2021-10祥銀老師寫作課第二次素材

1、We can live and work anywhere we like because of improved communication technology transport.Doyouthinkititiveor這個趨勢使得更了解世We can live and work anywhere we like because of improved communication technology transport.Doyouthinkititiveor這個趨勢使得更了解世（thistrendprovidesuswi 這個趨勢擴(kuò)大了交際圈nopportunitytoknowmorea

2、bout這個趨勢疏遠(yuǎn)了人的關(guān)系（涉及到溝通技術(shù)，經(jīng)?？梢赃@么講壞處（中心句）Thistrendallowsustoknowmoreaboutthe一個早飯?jiān)趥惗爻缘娜送砩峡梢孕蕾p巴黎的夜色在過去人們被困在自己（這個勢對年輕人尤其有利。他們對世界充滿好奇，并且去往不同的地方幫助他們獲得將來成功必須的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。注意：真正表達(dá)的時候字?jǐn)?shù)甚至不用這么多(confine)(confinesb.toAnindividualwhohashadbreakfastinLondoncanenjoythenightover/ofhepastpeoplewereconfinedtowheretheywereThe adv

3、antages of this trend are lly obvious when it comes to the young/(the particularlybenefitfromthisThey are curious of the world outside. Visiting and working in different acquiretheskillsneededforfurtherenable them Xparticularlybenefitfrom/XXarellyobviouswhenitcomestoan individual who has eaten break

4、fast in London in the morning can enjoy the night over he past people were confined to where they were born. The young benefit from improved transport and communication. They are curious of the world Working and living in different allow them to he experience needed furtherthis trend allows us to ma

5、ke more friends. nks to this trend, our l circle/sphere 一篇文章如果一方和另一方的idea一共有三個，參考三個idea的結(jié)構(gòu)。每個idea字?jǐn)?shù)65夠了。講解的時候 Forle,wecancontactothersinanypartoftheworldsorothertools. he past we had to visit others face to face if we wanted to make friends. explainswhymodernpeoplettheyarefar Forle,wecancontactother

6、sinanypartoftheworldsorothertools. he past we had to visit others face to face if we wanted to make friends. explainswhymodernpeoplettheyarefarnhe(peoplearelesslikelytohavecloserelationswithothersbecauseofthistrend) ( people are not so close as before)/thetwehavetopayfortweareless為付出的代價(jià)擴(kuò)人和遠(yuǎn)方，他們沒有太多的

7、機(jī)會同家人見面，雖然可以。However, 如果在過去，的機(jī)會在一起。（老年人 suffer from）（特點(diǎn)（課后寫給老師Some people think it is better to be self-employed or while others prefer to work in company.Discussbothsidesandgiveyour創(chuàng)創(chuàng)業(yè)錢慢慢打工融入社團(tuán)隊(duì)精如果人們選擇創(chuàng)業(yè)，他們可以有做喜歡的事經(jīng)常不得不。Ifpeopledecidetobeselfemployed,theycanenjoythefreedomngwhattheymorelikelytodost

8、h.)(peoplechoosingtobeself-employedaremorelikelytoenjoythefreedomtobeselfemployedallowspeopletoenjoythefreedom ngwhattheyIftheychoosetobeself-employed,theycanhavethefreedomngwhattheylike.Theycanruncompanybysathome.However,iftheyworkinacompany,theyoftenhavetoworkingaftertheyarrive他們可以坐在家里沙發(fā)上喝著茶收發(fā)郵件在運(yùn)

9、營公司還可以在家里收發(fā)郵件運(yùn)營公司thetwehavetopayisthe n創(chuàng)業(yè)使得人們的錢(選擇創(chuàng)業(yè)的人更有可能的錢)。人們不得不的錢來確保好的創(chuàng)業(yè)使得人們的錢(選擇創(chuàng)業(yè)的人更有可能的錢)。人們不得不的錢來確保好的生活大部分打工的人們幾乎勉強(qiáng)度日（make a life of subsistence）/（一些打工的人不得不free 貼家用。然而，一個人選擇創(chuàng)業(yè)的話，情況將改變很多。 (公司里里面工作很長時間的人尤其適合創(chuàng)業(yè)（他們?nèi)嗣}，經(jīng)驗(yàn)，知道如何為將來做打算，如何運(yùn)營團(tuán)隊(duì)鋪Tobeself-employedallowspeopletohavemoremoney/earnmore/make

10、afortune.Peoplenowhave to make more to ensure a good/decent life. However, most of people working in companies can only livea life of subsistence. If they choose to be self-employed, the situation will be much better.（theadvantagesofbeingself-employedareparticularlyobviouswhenitcomestopeoplewhobeen

11、working in a company for long）或：(people who have been working in a company for long particularly benefit from being self-employed).alresource ）(experience)knowhowtomakeplansfortheirfuture,runa（不用這么多打工幫助人們獲得成功所需的基本的技能和知識考慮。epern vire dee nelatiswh he)To work in a company enables people to acquire/obt

12、ain basic skills and knowledge needed achievements in career. They can gradually learn to be proper in behavior and considerate in relations with others. （對于剛剛畢業(yè)的學(xué)生。）他們沒有經(jīng)驗(yàn)，沒，有的只是學(xué)術(shù)知識（課后自己寫，老師改Youngpeopleareencouragedtotravelorworkforayearnfinishingacupofteaonthesofaathome,anindividualcanrunacompany

13、byschool and starting university education. Do the advantages 7. 扯一整件1.（難度 心school and starting university education. Do the advantages 7. 扯一整件1.（難度 心句（具體化）（對比）（讓步）（舉個例）如果學(xué)生travel or work for a year，他們更有可能學(xué)著融入社會.They can eract others, so they can learn to be proper in behavior and considerate in rel

14、ationship with However, 直接上大學(xué)的孩子就不大可能來成功所需的基裕的孩子。這些孩子沒有經(jīng)歷太多的逆境，父母什么都為他們準(zhǔn)備好。他們需要eractions with the outside world.融入adapttothenormsofaThe advantages of travelling or working are lly obvious when it comes to children from s. Most of them have not experience adversity and parents always prepare everythi

15、ng themin (graduallyadapttothenormsofthesocietyChildren from wealthy s particularly benefit (the advantages of travelling workingarellyobviousto.If students choose to travel or work for a year, they are more likely to adapt to the norms of society. They can eract with others, so they can learn to be

16、 proper in behavior considerate in relationship with others. However, children spending most of their time computer games are unlikely to get l . The advantages of are lly when it comes to children from rich s. Most of them have not experienced adversity parentspreparealmosteverythingforthemin1.（舉個例

17、）（難度?。ǎ┼従拥暮⒆釉竞芴裕╪aughty），對家里的客人沒有禮貌。他的父母為此很擔(dān)心，怕他可能將來會無法獨(dú)立的適應(yīng)社會。在工作。半年的工作，他變得nice。經(jīng)常在周末為家人做飯，打掃房間中畢業(yè)后鼓例子： 中心句+人類思維If students choose to travel or work for a year, they are more likely to adapt to the norms of society. However,childrenspendingmostoftheirtimeplayingcomputergamesareunlikelytol. (個例，字?jǐn)?shù)不

18、要太多如果學(xué)生travel or work for a year，他們更有可能學(xué)著融入社好處尤其是明顯的對于家境1. （難度稍大travel或者work的孩子更有可能學(xué)著融入社會。孩子將來將的社會遠(yuǎn)比可能認(rèn)為的復(fù)雜擇工作的學(xué)生更有競爭力，能夠慢慢的學(xué)將來成功所需的經(jīng)驗(yàn) /Through they meet at work,他們會變1. （難度稍大travel或者work的孩子更有可能學(xué)著融入社會。孩子將來將的社會遠(yuǎn)比可能認(rèn)為的復(fù)雜擇工作的學(xué)生更有競爭力，能夠慢慢的學(xué)將來成功所需的經(jīng)驗(yàn) /Through they meet at work,他們會變得更加他人考慮，更加處事得體。即使碰到一erac

19、tion with ，他們可以學(xué)著。富裕家庭的孩子尤其需要這個經(jīng)歷（特點(diǎn):沒有經(jīng)歷逆境，父母什么都預(yù)先準(zhǔn)備好。他們需要同外界的交流The society children will face might be far more n they ve imagined. choosingtoworkaremorecompetent.Theycangraduallyacquiretheexperienceneededforachievements. Through at work , they can learn to be proper in behavior and considerate re

20、lations with others. Even if they are faced with difficulties, they e these setbacks there might be some dangers for them。他們對社會的認(rèn)識不夠好。不知道如何處理同他人的關(guān)系一些心智不孩子不大會處理可能碰到的麻煩。(understanding of they do ve a good understanding of the society and do not know how to get along others.Itisttheymightfacettheycanno

21、tsolve過多重視 working or travelling 的學(xué)生不大可能專注于將來的學(xué)業(yè)。A dofknowledge requires devotion and concentration. nowledge is also one of the ttheycanrelyonwhenthey Are less likely to do 再也不愿回去上學(xué)了。實(shí)習(xí)的經(jīng)歷幫助一些學(xué)生獲得謀生的技能。他們可能認(rèn)為不用依賴學(xué)業(yè)在將社會立足。大學(xué)單調(diào)緊張的氛圍讓他們厭煩. （這點(diǎn)更有可能發(fā)生在窮孩子身上。家里的經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力經(jīng)SkillsneededformakingaThey might be re

22、luctant to go back to school.(they might be reluctant to continue their study What they have accumulated as a worker or traveler allows them to acquire the basic skills knowledge needed sary for making a living. They might mistakenly t they do have to rely on academic knowledge to establish themselv

23、es. They are bored with tedious repetitive life on us. (They might be ed with the tedious and repetitive life cus).Childrenfromimpoverisheds are llyreluctanttocontinuetheirstudy. are concerned about the economic burden of their s and hope to ve their parents of Some people tchildren should obey the

24、rules of parents and teachers, while others t shouldbegivenmorefreedom.DiscussbothsidesandSome people tchildren should obey the rules of parents and teachers, while others t shouldbegivenmorefreedom.Discussbothsidesandgiveyour一篇文章兩個想法，每個想法擴(kuò)展到100。社會上有很多的（關(guān)于一個人應(yīng)該如何行為處事的）規(guī)則因此,孩需要父母的管教。父母所積累的更有可能使得他們con

25、siderateinrelationswithothersandproperbehavior.低年級的孩子尤（心智不成熟，缺乏判斷是非的能力，心理發(fā)展處于重要階段Controlallows childrentoadapttothenorms ofthesociety./Childrenunder theguidanceof aremorelikelytoadapttothenormsoftheRulesontherearemanyunspokenrulesonhowanindividualshouldRulesonTherearemanyrulesonhowanindividualoughtt

26、obehaveinaChildren under the control of parents are more likely to adapt to the norms of a society. There are many rules onhow an individualshould behave. Therefore, theyneed the guidance of parents. parents have accumulated allows them to be proper in behavior and considerate in relations others.ow

27、ergradesarellyinneedofcontrol.Theyarementallyimmaturelacktheabilityofjudgment.Besidestheyareinanimportantperiodofmental注意：同樣的中心句可以選擇簡單的方法。（稍微因果或者例子不會擴(kuò)展這么多，但是一整件事字?jǐn)?shù)太多接受管教的孩子更能學(xué)的融入社會。父母所積累的更有可能使得他們 considerate in relations othersandproperin（一整件事被給的孩子更有可能獲得獨(dú)立思考獨(dú)立解決問題的能力。孩子將很多的-(自己需要為自己接受管教的孩子更能學(xué)的融決定)-狀

28、況.因此，獨(dú)立思考的能力對他們極為重要。這種能力使得他們知道如何在面的時候做出好的判斷(allow sb. To do sth.)。這也是成身上經(jīng)常能找到的稀缺的品質(zhì)(this is also a rare oftenfound決定)-狀況.因此，獨(dú)立思考的能力對他們極為重要。這種能力使得他們知道如何在面的時候做出好的判斷(allow sb. To do sth.)。這也是成身上經(jīng)常能找到的稀缺的品質(zhì)(this is also a rare oftenfoundin/amongsful individuals). 高年級的孩子更需有好的認(rèn)識，學(xué)業(yè)壓力大，過多的管教使得Children give

29、n more freedom are more likely to acquire the ability to think and solve independently.(childrengivenmorefreedomtendtobemorehewaytheythinksonwhichsb.dosituationswheresb.doChildrengivenmorefreedomtendtobemorehewaytheythinkandsolveThey will face many situations where they ought to make s on their own.

30、 Thus, hinkingisimportant,allowingthemtoknowhowtomakesoundjudgmentsin sful people.+（范圍縮小Some people t children from rich s are more likely to succeed. While others tchildrenfrompoorscanmakeachievements.Discussbothsidesandgiveyour富孩子能接觸到更好的教育. 將來的競爭mainly focus on educational qualifications.富孩子的家庭能夠承

31、擔(dān)years of often denied stoqualityeducation, 窮孩子經(jīng)常得考慮緩解家里的經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力，通過part-jobs. 窮孩子尤其沒有機(jī)會，在那lessdevelopedcountries, 這些國家沒有好的福利制度。窮孩子無享受免費(fèi)的基本教育Children from rich s can s to good education. The he future mainly . Rich s can afford years of l investment. However, a disturbing/disquieting fact tThey often ha

32、ve to worry about how to ve their s of economic burden takingsortsofparttimejobs.Childrenareparticularlydisadvantagedinunderdevelopedwhere the welfare system is in its rudimentary period. Children are deprived of the right to freeelementary )如果要加，可以考慮這個。（中心句,富孩子有很多父母提供的資源）很多是少數(shù)富人為了自的利益倡導(dǎo)的。在一些領(lǐng)域，即使一個

33、窮孩子努力, 他無法獲得應(yīng)該有的尊重。不大可能在職場上去的大的成就。富裕的家庭為孩子積累的人脈為他們成功鋪平了道路aremoreManylchangesarepromotedbytheinoritiestotheirown The poor may not be treated with due respect, however diligent they are/no matter how they Rich parents can offer their offspring needed for further achievement. Many changes are promoted

34、by the minority to their erest. what the rich have accumulated children pays way for their Rich parents can offer their offspring needed for further achievement. Many changes are promoted by the minority to their erest. what the rich have accumulated children pays way for their s.In other words, chi

35、ldren from impoverished s may not treated with due respect, despite their diligence, nor can they make s/achievementsin(be perseverant /perseverance/be determined in mind/be constant in pursuit of dreams/be persistent in pursuit of goals)However,therearealsoreasonswhychildrenfrompoors can hefuture.

36、窮孩子有毅力。成功都是基于很多失敗的，窮孩子的更有可能克服這。他們更知道如何頂住壓力。In words,theytendtobemoreconstantinpursuitofdreamsanddauntlessinfaceofdifficulties。這個力使他們生長環(huán)境造就的。然而不能指望絕大部分富孩子擁有這個能力，因?yàn)樗麄儧]有經(jīng)歷太多的逆境，并且父母什么都為他們預(yù)先準(zhǔn)備好。(范圍縮小到：children who have the chance to university 尤其刻苦)（扯到學(xué)業(yè)怎么怎么刻苦）（怎么珍惜機(jī)會Children frompoor s tend to be more

37、perseverant. s is always based on failures. children are more likely e these difficulties/setbacks. They also know how reinfaceofThisqualityistheresultoftheenvironmentwheretheyhavegrownHowever, we cannot expect most of children from wealthy s sess this fromwealthysarelesslikelysessthisquality,becaus

38、eThisqualityistheresultoftheenvironmentwheretheygrowWecannotcannotexpectsb.Todosisalwaysbasedone e SustainbeChildren from impoverished s tend to be more perseverant. s is always based failures. These children are more likely e these setbacks and know how to re. Inotherwords,theytendtobemoreconstanti

39、npursuitofdreamsanddauntless infacedifficulties. This ability is the result of the environment where they have grown up. However, cannot expect most children from rich s sess/show this quality, partly because havenotexperiencedmuchadversityandparentspreparealmosteverythingfortheminSomepeoplethinkoneshappinessisdeterminedbyhealth,whileothersthinkotherfactorsareimportant.Discussbothsidesandgiveyour健康是人們的基礎(chǔ)。如果一個人因的。即使他有，他不能周末同家人在公園散步，不能享受運(yùn)動帶來Somepeoplethinkoneshappinessisdeterminedbyhealth,whileothersthinkotherfactorsareimportant.Discussbothsidesandgiveyour健康是人們的基礎(chǔ)。如果一個人因的。即使他有，他不能周末