2023屆浙江省首考讀后續(xù)寫：蜂鳥報恩課件

—浙江英語高考

蜂鳥報恩ContinuationWriting

Iwasinvitedtoa

cookout(=barbecuen.野外燒烤宴會)

onanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghouse(牛奶房)whichhadapparently(顯然)notbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperately(絕望地)tryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarely(幾乎不)abletomoveherwings.She

ceased(停止)

herstruggletheinstant(一...就...)

Ipickedherup. Withthebirdinmycuppedhand(窩起的/杯狀的手),Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffed(塞)

apieceof

cloth(布)

into

theholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurely(安全地)

behindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthe

sticky(黏的)

spider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still(但是),she

madenoattemptto(沒嘗試做...)

fly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootiredortoothirsty.

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight(在視野之外).

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting(離開),myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,then

letout(發(fā)出)asqueakingcall(吱吱聲)andwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①嘗試畫出前文情節(jié)中“我”的路線圖在農(nóng)場外下車，經(jīng)過黑莓小徑，途徑農(nóng)場中的牛奶房，在農(nóng)場里cookout。②總結(jié)一下原文中出現(xiàn)的描寫蜂鳥的表達(dá)Shewascoveredinspider-webs.Hovering（懸停）,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.③第二段“我”即將從哪離開？2種可能，牛奶房或農(nóng)場。如果是牛奶房，那么第一段的時間就只是我停車到到達(dá)牛奶房；如果是農(nóng)場，那么第一段還要寫我后面去農(nóng)場干什么。建議是農(nóng)場，因?yàn)檫@樣情節(jié)會多一些。④第二段峰鳥出現(xiàn)怎樣才能意料之外，合理之中？借朋友之口說蜂鳥這段時間一直在農(nóng)場附近盤旋，似乎渴望見到作者，只有這樣它第二段出現(xiàn)才不突兀。Iparkedoutsidethefarm.WhoWhereWhenWhat

I,hummingbird,myfriendbeforeandduringthecookoutamilkinghousewithbrokenwindow,myfriend’sfarm讀懂主要故事情節(jié)

確定故事走向

Isavedatrappedbirdinamilkinghouse.AsIwasdeparting,shecametomeasifsayinggoodbye.讀透人物性格

細(xì)化故事情節(jié)Para1:Isavedatrappedbird.kindPara2:Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.consideratecarefulPara6:Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedmetofixthewindow.kindhearted/warmhearted讀透人物性格

細(xì)化故事情節(jié)Para6:Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.cleverPara6:AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedtomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.grateful讀準(zhǔn)語言特點(diǎn)

豐富故事表達(dá)1.thehummingbird--shepersonification2.“thebird,thistinycreature,ahummingbird”3.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention.無靈主語4.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)cupped杯型的，凹形的repetition

usedifferentnamestoavoidShewasbarelyabletomoveherwings.Shesat

lookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Hovering,sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Sheflewquicklyoutofsight.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Languagefeature:simplebutdescriptive.在這普天同慶的大日子里我有萬千祝福而無從說起只想很老土地向你說四個字圣誕快樂！Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.讀清段首句

初步確定兩段情節(jié)

Plot1:WhatdidIdoonthefarm?Plot2:Ididn’tseethehummingbirdonthefarm.Plot1:Wemeteachother.Plot2:Wehadanotheramazingexperience.Theinstantthedesolatemilkinghousecameintomysight,memoriesofthetinyhummingbirdcamefloodingback.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.①在原來的地方停了車，我又踏上了黑莓小徑。_______________________（非謂語）atthesamepositionasbefore,I____________________ontheblackberry-linedpathagain.Havingpulledover/parked

wandered/stepped②那座荒涼的牛奶房一進(jìn)入我的視線，關(guān)于那只小蜂鳥的記憶就如潮水般涌了上來。_____________the__________milkinghouse____________________,memoriesofthetinyhummingbird____________________.

Theinstantdesolatecameintomysight

camefloodingback

Iobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.③我注意到破裂的窗戶已經(jīng)修補(bǔ)好了，正如承諾的那樣。I__________thatthe________window_________________________________________(正如承諾的那樣，as+過去分詞）.observedcracked

hadbeenmended/fixed

aspromised④我朋友接下來說的話觸動了我的心弦。這幾天，蜂鳥不時地在屋外盤旋，似乎在尋找我的蹤跡。Whatmyfriendsaidnext_________________________.Thehummingbird____________________outsidethehouse__________________thesedays,seemingtoseekforthe____________ofme.tuggedatmyheartstrings

hadbeenhovering

fromtimetotime

trace/trackIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.⑤在野炊期間，上次見到這只可愛生物的場景不斷出現(xiàn)在我的腦海中，我期待著再次見到它。Duringthecookout,_______of_____________the_______________lasttime___________________________tome,with_________________________toseeitagain________________mymind.

scenesencounteringlovelycreaturekeptpresentingthemselvesanticipation/expectationsurgingthroughIobservedthatthecrackedwindowhadbeenmended.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.①我的心激動得怦怦直跳，她拍著翅膀，在我的臉上盤旋。Withmyheart____________________,she________itswings,__________closetomyface.

thumpingwiththrillflappedhovering②當(dāng)我們的目光相遇時，她發(fā)出了一聲尖銳的吱吱聲，在我面前歡快地叫著。Asour_________met,she________a________________________,_________________infrontofme.glancesletouthigh-pitchedsqueakchirp