讀后續(xù)寫-旱季里的生命之泉比利的善舉講義-河北省衡水市阜城縣阜城實驗中學2024-2025學年高二上學期12月月考英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Itwasoneofthehottestdaysofthedryseason.Wehadnotseenraininalmostamonth.Thecropsweredying.Cowshadstoppedgivingmilk.Thestreamswerelonggonebackintotheearth.Ifwedidn’tseesomerainsoonwewouldloseeverything.IwasinthekitchenmakinglunchforthefamilywhenIsawmysixyearoldson,Billy,walkingtowardthewoods.Icouldonlyseehisback.Hewasn’twalkinginhisusualway.Hewasobviouslywalkingwithagreateffort,tryingtobeasstillaspossible.Minutesafterhedisappearedintothewoods,hecamerunningoutagain,towardthehouse.Momentslater,however,hewasonceagainwalkinginthatslowpurposefullongsteptowardthewoods.Thisactivitywentonforoveranhour—walkingcautiouslytothewoods,thenrunningbacktothehouse.Finally,mycuriositygotthebestofme.Icrept(

悄悄移動;緩慢地行進)outofthehouseandfollowedhimonhisjourney.Hewascuppingbothhandsinfrontofhimashewalked;beingverycarefulnottospillthewaterhecarried.Branchesandthornsslapped(拍打)hislittlefacebuthedidnottrytoavoidthem.Hehadamuchgreaterpurpose.AsIleanedintospyonhim,Isawthemostamazingsite.Severallargedeerappearedthreateninginfrontofhim.ButBillywalkedrightuptothem.Ialmostscreamedforhimtogetaway.AndIsawababydeerlayingontheground,obviouslysufferingfromheavylossofwaterandheatexhaustion,lifteditsheadwithgreatefforttolap(舔)upthewaterinmybeautifulboy’shand.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.續(xù)寫部分為兩段，開頭語已為你寫好；Paragraph1:Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:AndlaterIknewwhatwasgoingon.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意：在旱季最炎熱的時候，久未降雨，莊稼瀕死，牲畜無奶，水源干涸，情況危急。作者看到兒子比利行為異常，先是小心翼翼走向樹林，再跑回屋，如此反復。作者好奇跟去，發(fā)現(xiàn)比利用手捧水去喂因缺水和中暑而虛弱的小鹿。盡管樹枝荊棘抽打他的臉，面對有威脅性的大鹿，他也未退縮，展現(xiàn)出善良與勇敢。故事山分析：開端：極度干旱的背景設定，莊稼、牲畜受影響，為兒子的行為提供了情境鋪墊，引出比利奇怪的舉動。發(fā)展：比利多次往返于家和樹林，行為異常，引起作者的好奇，作者決定跟蹤他，情節(jié)逐漸推進。高潮：作者發(fā)現(xiàn)比利不顧危險給小鹿喂水，展現(xiàn)出孩子純真善良的內(nèi)心，這是故事的核心情節(jié)，營造出緊張而感人的氛圍。結(jié)局：比利繼續(xù)往返取水，作者在一旁默默關注，故事在此處留下溫暖的余韻，引發(fā)讀者對人性善良的思考。五處伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應：伏筆：干旱的環(huán)境描寫，如“Wehadnotseenraininalmostamonth.Thecropsweredying.Cowshadstoppedgivingmilk.Thestreamswerelonggonebackintotheearth.”回應：比利的行為正是在這樣嚴峻的干旱背景下發(fā)生的，他的善良和對生命的關懷更加凸顯，也為后文他堅持取水救小鹿做了環(huán)境鋪墊，表明即使在艱難的生存環(huán)境下，人性的善良依然閃耀。伏筆：比利走路姿勢異常，“Hewasn’twalkinginhisusualway.Hewasobviouslywalkingwithagreateffort,tryingtobeasstillaspossible.”回應：這暗示他手中捧著重要的東西，在續(xù)寫中揭示他是小心翼翼地捧著水，生怕灑掉，體現(xiàn)他對救小鹿這件事的認真和專注。伏筆：比利多次往返樹林和家，“Thisactivitywentonforoveranhour—walkingcautiouslytothewoods,thenrunningbacktothehouse.”回應：續(xù)寫中詳細描述他往返是為了一次次地取水，表現(xiàn)出他的堅持和決心，不放棄拯救小鹿的努力，進一步刻畫他善良執(zhí)著的形象。伏筆：作者的好奇以及跟蹤行為，“Finally,mycuriositygotthebestofme.Icreptoutofthehouseandfollowedhimonhisjourney.”回應：通過作者的視角，讀者得以見證比利的善良舉動，在續(xù)寫中作者的觀察和內(nèi)心感受也能更好地傳達故事的情感，如作者看到比利喂小鹿時的感動，以及對比利行為的反思，豐富了故事的層次。伏筆：小鹿的虛弱狀態(tài)，“ababydeerlayingontheground,obviouslysufferingfromheavylossofwaterandheatexhaustion”回應：這為比利的救助行為提供了合理的動機，同時在續(xù)寫中可以描述小鹿在比利的幫助下逐漸恢復生機，體現(xiàn)比利行為的意義和價值，強化了善良與生命關懷的主題。續(xù)寫要點：第一段：描述比利回到家后急切地取水過程，包括他如何努力地讓水流進手中，盡管速度緩慢但毫不氣餒，同時可以描寫他的神態(tài)，如專注、堅定的眼神，展現(xiàn)他內(nèi)心的焦急與對小鹿的關切。還可以提及作者看到這一幕的內(nèi)心感受，對比利的行為既感動又驕傲。第二段：講述作者后來了解到比利是因為聽到家人談論干旱對動物的影響，從而決定自己去幫助小鹿。然后可以寫這件事對家庭的影響，如家人對比利的稱贊，以及這件事在社區(qū)中傳播后，引發(fā)人們對保護動物、關愛生命的思考，升華故事的主題，將個人的善良行為拓展到更廣泛的社會影響層面。情感線：

起初，作者因干旱的困境而感到焦慮和擔憂，對未來充滿不安。當看到比利奇怪的舉動時，內(nèi)心充滿好奇和疑惑。在發(fā)現(xiàn)比利喂小鹿的瞬間，被他的善良和勇敢深深打動，內(nèi)心涌起溫暖和感動。隨著比利一次次往返取水，作者的情感轉(zhuǎn)化為對比利行為的支持和敬佩，為他的堅持和善良感到驕傲。最后，當了解到比利行動的緣由，作者的情感進一步升華，從對比利個人的情感延伸到對人性善良和生命關懷的深刻思考，感受到在艱難環(huán)境下人性的光輝與美好，以及這種善良行為可能帶來的積極影響和力量。故事線：干旱季節(jié)，環(huán)境惡劣，莊稼、牲畜受災。比利行為異常，多次往返樹林和家。作者好奇跟蹤，發(fā)現(xiàn)比利喂小鹿。比利回家取水，作者見證過程。作者了解比利行動緣由。比利的行為引發(fā)家庭和社區(qū)的反響，升華主題。主旨升華句5句英文Intheharshestoftimes,asingleactofkindnesscanbeaglimmerofhope,illuminatingthepathofhumanityandteachingusthevalueofeverylivingbeing.（在最艱難的時刻，一個小小的善舉可以成為希望的微光，照亮人性的道路，讓我們懂得每個生命的價值。）Billy'sselflessdeedinthefaceofdroughtnotonlysavedalifebutalsosowedtheseedsofpassionandresponsibilityinourhearts,showingthateventheyoungestamonguscanmakeadifference.（比利在干旱面前的無私行為不僅拯救了一個生命，也在我們心中播下了同情和責任的種子，表明即使是我們中最年幼的人也能有所作為。）ThestoryofBillyandthedeerisatestamenttothefactthatkindnessknowsnoage,andinthemidstofdespair,ithasthepowertoheal,toconnect,andtoremindusofwhattrulymattersinlife.（比利和小鹿的故事證明，善良無關年齡，在絕望之中，它有治愈、連接的力量，并提醒我們生命中真正重要的東西。）Whenthelandisparchedandhopeseemsscarce,thepureheartofachildcanbringforthanoasisoflove,teachingusthatouractions,nomatterhowsmall,canhaveaprofoundimpactontheworldaroundus.（當大地干涸，希望渺茫時，一個孩子純潔的心靈可以帶來愛的綠洲，告訴我們，無論我們的行動多么微小，都能對周圍的世界產(chǎn)生深遠的影響。）Billy'sjourneytosavethedeerisajourneyofthesoul,areminderthatinthedriestofseasons,thewellspringofkindnesswithinuscanneverrundry,anditisourdutytoletitflowandnourishthelivesinneed.（比利拯救小鹿的旅程是一次心靈的旅程，提醒我們在最干旱的季節(jié)里，我們內(nèi)心的善良之泉永遠不會干涸，我們有責任讓它流淌，滋養(yǎng)那些需要的生命。）兩篇寫作示范第一篇Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.Hisfacewasflushedwithexertion,buthiseyeswerefilledwithdetermination.Iwatchedashescurriedtothefaucet,hissmallhandstremblingwitheagerness.Hecarefullyturnedthehandle,allowingonlyathinstreamofwatertoflow,cuppinghishandsbeneathitwithutmostpatience.Dropssplashedontohisshirt,buthepaidnoheed.Ifeltalumpinmythroat,witnessinghisunwaveringdedicationtohelpingthehelplessdeer.AndlaterIknewwhatwasgoingon.Billyhadoverheardmyhushedconversationswithhisfatheraboutthedrought'stollonthewildlife.Thatinnocentheartofhistookituponhimselftobethesavior.WordspreadinoursmallmunityaboutBilly'sactofkindness.Neighborscamebytoofferpraiseandsupport.Ourfamily,too,wasforeverchanged.Werealizedthatinthefaceofadversity,itwasourcapacityforloveandpassionthattrulymattered.Billyhadtaughtusallalessonthatwouldstaywithus,areminderthateventhesmallesthandscouldholdthepowertochangealifeandtouchtheheartsofmany.第二篇Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.Hesprintedwithallhismight,hislittlelegspumpingasfastastheycould.Onceatthehouse,hefumbledwiththefaucet,hisbrowfurrowedinconcentration.Thewatertrickledslowly,andhewaitedpatiently,hiseyesfixedonhishands,willingthemtofillfaster.Istoodatadistance,myheartswellingwithprideandadmirationformybraveboy.AndlaterIknewwhatwasgoingon.Billyhadbeendeeplyaffectedbythetalesoftheanimals'suffering.Hiskindspiritledhimtotakeaction.Thisincidentbecameaturningpointforourfamily.Westartedtothinkmoreaboutourroleinprotectingtheenvironmentandthecreaturesthatshareourworld.Billy'ssimpleacthadarippleeffect,inspiringotherstoshowkindnessintheirownways.Itwasapowerfulreminderthatkindnessiscontagious,andinthedarkestoftimes,ithasthepowertobringlightandhope.Wevowedtocarryforwardthisspiritofpassion,knowingthateverysmallactcountsinmakingtheworldabetterplace.續(xù)寫第一段Paragraph1：Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.Mycuriosityonceagain