高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)專(zhuān)題之遇險(xiǎn)類(lèi)+地震中的溫暖與追求+講義

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Thevideoofaquakesurvivorsearchingforthearmyofficerwhosavedhislife10yearsagohasattractedmuchattentiononChina’ssocialmedia.“Tenyearshavepassed.Ihavebecomeasoldierlikeyou.Canyouseeme?I’vebeenlookingforyoualltheseyears.Whereareyou?”thesurvivor,QiangTianlin(強(qiáng)天林),saysinthevideo.Sincethevideowentonlineaweekago,ithasbeenviewedmorethan12milliontimesandforwarded（轉(zhuǎn)發(fā)）over30,000timesonSinaWeibo.Qiangwas14andattendingGuanzhuangMiddleSchoolwhenthe8.0-magnitudeearthquakestruckSichuan’sWenchuanCountyonMay12,2008.Thequakeclaimed（索?。﹎orethan80,000lives,andaround130,000military（軍隊(duì)）personneltookpartinthesearchandrescuework.Worriedabouthisfamily,Qianglefthisschoolandheadedhomealone.Walkingonamountaintrack,aftershockssuddenlycausedalandslide.Apassingsoldiergrabbed（抓?。㏎iangandusedhisownbodytoshield（保護(hù)）theteenagerfromthefallingrocks.“Wereitnotthatsoldier,Imighthavedied.Isawfallingrockshittinghisbackandhishandswerebleeding,”Qiangrecalled（回憶）.ThesoldiertookhimtoatemporaryshelternearbyandfetchedQiang’sfamilythenextday.Inthefollowingmonths,hecametotheshelterseveraltimes,settinguptentsanddelivering（派送）supplies（物資）topeople.“IregretthatIdidn’taskforhisname.AllIknowisthathewas1.7meterstallandotherscalledhimBattalionCommander,”Qiangsaid.注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為二段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已經(jīng)為你寫(xiě)好；Paragraph1TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang’slife.Previously（以前的）,hisacademicperformance(學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī))waspoor,buttheofficer___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Theofficerresponded（回復(fù)）afterviewing（觀看）thevideoonSinaWeibo.AndtheyhadachancetochatontheWeChat（微信）.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、文章大意2008年5月12日四川汶川發(fā)生8.0級(jí)地震，強(qiáng)天林當(dāng)時(shí)14歲，在回家途中遭遇山體滑坡，一位路過(guò)的身高約1.7米、被稱(chēng)為營(yíng)長(zhǎng)的士兵用身體保護(hù)了他，并將他帶到臨時(shí)避難所，還幫他找到了家人，之后多次來(lái)送物資。10年后，強(qiáng)天林已成為一名士兵，他發(fā)布視頻尋找當(dāng)年救他的軍官，該視頻在社交媒體上引起廣泛關(guān)注。二、伏筆及續(xù)寫(xiě)回應(yīng)（一）伏筆軍官的保護(hù)行為：為強(qiáng)天林擋住落石，手部流血，這一細(xì)節(jié)為后續(xù)強(qiáng)天林的轉(zhuǎn)變埋下情感基礎(chǔ)，可在續(xù)寫(xiě)中體現(xiàn)強(qiáng)天林對(duì)這份恩情的銘記以及其對(duì)他人生態(tài)度的影響。軍官多次送物資：展現(xiàn)軍官的持續(xù)關(guān)懷，可在續(xù)寫(xiě)中成為強(qiáng)天林成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中的溫暖回憶和激勵(lì)因素。強(qiáng)天林不知軍官名字：推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展，使得尋找軍官這一情節(jié)成為可能和必要，在續(xù)寫(xiě)中可圍繞尋找過(guò)程及找到后的情感交流展開(kāi)。（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)回應(yīng)第一段：可描述軍官的行為如何改變強(qiáng)天林的生活，如從學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)差到努力學(xué)習(xí)，最終成為士兵，回應(yīng)軍官的榜樣力量對(duì)他的積極影響。第二段：寫(xiě)軍官看到視頻后的回應(yīng)以及他們的交流，可展現(xiàn)兩人之間的情感連接，如軍官對(duì)強(qiáng)天林成長(zhǎng)的欣慰等。三、續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)（一）第一段描述強(qiáng)天林生活的變化，重點(diǎn)突出在學(xué)習(xí)和人生目標(biāo)方面的轉(zhuǎn)變，強(qiáng)調(diào)軍官對(duì)他的激勵(lì)作用?？梢蕴峒八谂^(guò)程中遇到的困難以及如何克服，進(jìn)一步豐富情節(jié)。（二）第二段軍官回應(yīng)的內(nèi)容和方式，比如表達(dá)對(duì)強(qiáng)天林的贊賞、回憶當(dāng)年的情景等。兩人交流中的情感互動(dòng)，如感動(dòng)、欣慰等，以及對(duì)未來(lái)的展望或期許。四、故事線地震發(fā)生-軍官救強(qiáng)天林-強(qiáng)天林成長(zhǎng)-發(fā)布視頻尋找軍官-軍官回應(yīng)-情感交流與展望未來(lái)五、感情線從軍官的救命之恩引發(fā)強(qiáng)天林的感恩之情，到他努力成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中的堅(jiān)定信念，再到找到軍官后的感動(dòng)與欣慰，情感逐漸升華。六、主旨升華句Theactofkindnessinthefaceofdisastersowedtheseedsofhopeandtransformationinayoungheart.（在災(zāi)難面前的善舉在一顆年輕的心中播下了希望和轉(zhuǎn)變的種子。）Throughtheyears,thememoryofthatselflesssacrificebecamethedrivingforcebehindone'spursuitofabetterself.（多年來(lái)，那份無(wú)私犧牲的記憶成為了一個(gè)人追求更好自我的動(dòng)力。）Thebondformedinthechaosoftheearthquakeendured,bridgingthegapoftimeandbringingtwolivesbacktogetherinamomentofemotionalreunion.（在地震混亂中形成的紐帶經(jīng)久不衰，跨越了時(shí)間的鴻溝，在情感重聚的時(shí)刻將兩個(gè)生命再次聯(lián)系在一起。）Thesearchwasnotjustforaperson,butfortheembodimentofcourageandkindnessthathadshapedalifeandinspiredajourneyofgrowth.（這次尋找不僅僅是為了一個(gè)人，更是為了尋找勇氣和善良的化身，它塑造了一個(gè)生命并激發(fā)了成長(zhǎng)之旅。）Intheaftermathofdisaster,asimpleactofheroismhadthepowertoigniteaflameofdeterminationthatwouldburnbrightlythroughtheyears,leadingtoabeautifulencounterofgratitudeandfulfillment.（在災(zāi)難的余波中，一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的英雄行為有能力點(diǎn)燃一團(tuán)決心的火焰，多年來(lái)熊熊燃燒，導(dǎo)致了一次感恩和滿足的美好相遇。）七、寫(xiě)作范文范文一第一段TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang’slife.Previously,hisacademicperformancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sheroicactbecameaturningpoint.Everytimehethoughtofthesoldierriskinghislifetosavehim,asurgeofdeterminationfilledhim.Hestartedtofocusonhisstudies,spendinglonghoursporingoverbooks.Whenhefaceddifficultiesandwantedtogiveup,theimageofthebleedinghandsoftheofficerwouldflashinhismind,motivatinghimtopersevere.Eventually,hishardworkpaidoff,andhemanagedtogetgoodgrades.Inspiredbytheofficer,healsojoinedtheschool'svolunteerteam,helpingothersjustliketheofficerhaddoneforhim.Hewasdeterminedtobecomeasoldiertocontinuespreadingloveandhope.第二段TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.AndtheyhadachancetochatontheWeChat.TheofficerwasdeeplytouchedbyQiang'seffortsandtransformation.HetoldQiangthathewasjustdoinghisdutybackthenandneverexpectedsuchaprofoundimpact.HerecalledthemomenthesavedQiangvividlyandwasgladtoseethattheyoungboyhadgrownintoaresponsibleandbraveman.Theytalkedabouttheirlivesovertheyears,andtheofficerencouragedQiangtokeepupthegoodworkinthemilitary.Theypromisedtomeetinpersonsomeday,andbothwerelookingforwardtothatmomentwithanticipationandjoy,knowingthattheirconnectionformedduringthedisasterhadenduredandwouldcontinuetoinspiretheminthefuture.范文二第一段TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang’slife.Previously,hisacademicperformancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sselflessshieldinspiredanewpathforhim.Hemadeavowtohimselfthathewouldnotwastethesecondchanceatlifegivenbytheofficer.Hebegantostudywithextraordinarydiligence,seekinghelpfromteachersandclassmateswheneverheencounteredproblems.Thememoryoftheofficer'skindnessbecamehissourceofstrengthduringtoughtimes.Inadditiontoimprovinghisacademicperformance,healsoactivelyparticipatedinphysicaltraining,aimingtobuildastrongbodyliketheofficer.Hisdreamofbecomingasoldiergrewstrongerdaybyday,andhefinallyachieveditthroughunremittingefforts.第二段TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.AndtheyhadachancetochatontheWeChat.TheofficerexpressedhisprideinQiang'sachievements.HesharedsomeofhisownexperiencesinthemilitaryandadvisedQiangtoalwaysremembertheresponsibilityonhisshoulders.Theyreminiscedaboutthedaysaftertheearthquake,andtheofficerwasamazedathowmuchQianghadrememberedabouttheirbriefencounters.Theirconversationwasfilledwithwarmthandemotion.TheofficerhopedthatQiangwouldcontinuetostriveforexcellenceandmakecontributionstothecountryandthepeople.Thisencounternotonlyrekindledtheiroldconnectionbutalsostrengthenedtheirbeliefinthepowerofkindnessandtheresponsibilitytopassiton.Astheyendedthechat,theybothfeltasenseoffulfillmentandlookedforwardtoanewchapterintheirrelationship.參考答案Paragraph1TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang’slife.Previously,hisacademicperformancewaspoor,buttheofficergavehimnumerousnotebooksasgiftsbeforehedisappeared.“Hetoldmetostudyhardandwalkoutofthemo