專題09上海高考夾敘夾議類作文（原題版）

?專題09上海高考夾敘夾議類作文_________________________________________________________________________________________考點(diǎn)精考點(diǎn)精講【考情鏈接】夾敘夾議文是一種比較常見(jiàn)的寫(xiě)作文體,以記人敘事為主,記敘人物的經(jīng)歷或事物/事件發(fā)生、發(fā)展、變化的過(guò)程。兼有總結(jié)全文，深化主題。材料常涉及社會(huì)生活現(xiàn)象、人物或自然景物。無(wú)論記人還是敘事都要通過(guò)敘述、描寫(xiě)來(lái)加以表達(dá),把人物的經(jīng)歷或行為、發(fā)生的事情/事件用一定的順序和語(yǔ)言技巧敘述出來(lái)。在敘述過(guò)程中“人以事顯,事由人生”,人和事是密不可分的。在一篇記敘文中記人、寫(xiě)景、敘事往往是交織在一起的,不能簡(jiǎn)單地分裂開(kāi)。高考作文一般都不會(huì)單純的記敘某事，而是夾敘夾議。圍繞主題開(kāi)展敘述、討論—結(jié)論段（結(jié)尾部分Concludingparagraph）對(duì)全文的總結(jié)和概括。論說(shuō)文的類型通常有：觀點(diǎn)對(duì)比型、問(wèn)題解決型、道理/觀點(diǎn)論證型、說(shuō)明利弊型等，各類型的論證方式有相異之處，每一種類型都有相對(duì)固定的論證方式及句型。值得注意的是近年試題中經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)記敘與結(jié)論相結(jié)合的敘議形式?！镜淅饰觥俊旧虾Ｊ心夏?022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期開(kāi)學(xué)考】假設(shè)你是李華，你要競(jìng)選模擬聯(lián)合國(guó)社團(tuán)主席，請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇競(jìng)選演講稿，內(nèi)容包括：1.你認(rèn)為自己具備什么條件2.如果當(dāng)選，你會(huì)為大家做什么_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Ladiesandgentlemen,I’mLiHua,I’mnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.I’msureIcandothejobwell.Tobeginwith,municatingwithothersisnotaproblemforme,whichmakesmeworkefficiently.Moreover,IusedtobethechairmanoftheStudents’Unionofmyhighschool,andIbelievesuchexperiencewillhelpalot.Thelastbutnotleast,beingfriendswithmanyexchangestudentsfromallovertheworldallowsmetoknowmoreaboutdifferentcultures.IfIbeethechairman,Iwilltrymybesttouniteeverysingleclubandholdmeaningfulactivities,whichwillenrichourschoollife.Thankyouforyourlistening!【解析】【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文是一篇應(yīng)用文。要求考生寫(xiě)一篇演講稿來(lái)競(jìng)選模擬聯(lián)合國(guó)社團(tuán)主席的職位。【詳解】1.詞匯積累幫助：help→assist首先：tobeginwith→firstofall此外：moreover→what’smore/besides最后：thelastbutnotleast→atlast/aboveall/intheend2.句式拓展簡(jiǎn)單句變復(fù)合句原句：I’mLiHua,I’mnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.拓展句：I’mLiHua,whoisnowrunningforthepositionofbeingthechairmanoftheModelUnitedNationsClub.【點(diǎn)睛】【高分句型1】Thelastbutnotleast,beingfriendswithmanyexchangestudentsfromallovertheworldallowsmetoknowmoreaboutdifferentcultures.（運(yùn)用了動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)）【高分句型2】IfIbeethechairman,Iwilltrymybesttouniteeverysingleclubandholdmeaningfulactivities,whichwillenrichourschoollife.（運(yùn)用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）【真題回顧】【2018上海高考}Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120—150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假設(shè)你是明啟的高三學(xué)生盧平。《英語(yǔ)報(bào)》向高三學(xué)生進(jìn)行征文，題目為MyTeachers。盧平也想投稿。具體要求是：1.請(qǐng)你將認(rèn)識(shí)的老師進(jìn)行分類；2.具體描述每一類老師的特征。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考答案】MyteachersOnthepathofpursuingknowledge,numerousteacherswehaveencounteredmayhavealifelongimpactonus,andevencontributetoshapingwhoweare.Lookingbackonmyschoollife,myteacherscanbegenerallyclassifiedintothreetypes:dedicated,approachable,andirresponsible.Dedicatedteachersaremostpopularamongstudentsnotonlybecauseoftheiroutstandingprofessionalknowledgebutalsobecauseoftheirdevotiontothecareerofteaching.Youcanexpectmorethanclasstimeofthem.Theymayhaveaface-to-facemunicationwithyouafterclasstoenlightenyouwithatrickymathproblem.Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.Needlesstosay,mostteachersfallintothiscategory.Thesecondtypeofteachermayseemlessqualifiedintermsoftheirteachingskills,buttheycanalsoeasilywinstudentheartsbecausetheycanbeentrustedwithourdeepestsecrets.Childhoodandadolescenceareawkwardperiodswhenwestruggletoexploreourownwayintheworld.Ourpeersmaybejustasinexperiencedasuswhileourparentsseeminglyliveonanotherplanet.Soafriendlyadultlikeapproachableteacherscanbealifesaver.Wetendtobecarefulwhenlabelingateacherirresponsible,buttheydoexist.Someofthemmayhavetemperissue,whileothersmaydisregardtheirownjob.Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.

Inthefuture,asmylearningcontinues,Iwillhaveopportunitiestomeetmoreteachers.Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.【分析】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于命題作文，要求考生以MyTeachers為題，描述老師的種類并寫(xiě)一寫(xiě)各種老師的特征。【詳解】第一步：審題體裁：命題作文時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)。結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法總分法指把主題句作為總說(shuō)，把支持句作為分說(shuō)，并以這種方式安排所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容。要求：1.介紹老師的種類；2.描述每一種老師的特征。第二步:列提綱（重點(diǎn)詞組）onthepathof;havealifelongimpacton;contributeto;lookbackon;beclassifiedinto;becauseof;morethan;enlightenyouwithatrickymathproblem;keepyoupany;needlesstosay;fallinto;intermsof;tendto;belinkedto;academicperformance;passionforknowledge第三步：連詞成句1.Onthepathofpursuingknowledge,numerousteacherswehaveencounteredmayhavealifelongimpactonus,andevencontributetoshapingwhoweare.2.Lookingbackonmyschoollife,myteacherscanbegenerallyclassifiedintothreetypes:dedicated,approachable,andirresponsible.3.Dedicatedteachersaremostpopularamongstudentsnotonlybecauseoftheiroutstandingprofessionalknowledgebutalsobecauseoftheirdevotiontothecareerofteaching.4.Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.5.Thesecondtypeofteachermayseemlessqualifiedintermsoftheirteachingskills,buttheycanalsoeasilywinstudentheartsbecausetheycanbeentrustedwithourdeepestsecrets.6.Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.

7.Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）1.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：and;notonly…butalso…2.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：but,Whereas,Some…,whileothers…3.表因果關(guān)系：Because,So連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰，【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Theymaysacrificetheirfamilytimetokeepyoupanysothatyoucansmoothyouremotionalproblemcausedbyyourownfamily.（非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作后置定語(yǔ)和目的狀語(yǔ)和結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2]Oneofmyteachersfitthedescription,whowasdirectlylinkedtomypooracademicperformanceduringhisstint.（非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型3]Whereas,neverwillIforgettheassistancefrommypreviousteachersortheirpassionforknowledge.（不完全倒裝句）_____優(yōu)選操練優(yōu)選操練01【上海市控江2022-2023學(xué)年學(xué)高三上學(xué)期9月月考】假設(shè)你是李紅，你的即將迎來(lái)100周年的校慶，校長(zhǎng)就如何舉行校慶活動(dòng)向在校學(xué)生廣泛征求建議。請(qǐng)你用李紅的名義給校長(zhǎng)寫(xiě)一封信，就校慶活動(dòng)提出你的建議，并陳述理由。信的內(nèi)容需包括：1.校慶的形式。內(nèi)容和參加對(duì)象2.你的理由_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________02【上海市吳淞2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期10月調(diào)研】Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120—150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假設(shè)你是明啟學(xué)生王磊，你校下個(gè)月將舉行中外學(xué)生交流活動(dòng)，現(xiàn)向?qū)W生征求活動(dòng)方案。你主動(dòng)向校長(zhǎng)寫(xiě)信，表達(dá)你的想法。你的信包括以下內(nèi)容：1.活動(dòng)的主題；2.你設(shè)計(jì)的1-2個(gè)活動(dòng)的具體內(nèi)容；3.你設(shè)計(jì)該活動(dòng)的理由。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________好題必好題必測(cè)（2021·上海楊浦·一模）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.紅星為了創(chuàng)建文明校園，促進(jìn)和諧社會(huì)，舉辦題為“ConflictManagement”的征文比賽。假定你是李林，請(qǐng)給校報(bào)投稿，你的文章需包括：1）你親身經(jīng)歷的最嚴(yán)重或令你最難忘的沖突；2）你對(duì)處理沖突的反思或從到的經(jīng)驗(yàn)教訓(xùn)。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【上海市復(fù)旦大學(xué)附屬2022-2023學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期11月教學(xué)質(zhì)量檢測(cè)英語(yǔ)試題】假如你是明啟高三學(xué)生李明，你校正在為即將于高一高二年級(jí)舉辦的英語(yǔ)辯論賽（EnglishDebateContest）和英語(yǔ)電影配音賽（EnglishFilmDubbingContest）在高三學(xué)生中招聘學(xué)生評(píng)委（judge），你對(duì)此很有興趣。請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一封電子郵件給相關(guān)負(fù)責(zé)老師，申請(qǐng)擔(dān)任其中一項(xiàng)比賽的評(píng)委。郵件內(nèi)容需包括：1.你希望擔(dān)任該比賽評(píng)委的意愿；2.簡(jiǎn)單的相關(guān)自我介紹；3.你適合擔(dān)任該比賽評(píng)委的理由。________________________________________________________________________