，一定要平時練好字，考場上務必做到書寫清晰可認。Passage1第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens.whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahoseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的）blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————Passage2第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Onefall,mywifeEliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,EliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter,Itooksomepicturesorthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Atthatverymomentthehelicopterarrived.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________————————————————————————————————————————Passage3第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom，“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-cappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom！”shecried.“Help！”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,_shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,_thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Butthehelicopterdidn’tcomebackagain,andthedaybecamedarker.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Janewokeupatthedaybreak.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________————————————————————————————————————————高中英語讀后續(xù)寫滿分突破主題專練人與自然之野外入困續(xù)寫Passage1第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens.whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahoseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的）blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【讀后續(xù)寫解析】本語篇寫了父親帶兒子去西部荒野的一個朋友家體驗農(nóng)場生活，見父親和叔叔騎馬，兒子也很想騎，于是親身上馬體驗迷路的故事。符合我們的困境類（困境--想辦法脫離困境--脫困后結(jié)尾升華）的框架式寫作。[高頻詞匯，不需要記太多，管用夠用即可。]問題觸發(fā)后的語料：動作描寫：Seeing/Hearingwhathappened,Isuddenlyrealizedthat...（突出細節(jié)）表情描寫：Herfaceturnedpalewithfear.(細節(jié)+動作)心理描寫：ScaredasIwas,Istill...(細節(jié)+動作)心理描寫：Wecannotmakeitbacktothehouse.（不能夠回到家）Wewerecompletelylostintheforest.(迷路)解決問題語料:表情描寫：Myfacelitup.（表達高興）心理描寫：decidetodo.../makeupone’smindtodo...(下定決心解決問題)表情描寫：Excitementinone’seyes（表達高興）心理描寫：NeverinmylifehadIbeensodelighted.（表達高興）動作描寫：Ondoing(高頻句型“一……就……”)環(huán)境描寫：Everythingwentamazingly.(事情進展一切順利)Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.(野外迷路，找河流)心理描寫：Iworkupthecouragetodo...(鼓起勇氣)脫困后的感悟語料:（解決問題后感動相擁）表達感動：Iwasmovedtotears.動作描寫：Iwalkuptoher,andhughertightlywithtearsrollingdownhercheeks.(擁抱)結(jié)尾：Weeventuallyfindawayout.(出路)【參考范文：】Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.DadandIfounditwassocutethatwedecidedtochaseit.Afterawhile,wewerecompletelylostintheforest.Therewasnothingleftinoursightbutthetrees.“Wemaynotbeabletomakeitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughttomyself.Afteraseriesoffruitlessattemptstofindawayout,wefelthungryandtired.Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Wegotstuckintheforest.Andanunexpectedshoweraddedtothedifficultyofusinfindingawayhome,forallthetrackswehadmadedisappearedbecauseoftherain.Iwasalmostontheedgeofbreakingdownwhenmyfathersaid,“Don’tworry,myson.Irememberthereisarivernearthefarmhouse.Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.”Finally,wefoundtheriverandgotbacktothehousealongit.Iwalkuptomyaunt,andhughertightlywithtearsrollingdownthecheeks.Needlesstosay,weatealatedinner.Passage2第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter,Itooksomepicturesorthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Atthatverymomentthehelicopterarrived.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________————————————————————————————————————————【讀后續(xù)寫解析】本語篇本文主要講述了人與熊對抗,之后成功脫險的故事。主人公的感情線變化為:興奮渴望+驚恐+放松。劇情線以主人公如何與北極能周旋并成功擺脫它展開。符合我們的困境類（困境--想辦法脫離困境--脫困后結(jié)尾升華）的框架式寫作。[高頻詞匯，不需要記太多，管用夠用即可。]問題觸發(fā)后的語料：動作描寫：Seeing/Hearingwhathappened,Isuddenlyrealizedthat...（突出細節(jié)）表情描寫：Herfaceturnedpalewithfear.(細節(jié)+動作)心理描寫：ScaredasIwas,Istill...(細節(jié)+動作)心理描寫：Wecannotmakeitbacktothehouse.（不能夠回到家）Wewerecompletelylostintheforest.(迷路)解決問題語料:表情描寫：Myfacelitup.（表達高興）心理描寫：decidetodo.../makeupone’smindtodo...(下定決心解決問題)表情描寫：Excitementinone’seyes（表達高興）心理描寫：NeverinmylifehadIbeensodelighted.（表達高興）動作描寫：Ondoing(高頻句型“一...就...”)環(huán)境描寫：Everythingwentamazingly.(事情進展一切順利)Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.(野外迷路，找河流)心理描寫：Iworkupthecouragetodo...(鼓起勇氣)脫困后的感悟語料:（解決問題后感動相擁）表達感動：Iwasmovedtotears.動作描寫：Iwalkuptoher,andhughertightlywithtearsrollingdownhercheeks.(擁抱)結(jié)尾：Weeventuallyfindawayout.(出路)【詳解】由第一段的段首提示句可知:幾分鐘后,能又回到營地。接下來可通過場景渲染,描寫當時令人顫栗驚恐的畫面,例如"Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness."這不僅合理地描寫了熊的反應,也描繪出讓人戰(zhàn)栗的場景。由第二段的段首提示句可知:此時,直升機到了。如果想要進行續(xù)寫兩段的合理銜接,第一段的結(jié)尾可描寫成“Afterthoroughlycheckingthearea,thebearmovedforwardafewsteps.”這樣可以營造出危急的場景?！拔覀儭笨吹街鄙龣C的到來，感到絕處逄生的喜悅,可以以人物心理描寫作為第二段的開頭,重點描寫喜極而泣的狀態(tài)，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”最后，結(jié)尾部分需要迅速收束,并說明成功逃脫的結(jié)局。本文續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與原文高度契合,使用了高級詞匯和句子,尤其突出的是,場景和心理描寫傳神到位,如:Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.,又如Heroaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.,這不僅合理地描寫了熊的動作,也渲染出讓人戰(zhàn)栗的場景,讓讀者有極強的代入感;再如Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,ElIiprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.傳神地描繪出了EIi對于絕處逄生感到難以言表的喜悅和對救援的感激之情,等等【參考范文：】Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.ThenoisesturnedElIiandIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.Heroaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.EIliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepicturesofthebear.Theanimal'snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,hetrottedforwardafewsteps.Paragraph2：Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.EIliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Eliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.Passage3第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-cappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,_shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1：Butthehelicopterdidn’tcomebackagain,andthedaybecamedarker.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Janewokeupatthedaybreak.