讀后續(xù)寫如何進(jìn)行動(dòng)作描寫導(dǎo)學(xué)案高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫：如何進(jìn)行動(dòng)作描寫讀后續(xù)寫的寫作過(guò)程中，成功的動(dòng)作描寫，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物心理活動(dòng)的進(jìn)程，可以表現(xiàn)人物的性格特征。一、精選動(dòng)詞，精準(zhǔn)描述在描寫動(dòng)作時(shí)，要準(zhǔn)確抓住人物在特定情景中行動(dòng)的特點(diǎn)，所選動(dòng)作要體現(xiàn)人物特征，比如年齡、性格、性別、身份、環(huán)境、情景等。BodyWordbank(verb.)mouthShout,cry,yell,scream,exclaim,whisper,murmur,mumble,mutter,sob,stammer,stutter,howl,growl,snarl/smile,laugh,grin,

beam,smirk,giggle,chuckle/emphasize/stress/tell/add/explain/admit/reply=respond/praise/plain/fort...footrush,dash,charge,jog,trot,gallop,bolt/makeone'swayto/wander/

travel/

march/staggerjump/springtoone'sfeet/standstill/

trip/drag/crawl...hand/armhit,beat,tap,pat/drag,draw,pull/catch,grab,grasp,seize/cast,throw/lift,raise,carry,take/hug,embrace/reach(out)...試比較：1.

Werandowntotheshoreintimetoseeanenormousanimaloppositeus

jumping

outofthewaterandthen

dropping

downagain.2.

Werandowntotheshoreintimetoseeanenormousanimaloppositeus

throwing

itselfoutofthewaterandthen

crashing

downagain.

（B7U3UndertheSea)句2更能讓讀者感受到OldTom的重量和動(dòng)作的力量。場(chǎng)景小練：Henry

jumpedinto

theriverand

saved

Robert.

Hearingthescreams,Henry

______________

totheriverside,

____________

hisclothesand___________

thewaterwithouthesitation.He

________

Robertjustashewassinkingthelasttime.Bygreateffort,andwithmuchdangertohimself,he

________

Roberttotheshore.二、結(jié)合修飾成分讓動(dòng)詞更具體生動(dòng)

（主要為副詞和介詞短語(yǔ)）adverbs

quietly/shyly/slightly/softly/gently/attentively/mildly/fortably/modestly/tightly/cheerfully/hopefully/helplessly/desperately/fiercely/violently/swiftly/firmly/gratefully/swiftly...in+n.inconfusion/admiration/excitement/shock/sorrow/inalow/

weak/

sweet)voice...with+情感n.withdelight/pleasure/excitement/satisfaction/anger/fear...with+身體部位withitssharpeyes/hershakyhand/herpalelips..with+n./pron.+賓補(bǔ)withhishandstrembling...牛刀小試：1.'Willtherebeanyfoodleftover?'heasked

.（滿懷希望地）2.Hewalked

（迅速地）towardshomedownthedarkstreet.3.Theywaitedthere

（不安地）foralongtime.4.Hefoughttheillness

（勇敢地）

anddetermination.5.Theywatchedtheexperiment

（非常感興趣地）.6.

場(chǎng)景小練：(浙江2018.6)Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishouted

____________________________（眼睛因極度興奮而閃閃發(fā)光）.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thus

(立刻)stimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatit

(不動(dòng)地）.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,

（意外地）receivinghispromptagreement.

（完全地）

forgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwas

（很快地）disappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.三、構(gòu)造動(dòng)作鏈：動(dòng)作Aand

動(dòng)作B，動(dòng)作A,

動(dòng)作Band

動(dòng)作C人物的動(dòng)作或簡(jiǎn)單，或復(fù)雜，都不是一下子就能完成的，細(xì)心觀察都能捕捉到最能體現(xiàn)人物特征的慢鏡頭。因此，在描寫動(dòng)作時(shí)，細(xì)化動(dòng)作，把動(dòng)作過(guò)程分解成一連串細(xì)微的動(dòng)作，形成動(dòng)作鏈，寫出動(dòng)作的連貫性，這樣可以使描寫具有畫面感，使人物更立體。高考真題再現(xiàn)：1.(浙江2016)

Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.她吃了一些漿果，然后沿著小溪走著，希望能找到一個(gè)合適的地方來(lái)引導(dǎo)直升機(jī)。2.(浙江2016)InnotimedidJanerushtotherock,climbontoitandwaverheryellowblousemadly.

簡(jiǎn)并沒(méi)有沖到巖石上，瘋狂地?fù)u晃著她的黃色襯衫。3.(浙江2017.6)Seeingthecardisappear,MacandhisfriendsgotonthebicyclesandcontinuedheadingforAlaska.看到汽車消失了，麥克和他的朋友們騎上了自行車，繼續(xù)前往阿拉斯加。4.(浙江2017.6)Theyjumpedofftheirbicycles,tookouttheknivestheyhadtakenwithandapproachedthewolfinchbyinch.

他們跳下自行車，拿出隨身攜帶的刀，一寸一寸地走近狼。5.(浙江2017.6)Soonitranoffintotheforestanddisappearedinthedistance.很快，它跑進(jìn)了森林里，消失在遠(yuǎn)處。牛刀小試：1.(浙江2017.11)CallingoutDavidandme,she

，

and

.

她喊著大衛(wèi)和我，下車，笑著跳。2.(浙江2017.11)We

________

bigriversandvastplains,

__________

highmountainsand

______________

deepvalleys.我們穿過(guò)大河和廣闊的平原，爬上高山，俯瞰著深深的山谷。3.（浙江）MydadandI

ournewcowboyhats,

ourhorses,and

___________slowlytowardsthemountains.

我和爸爸戴上新的牛仔帽，騎上馬，慢慢地向群山走去。4.（浙江）He

,

,

horserein

andledtheway.他保持沉默，非常仔細(xì)地聽著，抓住我的韁繩，領(lǐng)著路走了下去。5.

(浙江原文)

He

,

,and

,tryingnottolethisemotions

getthebetterofhim.

他站起來(lái)，擁抱著父母，微笑著，試圖不讓自己的情緒（情緒）戰(zhàn)勝他。6.

(浙江原文)

Theboy

thelastbagontohisshoulder,and

.男孩把最后一個(gè)包舉到肩上，露出了燦爛的微笑。7.

(浙江2020.7)

We

,

,and

blankshotgunshellsintotheair.我們對(duì)著熊大喊大叫，用力打花盆，然后向空中發(fā)射空彈。8.

I

herthepepperspray,

fromanearbytreeand

inmyhand.

我把胡椒噴霧給了她，折斷了附近一棵樹上的一根樹枝，緊緊地握在手里。9.

(浙江2021.1)Dad

,

,andthen

.爸爸沖了進(jìn)來(lái)，靜靜地站著，然后突然大笑起來(lái)。四、構(gòu)造動(dòng)作面：面部+

肢體+

語(yǔ)言/

心理1.他面帶殺氣，振臂一揮，大喊：“放箭”Withamurderouslookonhisface,hewavedhisarmsandshouted,"Arrow!"

（面部+肢體+語(yǔ)言）2.他們坐在空曠的路邊，仰望天空，感受著這難得的寧?kù)o。

Seatedbesidetheemptyroadside,theylookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeacefulmoment.

（肢體+面部+心理）牛刀小試：1.____________,he

___________mewithhisfrighteningeyes,

_______,“You’resuchanidiot.”他怒火中燒，用他那可怕的眼睛瞪著我，喊道:“你真是個(gè)白癡?！?.(2022全國(guó)卷1）Hearingmywords,David

__________

withtearsspillingoutofhiseyesand

__________

hehadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecrosscountryrun.聽了我的話，大衛(wèi)顫抖著轉(zhuǎn)過(guò)身來(lái)對(duì)我說(shuō)，他已經(jīng)下定決心要完成越野跑。3._____________

,Lucy

___________,whispering,“Ivolunteer.”被老師的話鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說(shuō)，“我來(lái)。”4._____________,Mikestrokemyhair,

_______,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI’veeverseen.”邁克直視著我的眼睛，撫摸著我的頭發(fā)，低聲說(shuō):“你是我見過(guò)的最漂亮的女孩?！?/p>

1.

形容詞、分詞作狀語(yǔ)

2.

定語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句五、恰當(dāng)使用高級(jí)語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)

3.獨(dú)立主格（名詞/代詞

+doing/done/todo/n./adj./adv./介短

4.With復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)讀后續(xù)寫常用句型：1.doing,

謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞或

謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞,doing

Lookingupatthefarmer,theboysaid,“Thankyou.”

Seeingthewolflyingontheground,theyinstantlyrealizedwhathadhappened.

Shestoodthereshivering/tremblingwithcold.2.AandB,Cing

或

A，BingandCing

或

Aing，

B，CingThestudentscamein,talkingandlaughing.Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”3.Havingdone…,

主句Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthatthetickethadbeensoldout.=Afterhehadqueuedforfor3hours,hewastoldthatthetickethadbeensoldout.4.done,

謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞Deeplymovedbythestory,thechildrenbegantocry.5.done,

謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，doingEncouragedbytheteacher,Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“Iwanttohaveatry.”6.

形容詞作狀語(yǔ)Thegirlstoodthere,staringatthefood,coldandhungry.Theysatonthebeach,enjoyingthesunshine,relaxedandhappy.7.

定語(yǔ)從句

Theyoungestkidwantedtogetapresent,buthewasrefusedbyhismother,whichmadehimcry.8.

狀語(yǔ)從句Themomentshesawhishusband,Janerushedtohimandhuggedhimtightly.Whenthestudentsheardthattheygotthefirstprizeinthegymnasticspetition,theycheeredandjumpedwithjoy.9.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)Jennywalkedslowlytothefront,withherlegs

trembling

andherheart

beatingfast.Heturnedaround,withtearsrolling/streaming

downhischeeks.Thegirlstoodthere,shivering/tremblingwithcold,withdirtonherfaceandhair.實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練：1.場(chǎng)景小練：Kevinwasashortdistancerunnerandaftermanyyearsofhardtrainingwonthefirstprizeinthenationalsportsmeeting.

請(qǐng)?jiān)O(shè)計(jì)一個(gè)情節(jié)，詳細(xì)描述他在獲勝后的動(dòng)作，重點(diǎn)突出他激動(dòng)的心情。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.2020年7月浙江卷閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbearslikeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthoughhejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇)，Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes，butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫)，thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.

續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:_____________________________________________________________________________________