智課網(wǎng)范文及賞析issue67

1、智課網(wǎng) GRE 備考資料寫(xiě)作題庫(kù) 67GRESome people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species, despite theexpense to humans in effort, time, and financial wellbeing. Others believe that society does not have the responsibility to make such extraordinary efforts to save endangered species.

2、范文Since the dawn of time, species have come and gone. However, as the human population on earth has grown, the process of extinction has really sped up for some species. It is clear, then, that humans, as the cause, have the responsibility to protect and preserve endangered species.While humans cert

3、ainly have caused the extinction of species to speed up over time, thedisappearance of species due to natural selection was part of the world in which we now live. Before the appearance of human beings, a number of factors could contribute to extinctionthe world is always changing. Nevertheless, as

4、human population on earth has increased, the behavior of human beings is causing a lot of problems. Humans burn rain forests for hunting animals for game or trade. While humans are clearly a plague on the earth, there are still other reasons explaining the extinction of some species. The wild world

5、itself is very intricate. There are predators and is prey. Rapid increase of the population of predators may also lead the extinction of their prey. The point is humans should take some or most but not all responsibility for the condition of things. As the leading cause, it is the undeniable duty of

6、 humankind to protect species endangered by our behaviors.While we certainly have the responsibility to preserve the world around us, lets take a look at thematter from another angle. Lets consider, for a moment, that humans had nothing to do with the extinction of any species. Humans still have an

7、interest in preserving just about everything that內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)分總結(jié)構(gòu)。第一句話指出人類活動(dòng) 了物種 ，自然選擇也是物種 的 之一。隨后指出盡管有自然選擇的 ，但越來(lái)越多的人依舊造成了物種 消失。人類應(yīng)該負(fù)大部分責(zé)任。最后一句總結(jié)說(shuō)因?yàn)槿祟愂?物種小時(shí)的主要 ，所以保護(hù)因人類而瀕危的物種是人類的責(zé)任。此段功能論點(diǎn)一，人類是造成物種的主要，因此應(yīng)該為此負(fù)責(zé)，不遺余力地保護(hù)瀕危物種。內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)第一，二句話簡(jiǎn)單分析了題目的背景，第三句話提出了作者的看法， 他/她認(rèn)為人類有責(zé)任保護(hù)瀕危物種。此段功能介紹題目背景，提出作者意見(jiàn)。c

8、urrently exists on earth because these things benefit humankind. Something we save today couldbecome an essential tool for our survival tomorrow. So, it is sensible to maintain the perspective that we should protect the natural environment of the creatures that roam the earth so that one day we can

9、utilize those plants and animals to our benefit.Lets take a look at one particular natural environment. The disappearing Amazon rainforest is saidto be the lung of the earth, transforming the carbon dioxide into oxygen. Considering the human species along, we must consider how, without oxygen, were

10、going to live here on earth.However, things arent that dramatic. The world will not simply run out of oxygen. So, humans needto consider some other very pressing issues that threaten our survival. Firstly, lets consider AIDS.There is no good reason to preserve thethat kills people. Secondly, in acco

11、rdance withDarwin's theory of nature selection, only the stronger species survive. The process of naturalselection needs to be respected by humans. Third, protection should not strain people economically such that they can no longer sustain themselves.In, we should protect endangered species but

12、 we should do so with a high level ofawareness for all other matters. This prudent, balanced approach will ensure the best possibleoutcome in regards to the matter of ecological protection.內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)第一句話點(diǎn)明了作者對(duì)題目問(wèn)題的看法，總結(jié)了上文的論述。第二句內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)總分結(jié)構(gòu)。第一句承接上文，第二句提出本段中心，認(rèn)為人們?cè)诒Ｗo(hù)生物的同時(shí)需要注意一些迫切的問(wèn)題。作者舉了三個(gè)例子，一

13、個(gè)是諸如毒一類的有害生物，一個(gè)是需要尊重物種選擇、優(yōu)勝劣汰的規(guī)則，還有一個(gè)是保護(hù)生物不應(yīng)在 上使人們自身不保。此段功能論點(diǎn)三，保護(hù)地球生物的同時(shí)需要考慮一些重要問(wèn)題。內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)用三句話舉例說(shuō)明亞馬遜雨林的作用，證明人類不可以不保護(hù)它，不能不保護(hù)自然。此段功能承上啟下，接續(xù)上一段，舉例證明上一段的觀點(diǎn)。內(nèi)容詳細(xì)條目段落此段結(jié)構(gòu)這一段仍舊在最后一句提出論點(diǎn)，所以可看作分總結(jié)構(gòu)，因?yàn)榈谝痪洳⑽粗苯又该鹘嵌群头较颉Ｗ髡咴诒径渭僭O(shè)人們與任何物種的消失無(wú)關(guān)，人們對(duì)地球上的物種還有 保護(hù)，因?yàn)楸Ｗo(hù)它們對(duì)人類有益，這些被保護(hù)的生物會(huì)變成支持人類生存的基本。最后一句得出結(jié)論。此段功能論點(diǎn)二，地球上

14、的動(dòng)植物是有益于人類的，因此應(yīng)予以保護(hù)。滿分要素剖析語(yǔ)言表達(dá)本文的作者在寫(xiě)作中用到了不少難度較高的詞匯，語(yǔ)法使用中規(guī)中矩，但整體表意清晰明確。作者似乎很偏愛(ài)“Lets”一詞，在論述中出現(xiàn)此詞的頻率較高，提醒考生盡量不要集中地重復(fù)使用同一詞匯或短語(yǔ)，稍作變換更能體現(xiàn)詞匯量和英語(yǔ)水平。Since the dawn of time, species have come and gone. 文章開(kāi)頭的第一句話很有意思的地方在于，它看上去很像片里會(huì)用的語(yǔ)氣。其實(shí)這句話就是個(gè)很簡(jiǎn)單的現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)時(shí)態(tài)，連 since 作為標(biāo)志詞也明顯的一眼看得出，但 the dawn of time 搭配的用法顯得很地道，因

15、為沒(méi)有干巴巴地直接表述，而是使用了 dawn 開(kāi)端一詞，讓句子更美。While humans are clearly a plague on the earth, there are still other reasons explaining theextinction of some species. 這句話中的 plague 是災(zāi)害、禍害、麻煩的意思，有一種因?yàn)榉簽E而產(chǎn)生害處的含義，也就是說(shuō)人口增長(zhǎng)給環(huán)境帶來(lái)很多問(wèn)題。Considering the human species along, we must consider how, without oxygen, were going to livehere on earth. 這句話把介賓短語(yǔ) without oxygen 提前到 how 和 were 之間，而不是放在句末，主要是為了強(qiáng)調(diào)它的內(nèi)容，對(duì)應(yīng)前一句提到的亞馬遜雨林的制氧作用。Third, protection should not strain people economically such that they can no