高考英語(yǔ)專(zhuān)項(xiàng)復(fù)習(xí)之讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類(lèi)-丟手機(jī)的孩子抓住機(jī)會(huì)成長(zhǎng)變化

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類(lèi)--丟手機(jī)的孩子，抓住機(jī)會(huì)成長(zhǎng)變化

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）2024學(xué)年第一學(xué)期浙南名校聯(lián)盟第一次高三聯(lián)考

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ava,afifth-grader,longedforacellphonelikeherpeersbuthadtowaituntilshewas

thirteen.Topersuadeherparents,shepennedanessay,demonstratingshewasmatureenough

foracellphone.Herparents,impressed,gaveheranoldphone.

"Ava,"herdadsaidseriously,/zacellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames.It'sasignificant

responsibility.Youmustkeepyourphonesecure.Youmustsilenceitinpublicspaces.You

must...”Helistedallofthewaysthatshehadtoberesponsiblewithherphone.ButAva,too

busywithchoosingtheperfectwallpaper,downloadingappsandchattingwithherbestfriend

Sarah,onlyhalf-listened.

Overtheweekend,Sarah'smomtookthegirlstoamovie.NormallyAvaavoidedhorror

films,butSarah'spleadingwordswithfunnymemes（表情包）hadsomehowconvincedAvathat

themoviemightactuallybeenjoyable.Beforethemoviestarted,Sarah'smominstructedthe

girlstosilencetheirphonesoutofrespectforothers.Asthemovie'stensionbuilt,Avafound

herselfgrowingincreasinglyuncomfortable.zzlneedtogotothebathroom/'Avawhisperedto

Sarah.

Afterthemovie,whilewaitingforSarah'smomtofetchthecar,Avafeltasinkingfeeling.a\

can'tfindmyphone!”sheshrieked,pattingdownallofherpockets.Panic-stricken,Ava

searchedherbag,yetherphoneseemedtohavevanished.Avagotintothecar,herstomachin

knots.

“Areyougoingtotellyourparents?"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback.Avawas

silent,hermindracingwiththeconsequences.Shecouldenvisionherparents'disappointed

facesandharshwords.Shefearedthatthisincidentmightleadtoherparentstakingawaythe

privilegeofhavingaphonealtogether

Astheyarrived,Avaclimbedoutofthecarandtrudgedhome,herheartheavywithwhat

hadhappened.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:ThemomentAvawalkedin,herparentsgreetedherwithasmile.

Paragraph2:ThenherparentsdroveAvabacktothecinema.

析?重視原文的素材整理

01原文精致賞析，必須積累素材

原文分析：紅色定從/定語(yǔ)；藍(lán)色賓從；黃色狀從，只標(biāo)連詞；下劃線標(biāo)黃單詞為需掌握積

累單詞；從句類(lèi)會(huì)用別於標(biāo)注；需積累都分黑體加粗下劃線、（定語(yǔ)從句1）

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ava,afifth-grader,longedforacellphonelikeherpeersbuthadtowaituntilshewas

thirteen（狀從）.Topersuadeherparents,shepennedcmess。%demonstratinjshewasmature

enoughforace〃p/）oae（非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)+賓從做伴隨動(dòng)作）.Herparents,impressed,gaveher

anoldphone.

“Ava,"herdadsaidseriously,/zacellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames.Itsasignificant

responsibility.Youmustkeepyourphonesecure.Youmustsilenceitinpublicspaces.You

must..."Helistedallofthewaysthatshehadtoberesponsiblewith/7urp6oae（定語(yǔ)從句）.But

Ava,toobusywithchoosingtheperfectwallpaper,downloadingappsandchattingwithherbest

friendSarah,onlyhalf-listened（此處不是句子、是主語(yǔ)的補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明）.

Overtheweekend,Sarah'smomtookthegirlstoamovie.NormallyAvaavoidedhorror

films,butSarah'spleadinawordswithfunnymemes（表情包）hadsomehowconvincedAvathat

themoviemightactuallybeenjoyable.Beforethemoviestarted,Sarah'smominstructedthe

girlstosilencetheirphonesoutofrespectforothers.Asthemovie/stension狀語(yǔ)從句），

Avafoundherselfarowinaincreasinqlv非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞）“Ineedtogotothe

bathroom,“AvawhisperedtoSarah.

Afterthemovie,whilewaitingforSarah'smomtofetchthecar（狀從的省略）,Avafelta

sinkinafeelina."Ican'tfindmyphone!”sheshrieked,pattinadownallofherpockets（mE謂語(yǔ)

動(dòng)詞做伴隨動(dòng)作）.Panic-stricken,Avasearchedherbag,yetherphoneseemedtohave

vanished.Avagotintothecar,herstomachinkr70ns（獨(dú)立主格）.

“Areyougoingtotellyourparents?"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback.Avawas

silent,hermindracinawiththe（?0〃5￡。1/6〃「2$（獨(dú)立主格）.Shecouldenvisionherparents/

disappointedfacesandharshwords.Shefearedthatthisincidentmightleadtoherparents

takingawaytheprivilegeofhavingaphonealtogether］賓從）

Astheyarrived（狀閃,Avaclimbedoutofthecarandtrudaedherheartbeai/ywith

whathad6aMe（獨(dú)立主格+賓從）.

02原文所涉及的高中語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象

語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象：

-時(shí)態(tài)使用：全篇以一般過(guò)去時(shí)描述過(guò)去發(fā)生的事件，并用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)表達(dá)普遍事實(shí)，

如掌握時(shí)態(tài)切換與一致性對(duì)高考英語(yǔ)閱讀和寫(xiě)作

"Acellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames."0

都很重要。

-從句：文中有許多賓語(yǔ)從句，^rr"Avafoundherselfgrowingincreasinglyuncomfortable"

中的“自己越來(lái)越不安〃的發(fā)現(xiàn)表述；"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback”中“在回程中

悄悄告訴她〃的句式等。

-情態(tài)動(dòng)詞：如"must"表示責(zé)任感，強(qiáng)調(diào)手機(jī)的使用規(guī)則；"might”表示不確定性和對(duì)電

影的期待。

-非限定動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu):如"tosilencetheirphones"表明要"把手機(jī)調(diào)成靜音〃;"choosingthe

perfectwallpaper〃表達(dá)進(jìn)行的動(dòng)作，用作描述。

03原文中涉及的詞匯整理

常見(jiàn)搭配：

-longfor+名詞：表示對(duì)某事的渴望。如"Avalongedforacellphonelikeherpeers”。

-asinkingfeeling:指內(nèi)心的一種不祥之感，適合表達(dá)心情起伏。

-patdown/searchpockets/bags:指對(duì)物品的尋找。

-trudgehome:指在疲憊或心情沉重下走回家。

可積累的詞語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)：

-demonstrate*(v.)*表達(dá)，展示

-近義詞：show,illustrate

-反義詞：hide,conceal

-例句：Shedemonstratedherabilitytohandleresponsibility./Theexperimentdemonstrated

thenewmethod'seffectiveness.

-convince*(v.)*使信服

-近義詞：persuade,assure

-反義詞：discourage,dissuade

-例句:Herwordsconvincedhimtojointheteam./Theyfinallyconvincedheroftheir

sincerity.

-significant*(adj.)*重大的，有意義的

-近義詞：important,meaningful

-反義詞：trivial,insignificant

-例句：Thisisasignificantmomentinhislife./Herdecisionhadasignificantimpactonthe

outcome.

-responsibility*(n.)*責(zé)任

-近義詞：duty,obligation

-反義詞：irresponsibility,neglect

-例句：Responsibilitycomeswithtrust./Hehasaresponsibilitytohisfamily.

續(xù)寫(xiě)思路的構(gòu)建和思考

01構(gòu)思的步驟

在完成讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)，要先思考文章的情節(jié)發(fā)展與情感主線，本文中Ava丟失手機(jī)后可能

產(chǎn)生的心理變化和行動(dòng)可以作為續(xù)寫(xiě)的重點(diǎn)。

構(gòu)思步驟：

1.情節(jié)推演：想象Ava回家后是否會(huì)告訴父母？她如何面對(duì)父母的反應(yīng)？

2.心理描寫(xiě)：Ava的內(nèi)心掙扎和壓力，可以通過(guò)細(xì)膩的內(nèi)心描寫(xiě)表現(xiàn)出她對(duì)父母失望的恐

懼。

3.情感升華：續(xù)寫(xiě)可以加入她因誤解或自責(zé)而成長(zhǎng)的心路歷程，最終可能主動(dòng)承擔(dān)責(zé)任或

重新贏得父母的信任。

02實(shí)施要點(diǎn)

實(shí)施要點(diǎn)：

-情緒表達(dá)：善于使用情緒性詞匯，比如"nervous,”"regretful,”"conflicted”來(lái)展現(xiàn)心理過(guò)程。

-關(guān)鍵動(dòng)詞：用"confess,""admit,""reveal”等表示坦白的詞。

-環(huán)境渲染：用“silencefilledtheroom”表現(xiàn)緊張氣氛，"thecomfortingglowofhomelights”

呈現(xiàn)家庭溫暖。

03情緒、動(dòng)作、心理和環(huán)境描寫(xiě)的推薦短語(yǔ)

-情緒:anxioussmile,heavy-hearted,amixtureoffearandhope

-動(dòng)作:hesitatedbeforeknocking,slowlyapproached,nervouslyglancedaround

-心理：asurgeofguilt,tornbetweenhonestyandfear,mentallypreparingfortheworst

-環(huán)境：dimlylithallway,thequiethumofthecar,distantlaughterechoingfromthestreet

續(xù)寫(xiě)范文欣賞及分析

開(kāi)放式續(xù)寫(xiě)練習(xí)及語(yǔ)法點(diǎn)分析、思路分析

AsAvaslowlyopenedthefrontdoor（狀從），shecouldfeelherheartpoundina.

Shewantedtoconfessaboutthelostphonebutdreadedherparents'reaction.

Wit/）ste。,herauiltgrewheavier.Finally,hermothernoticedher

unusuallyquietdemeanorandaskedgently,"Honey,iseverythingokay?"

/i/alookeddown,tomeethermover'sryes（形容詞短語(yǔ)做補(bǔ)語(yǔ)）.

Afterabriefoause,shemurmured,"Mom,I...Ilostthephone.I'msosorry."Her

wordstumb/edout,filledwithrearetandwo/r，（filled非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做后置定

語(yǔ)）."Iwascareless,andIdidn'tlistentoDad'sadvice.Kmreally,reallysorry."

Hermothor'sexoressjonsoftened,andshe。/creedacomfort/皿hando/i

Ava'ss力ou/der?"Thankyoufortellingusthetruth//shesaid.Ava'sdad,who

hadoverheard（是從joinedthem.Thouqhhisfaceshowedahintof

如。。。。用1/7?6/?七（狀從）,hemanaaedareass人"皿sm〃e.

“Wetrustedyouwithaphonebecausewebelievedyouwerereadyforthe

responsibility（賓以）.Mistakeshappen,andwhat'simportant（主從）isthatyou

learnfromthisexperience（表從）；'hesaidgently.

Avafeltealimmerofreliefbutalsoareneweddetermination.Shepromised

tobemoreresponsibleinthefutureandtookextrachorestosaveupand

eventuallyreplacethelostphone.Overtime,herparentssawherovowM。sense

ofresponsibility,andmonthslater,onherbirthday,theysuco/7sedherwitho

new0

Thistime,however,Avamadesuretofolloweveryruleherparentshad

set■（表從）.Shekeptherphonesecure,silenceditwhennecesrary,andhandled

itwithcare.Throughthisexperience,Avalearnedthatresponsibilitywasn/tjust

aboutowningsomething,butaboutrespectingherparents/trustandherown

commitments.

1.賓語(yǔ)從句

-句型示例："Iwascareless,andIdidn'tlistentoDad'sadvice."

-分析：賓語(yǔ)從句用作動(dòng)詞的補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明，如"listentoDad'sadvice〃作為

“didnf的賓語(yǔ)。

2.非限制性定語(yǔ)從句

-句型示例:"Hermother,whohadoverheard,joinedthem."

-分析：“whohadoverheard”作為定語(yǔ)修飾mother,提供補(bǔ)充信息。

3.動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)

一句型示例:"Mistakeshappen,andwhat'simportantisthatyoulearnfrom

thisexperience."

-分析：動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)“l(fā)earnfromthisexperience”作為句子補(bǔ)充，強(qiáng)調(diào)經(jīng)歷對(duì)

成長(zhǎng)的重要性。

4.不定式作賓語(yǔ)補(bǔ)足語(yǔ)

-句型示例："Theybelievedyouwerereadyfortheresponsibility."

-分析：“tobereadyfor”用作"believed”的賓語(yǔ)補(bǔ)足語(yǔ)，表明信任。

常見(jiàn)搭配與可積累語(yǔ)料

1.Feelone'sheartpounding-形容緊張和內(nèi)疚感

-例句：Asheapproachedthestage,hecouldfeelhisheartpounding.

-例句：Thenewsmadeherheartpoundwithexcitement.

2.Makeapromisetodo-承諾做某事

-例句：Shemadeapromisetoherselftoworkharder.

-例句：Hepromisedtobemorecarefulnexttime.

3.Throughthisexperience-表示通過(guò)某經(jīng)歷學(xué)到某事

-例句：Throughthisexperience,helearnedthevalueofpatience.

-例句：Shematuredalotthroughthisexperience.

生詞短語(yǔ)

1.Responsibility

-詞，性：noun

-詞義：責(zé)任

-近義詞：duty,accountability

-反義詞：irresponsibility,neglect

-例句：Takingcareofapetisabigresponsibility.

-例句：Heacceptsresponsibilityforhisactions.

2.Determine

-詞性:verb

-詞義：決心，決定

-近義詞：resolve,decide

-反義詞：hesitate,doubt

-例句：Shedeterminedtoimprovehergradesthissemester.

-例句：Aftercarefulthought,hedeterminedtochangehiscareerpath.

3.Relief

-詞性：noun

-詞義：寬慰，解脫

-近義詞：comfort,consolation

反義詞：distress,anxiety

-例句：Hefeltahugereliefafterthetestwasover.

-例句：Herwordsbroughthimgreatrelief.

4.Significant

-詞，性：adjective

-詞義：重要的，顯著的

-近義詞：importan3noteworthy

-反義詞：insignificant,trivial