2024屆高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)寫(xiě)作專項(xiàng)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)父子關(guān)系 My first hunting 學(xué)案

試題呈現(xiàn)：Hisfathersaid,“Allset,boy?”andJeremynodded,pickinguphis

gun

withawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthis

camera

torecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgo

duck

huntingforthefirsttime.However,he

hated

it,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.Buthewasdeterminedtogothroughwithit.Helovedhisfather,andwantedhis

approval

morethananythingintheworld.

Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyand

waited.Toreducefear,hetooka

picture

ofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.“I'llletyou

shoot

first,”hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun.“Youknow,I'vebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus..."Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.“There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.I'llgiveyoutheword.”

Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,

tense

andeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,“Don'tletthemcome,please!”

Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack,”hisfathersaid.“Onemallard(綠頭鴨）.”Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...“Getset,”hisfatherwhispered.

“Now!”criedJeremy'sfather.“Takethem!”Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersand

flew.“Shoot!”saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:

Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”__________________________Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.______________________________Analysisofthetext:1.Whoarethemaincharactersinthearticle?Whatarethedescriptionsoftheirpersonalitiesandhobbiesinthearticle?JeremyIlovephotography,hatehunting,lovemyfather,andcravehisapprovalFatherLikeshuntingandlooksforwardtohuntingwithmyson(thinkinghealsoenjoyshunting)2.Whatarethetimeandplacewherethestorytakesplaceinthearticle?Whatisthedescriptionofthistimepointinthearticle?Howhelpfulisitfordescribingdetails?Time:atdawnDescription:free;Sacred;Thesuncomesout;ThewhitefrostonthegunLocation:nearthecleanwaterHelp:Useenvironmentaldescriptioninoutdoorscenarios,echoingrelevantdetailsoftimeandplace3.Whatdoesthewordshootmeanintheoriginaltext?Thepunmeaningof"shoot"is1:shooting;Meaning2:ShootingWhatarethemaincontradictions/issuesinthearticle?Superficialcontradiction:ShouldJeremyshootforhunting4.Deeplevelcontradictions:1)ShouldJeremysticktohisinterests(takingphotos)orchoosehuntingtogainhisfather'sapproval2)Howtogetalongwithafatherandson:DosonshavetolistentoandlikethingsthatthefatherlikesWhatshouldbewrittenattheendofthefirstparagraphfromthebeginningofthesecondparagraph?5.Atthebeginningofthesecondparagraph,ToJeremy'ssurprise,itcanbeseenthattheendofthefirstparagraphcanbewrittenaboutJeremy'spsychologicaldescriptionafterexplainingwhyhedidn'tshoot,thinkingthathisfatherwouldbeangry.參考范文：Paragraph1:

Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”

Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplode.Jeremydroppedhisheaddown,tenseandspeechless.Atthethoughtoflosinghisfather’s

approval,hewasovercomewithasenseoffailure,tearsfallingontothesilentground.“Son,tellmewhat’sthematter?”murmuredthefather,gatheringJeremyintohisarms.“Youlike

duck

hunting,don’tyou?”Jeremyexplainedthathedidn’tlikehuntingatallandhowexcitingitwastostrollwithhimandtakephotosasusual.Thenupwenttheboy’shead,throughhismistyeyes,hewitnessedhisfatherturningandleaving.（103w）Paragraph2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

“Sorry,Ithoughtyouwerefondofhuntingjustlikeme,”apologizedthefather,puttingthe

camera

ontheboy’spalms.Eyesglintingandlipscurvingintoabigsmile,theboywasjumpingwithjoy,takinga

picture

ofhisfatherandthecharmingscenery.Havingtakingawaythe

gun,thefatherwasbathedintheradiantglowofsun.Hecouldhearthechirpsofthebirdsandlaughterfromhisson.Itsuddenlydawnedonhimthathewasfullofhimselfinshowinghislovetohisson.（92w）下水作文:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?"LookingintoJeremy'seyes,hetriedtofigureoutwhathadhappenedButthelittleboysimplylookedaway.apparentlyinanattempttoavoideyecontactwithhisfather,withtearswellingupinhiseyes.Onepartofhimwantedtohavefather'sapproval,justoutoflove,butanothervoiceurgedhimtoletthemallardgoandflylikethewindandcapturethelivelyscenewithhiscamera.Afterquiteamomentofsilence,heturnedhiseyesinthedirectionofthecamera.ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecamerato