讀后續(xù)寫親情類-我和爸爸一起制作玩具屋講義 高三英語作文復(fù)習寫作專項

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)起內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Myfatheris

apracticalman.

Hecan'texplain

calculus(微積分）buthecantellyouhowmuch

pressureaboilerneeds.Heputhimselfthrough

nightschooltobecomeanengineer,butthatwas

onlyafterheworkedasanelectriciananda

mechanic.

Onedaywewalkedbyatoystorewindow.Sittinginthecornerwasthemostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseen.Itwasshapedlikeanupturnedlog."Oh,Daddy,"I

said."isn'titbeautiful?DoyouthinkSantaClauswillbringittome?"Dadlookedatthe$100pricetag一anexorbitant(過高的)figureinthosedays."IthinkevenSantacouldn'taffordthishouse."hejoked，hikinguphisbeltasheoftendoeswhenhe'snervous."Maybeoneday,sweetheart."

OnChristmasmorning.Iawokeearlyandraceddownstairs,Inthedim(昏暗的)light.Imadeoutsomewrappedboxesunderthetree一butnonelargeenoughtocontainmydollhouse.Dadcouldseemydisappointment.Hepulledmeontohislapandgentlytoldmehow,asaboy,hehadwantedaredwagon,buthisfathercouldn'taffordone.Hesaidhemadehisownfromwoodandoldwheelshefound."I'llmakeoneforyou."Dadpromisedme.

AndrightafterChristmas,despitealltheunfinishedprojectsathome,hestartedit.1hadthoughtitwasaneasytoytomake,buteverystepofthelongprocesswasmorecomplex(復(fù)雜的）thanIhadexpected.Nightafternight，Dadwouldcomehomefromhisjobdeadtired.yethe'dalways

findtimetoworkonthelog

houseinthedimlight.Inthedimlight,Dadwasalwaysbusycreatingmydollhouse.注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Ihesitated(猶豫),wonderingif1shouldhelpmyfather.

Inall,

ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.寫作指導(dǎo)Step1故事梗概1.看到一個玩具屋,作者很喜歡,但是價格很貴。2.父親承諾給作者制作一個玩具屋。盡管父親下班回家后很累,但仍會擠出時間來制作玩具屋。3.

續(xù)寫線發(fā)展：糾結(jié)于是否應(yīng)該幫忙——想法被看出——商量決定一起制作玩具屋——一個月后終于做成——心情非常喜悅——父親的諄諄教誨——主旨升華Step2情節(jié)推斷1.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我猶豫了,不知道我是否應(yīng)該幫助我的父親?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫父親看出作者的想法后主動和作者說讓其幫忙的場景和之后他們一起制作玩具屋的過程。2.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“總之，我們花了一個月的時間辛勤工作?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫玩具屋做成之后作者的喜悅之情和父親對作者的教誨以及作者自己的感悟。五要素分析：要素

線索詞時間thefollowingmonthafterChristmas地點

athome人物

Iandmyfather關(guān)鍵詞

patiently,effort,payoff,joy,gift,bring...tolifeStep3

【佳句句式】[好句型1].ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile.(運用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)[好句型2].Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.(運用了when引導(dǎo)的定語從句)[好句型3]Sittinginthecornerwasthemostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseen.（完全倒裝句，將要強調(diào)的表語放在了最前面。）正常句序：Themostunusualdollhouse(玩具屋)I'deverseenwasSittinginthecorner.[好句型4]"IthinkevenSantacouldn'taffordthishouse."hejoked，hikinguphisbeltasheoftendoeswhenhe'snervous.(現(xiàn)在分詞做joke的伴隨狀語）[好句型4]Ihadthoughtitwasaneasytoytomake,buteverystepofthelongprocesswasmorecomplex(復(fù)雜的）thanIhadexpected.（hadthought本以為但實際未……；hadexpected……本料想但實際上未）Step4將已確定的四要素串聯(lián),并增加細節(jié)描寫，完成讀后續(xù)寫。下水文1Ihesitated(猶豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

ButheseemedtoknowwhatIthoughtandonenightsaidtomewithasmile,“Ineedyourhelp.L.et'screatethedollhousetogether."“But,Daddy,1don'tknowhow,"saidI."Thatdoesn'tmatter.Iwillteachyou,"saidmyfather.SoeverynightwhenheworkedonthedollhouseI

wouldsitbyhissideandhewouldpatientlyandlovinglyteachmehowtomakesuchatoy.Itwasreallynoteasy,butoureffortspaidoffandwefinallymadeit.In

all.ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.

Myjoywasbeyonddescriptionatthatmoment.ThenI

heardmyfathersaying,“Icanbuildalot

ofthings,but1can'tbuildyourlife.AllIcan

doist0helpyoubuildyourown.Iwouldalwaysrememberhiswords,sothedollhousebecamethemostspecialgift

tome.Longafter1gaveupplayingdolls,Iwouldoccasionallybringitdownfromtheatticjusttoadmireitandrememberthosedayswhenweworkedtogethertobringmydreamtolife.下水文2：Ihesitated(猶豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

Butheseemedtohaveknownmythoughts.Onenight,hesmiledandsaidtome,"Ineedyourhelp.Let'smakeatoyhousetogether.""But,Dad,Idon'tknowhowtodoit,"Isaid.It'sokay.I'llteachyou,"myfathersaid.Soeverynightwhenheworksinthetoyhouse,Isitnexttohimandhepatientlyandlovinglyteachesmehowtomakesuchtoys.Thisisreallynoteasy,butoureffortshavepaidoffandwehavefinallysucceeded.In

all.ittookonemonthofhardworkbyus.Myjoyatthatmomentwasindescribable.ThenIheardmyfathersay,"Icanbuildmanythings,butIcan'tbuildyourlife.AllIcandoishelpyoubuildyourownlife."Iwillalwaysrememberhiswords,sothetoyhousebecamemymostspecialgift.Aftergivingupplayingwithdollsforalongtime,Ioccasionallytakethemofftheatticjusttoappreciatethemandrecallthedayswhenweworkedtogethertoachieveourdreams.下水文3：Ihesitated(猶豫)，wonderingifIshouldhelpmyfather.

Butheseemedtounderstandmythoughtsfrommyexpression.Onenight,hesmiledhappilyandsaidtome,"Thisisacomplextask,andIneedyourhelpandsupport.Let'sbuildatoyhousetogether.""But,Dad,Idon'tknowhowtodoit.Canyouteachmehowtodoit?"Iasked.It'sokay.I'lltellyou,youjustdowhatIsay,"myfatherreplied.Soeverynightwhenheworksinthetoyhouse,Iwillbebyhisside,andhewillpatientlyandlovinglyteachmehowtomakesuchtoysstepbystep.Thisreallyrequirespatienceandperseverance,butoureffortshavepaidoffandwehavefinallys