讀后續(xù)寫：人與動(dòng)物溫情故事-拳師犬治愈人心講義-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Ithadbeenafewmonthssinceourbeloved

boxer(拳師犬)

Bamahadpassedaway.He'dlivedagood,

longlife.AlanandIdidn'thavechildren.Ourboxerwasourbaby.

AfterBama'sdeath,wecouldn't

bringourselvestogothrough

histoysto

decidewhattokeep-soweputthemallinthebasement.

ItoldmyselfI'ddoitwhenIwasready.

Apparently,Istillwasn't.NowIsatinmyyardandwept.Friendsandfamilyhadsuggestedwegetanotherdog,but

AlanandIdismissedtheidea.Wecouldn'tgothroughthatkindofheartbreakagain.Igazedoutovertheyard.Acrossthestreetwasadog.Aboxer.Iwipedthetearsfrommy

eyes,heartbeatingwildly.Washerealorjustmywishfulimagination?Itookasecondlook.The

boxerwasstillthere.Welockedeyes.Heranacrossthestreet,straighttowardme.

Iofferedmy

hand.Hesniffediteagerly,bushytailwagging.Helickedme.

ThisdogwasyoungerthanBama,smaller.Hewaswell-fedandclean.Heworeacollarbut

hadnoID.Iknewhemustbelongtosomeoneintheneighborhood,butI'dneverseenanother

boxeraround.Thedoglaydownbesidemyfeet,histonguelollinginadoggiesmile.

Hedidn'tseemlost,justasifheweredroppingbyforavisit.“Alan!”Icalled.“Youhavetocomeseethis!”Alanjoinedme,andwesattogethersilentlyforamoment.Thentheboxergotupandwalked

off.Inthefollowingdays,he'dsometimesappearinthebackyardwhenAlanandIwereoutside.

Othertimes,he'dwaitforusonthefrontporch.Witheachvisit,I

couldfeeltheacheinmyheartlessen.

Seeinghimwashelping

mework

throughmydeepsorrow.Atworkoneday,ayoungmanandanolderwomanI'dneverseenbeforecamein.Itook

downtheman'saddresstocompletesomepaperworkandnoticedhelivedupthestreetfromme.HisnamewasTanner.Thewomanwithhimwashisgrandmother.Heandhisfamilyhad

recentlymovedfromGeorgia.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。學(xué)生習(xí)作Paragraph1“Doyouhappentohaveadog?”

Iasked.Tannernoddedandexplainedthatthedogishis.Whentheyarrived,

theboxeralwayswentout,whichtheythoughtforplaying.However,yesterdaytheywereshockedtofindthathecametomyhouse.

“

I'msosorry.Hemustbringmuchtroubletoyou.”

Tannerapologized.

Paragraph2

“Notatall!Actually,

hewasabighelp.”

Isaid.“Wehadaboxer,

butithadpassedaway.It'shimwhohelpusgetthroughthesorrow.”

Ismiled.

Tannersaidthathewasgladtohearthathisboxerhelpedus.Hethensaidthattheywouldtaketheboxertobuysometoys.Atthatmoment,

anideahitme.IrushedtothebasementandtookoutBama'stoys.

“Ifyoudon'tmind,

takeourboxer'stoysasourappreciation.”

Tanneracceptedwithouthesitationandhopedthatthiscould

reliefoursorrow.Thetoyswere

fullofourlovetobothBamaandTanner'snow.建議修改1.第一小節(jié)整體情節(jié)構(gòu)思有問題。從原文可知I

和Tanner應(yīng)該是第一次見面，所以后面的構(gòu)思和此相互矛盾。思維導(dǎo)圖：Tanner聽到問話驚訝困惑---I

做出解釋---Tanner道歉，擔(dān)心狗給我們帶來麻煩。2.對(duì)話偏多。Isaid.“Wehadaboxer,

but

ithadpassedaway.It'shimwhohelpusgetthroughthesorrow.”

，此句可改成間接引語:

Iexplainedto

themwhathadhappenedtomyBamaanditwastheirboxer,afrequentvisitortoourhouse,thathelpedusthroughthesorrow.修改后習(xí)作：Paragraph1

“Doyouhappentohaveadog?”Iasked.

“Yeah,actuallywekeepaboxercalled

Butt.”

Tanner

nodded,looking

somewhat

surprised.IaskedwhethertheirButtworeacollarbuthad

noID,whichwasconfirmedbytheoldwoman.Mysterysolved!Meetingtheir

confused

look,ItoldthemthatButtdroppedbymyhouseforavisit.“

I'msosorry.

Wehadlittletimeforhimsincewejustmovedhere.IhopeButtdidn’tcause

youanytrouble.”Tannerapologized,scratchinghishead.Paragraph2

“Notatall!Actually,

hewasabighelp.”

Isaid.

Isharedwiththemwhathappenedtoourbeloved

Bamaandhowwesufferedafterhisdeath.Butt’svisits

turnedouttobeacureforourdeepsorrow.Atthis,Tanner

feltrelievedtoknowhisboxercouldbringuscomfort.AndhealsomentionedtheywouldbuysometoysforlonelyMutt.

Rightaway,

Irealizedthat’swhenIwasready.

“Take

ourboy’s

toys

ifyoudon’tmind.”

IhandedthemsomeofthetoysIpickedoutinthebasement.

Withgratitude,Tanneraccepted

them

andpromisedtovisitusregularly.Thetoyshadgottheirnewowner,connectingusandourlateBama.Possibleversion2“Doyouhappentohaveadog?”

Iasked

tentativelyandabruptly.

‘’Wedo,”themanrepliedwithaconfusedlook,“WeadoptedPoppy--aboxerseveralyearsago.”

That

explainedalot!ItoldthemaboutPoppy’sregularvisitstomyfamily.AfterhearingwhatIsaid,theywere

kindof

uneasyandapologizedforthedog’sdisturbance,“Iamterriblysorry.Hemusthaveescapedfromtheholeinthefencethatwehaven’tfixed.Ihopehedidn’tbringanyinconveniencetoyou.”“Notatall!Actually,hewasabig

help.”

Isaid.Sensinghisconfusion,IsharedwiththemthestoriesofmybelovedBamaandthecomfortAlexbroughttous.Iadded

thatwehadbeenthrownintoaworldofdarknessforthelossofBama.However,itwastheirboxerthatbrightenedourgloomydays.Relievedandamazed,theydecidedtovisituswithboxerfrequentlyinthefollowingdays.Fromthenon,ahappyfigurebarkedandjumpedcheerfullyinourbackyard,surroundedbypilesoftoys.關(guān)于狗的描寫語言積累1.Uponhismaster’sarrival,thedog

leapttohisfeet

，snortedhappily

and

boundedforward.

主人一到，狗就跳起來，高興地哼著鼻子，蹦蹦跳跳地向前跳去。2.He

stretched,

shookhimself

and

circledseveraltimes

beforedroppingtotheground.

他伸了個(gè)懶腰，搖了晃，繞了幾圈才倒在地上。3.Thedog

wanderedoff

to

resthernosesinherpaws.

那條狗走開了，用爪子捂住鼻子。4.Dogs

takemuchpleasureinrollingandrubbingtheirnecksandbackswiththeirpaws.

那條狗走開了，把鼻子擱在她身上爪子。狗喜歡用爪子滾動(dòng)和摩擦它們的脖子和后背。5.Seeingthemeat

inthemaster’shand,thelittledog

waggeditstail

and

watchedwithhopefuleyes.

看到主人手里的肉，小狗搖著尾巴，充滿希望地看著。6.Atthesightof

astranger

approac