技巧12 如何設(shè)計動作-高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練技巧12如何設(shè)計動作動作描寫技巧略談讀后續(xù)寫試題都是要求我們續(xù)寫人物經(jīng)歷，補(bǔ)充故事情節(jié)。在答題中存在的典型問題為情節(jié)構(gòu)思與前文不連接、續(xù)寫內(nèi)容欠豐滿、語言表達(dá)欠生動等。其重要原因就是不會根據(jù)文章主題和故事發(fā)展的需要生動、細(xì)致地描寫主要人物的動作，導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫文章情節(jié)失真、內(nèi)容平淡、人物蒼白、語言空洞。以下就是動作描寫的三個技巧：一、描寫精準(zhǔn)化怎樣使用精準(zhǔn)化動作類詞匯對動作進(jìn)行細(xì)致描寫呢？其實(shí)很簡單，用一系列小動作而不用大動作，或者用含義比較明確的動詞，而不用抽象或虛化的動詞來描述，可以使描寫更加具體生動。試比較下面兩句:①Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.小男孩對他媽媽說對不起。②Thelittleboyhunghisheadandmumbledanapologytohismother.小男孩垂著頭，咕噥著向他母親道歉。分析：第一句中“saidsorryto”不帶任何感情色彩,而第二句中使用了具體化的表示“說”的動詞mumbled（咕噥），從而使一個不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地復(fù)現(xiàn)在讀者腦海中。除了精準(zhǔn)選用表示動作的詞語，而且要給動詞加上適當(dāng)?shù)男揎棾煞?。適當(dāng)?shù)男揎椪Z能細(xì)致地表達(dá)出動作的時間、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表現(xiàn)人物的鮮明個性與思想境界。動作描寫中最常見的修飾成分就是狀語，如副詞、介詞短語等。例如，在體現(xiàn)動作的迅速和短暫時，我們可以添加以下修飾語：suddenly、immediately、withoutpausing、withoutdelay等。比如下面兩句：①Thewolfalsonoticedthemand

turneditsheadback,shouting

atPaulandBecky.狼也注意到他們，回頭朝保羅和貝基大喊大叫。②Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemand

fiercely

turneditsheadback,shouting

loudly

atPaulandBecky.與此同時，狼也注意到了他們，惡狠狠地轉(zhuǎn)過頭，對保羅和貝基大聲大叫。分析：第二句中加上了atthesametime與此同時/fiercely激烈地/loudly大聲地這三個副詞，把這兩個人遇到狼這個危險情況生動表達(dá)了出來。至于有哪些重要的副詞，可以豐富我們的句子表達(dá)呢？在后面的課程中，我們會有專題講解，請大家耐心等哦。二、動作過程化記敘文中有不少動作描寫是一連串動作過程的展示。尤其在展示人物個性的動作時,如果我們蜻蜓點(diǎn)水、一筆帶過,就很難突出人物形象,也很難給人以深刻的印象,而通過細(xì)節(jié)描寫展現(xiàn)出動作的過程,表現(xiàn)力便會大增。我們來看下面兩句:①Shewenttocatchthebutterfly.她去捉蝴蝶。②Shecreptalongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedherhandsaroundthebutterflygently.她躡手躡腳地走著小路，迅速彎下腰，輕輕地繞著蝴蝶。分析：第①句在描寫主人公捕捉蝴蝶的動作時,沒有細(xì)節(jié)的動作描寫,因此顯得很平淡。而②句運(yùn)用了creep爬,bend彎腰,cup（使成杯型）三個連貫的動詞生動具體地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙過程,具有極強(qiáng)的畫面感。因此,在續(xù)寫過程中,在必要的地方恰當(dāng)使用一連串的動詞來表示過程,能為文章增添不少色彩。三、語言修辭化除了在動詞上做調(diào)整,還可以利用恰當(dāng)?shù)男揶o手法來幫助描寫動作。比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法都能讓動作描寫變得更有表現(xiàn)力。(1）第一組①Theoldman’sfacewrinkled.老人的臉皺了起來。②Theoldman’sfacewaslikeawitheredapple.老人的臉像一個枯萎的蘋果。分析：第②句使用了比喻，不說“皺起來”，而說“像一個枯萎的蘋果”，使得臉上動作描述，更加生動形象，更加吸引眼球。(2)第二組：①M(fèi)ystomachwasachingfornoteatingontime.我的胃因不按時吃飯而疼痛。②Mystomachwaspunishingmefornoteatingontime.我的胃在懲罰我沒有按時吃東西。分析：第②句使用了擬人，不說“疼痛”，而說“懲罰了我”，更加生動有趣。(3)第三組①Whensheheardthebadnews,shecried.當(dāng)她聽到這個壞消息時，她哭了。②Whensheheardthebadnews,ariveroftearspouredout.當(dāng)她聽到這個壞消息時，我淚流如何。分析：第②句使用了夸張，不說“哭”，而說“淚流如河”，讓我們的腦海中，悲傷之情油然而生。動作描寫素材積累與肢體語言相關(guān)的動作描寫素材(1)head①Sheturnedandheadedforthedoor.她轉(zhuǎn)身朝門走去。②Heburied/put/heldhisheadinhands,greatlyannoyed.他雙手抱頭，非常生氣。③Manypeopleintheaudiencenoddedinagreement.許多觀眾點(diǎn)頭表示贊同。④Ifellasleepassoonasmyheadhitthepillow.頭一碰枕頭我就睡著了。⑤Hehung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowedhisheadinshame.他羞愧地低下了頭。(2)face①Herfacepaledwithfright.她嚇得臉都白了。②Abrightsmileappearedon/spreadacross/crossedhisface.他的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。③Herfacelitup/brightened/glowedwhenIgaveherthepresent.我給她禮物時，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩。(3)cheek①Colorrushed/flooded/rosetohercheekswhensherealizedshewasbeingwatched.意識到有人在看她，她頓時漲紅了臉。②Hefelthischeeksburningwithshame.他因為羞愧而感到臉頰發(fā)燒。③Hercheekswerewetwithtears.她淚流滿面。(4)eye①Heturnedhiseyestothedoorwhenheheardthehandleturning.聽到門把轉(zhuǎn)動的聲音，他向門那邊看去。②Tinasqueezedhereyesshutandbitherlip.蒂娜閉上雙眼，咬了咬嘴唇。③Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.她直視父親的眼睛，誠實(shí)地回答了他的問題。④Shetriedtositup,hereyesfixedonJoan'sface.她試圖坐起來，雙眼緊盯著瓊的臉。⑤Ifelttearswellupinmyeyes.我感到淚水在眼里涌出來。(5)mouth①Ourmouthsdroppedopeninsurprise.我們驚奇地張大了嘴。②MymouthstartedwateringwhenIsmelledthefood.聞到食物的香味，我開始流口水了。③MyheartwasinmymouthwhenIwalkedintoheroffice.我走進(jìn)她的辦公室時，緊張得心都提到嗓子眼了。(6)hand①Shetookthechild'shandandhelpedhimclimbthesteps.她拉住孩子的手牽著他爬上臺階。②Hereachedforherhandandheldittightly.他伸手抓住她的手并緊緊握住。③Sheshruggedandspreadherhands.“That'sallIcantellyou.”她聳聳肩，攤開雙手說：“我只能告訴你這么多了?！雹躍heshivered,rubbingherhandstogetherfiercely.她一邊顫抖，一邊使勁搓著雙手。⑤Herhandsshook/trembledassheliftedtheglasstoherlips.她的手顫抖著把杯子送到唇邊。(7)arm①Hewasrunningforward,wavinghisarms.他揮舞著胳膊向前跑著。②Hestoodtherewithcrossedarms,lookingangry.他交叉著雙臂站在那里，看上去怒氣沖沖。③Shefoldedherarmsandstaredathim.她交叉著雙臂注視著他。1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwaspouringheavily.Mabelwasallwetbythetimeshearrivedatthesheltered(遮蔽)walkway.Fromfarawayshewatchedthepublicbusleavethebusstopwithouther.Sheshookherheadandsaidtoherself,“Ishouldhavebroughtmyumbrella.”Mabelstoodattheshelterandwatchedpeoplegetonthebuses.Theonlywayshecouldreachschoolwouldbetohavesomeoneshelterhertothebusstopandwaitforthenextbus.Theschoolwasjustonebusstopaway.However,shewasnotconfidentofanyonehelpingheratall.Everyonelookedtoobusytonoticeher.Mabelaskedafewpeopleforhelp.Butnobodystoppedtolendorshareanumbrella.Mabelbegantofeeldisappointed.Shewasshockedthatnoonehadagreedtohelpher.Shehadnochoicebuttostaywhereshewas.Shedecidedtowaitfortheraintostop.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,someonetouchedMabelonhershoulder.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Mabelfinallyarrivedatherschool.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語段續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文，續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右。Jackson’sfamilyhiredadriver.Thedriver’sfamilycametostaywiththeminasmallhouseintheirbackyard.That’showJacksonmetthedriver’seight-year-oldsonTom.FromthedayhemetJackson,Tombecamehisfan.ForTom,11-year-oldJacksonseemedtobeabigboy.HewouldalwaysfollowJacksonaround.Tomdidn’tgotoschool.Hewasadmittedtoalocalgovernmentschool,butherefusedtogo.HetoldJacksonshylythattheteachersonlymadethemcopywordsfromtheblackboard.Sincehehadn’tlearnedhowtoread,hecouldnotunderstandanythingthatwaswrittenontheblackboard.

Jacksonfeltsorryforhim.OnSunday,JacksonsawTomsittingunderatreeholdinganalphabet(字母表)bookinhishands.JacksonwalkedquietlytowardshimanddiscoveredthatTomwasholdingthebookupsidedown.JacksontookthebookoutofTom’shandsandturnedtherightsideup.“Thisishowyoushouldread,”hetoldTom.TwobigtearsrolleddownTom’scheeks.TomtoldJackson,“Iwanttobelikeyou,butIcan’tdoanything.”Thatevening,JacksontoldhisparentstheyhadtohelpTomgetintoabetterschool.ItwasnoteasytomakeTomadmittedtoanewschool,becausethetimeforadmissionwasover.Luckily,oneprincipal(校長)lookedatTomkindlyandadmittedhimtoherschool.ThenextdayTomwenttohisnewschoolwearinganewshirt.ButwhenTomreturnedfromschool,hewasabitsad.Theotherchildreninhisclasshadlaughedathim.HetoldJackson,“TheyallsaidIammucholderthanthembutinasmallerclass.Idon’twanttogotoschool.”注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式作答。Paragraphl:Jacksonsaid,“Don’tworry,Tom,Iwillteachyoutoread."________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Twomonthslater,Tomreturnedfromschoolwithabrightsmile.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Moneyweretight,soIwasexcitedwhenafriendmentionedanonlinecompanythatwastryingtohirewriters.Oncheckingtherequirementsforthepost,Iknewthiswasthejobforme.Partoftheapplicationprocessinvolvedwritingatestarticle.Ithoughtoverthetopic,spentseveralhoursdoingresearch,andproducedmybestpossibleeffort.Oneoftherequirementsinvolvedtheuseofsoftwarethatwasnewtome.ThenewsoftwaresavedautomaticallyasIworked,sothatseemedperfect.Thatsavedmefromneedingtohit“save”evennowandthen.Aftercompletingthearticle,Icheckeditseveraldozentimes.Ithadtobeasnearperfectionaspossible.WhenIcouldnolongerimproveitanymore,Itoldthecompanythatthepostwasreadyforthemtoreadandsentthemalink.Afewdayspassedbeforethecompanycontactedme.Theyhadrefusedme.Icouldn’tunderstandwhy.Itmusthavebeenmyarticleas,untilthatpoint,theyseemedhappywitheverythingelse.Theyinvitedmetotryagaininninetydays,butthereseemedlittlepointindoingthat.Ihadnoideawhattheydidn’tlikeaboutmyarticle.Disappointed,IthankedthempolitelyandwonderedwhatelseIcoulddotoimprovemyincome.Nextday,Ireceivedanothere-mailfromthecompany.Theywantedmetopostmyarticleagain.Thatseemedstrange.Whatwasthepointofpostinganarticlethey’dalreadyrefused?Followingtheadviceofmyfriend,Iopenedmypostoncemoretoseeiftherewereanyoverlookedproblems.Iimmediatelynoticedthataneditorforthecompanyhadeditedthearticle.Sheseemedtolovethepieceuntilshecametothelastparagraph.Ithadtoomanytypingerrors.Neartheend,thetextturnedintothreelinesof“n”.Hereandthere,anotherletterappeared,andthenthe“n”continued.Overthreelines.Thewordwashiddenamongdozensof“n”.Iwasshocked.Howcouldthathavehappened?Somethingmusthavelandedonthekeyboard.ButhowhadInotnoticedit?注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Atthatpoint,ourverycute,extremelycuriousparrot,flewintotheroomandlandedonmyshoulder.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ieditedmypiececarefullyagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Alittlekindnessgoesalongway.Itisincrediblehowonesimpleactcancompletelyturnaperson’sdayaround.Thesesimple,preciousmomentsarewhatmakeslifesospecial.JulieBickisasinglemotheroftwolovelychildren,aged8and10,andshethinksherfamilyisherworld.Sheabsolutelyadoredhermomanddadgrowingup,andshekeptagoodrelationshipwiththemasanadult—althoughthestressesoflifesometimesgotinthewayofthemspendingtimetogether.Unfortunately,Julie’smompassedawayunexpectedly.Shewasn’tabletomakethememoriesshewouldhavehopedto,anditbotheredherdeeply.Shewasdeterminednottomakethesamemistaketwice.Thenin2017,justoneyearafterhermomdied,Julie’sdadwasdiagnosedwithAlzheimer’sdisease(老年癡呆).Theworrieddaughterwastotallyoverwhelmed(不堪重負(fù)的),butsherememberedthepromiseshehadmadetoherselfafterlosinghermother.Thisnewsservedasareasonforspendingmorequalitytimewithherdad.Juliedecidedthatthebestthingtodowassticktogether.Sheandherchildren,CarleeandBrantlee,movedinwithherdad.Theywantedtogivehimthebestlife,sotheybecamehiscaretakers.Thisseemedtocheerherdadup,whichwasalltooessentialatsuchacriticalpointinhislife.Thisnewlivingsituationwasnotwithoutdifficulties,butitwasworthittoJulietobethereforherfather.Still,thewomanwasstrugglingalot:Shewasamother,acaretaker,abreadwinner,andanindividual.Itcouldbehardtobalanceitall.SometimesJuliefeltoverwhelmedbythesituationlifehadthrownather,butshealwaystriedtomanageit.Sheneverwantedtoshowherworriestoherdad,becauseshedidn’twanttocausehimstress.Whenshecried,shewouldwipeawayhertearsbeforehecouldseethem.ButJulieandherdadwereclose,andheknewthatsomethingwastroublingher.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Fortunately,Harold,agarbageman,comfortedthedadanddaughterwithhiskindness.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItmeantsomuchtoJuliethatthismanwouldtaketimeoutofhisdaytohelpher.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Oneday,DadtookTimandLilytothesupermarket.“NowwherehasTimgone?”askedDad.Lilyshrugged.KeepingtrackofTimwasnotonheragendatoday.She’dbeentryingtodecideontheperfectgiftforDad’supcomingbirthday.Thisyear,shewasdeterminedtoprepareapresentthatcouldn’tbeboughtatastoreororderedonline.“Daddy!”Timappearedoutofnowhere,disturbingLily’sthoughts.Heyelled,holdingacereal(麥片)boxintheair,“Let’sgetit!It’snutritiousanddelicious!Andithasadragoninside!”TimrememberedDadsayingthatwhenhewasakid,almosteveryboxofcerealcamewithatoy.Eversince,Timwascertainthathe,too,wouldfindatoyinthenextbox.Whentheygothome,DadandLilybeganputtingawaythegroceries.Timcouldn’twaittotaketheboxofcerealupstairstohisroom.Bythetimetheyfinished,LilycouldhearTimshouting.“No!No!”Tim’svoicekeptgettinglouderandlouder.Lilyimaginedeachwordasthesoundofahammerstrikingmetal.Thensheracedtowardsherbrother’sroom.Themomentshesteppedinside,shefeltacrunch(嘎吱聲)beneathherfeet.ItwasobviousthatTimdumpedallthatcereallookingforatoydragon.“Theylied!Nodragon.Justapictureonthebox.”Timsoundedclosetotears.AnnoyedasLilywas,shesaidquietly,“Let’sseewhattheboxsays.”“Idon’tknowhowtoread.”herbrothersaidinalowvoice.ItremindedLilythatlastschoolyear,Tim’steacherwhosenthomeeasy-to-readbooksandworksheetsinsistedthathewasreadytolearntoreadandjustneededsomeextrahelp,butTimcomplainedaboutbooks“forbabies”and“boring”homeworkassignments.ItwasreallyaheadacheforDadtoteachTimtoread!Atthethoughtofthese,itseemedthatTim’sdragonissuehadsweptawayherconcernforapresentforDad.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1：LilydecidedtocooperatewithTim,makingupadragonstoryandhavingTimreadforDad.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,Dad’sbirthdayfinallycame.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Suddenly,someonetouchedMabelonhershoulder,Mabelturnedbackandsurprisinglyspottedatallandbeautifulladywearingashiningsmileonherface,withacolorfulumbrellainherhand.Agentlevoicecame,“Doyouwanttogowithme?”SheexplainedthatshehadrecognizedMabel’sschooluniformanddecidedtoshelterhertotheschool.Mabelwaspleasedbeyonddescription,smiledandagreedimmediately.Mabelfinallyarrivedatherschool.Whenshesatdowninclass,shetookoffherwetcoatandsocksandfeltoverwhelminglymoved.Therewasnodoubtthatitwasherdaybecausetheteacherpraisedherinclassandshefeltgratefulthatshewasnotlateforclass.Althoughdrenchedcompletely,Mabelwasstillhappythattheladyhadhelpedheronthewaytoschool.Shecouldn’thelpthinkingofthatbeautifulwoman.Whilethelady’sphysicalbeautywasastounding,itwasherinvisiblebeautythatsheshallalwaysremember.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了Mabel在上學(xué)的路上遇到傾盆大雨，她找到一個庇護(hù)所避雨，但這庇護(hù)所離車站有一段距離，她希望有人能分享傘讓她去車站，但幾次求助無果后，她別無選擇只能站在那里等待雨停。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由首句內(nèi)容“突然，有人碰了碰Mabel的肩膀。”可知，這段可重點(diǎn)寫Mabel遇到一位好人愿意送她去學(xué)校。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Mabel終于到了她的學(xué)校。”可知，第二段可描寫Mabel準(zhǔn)時到達(dá)學(xué)校，心中對幫助她的人充滿感激。2.續(xù)寫線索：女士提供幫助——Mabel接受幫助——Mabel準(zhǔn)時到達(dá)學(xué)校——Mabel充滿感激之情3.詞匯激活行為類①.看見：notice/spot/see②.解釋：explain/interpret/spot③.記?。簉emember/keepinmind情緒類①.驚訝地：surprisingly/astonishingly/astoundingly②.滿意的：pleased/satisfied/content③.感激的：grateful/thankful/appreciative【典型句式】[高分句型1].SheexplainedthatshehadrecognizedMabel’sschooluniformanddecidedtoshelterhertotheschool.（運(yùn)用了由that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）[高分句型2].Whilethelady’sphysicalbeautywasastounding,itwasherinvisiblebeautythatsheshallalwaysremember.（運(yùn)用了由itwas...that引導(dǎo)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句）2．Jacksonsaid,“Don’tworry,Tom,Iwillteachyoutoread.”“CanIbethesameasyou?”Tomaskedwithhope.“Sure,ifyouwantto.”answeredJackson.Thenthetwomadeareadingplantogether.Onthedaybothofthemwenttoschool,whileonthenighttheyspentatleasttwohoursreadingthealphabetbook.WithJackson’shelp,Tombegantounderstandthethingthatwaswrottenontheblackboardslowly.Twomonthslater,Tomreturnedfromschoolwithabrightsmile.Herushedintothehouseandcan’twaittotellJacksonagoodnewsthathewaspraisedbytheteacher,whosaidhemadesuchagreatprogressinashorttime.Andalltheclasswereastonishedathisimprovements.“Thankyou,youdomakeadifferencetome.”saidtoJackson.“No,itisyouwhoyoushouldsaythanks.Alwaysremember,anyonecanmakeadifference,justdon’tgiveup!”【寫作分析】本文以第三人稱視角講述湯姆在進(jìn)入一個更好學(xué)校之后因為不識字而被同學(xué)嘲笑，從而產(chǎn)生了厭學(xué)的想法，在好朋友杰克遜的幫助下，他學(xué)習(xí)取得了進(jìn)步，并且贏得了同學(xué)們的尊重，對學(xué)習(xí)和校園生活重拾了信心的故事。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“杰克遜對湯姆說：‘別擔(dān)心，我會教你讀書的?！笨芍谝欢慰蓪懡芸诉d是如何幫助湯姆進(jìn)行閱讀識字的。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“兩個月之后，湯姆帶著燦爛的笑容從學(xué)?；貋砹恕笨芍诙慰擅鑼憸吩趯W(xué)校所發(fā)生的事情，以及閱讀取得的成效和對杰克遜的感謝。2.續(xù)寫線索：幫助閱讀識字——被表揚(yáng)——感謝——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①回復(fù)：answer/reply②回家：rushintohouse/gobackhome③放棄：giveup/backdown情緒類①開心：withahappysmile/verydelighted②驚訝：feelastonished/surprised【典型句式】【高分句型1】Herushedintothehouseandcan’twaittotellJacksonagoodnewsthathewaspraisedbytheteacher,whosaidhemadesuchagreatprogressinashorttime.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的同位語從句和who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句）【高分句型2】No,itisyouwhoyoushouldsaythanks.（運(yùn)用了itis...who引導(dǎo)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句型）3．Onepossibleversion:Atthatpoint,ourverycute,extremelycuriousparrot,flewintotheroomandlandedonmyshoulder.HeusuallyflewintomyroomandstoodbymewhileIwasworkingonmycomputer.Sometimeshewouldlandonthekeyboard.Hesoonlearnedthatifheranonthekeys,littlefiguresappearedonthescreen.Atsomepointwhilemyimportantarticlewasstillopenonmyscreen,Imusthavelefttheroom.WhileIwasaway,hecameouttoplay!Hemusthavedoneahappytapdanceontheletter“n”andthenflownawaybeforeIreturned.Ieditedmypiececarefullyagain.ThistimeImadesureitwasperfectbeforeclosingthewindow.Iwroteacovere-mailcontainingaheartfeltapologyandexplainedwhatIthoughthadhappened.AfterIsenttheletter,Iwonderedaboutmywisdom.Itreallydidsoundliketheage—oldexcuseteachershear:“Thedogatemyhomework!”However,itseemedtodothetrick.Afewdayslater,Isignedmyletterofacceptancetoworkwiththecompany.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述作者非常想要尋找一份工作解決經(jīng)濟(jì)緊張問題，朋友提到一份網(wǎng)上公司的工作時，作者核查了要求感覺特別適合自己，于是精心編輯了一篇文章應(yīng)聘，自我感覺文章近乎完美，但是結(jié)果公司卻拒絕了作者，作者很困惑，后來公司請作者再次上傳一次他的文章，作者打開同一篇文章準(zhǔn)備再仔細(xì)檢查一下，結(jié)果發(fā)現(xiàn)文章中有許多無效的字母，作者很震驚，最終弄清楚是自己的鸚鵡落在鍵盤上弄出了這些無效字母的故事。1.段落續(xù)寫：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時，我們那只非?？蓯?、非常好奇的鸚鵡飛進(jìn)了房間，落在了我的肩上?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者想到很可能是鸚鵡落在鍵盤上弄出了這些無效字母n。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我又一次仔細(xì)地編輯了我的文章。”可知，第二段可描寫作者再次精心編輯了文章，發(fā)給了公司，雖然感覺理由有點(diǎn)令人不能相信，作者還是解釋了原因，最終被公司錄取的經(jīng)過。2.續(xù)寫線索：想到鸚鵡平時的動作——懷疑鸚鵡——再次編輯文章——解釋原因——被錄取3.詞匯激活行為類①.落在鍵盤上：landonthekeyboard/fallonthekeyboard②.返回：return/goback③.解釋：explain/interpret情緒類①.困惑：wonder/fellconfused/feelpuzzled【典型句式】[高分句型1].HeusuallyflewintomyroomandstoodbymewhileIwasworkingonmycomputer.（運(yùn)用了while引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句）[高分句型2].Iwroteacovere-mailcontainingaheartfeltapologyandexplainedwhatIthoughthadhappened.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作定語，what引導(dǎo)賓語從句）4．Fortunately,Harold,agarbageman,comfortedthedadanddaughterwithhiskindness.Haroldwasanextremelynicemanwhohadgoodrelationshipswitheveryoneintheneighborhood.Hewasknownallaroundtheblockforhisfriendliness.EveryMondayhewouldvisitwiththegarbagetruck.OneMonday,whenJuliejustspentaroughnightandswepthertears,herfatherapproachedherandsaid,“Don’tworry,Julie.Haroldismyfriend.Hewouldlikeadaywithmetomorrowsothatyoucanfreeyourselfforamoment.”ItmeantsomuchtoJuliethatthismanwouldtaketimeoutofhisdaytohelpher.Hiskindheartleftherwitharestoredfaithinhumanity.Sheknewnomatterwhatdiseaseherfatherhad,itwouldnevertakeawayhisloveforher.AlthoughHaroldhadpickeduptheirgarbageformanyyears,hetrulydidn’tknowwellabouther.ButwhenheknewthatthefatherhadAlzheimer’sdisease,hewouldtaketimetolookafterthem.Therewassomuchgoodinthisworld,anditstartedwithsimpleactsofkindness.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開。Julie是位有兩個孩子的單親媽媽，盡管生活壓力很大，她還是與父母經(jīng)常保持聯(lián)系。然而不幸的是，母親意外過世，父親也在一年后患了老年癡呆。Juli