高考英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫 寒冷清晨的溫暖：救助校車事故傷者+講義

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasaverycoldmorningasithadbeenrainingveryheavilythepreviousnight.Asmy

motherwasfeelingalittleundertheweather,mysistervolunteeredtodrivemetoschool.Ihad

oversleptandasaresult,wasrunningabitlateforschool.Wegotintothecarhurriedly.Theroad

wasalreadycrowdedwithtraffic.Itappearedthateveryonewaslateaswell.

MysisterwasacarefuldriveranddespitethefactIwasalreadylate,sherefusedtodrivefast

ontheslipperyroad.Iwasluckyshewassuchadeterminedandcarefulpersonbecauseafew

hundredmetersawayfromtheschool,wewitnessedatragicaccident.Itallhappenedvery

quickly,

Acarhadmadealeftturningwithoutsignalingandasaresult,aschoolbuscrashedintoit.A

fewcarsbehindtheschoolbusrammed（猛撞）intothebusastheycouldnotbrakeintimeand

soonitbecameapile-up.Thealreadycrowdedroadbecamejammedwithvehiclesthatcametoa

crawl.

ItoldmysisterthatIwantedtohelpthevictimsandshenoddedsilently.Sheparkedthecar

nottoofarfromtheaccidentspot.

ThescenethatgreeteduswassomethingIwouldneverforget.Itleftanunforgettable

impressioninmymindtodate.Thepassengersontheschoolbuswereinjured.1rushedintothe

busandsawthedriverlaidslumped（癱彳到）onthewheel.Hehadinjuriesonthehead.Mysister

helpedhimdownfromthebus.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為120左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Itoldtheinjuredschoolchildrentostaycalm.

Minuteslater,twoambulancesarrived.

文章大意

一個寒冷的清晨，因前一晚大雨，路面濕滑。我因睡過頭要遲到了，姐

姐開車送我上學(xué)。姐姐開車很小心，即便我快遲到了也不加速。在離學(xué)

校幾百米處目睹了一起嚴(yán)重事故：一輛車左轉(zhuǎn)沒打轉(zhuǎn)向燈，導(dǎo)致校車與

其相撞，后面的車又連環(huán)追尾。我和姐姐決定幫忙，到校車一看，司機

頭部受傷，姐姐把他扶下車，現(xiàn)場慘不忍睹。

伏筆與續(xù)寫回應(yīng)

1.伏筆：我要幫助受害者的想法。續(xù)寫中我讓受傷的孩子保持冷靜

并檢查他們的傷勢，呼應(yīng)了我想幫忙的伏筆，展現(xiàn)我開始行動。

2.伏筆：事故嚴(yán)重，很多人受傷。續(xù)寫中救護(hù)車到來，將傷者送往

醫(yī)院，回應(yīng)了事故嚴(yán)重需要專業(yè)救援的伏筆，推動情節(jié)發(fā)展。

續(xù)寫要點

第一段

?情感線：鎮(zhèn)定、關(guān)懷。我告訴孩子們保持冷靜，體現(xiàn)出自己在緊

急情況中的鎮(zhèn)定，檢查傷勢、安慰孩子展現(xiàn)出對他們的關(guān)懷。

?故事線：描述我安撫孩子的話語和行動，比如查看傷勢、用圍巾

為孩子包扎，還有姐姐找布幫忙的細(xì)節(jié)。

?續(xù)寫示范：Itoldtheinjuredschoolchildrentostaycalm."Help

iscoming,don'tworry,"Isaidsoftly.Iquicklyexaminedtheir

wounds.Oneboy'sarmwasbleeding,soIpressedmy

handkerchiefagainstit.Iencouragedthemwithkindwords,

tryingtoeasetheirfear.Mysisterrushedbackandforth,

bringingmoreclothtostopthebleedingofotherchildren.

第二段

?情感線：欣慰。救護(hù)車來了，看到傷者能得到救治，我內(nèi)心感到

欣慰，體現(xiàn)出對救援到來的期待得到滿足。

?故事線：講述救護(hù)車到達(dá)后的場景，如醫(yī)護(hù)人員將重傷者抬上擔(dān)

架送醫(yī)，其他孩子也被帶去檢查。

?續(xù)寫示范：Minuteslater,twoambulancesarrived.The

paramedicsswiftlygottowork.Theycarefullyloadedthe

seriouslyinjuredontostretchersandintotheambulances.The

childrenwereabitscared,butthemedicalstaffcomforted

them.Watchingthemleave,Ifeltasenseofreliefwashoverme,

knowingtheywouldbetakencareof.

情感線

1.從最初的著急上學(xué)，到目睹事故的震驚，再到幫忙時的鎮(zhèn)定關(guān)懷

和看到救護(hù)車后的欣慰，情感變化自然，使讀者身臨其境。

2.情感變化推動故事發(fā)展，讓讀者更關(guān)注救援過程和傷者情況。

故事線

1.故事圍繞上學(xué)路上的事故展開，從天氣路況、趕路、目睹事故到

參與救援，情節(jié)完整、邏輯清晰。

2.每個環(huán)節(jié)緊密相連，突出了在緊急情況下人們的善良和互助這一

主題。

主旨升華句

1."Inthefaceofdisaster,ahelpinghandislikealighthouseinthe

dark,guidingtheinjuredtotheshoreofhope."（面對災(zāi)難，援

手就像黑暗中的燈塔，指引傷者駛向希望之岸。）

2."Eveninthechaosofanaccident,kindnessandcalmnesscan

bethemostpowerfulmedicineforthewounded."（即使在事故

的混亂中，善良和鎮(zhèn)定也能成為傷者最有力的良藥。）

3."Theaccidentscenewasatestofhumanity,andouractions

showedthatlovealwaysshinesthroughintimesofcrisis."（事故

現(xiàn)場是對人性的考驗，我們的行動表明在危機時刻愛總是閃耀光

芒。）

4."Ourresponsetotheaccidentprovedthateveryactofhelping

isastitchinthefabricofacommunity'srecovery."（我們對事故

的反應(yīng)證明，每一次幫助都是社區(qū)恢復(fù)之布上的一針一線。）

5."Inthetragedyoftheaccident,oureffortstoassisttheinjured

werethewhispersofhopeinthenoiseofdespair."（在事故的悲

劇中，我們救助傷者的努力是絕望之音中的希望低語。）

寫作示范

范文一

Itoldtheinjuredschoolchildrentostaycalm."We'llbeokay,"Isaid,

tryingtosoundconfident.Imovedamongthem,assessingthe

injuries.Agirlwascryingbecauseherlegwaspinned.Igentlyheld

herhandandtoldhertobebrave.Ifoundsometowelsinthebusto

cushiontheinjuredparts.Mysisterjoinedme,talkingtothechildren

tokeepthemcalm.

Minuteslater,twoambulancesarrived.Theambulanceworkers

rushedinwithmedicalkits.Theycarefullyfreedthegirl'slegandput

heronastretcher.Theyworkedefficiently,takingthechildrenwith

seriousinjuriesfirst.Astheyleft,Ifeltgratefulthattheywereingood

hands.

范文二

Itoldtheinjuredschoolchildrentostaycalm.Isaid,"Don'tbeafraid.

We'llgetyouhelp."Ithenfocusedonaboywithaheadinjury.Iused

myjackettoapplypressuretostopthebleeding.Ialsotoldtheother

childrentoholdhandsandstaytogether.Mysisterwasbusyhelping

thosewithminorcuts,tellingthemstoriestodistractthem.

Minuteslater,twoambulancesarrived.Themedicalteamimmediately

startedtreatingthemostseverelyinjured.Theyloadedthemontothe

ambulanceswithgreatcare.Theremainingchildrenwerealsotaken

formedicalchecks.Iwasrelievedthattheywouldsoonreceive

propertreatment.

參考答案

Itoldtheinjuredschoolchildrentostaycalm.Mostofthemappeared

tosufferfromminorcutsandbruisesontheirarmsandbodies.Itwas

reallyfortunatethatnobodywasbadlyhurt.Bythenafewadultshad

enteredthebusandtogether