虛擬語氣在寫作中的提分技巧-作文練習(xí)評講

2.ShouldIbegiven

theopportunitiestotraveltothepast,IwouldliketogobacktoQingDynastyofearly20thcenturywhenChinawasinadisaster.

WereIbackinthelateQingDynasty,Iwould

makeeveryendeavortorescueChinafromtheforeigninvadersandpreventitfrombeingbullied

withoutresistance.Firstly,

Iwouldteach

mymoderntheoryandknowledgetothegovernors,instructingthemtofightagainsttheenemiesandconstructpowerfularmies.Secondly,allthecitizenswouldbecalledontounitetogetherandresistothercountries’invasionbravely.What’smore,joiningsomeanti-invaderspartieswouldalsobemychoice.第一頁第二頁，共27頁。亮點句型寫作指導(dǎo)除了虛擬語氣外，有許多亮點句型可以應(yīng)用到寫作中，增分添彩。第二頁第三頁，共27頁。比喻AistoBwhatCistoD.Likethesunshine,kindnesscanhelpthoseintrouble.Kindnessislikethelighthouse,whichcandirectthewayforthosewhoareindimsituation.第三頁第四頁，共27頁。排比IfIcould

gobacktothepastanddotheabovementionedthings,thelastthingmygrandparememberedwouldnotbe

theindifferenceandthebackofhisbelovedgrandson.

IfIcouldtravelbackthroughtime,thelastmemorybetweenhimandmewouldnotbehisclosedeyesandthedeadlookofhalf-unconscioussuffering.Thennow,Iwouldnothavetolivewiththisunbearableregretandpainfortherestofmylife.IfonlyIcould!

第四頁第五頁，共27頁。倒裝（贏在寫作P37-38）Simpleasthestoryis,Heregoesthesayingthat___.Onlywhen_____canwe___.Onlyinthisway,canweOnlybydoing-,canwe____.Onlyafterdoingsth,canweOnthewestoftheschoolliesapond,wheremanyfishareswimming.Undernocircumstanceshouldwe-類似的用法：Never/Bynomeans/onnoaccount/innoway/atnotimeshouldI.Hardly/scarcelyhadIgotintotheroomwhenitbegantorain.(nosooner，than)第五頁第六頁，共27頁。

Haditnotbeenforherstickingtobeingontime,shewouldn’thaveearnedherselfawell-paidjobandmoreimportantlybuiltupanimageofreliabilityandintegrity.倒裝

ShouldIbegiven

theopportunitiestotraveltothepast,IwouldliketogobacktoQingDynastyofearly20thcenturywhenChinawasinadisaster.

WereIbackinthelateQingDynasty,Iwouldmake

everyendeavortorescueChinafromtheforeigninvadersandpreventitfrombeingbulliedwithoutresistance.第六頁第七頁，共27頁。亮點寫作的注意事項1.過多的亮點，顯得堆砌對策：亮點分布，盡量首句2.亮點單一，例如全段排比或比喻對策：最好總—排比---總的結(jié)構(gòu)。照顧段落的完整性。3.華而不實，不重視內(nèi)容，徒有框架沒有內(nèi)容對策：先想內(nèi)容，再想修辭手法4.過多注重運用亮點，沒有注意謀篇，顧此失彼對策：謀好篇，定好每點行數(shù)，才能下筆第七頁第八頁，共27頁。亮點句型寫作訓(xùn)練練習(xí)：1.說明挫折的意義2.你怎樣看待老師對學(xué)生的影響。3.說說你對母愛的理解4.談?wù)剾Q心對人的影響第八頁第九頁，共27頁。使用虛擬語氣寫作的注意事項：1.確定到底要不要“虛”？2.確定到底使用哪個時態(tài)的“虛”？3.所謂“一虛到底”，其實是指在該假設(shè)情境中的虛擬的時態(tài)的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虛擬！一切要看情況進行選用。第九頁第十頁，共27頁。說說挫折的意義1.Hardandpainfulasfrustrationis,itisofsignificanceinourlife.Astheoldsayinggoes,“stormmakestreestakedeeperroots”,withoutfrustration,nevercouldwegrowupasastrong-willedperson.Werewesurroundedby

over-praiseandimmersedintheprideandhappiness,frustrationwouldbeatimelyalarm,urgingusnottostopattheso-calledpeakandcontinueyourpaceofpursuit.Wereweconfrontedwithobstacles,frustrationcouldbeaphilosopher‘sstone（魔法石）,withwhichwecouldtransformthetemporarysetbackstogreatopportunitiestobecomestrongerInaword,lifeisnotonlyabouthowtolivethroughthestormbutalso

howtodanceintherain.第十頁第十一頁，共27頁。說說挫折的意義2.Nevercanweemphasizethesignificanceofsetbacktoomuch.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbearoselackingfragrance.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbeavoyagelackingdirection.Itisnoexaggerationtosaythat

frustrationhassowntheseedofmaturityandself-developmentinmyinnerheartandhasmadeitpossibleformetoachievegreatsuccess.第十一頁第十二頁，共27頁。老師對學(xué)生的影響1.Supposethatteacherswereabsentinourlife,students’lifewouldbeapicturewith

intensedarkness.Withoutteachers,

thelaboriousengineersofoursoul,students’personalitiesandcharacters

wouldnotbeshaped.Withoutteachers,

theladderwithselflessdevotion,ourheartwouldnotbeliftedupbyencouragementandgrowmature.Withoutteachers,thesparklinglighthouseintheoceanofknowledge,nevercouldteenagersfindaccesstothesuccessfullifeinthefuture.第十二頁第十三頁，共27頁。老師對學(xué)生的影響2.Withoutthepatientandcarefulteachers,nevercouldstudentsgrowfromachildishanddependentchildintoamatureandindependentadult.Withouttheselflessandaffectionatepreachingofteachers,nevercouldstudents

stepontoapathwithabrightandpromisingfuture.Withouttheknowledgeableteachers,neverwouldstudentsmasterthenecessaryknowledgeanddevotethemtotheconstructionofamoreharmonioussocietyandcountry.第十三頁第十四頁，共27頁。母愛的理解1.Without

maternalaffection,wewouldchangefromfragrantflowersintoweedsabandonedbyotherswithoutashelterandcare.Without

thisever-lastingemotion,

neverwouldweliveasfullandrichalifeasotherchildrensurroundedbymerrimentandhappiness.第十四頁第十五頁，共27頁。母愛的理解2.Maternalloveislikeacircle.Ithasnobeginningandnoending.Butformotherhood,wewouldbe

thelittlestrayedlambs

whosteponthemistakentrack.Butformotherhood,nevercanwe

beenvelopedinwarmthandmerrimentby

apatchofsunlight.Butformotherhood,wecouldbe

overwhelmedbyendlessdarknessandtheworldwouldfadefromcolorfulandwonderfultodimandcold.第十五頁第十六頁，共27頁。決心的影響1.Determinationisthefuelofships,

withoutwhich,nevercouldwearriveattheshoreofsuccess.Determinationisthewalkingstickoftheclimber’s,withoutwhich,nevercouldwereachthepeakoflife.Determinationistheverycondition,withoutwhich,nevercouldwe

getridofthedarkdepthofdepression.第十六頁第十七頁，共27頁。決心的影響2.Withoutthefirmdetermination,nevercould

individualsgrowintostrongtreesstrugglinginthewindandrain.Withoutthesteadfastmind,nevercouldteamsunitetogethertocreatemiracle.Withouttheunswervingresolution,nevercouldcountriesuniteandfightfortheflourishingandbrightfuture

aswellasaharmoniousworld.第十七頁第十八頁，共27頁。第十八頁第十九頁，共27頁。說說挫折的意義1.Hardandpainfulasfrustrationis,（倒裝）itisofsignificanceinourlife.Astheoldsayinggoes,“stormmakestreestakedeeperroots”,（名言）

withoutfrustration,nevercouldwegrowupasastrong-willedperson.（虛擬）Werewesurroundedby

over-praiseandimmersedintheprideandhappiness,frustrationwouldbeatimelyalarm,urgingusnottostopattheso-calledpeakandcontinueyourpaceofpursuit.Wereweconfrontedwithobstacles,frustrationcouldbeaphilosopher‘sstone（魔法石）,withwhichwecouldtransformthetemporarysetbackstogreatopportunitiestobecomestronger.(虛擬+排比+非限制性定從)

Inaword,lifeisnotonlyabouthowtolivethroughthestormbutalso

howtodanceintherain.(總結(jié)部分可以用現(xiàn)在時)第十九頁第二十頁，共27頁。說說挫折的意義2.Nevercanweemphasizethesignificanceofsetbacktoomuch.(倒裝)

Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbearoselackingfragrance.Withoutsetback,ourlifewouldbeavoyagelackingdirection.Itisnoexaggerationtosaythat

frustrationhassowntheseedofmaturityandself-developmentinmyinnerheartandhasmadeitpossibleformetoachievegreatsuccess.（虛擬反說+比喻+排比）第二十頁第二十一頁，共27頁。老師對學(xué)生的影響1.Supposethatteacherswereabsentinourlife,students’lifewouldbeapicturewith

intensedarkness.Withoutteachers,

thelaboriousengineersofoursoul,students’personalitiesandcharacters

wouldnotbeshaped.Withoutteachers,

theladderwithselflessdevotion,ourheartwouldnotbeliftedupbyencouragementandgrowmature.Withoutteachers,thesparklinglighthouseintheoceanofknowledge,nevercouldteenagersfindaccesstothesuccessfullifeinthefuture.（虛擬反說+排比）

第二十一頁第二十二頁，共27頁。老師對學(xué)生的影響2.Withoutthepatientandcarefulteachers,nevercouldstudentsgrowfromachildishanddependentchildintoamatureandindependentadult.Withouttheselflessandaffectionatepreachingofteachers,nevercouldstudents

stepontoapathwithabrightandpromisingfuture.Withouttheknowledgeableteachers,neverwouldstudentsmasterthenecessaryknowledgeanddevotethemtotheconstructionofamoreharmonioussocietyandcountry.（虛擬反說+排比）第二十二頁第二十三頁，共27頁。母愛的理解1.Without

maternalaffection,wewouldchangefromfragrantflowersintoweedsabandonedbyotherswithoutashelterandcare.Without

thisever-lastingemotion,

neverwouldweliveas