【讀后續(xù)寫】2021年12月北斗星盟高二聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)：A Special Christmas Present 名師導(dǎo)學(xué)案-陳星可

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Morning導(dǎo)學(xué)案ItwasthenightbeforeChristmasandRobwaslyinginbed,thinkingaboutthenextday.Hisfamilywaspoor,livingentirelyonthefarmtheyran,andmostoftheexcitementofChristmaswasintheturkeytheyhadraisedthemselvesandpumpkinpieshismothermade.Herolledovertolookathisoldwatch-itwastwoo'clock.Threehourslater,hisfatherwouldcallhimtogetup,evenifitwasChristmas.Hisfathernevertalkedaboutlovinghim-hehadnotimeforsuchthings.Therewasalwayssomuchtodoonthefarm.“Or,maybe,hejustdoesn’tloveme,”Robthought.Hehadareasontothinkso.At5o’clockeverymorning,hisfatherwouldcallhimtogetupandhelpwiththefarmwork.Hehadtogotothebarn(棚)toholdthemilkingpails(擠奶桶)steadilywhenhisfatherwasmilkingthecow.Hehadtohelpputthetoolsinplaceanddothecleaningafterthemilking.Hehateditthathehadtodoallthesethingsatsoearlytime.Hewasnottheonlyoneawakeatthisnight.Heheardhisparentswhisperinginthenextroom.“Mary,IhatetocallRobinthemornings.He’sgrowingsofastandheneedshissleep.IfyoucouldseehowhesleepswhenIgointowakehimup!IwishIcouldmanagealone.”“Well,youcan’t,Adam.”Hismothersvoicewasgentle,Besides,heisn’tachildanymore.It'stimehetookhisturn.”“Yes，”hisfathersaidslowly.“ButIdohatetowakehim.”Whenheheardthesewords,somethinginhimspoke:hisfatherlovedhim!Hehadneverthoughtofthatbefore,takingforgrantedthetieoftheirblood.Nowthatheknewhisfatherlovedhim,hehadtodosomethingdifferentonthisChristmas.Hedidsaveandbuythemeachsomethingeveryyear,buthewishedhehadabetterpresentforhisfatherinsteadoftheusualtiefromtheten-centstore.Paragraph1:Agoodideasuddenlystruckhim._________________________Paragraph2:Itbeingalmostfive,herushedbacktohisroomandjumpedintobed,waitingtobewokenup.___________________________________________I.文本理解：LearnabouttheauthorWell-knownauthor,PearlS.Buckwrotemultiplebooksandshortstoriesthroughoutherlifetime,manyofwhichfocusedonherexperiencesinChina.Shewasalsoastrongadvocateofwomen’srightsandcivilrightsandwasdedicatedtosupportingthewelfareofAsianchildren.BornintoafamilyofmissionariesonJune26,1892,PearlspentherfirstfewmonthsinWestVirginia.However,soonafterherbirth,herparentsreturnedtoZhenjiang,China,wheretheystayedformanyyears.Followingthat,sheandherfamilytraveledtoandfromChinamanytimes.ItwasherearlylifeandexperiencesinChinathatformedthebasesofmuchofherwriting,includingEastWind:WestWindandTheGoodEarth.Becauseofherachievements,shereceivednumerousawardsinliterature.BuckdiedonMarch6,1973,leavingalegacyofliteratureandphilanthropy.Shewroteoverseventybooks,whichincludenovels,translationsofChineseliterature,children’sliterature,andbiographies.B.Fillintheblanksbasedonthetext.Rob’sfamilywaspoor,1._______livedentirelyonthefarmtheyranandtheonlyexcitementofChristmaswasafarm-raisedturkeyandhome-madepumpkinpies.Everymorning,hewould2.____________(wake)upearlybyhisfathertohelp3._______themilkingandcleaninginthebarn,whichmadehim4._________(convince)thathisfatherdidn’tlovehimatall.OneearlyChristmasmorning,5.___________,Robwasawakeandbyaccidentlearnedthroughhis6.___________(parent)whisperthathisfatherwasactuallylovinghim.Hewasunwillingtowakehimupsoearly7.________Robwasgrowingfastthesedaysandhopedthathe8.__________(he)couldmanagetheworkalone.Somewhattouched,hedecidedtodosomethingdifferentas9._______presenttohisfatherinsteadoftheusualtiefromtheten-centstore.Hismind10.________(work)fast,anideapoppedintohismind.II.語言學(xué)習(xí)TranslatethefollowingexpressionsintoEnglish.1.經(jīng)營(yíng)一家農(nóng)場(chǎng)2.喂養(yǎng)火雞3.翻身4.有理由做某事無緣無故地5.幫助干農(nóng)場(chǎng)上的活6.把...放就位7.不想干某事8.該輪到某人了9.把...想當(dāng)然10.既然11.突然學(xué)到一個(gè)主意12.等著被叫醒III.構(gòu)建情節(jié)A.UnderlinedwordsTrytomakeasmanyassentencesaboutthestorytobecontinuedwithunderlinedwordsincluded.Rob;father;barn;Christmas;present;love;getup;milking;manage;differentTip1:根據(jù)劃線詞可以判斷情節(jié)的基本走向：Rob獨(dú)立擠牛奶來作為圣誕禮物送給爸爸，回報(bào)爸爸的愛。Tip2:抽象名詞present可以作為續(xù)寫升華部分的出發(fā)點(diǎn)和歸結(jié)點(diǎn)。Tip3:盡可能多的使用劃線詞可以有效防止情節(jié)的走偏。Thefirstsentences:Q-A,逆推法Byaskingquestions,designtwoorthreescenesabouteachparagraph,andthentrytoanswerthem,withaction,emotions,dialoguesorfacialexpressionsincluded.Paragraph1:Agoodideasuddenlystruckhim._________________________Q1:Whatwasthegoodidea？Andthereasonorthepurpose?__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Q2:Howdidheputtheideaintopractice?__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Q3:Howdidhefeelaboutwhathehaddone?__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Itbeingalmostfive,herushedbacktohisroomandjumpedintobed,waitingtobewokenup.________________________Q1:Didhisfathercometowakehimup?Why?__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Q2:Howdidfatherreacttowhathehadfoundinthebarn?__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Q3:HowdidRobfeelaboutthepresent?Andwhatwasinhismind__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IV.語料積累--興奮Seeingsuchextraordinarybeauty,everycellinmybodywokeup.Itwaslikediscoveringanewdimensionoflife.Whenthehostannouncedthatshewontheprize,hereyestwinkledwithexcitement.Herheartwasthumping/beatingwithexcitement.Theexcitementbuiltupinsideofmeasbreakfastwenton.Sheburst/erupted/jumpedwithexcitement/joy.Hecouldhardlyconceal/containhisexcitementandgavemeanenormoushug.Thegamehadthecrowdontheedgeoftheirseats.V.參考答案：Agoodideasuddenlystruckhim.Whynotgivehisfatheraspecialpresent,outthereinthebarn?Hequicklygotupandcreptdownstairsontiptoes.Thecowslookedathim,sleepyandsurprised.Itwasearlyforthemtoobuttheybehavedwell,asthoughtheyknewitwasChristmas.Robhadnevermilkedallalonebefore,butthetaskwentmoreeasilythanhehadeverknownbefore.Hesmiledandmilkedsteadily,twostrongstreamsrushingintothepail,freshandfragrant.Finishingallthemilkingandcleaning,hewentoutofthebarnandclosedthedoorbehindhim.98Itbeingalmostfive,herushedbacktohisroomandjumpedintobed,waitingtobewokenup.“Rob!”Hisfathercalled,“Wehavetogetup,evenifitisChristmas.I’llgetthingsstarted.”Roblaystill,laughingtohimself.Injustafewminuteshisfatherwouldknow.Hisdancingheartwasreadytojumpfromhisbody.Theminuteswereendless-ten,fifteen,hedidnotknowhowmany--andheheardhisfather’sfootstepsagain.“Rob!”Hisfatherwaslaughing,aqueersobbingsortoflaugh.“It’sforChristmas,Dad!”Hefoundhisfatherhadclutchedhiminagreathug.Hefelthisfather’sarmsgoaroundhim.“Thankyou.Nobodyeverdidanicerthing.”105VI.下水作文：Appreciatethework,andtrytorememberbeautifulsentencesandthesentenceswithadvancedgrammaticalstructures.Agoodideasuddenlystruckhim.“Icandowhatfatherdoeseverymorningbeforehewakesup,”Robthoughttohimself,excitementfillinghisheart.Instantly,hejumpedoutofbed,pulledonhisclothesandslippedoutintothebarn.Andthenexttwohourswitnessedtheboybusyworkinthebarn:carefullyputtingthepailsinasteadypositionandmilkingthecowsonebyone.Withthemilkingdone,hecautiouslyplacedthetoolsbackinplaceanddidthecleaning.Lookingaroundatthebarn,Robcouldn’thelpsmiling,satisfactionandpridewrittenalloverhisface.Hecouldevenimaginefather’ssurprisedscream.103Itbeingalmostfive,herushedbacktohisroomandjumpedintobed,waitingtobewokenup.Asusual,fathercameintoRob’sroom.Pretendingtobeasleep,hedidn’topenhiseyesuntilhisfathercalledhisname.Whentheygottothebarn,whatgreetedthemreallymadefatherpuzzled,butsoonhecametounderstandthewholething.Proudlyandgently,hepattedRobontheshoulder,sayingthiswasthebestChristmaspresenthehadeverreceivedfromRob.Withanexcited“MerryChristmas,dad.Iloveyou!”,hethrewhimselfintofather’sarms.Feelinghimselfgrownup,RobdecidedtohelpmoreonthefarmandgivehisfatherasurpriseeveryChristmasahead.103VII.Morewritingswithsimilarthemes1：2021年3月“七彩陽光”高三下返校聯(lián)考TheWilsonswerehavingdinner.ThefoodwasleftfromtheirThanksgivingdinnertwodaysbefore：turkeysoupandturkeymeatmixedwithpotatoes.Eleven-year-oldAngelinaasked，”Arewehavingturkeyicecream,too?”Herfatherreplied,“Angelina,haveyouforgottenthatIhadnojobforawholeyear?NowIhaveworkagain.Youshouldbeverythankful.”“I'msorryIsaidthatabouttheturkey!ButunlessIgetanewdress，IwillnotlookgoodfortheChristmasFestival.”Angelinamurmured.TheFestivalwasthewinterholidaycelebrationofagroupshebelongedto:theAvalonGirls'ServiceClub.Theywrotecheerfulcardsforhospitalpatients.Theycookedmealsforthehomeless.ButtheChristmasFestivalwasdifferent.Thegirlsworepartyclothesandmanypeoplecametoseethemperform.Angelinahadonlyaplaingraydressthatshehadworntotheeventlastyear.Andnowitwasalittletooshort.Angelinaappealedtoherparentstobuyoneforher,abeautifulreddressinForbes'Store.Hermothersighed,“Well,wecannotbuyit.Wehavetobecareful.YouneverknowwhenImightlosemyjob.”Allhopewasnotgone.TherewasasignintheForbes’storewindowthatsaid”layaway(分期付款)”.Angelinapulledtenworndollarbillsfromhercoatpocket.Sherantothestoreandbeggedthesalesperson,Mrs.Harding,tohold’her’dressforher.”O(jiān)k.Butyoumustcomebackintwoweekstopaytherest”Angelinafeltlikejumpingintotheair.ShewassohappythatshetoldMrs.HardingabouttheAvalonServiceClub'sworkanditsChristmasparty.Then,Angelinashookandsufferedinthecoldwindlookingforwork.Finally,Angelinagotajobmakingnewclothingfordolls.Angelinawasexcellentatsewing.Sureenough,thedolls'dressesturnedoutbeautiful.Shegottwentydollars.Still，shewasfarfromhavingenoughmoneyforherdress.Shefelthelplessasthefinalpaymentdatearrived.ShereturnedsadlytoForbes'Store,“Idon'thaveenoughmoneyforthedress.”ThenshesawMrs.Harding'seyeswerered.Shelookedlikeshehadbeencrying.Shesaidthestorewasclosingandshewaslosingherjob.參考范文：Suddenly,MrsHardingsaidthatshewouldpaytherestofthemoneysoAngeliacouldhaveit.ThiscommitmentmadeAngeliaecstatic,herheartthumpingwildly.ThefantasticsceneofherpeersintheclubsurroundingherandcastingenviousandworshipinglookoverattheChristmaspartyflashedacrosshermind.Herfaceflushedandeyessparkled.Gigglesandchucklesweretosoundwhenadepressedfacewithredeyesreflectedintohereyes.Sheshiveredwithagustofchillinstantlyrunningdownherspine.ShefeltalittleashamedforhermomentaryselfishthoughtofbeautifyingherselfregardlessofthehardsituationofMrsHarding.Heracceptingheartwithdrew.“Thankyouverymuchindeedforyourkindness!MrsHarding!”saidAngelia,“MerryChristmastoyouandgoodluckforyourjobhunting!”Shestrodeout.Outside,AngelinasawamanwholookedlikeSantaClauswasaskingpeopleformoneytohelppoorpeople.Standinginthehardblowingwindandflutteringdensesnowflakes,hewasseenbusywarmlygreetingandsaying“Thankyou!MerryChristmas!”tothepedestriansdroppingmoneyinthecharitybox,afacebrimmingwithhappiness.“Donateitorkeepitformyself？”shepondered,withaconflictingheart,holdingtightlythetwenty-dollarbillshehadearnedbysewingharddollclothing,“Theformerwillgototheneedypeopleforlifenecessitiesandthelatter,thelong-expecteddress,maybe,isjusttoshowoff.”Thehauntingred-eyedMrsHardingaswellastheamazinglysimilar-seeminglifescenewhereherfatherhadbeenlaidoffdeterminedherchoice.ShesteppedupandgavehimhermoneyintheadmiringlookoftheSantaClausandotherdonors.Snowflakeswerestilldancingalongwithherdreamofchildrenallwearingbeautifuldresses.MelodiousChristmassongswereonandon!2：AChristmaspresentSeveralyearsago,IwaslivinginNewYorkandworkingforanairline,soInevergotbackhomeforChristmas.MyChristmaswashappytoowithsomeothercolleaguesaround.ButinmyheartIwassadbecauseIcouldn'tstaywithmyfamily.SometimesmycolleagueswouldsayourChristmaswasfilledwithtears.ButthisChristmaswasdifferent.Iwaslucky.Ihadthewholedayoff,whichmeantIcouldstaywithmyfamilyonChristmasEve.WhenChristmasmorningcame,Iawoketoasmallhandrubbingmyface.“Dad,MerryChristmas!”wasallmyyoungersonhadtimetosay.Heseemedtoberacingagainsttime.Iknewhewashuntingforgiftswithhisbrothereagerly.Igotdownstairsjusttoseethetwolittleboys’facesastheylookedatthepocketrocketsSantaClaushadleftthem.IrealizedthattherealChristmaswasforthechildrenwhohaddeepbeliefintheamazingpowerofSantaClaus.Atfirst,theirfingerswentalmostshylyovertheirtoys.Whentheirinspection(檢查)hadbeencompleted,thetwoboysensuredthatthegiftswerereallydeliveredbySantaClausandtheydraggedeverythingintothecenterofthelivingroom.Delightfloodedtheroom.Astheirmotherbegangivingoutgifts,Ismiledtomyself,wonderinghowmyunexpectedgiftsthisyearwouldbereceived.WithsomanyChristmasspentoutside,IhadpreparedsomanygiftsformychildrenandtogetherwithmywifeIhidtheminseveralsecretplaces.Butthechildrenwereexcellentdet