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1、新材料作文新材料作文-概括指導(dǎo)概括指導(dǎo)How to write a summary of narration Learning aim: To further master the methods and skills of writing summaries of narrative passages Difficult point: How to write an exact summary without leaving out key points學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤：學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤：概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不完整概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不完整使用太多細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容而不是用概括的語言使用太多細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容而不是用概括的語言

2、過多引用原文詞句過多引用原文詞句詞數(shù)過多詞數(shù)過多用第一人稱而不是第三人稱轉(zhuǎn)述用第一人稱而不是第三人稱轉(zhuǎn)述時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤 Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two hours later, I didnt catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home. Just then, I

3、 saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldnt believe my ears. “Yes. Its very important to be patient,” the old m

4、an said. “Dont consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently. I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didnt move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This ma

5、de me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish. On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience. 學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤1: The passage tells us that last Sunday a man went fishing but he didnt catch any fish in two h

6、ours. At this time he saw an old man sitting near him. The man asked the man how to catch fishes. The old man said that you should be patient.使用太多細(xì)節(jié)，使用太多細(xì)節(jié)，語言不夠概括語言不夠概括概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)： 精，準(zhǔn)，全精，準(zhǔn)，全學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤2: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing and didnt catch any fish. When he

7、prepared to go back home,he found an old man sitting there and his basket was full of fish. In the end, he caught many fish.引用原文詞句引用原文詞句不得直接引用原不得直接引用原文的句子文的句子學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤3: The story mainly tells us that the writer was fishing but made no achievements and prepared to go back home. While an old m

8、an whose basket was full of fish told him that fish is very important to be patient . The author learned to be patient. At last, the author caught fish and realized the secret of success was patience. (共60詞)詞數(shù)過多詞數(shù)過多詞數(shù)詞數(shù):約約30詞（小詞（小于于20詞或大于詞或大于40詞，扣詞，扣2分）分）學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤4: The writer tells us that h

9、e went fishing but didnt catch any fish after waiting 2 hours. Then an old man sitting near me told me his secret of fishing was patience. Finally the writer succeeded.人稱用錯(cuò)，應(yīng)該人稱用錯(cuò)，應(yīng)該用第三人稱用第三人稱一般以第三人稱一般以第三人稱來表述來表述 學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤5: The passage mainly tells us that the writer didnt catch any fish bec

10、ause of his impatience. He become happy when he understand the patience is the key to success.時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤與原文時(shí)態(tài)一致與原文時(shí)態(tài)一致(1)概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要：精，準(zhǔn)，全概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要：精，準(zhǔn)，全 寫概括時(shí)應(yīng)滿足的5個(gè)條件(4) 一般以第三人稱來表述一般以第三人稱來表述 (2)不得直接引用原文的句子（同義詞組替換不得直接引用原文的句子（同義詞組替換法；正話反說法；語態(tài)變換；簡單句變復(fù)法；正話反說法；語態(tài)變換；簡單句變復(fù)合句合句）(3)詞數(shù)詞數(shù):約約30詞（小于詞（小于20詞或大于詞或大于40詞，扣詞，

11、扣2分）分）(5)與原文時(shí)態(tài)一致（正文和結(jié)尾除外）與原文時(shí)態(tài)一致（正文和結(jié)尾除外）記敘文概括的方法-串聯(lián)要素法第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素 who 誰 what 何事 when 何時(shí) where 何地 why 原因 as a result/consequence/finally 結(jié)果 .,which led to第二步：用第二步：用自己的話自己的話串聯(lián)起來串聯(lián)起來 萬能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) because of /

12、as a result of /due to , which led to finally/eventually開頭套用句式：The story/passage is aboutThe writer/author tells us about.The story/passage mainly tells us thatThe passage describes . Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two h

13、ours later, I didnt catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home. Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “

14、About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldnt believe my ears. “Yes. Its very important to be patient,” the old man said. “Dont consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently.

15、I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didnt move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This made me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish. On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was

16、 patience. had no patience第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素： who 誰 _ _ what 何事 _ _ when 何時(shí) where 何地 why 原因 _ _ as a result 結(jié)果 _I (the writer)didnt catch any fishan old manhis basket was full of fishgot very angryIts very important to be patientlearn to be patient; caught it. 第二步：用第二步：用自己的話自己的話串聯(lián)起來串聯(lián)

17、起來 萬能公式：sb. (who) did sth. (at some place at some time ) because of / as a result of /due to , which led to /finally/eventually The writercaught a lot of fishafter becoming patientwho had no patience at firstbecause of being influenced by an old manhim realizing patience is the key to successOne pos

18、sible versionThe passage mainly tells us that the writer who had no patience at first caught a lot of fish after becoming patient because of being influenced by an old man. Finally , he realized patience is the key to success. had intended to give upintended to have given upGroup Work 閱讀下面的短文，然后以約30

19、個(gè)詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。 Hi, I am Mike. I just went through my first year of college. The toughest part on me at first was the general adjustment. I went to a very small high school where my mom was a teacher and she did practically everything for me. But at the college I need to know some basic life skills,

20、such as balancing a check-book, laundry, and the things you have to be able to handle that I never thought of in the high school! It was really tough for me at first and I got badly homesick. Once that first semester was over and I got used to the college life, I love itgood facilities, helpful inst

21、ructors, and a good library. The students Union organizes various parties every week. I also go to cinemas and concerts, and often spend Saturday nights in pubs and clubs. One thing I think is important is to get yourself active in things. I was on dance team in college and met a ton of people that

22、wayit was so much easier to make friends when you had a common ground.第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：第一步：請找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素： who 誰 _ when 何時(shí) _ what _ _ _ where 何地 why 原因 _ as a result 結(jié)果 _第二步：用第二步：用自己的話自己的話串聯(lián)起來串聯(lián)起來(根據(jù)萬能公式根據(jù)萬能公式) 萬能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) becaus

23、e of / as a result of /due to , which led to finally/eventuallyPresentation & EvaluationGroup Work 閱讀下面的短文，然后以約30個(gè)詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。 Hi, I am Mike. I just went through my first year of college. The toughest part on me at first was the general adjustment. I went to a very small high school where my mom wa

24、s a teacher and she did practically everything for me. But at the college I need to know some basic life skills, such as balancing a check-book, laundry, and the things you have to be able to handle that I never thought of in the high school! It was really tough for me at first and I got badly homes

25、ick. Once that first semester was over and I got used to the college life, I love itgood facilities, helpful instructors, and a good library. The students Union organizes various parties every week. I also go to cinemas and concerts, and often spend Saturday nights in pubs and clubs. One thing I thi

26、nk is important is to get yourself active in things. I was on dance team in college and met a ton of people that wayit was so much easier to make friends when you had a common ground.One possible version: Group work 1 范文：The passage mainly tells us that Mike, (who had difficulty in adjusting to the

27、first-year college life) got accustomed to it one semester later because of the colurful activities and enjoyed himself.sbdid sth.whenbecause ofIndividual Work Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. This is Li Hua from Senior Three. Im here today to share with you a good lesson from an overseas Chinese

28、 student living in Germany. It is a true story. After years of hard work, this Chinese student graduated with amazing academic achievements. Everyone thought he was going to get a good job easily and have a bright future. But to his disappointment, he was not even allowed the chance for an interview

29、! The third time he was turned down, he couldnt help telephoning the company to ask why they didnt want him. The answer was simple, We dont hire dishonest people in Germany. What was wrong you might wonder? The truth is, shortly after he arrived in Germany, this clever student found that it was easy

30、 to skip buying subway tickets. So, to save money, he often went without a ticket. As a result, he had been caught without a ticket in the subway three times. From this story, we learn that we may get short-term benefits by dishonest means, but the truth will come out sooner or later and the cost is

31、 high. So remember, honesty is the best policy. Thats all for my speech. Thank you! Presentation & EvaluationIndividual Work Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. This is Li Hua from Senior Three. Im here today to share with you a good lesson from an overseas Chinese student living in Germany. It is a

32、 true story. After years of hard work, this Chinese student graduated with amazing academic achievements. Everyone thought he was going to get a good job easily and have a bright future. But to his disappointment, he was not even allowed the chance for an interview! The third time he was turned down

33、, he couldnt help telephoning the company to ask why they didnt want him. The answer was simple, We dont hire dishonest people in Germany. What was wrong you might wonder? The truth is, shortly after he arrived in Germany, this clever student found that it was easy to skip buying subway tickets. So,

34、 to save money, he often went without a ticket. As a result, he had been caught without a ticket in the subway three times. From this story, we learn that we may get short-term benefits by dishonest means, but the truth will come out sooner or later and the cost is high. So remember, honesty is the

35、best policy. Thats all for my speech. Thank you! 用用自己的話自己的話串聯(lián)起來串聯(lián)起來(根據(jù)萬能公式根據(jù)萬能公式) One possible version:_ tells us that _ _didnt _ on purpose when _, which led to _due to _.The passage mainly an excellent Chinese student buy the subway tickets studying in Germanyhim not being able to find a jobhis di

36、shonestyReview the steps of writing a summary第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素 who 誰 what 什么 when 何時(shí) where 何地 why 原因 as a result/consequence/finally 結(jié)果 .,which leads to 第二步：用第二步：用自己的話自己的話串聯(lián)起來串聯(lián)起來 萬能公式：The passage mainly tells us that sb. (who) did sth. (at someplace at sometime ) because of / as a result of /due to , which led to finally/eventuallyHomework閱讀下面的短文，然后以約30個(gè)詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容。 Once upon a time some tiny frogs he