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TipsforcontinuationwritingSomegeneralconceptsWhatmakesagoodstory?Writingagoodarticleisjustliketobeagoodman:Youshouldhaveanoblesoul,astrongbodyandsuitableclothes.Threeprinciplestoevaluateacontinuationwriting
評(píng)估1.Fromtheplots2.Fromthedetails合情合理(真善美、積極向上)生動(dòng)具體/跌宕起伏+合乎邏輯+文風(fēng)一致3.Fromtheexpressions豐富準(zhǔn)確的表達(dá)三原則:正能量,一致性,曲折性
Step1Step2Step3Step4Step5研讀文本,尋找沖突確定主題,圍繞核心揣測(cè)首句,預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)關(guān)注伏筆,高度融合解決沖突,升華主題Stepsforcontinuingyourstory讀后續(xù)寫高分要素1.眼前一亮的書寫卷面2.情節(jié)合理,銜接過(guò)渡自然,3.內(nèi)容可讀性強(qiáng),創(chuàng)造性、邏輯性、豐富性、合理性4.生動(dòng)的動(dòng)作和貼切的心理描寫+環(huán)境襯托+少許對(duì)話5.豐富具體生動(dòng)高級(jí)的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)6.積極和有意義的結(jié)尾(解決沖突)Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?題材題材Skill1:Show,don’ttell1.動(dòng)作描寫動(dòng)作鏈:使用一連串動(dòng)作讓畫面動(dòng)起來(lái)Hedied/isdead/passedaway.Helaystillonthegroundwithoutabreath,hisheartnotbeatinganymore.動(dòng)作描寫–動(dòng)作鏈題材題材例1:①Fortunately,hethrewmeabranchandpulledmeout.②Helayonhisstomach,pushedthebranchbeforehimandwoundhiswaytowardsme.Igrabbledthebranchwithcareandwasultimatelydraggedoutoftheicewater.Action1Action2Skill1:并列動(dòng)作-并列謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞表示(動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)要一致)Action3Action4Action5媽媽抱著孩子.形成動(dòng)作鏈:沖向前蹲下來(lái)一把抱住Mumdashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredthekidintoherarms.
CreateanactionchainSub.+V1,V2and(then)V3Mumhuggedthekidtightly.Mumgavethekida(tight)hug.
她擁抱了Betty.(失散多年的老朋友)Shedashedforward,gatheredBettyintoherarmsand
burstintotears.沖上去--抱住她--流下眼淚--dashforwardhug/gatherherintoherarmsburstintotears上車?getintothecargetonthebusShestoppedacar,gotintoitand
toldthedriverherdestination.Skill1:Createanactionchain:Sub.+V1,V2and
V3“我去救公主”我要帶上最好的劍翻過(guò)最高的山穿過(guò)最深的樹林把公主帶回來(lái)動(dòng)作少怎么辦?我?guī)献詈玫膭Ψ^(guò)最高的山闖入最深的森林把公主帶回
Iclimbedoverthehighestmountain,foundmywayintothedeepforestandbroughtbacktheprincess.
Carryingthebestsword,Iwentintothedeepforestandbroughttheprincessback.Iclimbedoverthehighestmountainandfoundmywayintothedenseforest,bringingbacktheprincess.Afterclimbingoverthehighestmountain,Ifoundmywayintothedenseforesttobringbacktheprincess.流暢三連動(dòng)同時(shí)發(fā)生有先有后,有因有果Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookingintotheskyandfeelingthepreciouspeaceinherinnermind.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedintotheskyand
feltthepreciouspeaceininherinnermind.Standingonthetopofthemountain,shelookedintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeaceinherinnermind.Practicemakesperfect心理描寫:喜怒形于色----Heishappy.Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.facebodyvoiceSkill2:從面部/肢體和聲音三個(gè)方面體現(xiàn)人物的喜怒哀樂(lè).v.咯咯地笑v.長(zhǎng)聲尖叫rippleover(tospreadthroughapersonlikeawave)
flood=overwhelm[??v??welm]wellup情感涌動(dòng)=surgeup突然迸發(fā)或激增=boilupcomeinwavesbrimover充滿/overflow/bubblewith(feelings)Herheart_______________________________________happiness.Awaveofhappiness_________________________________________.wasbrimmingover/overflowing/bubblingwithflooded/rippledover/overwhelmedme.welledup/surgedup/boiledup/cameinwaves.sbHewasveryhappy.他喜上眉梢。無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)Differentemotionsseize,grasp,grip(holdtightly),takeholdof,tear...intopiecesjealousy,fear,curiositypanic,anxiety,anger,bitternessdoubts,joy,
...Anxiety_________________________________
seized/grasped/gripped/tookholdofher.
toreherintopieces.Awildjoy
(negativeemotion)tookholdofher.(positiveemotion)Shewasveryhappy.Shewasverynervous.
TheInterplaybetweenInnerthoughts
andOutwardExpressionsSkill3:續(xù)寫中的內(nèi)外穿插法外在表象:陳述、動(dòng)作、對(duì)話、表情、環(huán)境、五感、外貌等內(nèi)心世界:心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫等相互作用交替運(yùn)用他默默地站在那里,感激的淚水在眼眶打轉(zhuǎn)。Hestoodtheredumbly,tearsofgratitude
wellingupinhiseyes.Withtearsofgratitude
wellingupinhiseyes,hestoodtheredumbly.動(dòng)作描寫心理+表情描寫情境:JohnjustbrokeupwithSarahduringadinnerdateinarestaurant.請(qǐng)描寫Sarah走出餐館的一幕。(寫出她的傷心)
JohnjustbrokeupwithSarahduringadinnerdateinarestaurant.Sarahcouldn’tholdbackhertearsasshesteppedoutontothesidewalk.Fragmentsoftheirsweetpastkeptflashinginhermind.Howcouldsheletgoofthese?Shefeltasifthewholeworldhadcomecrashingdownaroundher.“Ithurts.Itreallyhurts.”Shesobbed.
內(nèi)外描寫的交織陳述動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫對(duì)話/獨(dú)白描寫表情描寫思考:紫句插在紅綠之間會(huì)更好嗎?Thewordsechoedinhermind,refusingtosinkin."We'regettingadivorce."Herparentshaddroppedthebombshelljustmomentsago,andtheteenagegirlwasstrugglingtoprocessthenews.Shesatonherbed,______________________________________________.Shefeltlost,helpless,andalone.Astheminutestickedby,thegirl'smindracedwithquestions,doubts,andfears.Wouldtheystillloveherthesameway?Whowouldshelivewith?Wouldanythingeverbethesameagain?Withaheavyheart,sheburiedherfaceinherpillow,wishingshecouldescapethepainandconfusionthathadtakenoverherlife.staringblanklyatthewall,astearssliddownherface(表情描寫)
Decodehowtheauthorconstructedthegirl’semotion.心理活動(dòng)+對(duì)話陳述感受描寫環(huán)境描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)動(dòng)作描寫尋找單句中內(nèi)外描寫的交叉手段(內(nèi))心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫(外)陳述、環(huán)境、五感、表情、動(dòng)作、外貌描寫Thesunbeatdownmercilesslyontheyoungcoupleastheytrudgedthroughtheendlessexpanseofsand.Theirthroatswereparched,andtheirlipscrackedfromtherelentlessheat.Theyhadbeenwanderinginthedesertforhours,withnoideawhichwaytoturn.Panicstartedtosetin,__________________________________.Theyoungmantookhisgirlfriend'shand,tryingtocomfortherastheystumbledforward.Witheverystep,theycouldfeeltheirbodiesweakening,theirhopefading.
Justwhentheythoughtitwasover,thecouplespottedasmallclusteroftreesinthedistance.Summoningalltheirstrength,theypushedforwardtowardstheoasis,prayingforamiracle.Astheydrewcloser,theycouldseeatrickleofwaterseepingfromtheground,andtheirheartsleapedwithjoy.Theycollapsedbesidethespring,drinkingthelife-givingwaterwithtearsofgratitudeintheireyes.Theyknewtheywereluckytobealiveandvowedtonevertakethegiftoflifeforgrantedagain.astheyrealizedtheymightnotmakeitoutalive(動(dòng)作描寫+表情描寫)
技巧識(shí)別和訓(xùn)練:環(huán)境+動(dòng)作描寫五感描寫陳述心理描寫動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)陳述動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)環(huán)境/陳述感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫表情描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫尋找單句中內(nèi)外描寫的交叉手段(內(nèi))心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫(外)陳述、環(huán)境、五感、表情、動(dòng)作、外貌描寫請(qǐng)用內(nèi)外穿插法描寫我上臺(tái)彈鋼琴時(shí)的緊張及戰(zhàn)勝緊張的過(guò)程。Everynerveinmybodystretchingtoabreakingpoint,Ifinallymadefirmstepstothepianobench.Withadeepbreath,Iarrangedmyfingersonthekeyscautiouslyandbegantoplay.Tomygreatrelief,thefirstnotewaslikeadropofwaterdrippingintoabarrenland(切換描寫對(duì)象),instantlydrivingawaymyawkwardnessandnervousness.Followingthefirstnote,thebeautifulmelodyflewoutnaturallywiththedanceofmyfingers.(擬人)
Igrewmoreandmoreconfident,smilingwitheyesclosed,andentirelyimmersedmyselfintheshow.感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫動(dòng)作描寫感受描寫感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫感受描寫Tip:注意兩個(gè)切換:描寫對(duì)象的切換&內(nèi)外描寫的切換Writingtime第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Charliewasalittleboyoften.Hewassuchagoodboythateveryonelovedhimalot.Duetohisfather’sjob,hisfamilyshiftedtoanewcity,wherehewasadmittedintoanewschool.AsCharliewasagoodboy,mostofhisnewclassmatesbecamehisgoodfriendssoon.TheteachersalsopraisedCharlieforhisintelligenceandgoodbehavior.ButtherewasoneboyintheclasswhodidnotlikeCharlieatall!HisnamewasBillandhewasaverynaughtyboy,sonoonelikedhimatall.HefoundthatCharliewasaquietboy,sohestartedmakingtroubleforhisnewclassmate.ButCharliestillkeptquietanddidnotcomplaintotheclassteacher.WhenCharlie’sparentslearnedaboutBill,theywantedtogotoschoolandcomplainaboutthisnaughtyboy’sbehavior.ButCharliestoppedthemandsaid,“Mom,Dad,pleasedonotworry.Everythingwillbeallright.”Dayswentbyandthetimecamefortheannualsportsmeetingattheschool.Charliewasalsogoodatsportsandhewasparticipatinginanumberofevents.Billwasparticipatinginthesackrace(套袋跑),thoughhecouldnotrunveryfastduetohisfatbody.WhenBillsawthatCharliewonfirstprizeinthe100-meterrace,hefeltveryjealous(妒忌的)anddecidedthathewouldnotletithappeninthesackrace.Asplanned,BilltriedtopushCharliewhilejumpingonthetrackduringthesackrace.Buthelosthisbalanceandfelldown!Hislegwasbadlyinjuredandhecouldnotevenstandupbyhimself.Butashewasunpopularamonghisfriends,nooneturneduptohelphim!注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Charlienoticedwhathadhappened.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________CharlietookBilltotheschooldoctor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Charliewasalittleboyoften.Hewassuchagoodboythateveryonelovedhimalot.Duetohisfather’sjob,hisfamilyshiftedtoanewcity,wherehewasadmittedintoanewschool.AsCharliewasagoodboy,mostofhisnewclassmatesbecamehisgoodfriendssoon.TheteachersalsopraisedCharlieforhisintelligenceandgoodbehavior.ButtherewasoneboyintheclasswhodidnotlikeCharlieatall!HisnamewasBillandhewasaverynaughtyboy,sonoonelikedhimatall.HefoundthatCharliewasaquietboy,sohestartedmakingtroubleforhisnewclassmate.ButCharliestillkeptquietanddidnotcomplaintotheclassteacher.WhenCharlie’sparentslearnedaboutBill,theywantedtogotoschoolandcomplainaboutthisnaughtyboy’sbehavior.ButCharliestoppedthemandsaid,“Mom,Dad,pleasedonotworry.Everythingwillbeallright.”Dayswentbyandthetimecamefortheannualsportsmeetingattheschool.Charliewasalsogoodatsportsandhewasparticipatinginanumberofevents.Billwasparticipatinginthesackrace(套袋跑),thoughhecouldnotrunveryfastduetohisfatbody.WhenBillsawthatCharliewonfirstprizeinthe100-meterrace,hefeltveryjealous(妒忌的)anddecidedthathewouldnotletithappeninthesackrace.Asplanned,BilltriedtopushCharliewhilejumpingonthetrackduringthesackrace.Buthelosthisbalanceandfelldown!Hislegwasbadlyinjuredandhecouldnotevenstandupbyhimself.Butashewasunpopularamonghisfriends,nooneturneduptohelphim!注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Charlienoticedwhathadhappened.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________CharlietookBilltotheschooldoctor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【讀后續(xù)寫解析】【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了Charlie因?yàn)榘峒疫M(jìn)入一個(gè)新學(xué)校,因?yàn)樗郧啥?、友好聰明,大家都很喜歡他。但是有一個(gè)名叫Bill的調(diào)皮男孩子不喜歡他,甚至因?yàn)镃harlie跑步比賽拿第一名而嫉妒他。并計(jì)劃在套袋跑比賽中使壞推倒Charlie。沒(méi)想到的是,Charlie沒(méi)摔倒,Bill自己卻摔倒了。Charlie本來(lái)即將贏得第一名,但是他為了去幫Bill放棄了比賽。Bill因此被打動(dòng),不再使壞,還立志成為Charlie一樣優(yōu)秀的孩子。他們倆也成為好朋友。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫:①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Charlie注意到發(fā)生了什么?!笨芍?,第一段可描寫Charlie注意到 Bill摔倒后,放棄比賽拿獎(jiǎng),前去幫忙。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Charlie把Bill送到了校醫(yī)那兒?!笨芍?,第二段可描寫Charlie如何
把Bill送到醫(yī)生那里,然后Bill因此而被改變。2.續(xù)寫線索:Charlie搬家進(jìn)入新學(xué)?!煌瑢W(xué)Bill欺負(fù)——Charlie比賽獲獎(jiǎng),Bill嫉妒,計(jì)劃使壞——Bill摔倒,Charlie棄賽幫忙——Bill就醫(yī)——Bill改變,二人成為好朋友
Charlienoticedwhathadhappened.
Atthatmoment,hewasfaraheadoftheotherracersandwasclosetowinningtherace.However,themomenthesawBillgotinjuredandwasstrugglingtogetup,heabandonedtheraceandturnedbacktohelphim.ThelittleboyhadtomakeagreatefforttopullBillup,ashewasmuchlargerinsize.Asaresult,Charlielosttherace,which
madehisclassmatesalittledisappointed.
CharlietookBilltotheschooldoctor.Atthedoctor’s,Billwascarefullycheckedand
wasgivensometreatment.“Youlostthissackraceonlybecauseofme!”saidBill,aftercomingoutofthedoctor’s.“Mymomtellsmethathelpingafriendismoreimportantthanwinningarace,”answeredCharlie.Deeplytouchedbyhisreply,BillpromisedtobeagoodboylikeCharlie.Afterthat,theybecamegoodfriendsandeverybodywasquitesurprisedatBill’sbigchange.Charlienoticedwhathadhappened.HesawBillfalldownonthetrack,clutching(因痛苦或害怕)抱緊、緊握hisinjuredleg.CharlieknewthateventhoughBillhadbeenmeantohim,hecouldn'tignoresomeoneinpain.Withouthesitation,CharlieranovertohelpBillupandsupportedhimtothesideoftheracetrack.Despitethepain,BillwassurprisedbyCharlie'skindnessandwasgreatlygratefulforhistimelyhelp.
CharlietookBilltotheschooldoctor.ThedoctorexaminedBill'slegandconfirmedthatitwasasprain.HeinstructedBilltorestandgavehimsomemedicinetoreducetheswelling.Whilewaitingforhisparentstopickhimup,CharliestayedbyBill'sside,chattingwithhimandmakingsurehewasokay.Billwasamaze
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