【讀后續(xù)寫】2021年11月紹興市一模讀后續(xù)寫講評：姐妹情深 名師教學設計-宣曄霏

教學設計宣曄霏文本分析：本文為典型的記敘文，圍繞5歲的露露和17歲的“我”展開。文章前三段介紹了我和露露的典型的自相矛盾的性格：倔強，脾氣暴躁，但同時又不記仇，熱心腸。文章第四、五段描寫了我和露露之間的一次face-off，我想教露露彈鋼琴，但露露堅決不按照我的要求彈奏，進而哭鬧喊叫，而且也因此暴怒，將露露拖到門口，外面天氣寒冷……學情分析：本課授課對象為高三學生，已經具備文本分析和解讀的能力，同時對于讀后續(xù)寫技能也已經非常熟悉。但對于矛盾沖突寫作方法依然比較陌生。教學過程：Step1:pre-readingTask1:thinkaboutthedefinitionofconflictsandwhatconflictsthereareinourlives.tobedifferent,opposed,orcontradictory:tofailtobeinagreementoraccordtask2:whatarethemainconflictsinastory?人物與人物環(huán)境與環(huán)境人物與環(huán)境性格與情感Step2:while-readingTask1:readthetitle“abittersweetface-off”andfindouttheconflictinthetitile.Task2:readthroughthewholepassageandfindoutthestructure.Part1(para.1-3):introductiontothesistersPart2(para.4-5):descriptionoftheface-offTask3:readandfindoutourpersonalities.Wildside:hot-temperedstubborntougheasytoflyintoangerMildside:fastforgivingneverharbouragrudgehonestwarm-heartedconflict1:personality-to-personalityTask4:what’sLulu’sappearance?Externalside:Withherbrowncurls,roundeyes,andChinadollface,Luluwasdesperatelycute.anangelInternalside:ademonawildhorseConflict2:appearance-to-personalityconflictTask5:readpart2andfindoutwhatIdidandhowdidLulureact.Conflict3:Character-to-characterconflictTask6:whatwastheweatherlike?Freezingcold.Whatwasmyreaction?DeterminationWhatwasLulu’sreaction?StubbornnessConflict4:environment-to-characterTask7:didIcareaboutLulu?Excitedaboutworkingtogether—withherbrowncurls,roundeyes,andChinadollface,Luluwasdesperatelycute–Iputheronthepianobench,ontopofsomecomfortablepillows.Conflict5:emotion-to-emotionTask8:whatmightbethetheme?Luluisawildone,butIloveherandwillalwaysloveherasanangel!Bloodisthickerthanwater!Conflictsexisteverywherebutloveconquerseverything!Step3:post-readingTask:trytowriteconflictsbyyourselves.Paragraph1:ButIwasdeterminedtoteachthelittlewildonealesson._______________________________▲___________________________________________Paragraph2:Lulu’steethwereclickingrepeatedlytogetherbecauseofcold,butsheshookherheadagain.________________________▲_____________________________________________Sample:Personality-to-personalityconflict(”I”)勃然大怒，言行激烈Holdinghercollar,Iclenchedmyfistandthreatenedhertostopcrying,“Iwillthrowyououtofhouseifyoudon’tlistentome”.Idraggedthelittlewildoutofthebackdoor,slammingthedoorfuriouslybehindher.(Lulu)桀驁不馴，無動于衷Insteadofbeingobedient,Lulushookherheadfiercelyandsteppedoutside,ignoringthechillywind.Task:Chooseoneortwoconflicts,discusswithyourpartnersandcontinuewritingthestory.Appearance-to-personalityconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Character-to-characterconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Environment-to-emotionconflict:_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Emotion-to-emotionconflict:AssignmentApply“conflicts”toyourpreviouswritingandpolishit.Appreciatethepossibleversionandfindouttheconflicts.ButIwasdeterminedtoteachthelittlewildonealesson.“Youcan‘tstayinthehouseifyoudon’tlistentome,”Isaidsternly嚴厲地.Insteadofbeingobedient,Lulusteppedoutside,facingmeinachallengingway.Adulldreadbeganseepingthroughmybody-thelittleonewaswearingonlyhersweaterandtights."Okay,you'vedecidedtobehave,"Isaidquickly.“Comeinnow.“However,Lulushookherheadwithastubbornlookinhereyes."Don'tbesilly,Lulu."Iwaspanicking."It’sfreezing.You'regoingtogetsick.Comeinnow.“Lulu‘steethwereclickingrepeatedlytogetherbecauseofcold,butsheshookherheadagain.ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatIhadunderestimatedLulu.Shewouldratherfreezetodeaththangivein.Mymindracing,Ichangedtactics戰(zhàn)術immediately,beggingandbribing誘哄Lulutocom