【讀后續(xù)寫】續(xù)寫微技能-心理描寫與思維點撥

【讀后續(xù)寫】續(xù)寫微技能—心理描寫與思維點撥一.心理描寫的原則1.落實“細微處”描寫在描寫人物心理活動時，一定要突出細節(jié)，所有的感情都體現(xiàn)在“細微處”，所以盡量不用籠統(tǒng)的詞，如smile，cry等，而用相關(guān)的細節(jié)性詞匯或詞組，例如：①Lilysmiledhappily.②Lilyworeashiningsmileonherface.分析:①句中“smile”是一個籠統(tǒng)的描述微笑的詞匯，而②句中使用了woreashiningsmile，用詞組的形式更加突出細節(jié)，展示了細微和精致的“微笑”。體現(xiàn)“多樣性”結(jié)構(gòu)在進行人物心理描寫時,盡量避免平鋪直敘,可以多采用如非謂語動詞的形式,作為謂語動作的伴隨狀態(tài),從而使得描寫到位,并體現(xiàn)語法結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性。如:①Hereyeswerefilledwithtears,andsheofferedhersincerethankstotheman.②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedhersincerethankstotheman.分析:①句在描寫心理活動“哭泣”時，用到了Hereyeswerefilledwithtears。而②句則把這句改成了獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，運用了Tearsfillinghereyes，更顯得描寫的細致，同時也體現(xiàn)了句式的多樣化，展示了高超的語言運用能力。3.展示“豐富化”修辭除了選擇細致的心理描寫詞匯和多樣化的句式表達外，提升語言層次的另外一種方式是多使用修辭方法，例如:①Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.②IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.分析:①句中,把“微笑”比喻成“像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光”;而②句中，把“悲傷”比喻成“漂浮在悲傷的海洋里”，展示了用修辭來體現(xiàn)細節(jié)描寫的豐富。二、心理描寫的素材1.與“喜悅和滿意”相關(guān)的詞塊abright/shiningsmile燦爛的微笑amixtureofexcitementandhappiness既興奮又開心burstintolaughter/burstoutlaughing突然大笑起來bewildwithjoy/delight欣喜若狂bejoyfulabout/at/over對……很高興beinhighspirits情緒高漲bepleasedbeyonddescription快樂難以言表lightup喜逐顏開becontent/satisfiedwith對……滿意bedelightedat對……很高興withpleasure非常樂意2.與“悲傷和煩惱”相關(guān)的詞塊besadatheart心里悲傷bedowninspirits情緒低落anoceanofsadness悲傷的海洋burstintotears/burstoutcrying大哭起來sob啜泣becloudedwithgrief陰沉的悲傷beinlowspirits情緒低落fallintodespair陷入絕望feeldepressed/discouraged感到沮喪/泄氣haveaworriedlook愁眉苦臉3.與“生氣和怨怒”相關(guān)的詞塊beveryangryat對……很生氣feelangry/annoyed感到惱怒/生氣beseizedbyanger充滿憤怒befumingwithrage大發(fā)雷霆tremblewithanger憤怒得顫抖alookofburninganger憤怒的一眼glareatsb.怒視flareup勃然大怒beinarage一怒之下bemadat對……生氣【遷移應(yīng)用二】Oneday,mybrotherandIwerealoneinourapartment.Thereasonwasthatmyparentshadbothgoneforaballpartyandhadleftmeinchargeofeverything.IwasdoingmyhomeworkwhilemyyoungerbrotherwaswatchingTV.Allofasudden,thedoorbellrang.Ding-dong!Ding-dong!MyyoungerbrotherhadrushedtothedoorbeforeIdecidedtoanswertheboththoughtthatourparentshadcomearesult,heunlockedthedoorandopenedit.Outsideofthehousestoodamanwhoworeablackraincoatandblackrubberlookednodifferentfromotherpeopleandhesaidthathewasasalesmanandaskedpolitelyifourmotherorfatherwasathomesohecouldtalkwiththem.Withoutanythinking,mybrothersaid,“No.”Heaskedifwewouldliketobuysomecomicbooks,whichhewasquicklyexplainedtohimthatwewerenotsupposedtobuyanythingwithoutourparents’permission.However,itseemedthathewasnotwillingtofollowmyadviceandhehadanintentiontoenterourhouse.Then,Irealizedsomethingterriblewouldhappen.AsIwasabouttoclosethedoor,heforcedhiswayintoourhouse.Hetookoutaknifeandforcedmetotieupmybrother’shandswithsomeropewhichhetookoutfromhistieduphishandsbutItiedinaspecialwaysomybrothercoulduntiehimselfasweoftenmanthentiedmyhandsupandlockedbothofusinthekitchen.Soon,hewentupstairstosearchthebedroomforsomethingmanagedtoteachmybrothertountietheropeonhisthenuntiedme.Irushedtothetelephonetocallthepolice,butthelinewasdead.Paragraph1:Thedoorswerealllockedfromtheoutsideandwhat’sworse,Ididnothavethekeys.Paragraph2:Justatthesametimeourparentscamebackhome.范文欣賞Thedoorswerealllockedfromtheoutsideandwhat’sworse,Ididnothavethekeys.Butluckily,themanforgottolockthekitchenwindow.BothmybrotherandImanagedtogetoutofthehousethroughthewindowwithjoyandwerantothenearbypolicestation,nervouslybuthappily,whereweaskedthemforpolicebravelyarrivedatourhouseassoonaspossible.Andasaresult,themanwascaught,whichmadeusveryhappy.Justatthesametimeourparentscamebackpoliceaskedmyfamilytogotothepolicestation.Itwasattherethepolicetoldusthatthemanwasawantedrobberpretendingtosellcomicbooksandtheyhadbeenlookingforhimforalongpolicepraisedmybrotherandmeforourbraveness.Backhome,Itoldmyparentsthewholestoryaboutthe