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高中英語復(fù)習(xí)寫作講評課Assessment&practiceofWriting高中英語復(fù)習(xí)12008年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕，一家英文報刊在其網(wǎng)站上征集奧運(yùn)會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議。假設(shè)你叫李華，是該報的一名讀者，請給該報編輯部寫一封信，談?wù)勀愕慕ㄗh和理由．內(nèi)容包括：１．向公眾開放，用于健身２．租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟(jì)效益３．開辟成旅游景點(diǎn)，吸引游客．４．………Deareditor,IamLiHua,areaderofyourpaper.………………………………2008年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕，一家英文報刊在其網(wǎng)站上征集奧運(yùn)會后2評分的四大緯度內(nèi)容語法思想框架---組織結(jié)構(gòu)要點(diǎn)全，拓展有度，有效連接詞，作文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊；流暢準(zhǔn)確，復(fù)雜語法結(jié)構(gòu)，高級詞匯，多種句型開放能引起讀者的共鳴,靈魂評分的四大緯度內(nèi)容語法思想框架---組織結(jié)構(gòu)要點(diǎn)全，拓展有度3常見錯誤:

1.單詞拼寫或用錯：GiveyousomeadviseIjustprovideyoumyownsuggests.Theycanattactvisitors.advicesuggestionattract常見錯誤:1.單詞拼寫或用錯：Giveyousom4問題:2.時態(tài)語態(tài)問題WemaygivenittothePEcompany.

WemaygiveittothePEcompany..3.主謂一致問題

Thesportstadiumsisverygreatandishighlyspokenofbytheforeigners.

Thesportstadiumsareverygreatandarehighlyspokenofbytheforeigners.4.逐字翻譯問題Thestadiumscanopentopeoplefordoexerciseuse.Thestadiumscanbeopened

topeoplefordoingexercises.問題:2.時態(tài)語態(tài)問題4.逐字翻譯問題5問題:5.詞性混淆問題Itcancreativemoney..Itcancreate/bringinmoney.Manypeoplecanusethemtostrongourbody.Manypeoplecanusethemtostrengthenourbody.6.介詞短語的運(yùn)用問題Iamwritingtomakesomeadviceforhowtomakefulluseofthesportsstadium.Iamwritingtomakesomeadviceonhowtomakefulluseofthesportsstadium.問題:5.詞性混淆問題6問題:句子結(jié)構(gòu)不完整Onlymakefulluseofthemdoesitmakesense.OnlybymakingfulluseofthemdoesitmakesenseThe29thOlympicGameswhichhostedinBeijingwereheldsuccessfully.The29thOlympicGameswhichwerehostedinBeijingwere

heldsuccessfully.問題:句子結(jié)構(gòu)不完整71.審題2.列提綱/要點(diǎn)3.連詞成句4.連句成篇5.潤色修正6.定稿寫作步驟:體裁時態(tài)結(jié)構(gòu)要求字?jǐn)?shù)內(nèi)容1.審題寫作步驟:體裁字?jǐn)?shù)8信息2信息3信息4開頭正文結(jié)尾1.審題:體裁人稱時態(tài)要求結(jié)構(gòu)字?jǐn)?shù)內(nèi)容一般現(xiàn)在時Para.1Para.2Para.3抓要點(diǎn),120個左右信息1信息5①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運(yùn)會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議.向公眾開放，用于健身總結(jié)，意愿……書信格式租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟(jì)效益開辟成旅游景點(diǎn)，吸引游客第一,三人稱信息2開頭1.審題:體裁字?jǐn)?shù)一般現(xiàn)在時Para.1抓要點(diǎn),9①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運(yùn)會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議

2.列提綱/要點(diǎn)開頭信息1①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運(yùn)會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議..Wanttowritesomeadvice/WouldliketogiveyousomeadviceContributesomesuggestionstoyou.CollectsomeadviceHowtouse/makeuseof/makethebestofthestadiums.AftertheOlympicGamesAfterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.The2008BeijingOlympic/wereover/finished/heldsuccessfullyinBeijing.①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕.2.列提綱/要點(diǎn)開頭信息1①08年10①向公眾開放，用于健身.②租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟(jì)效益.③開辟成旅游景點(diǎn)，吸引游客

2.列提綱/要點(diǎn).Useitas/beusedfor/as;takeitas;openitforPlacesofinterest/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitorsGive…to/Rent…to/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/createmoney;bringinmoney/makemoreprofitsOpen/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbodies/strengthenourbodies信息2信息3信息4向公眾開放，用于健身租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟(jì)效益開辟成旅游景點(diǎn)，吸引游客正文①向公眾開放，用于健身.2.列提綱/要點(diǎn).Useita11

2.列提綱/要點(diǎn).信息5總結(jié)，意愿……結(jié)尾Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned../frommypointofview.Iwouldappreciate…Iwouldyouwillthinkof/take…intoconsideration….2.列提綱/要點(diǎn).信息5總結(jié)，意愿……結(jié)尾Inmyop12

開頭信息1①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運(yùn)會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議..3.連詞成句①The2008BeijingOlympicGameswereover/finished.The29thOlympicGameswereheldsuccessfullyinBeijing.Beijinghostedthe29thOlympicGameswithagreatsuccess.①The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Beijingachieveditsdreamofhostingthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.

②CollectsomeadviceHowtouse/makeuseof/makethebestofthestadiums.AftertheOlympicGamesAfterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.②YouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakeuseofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.IhearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.③Wanttowritesomeadvice/WouldliketogiveyousomeadviceContributesomesuggestionstoyou.③Iwouldliketogiveyousomeadvice.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou開頭信息1①08年奧運(yùn)會剛剛落幕..3.連詞成句①The13

4.Useitas/beusedfor/as;takeitas;openitforPlacesofinterests/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitors3.Give…to/Rent…to/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/createmoney;bringinmoney/makemoreprofits信息2信息3信息4向公眾開放，用于健身租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經(jīng)濟(jì)效益開辟成旅游景點(diǎn)，吸引游客正文3.連詞成句2.Open/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbody/strengthenourbodies2.Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheir

bodies/strengthentheirbodies

3.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmore

money/makemoreprofits4.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.4.Useitas/beusedfor/as;ta14

.信息5總結(jié)，意愿……結(jié)尾Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned../frommypointofview.Iwouldappreciate…Iwouldyouwillthinkof/take…intoconsideration….Inaword…3.連詞成句Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefulluseofthestadium.Iwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration.信息5總結(jié)，意愿……結(jié)尾Inmyopinion/a154.連句成篇Para.1:

The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Para.2:Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheirbodies/strengthentheirbodies.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmoremoney/makemoreprofits.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Para.3:

Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration4.連句成篇Para.1:The29thOlympic164.連句成篇Para.1:

The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Para.1:

Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.4.連句成篇Para.1:The29thOlympic174.連句成篇Para.2:Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Para.2:Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.FirstofallFirstly,Tobeginwith,Inaddition,Besides,Moreover,What’smoreFinally,What’sworse,4.連句成篇Para.2:Thestadiumscan18使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞邏輯角度合適的過渡性詞匯⑴排序關(guān)系

⑵并列關(guān)系⑶舉例關(guān)系⑷轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系⑸因果關(guān)系⑹歸納總結(jié)⑺遞進(jìn)關(guān)系first;firstly;second;secondly;lastbutnotleastand;too;aswellas;alongwith;togetherwithforexample;forinstance;like;suchas;asto

but;however;while;though;onthecontrarybecause;since;thanksto;asaresult/consequence(of);thus;thereforeinaword;inshort;tosumup;inconclusionwhat’smore;besides;tomakemattersworse;what’sworse;worsestill;furthermore使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞邏輯角度合適的過渡性詞匯⑴排序關(guān)系194.連句成篇

Iheardyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration5.潤色修正4.連句成篇Iheardyouar20二.使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔三.巧用倒裝增強(qiáng)句子表現(xiàn)力四.嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式5.潤色修正方一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力①強(qiáng)調(diào)句②With短語復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)③定語從句④名詞性從句(主賓表同從句)⑤各種狀語從句⑥被動語態(tài)二.使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔三.巧用倒裝增強(qiáng)句子表現(xiàn)211.Manypeoplewanttovisitthestadium

.

2.Thestadiumisuseful.

Manypeoplearedyingtovisitthestadium.

Thestadiumisofgreatvalue.一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力5.潤色修正1.Manypeoplewanttovisi221.The29thOlympicGamesweresuccessfullyended.Itleftmanystadiumsunused

The29thOlympicGamesweresuccessfullyended,leavingmanystadiumsunused.二.使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔5.潤色修正1.The29thOlympicGameswere231.wecanletstadiummakesenseOnlywhenwemakefulluseofthestadium2.Thestadiumscanberentedtothephysicalcompanytocreatemoreeconomicprofits.theycanbetheplacestoappealvisitorstopayavisit.

Onlywhenwemakefulluseofthestadiumcanweletstadiummakesense.Notonlycanthestadiumsberentedtothephysicalcompanytocreatemoreeconomicprofits,butalsotheycanbetheplacestoappealvisitorstopayavisit.5.潤色修正三.巧用倒裝增強(qiáng)句子表現(xiàn)力1.wecanletstadiummakesens24WeshouldtaketheOlympicstadiumsintoconsiderationafterBeijinghostedthegamessuccessfully.

The29thOlympicGameswereendedsuccessfully.westarttalkingabouthowtousethestadiumsproperlyforourdailylives

ItistheOlympicstadiumsthatweshouldtakeintoconsiderationafterBeijinghostedthegamessuccessfully.Withthe29thOlympicGamesendedsuccessfully,westarttalkingabouthowtousethestadiumsproperlyforourdailylives.5.潤色修正四.嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式①強(qiáng)調(diào)句②With短語復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)WeshouldtaketheOlympicsta25Youcanopenthemforthepublic.Thestadiumscanbeusedtotakeexercise.

Youcanopenthestadiumswhichcanbeusedtotakeexerciseforthepublic.5.潤色修正四.嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式③定語從句④各種狀語從句我們鍛煉的越多，我們就越健康。

Themoreexerciseswetake,thehealthierwewillbecome.⑤被動語態(tài)Weshouldpaymoreattentiontothestadiums.

Moreattentionshouldbepaidtothestadiums.Youcanopenthemforthepubl26

Iheardyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration5.潤色修正Iheardyouarecoll27高考書面表達(dá)各檔次的給分范圍和要求第五檔（21-25分）完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù):準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表達(dá)了短文的內(nèi)容，要點(diǎn)無遺漏應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯有少許錯誤，但為盡可能使用較復(fù)雜表達(dá)方式所致；具備較強(qiáng)的語言應(yīng)用能力有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的。第四檔（16-20分）完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù):比較準(zhǔn)確、清楚地表達(dá)了短文的內(nèi)容應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確，少許錯誤主要是因為嘗試較復(fù)雜語言結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致應(yīng)用簡單的語句間