2024屆高考英語專題復習：讀后續(xù)寫語篇訓練 第三節(jié) 人與自然（語篇演練）課件

語篇演練：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.

Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡1.ReadforinformationWhoWhenWhereWhatWhyI,Elli,thepolarbearOnenightinthefallAresearchcampoutsidethetownofChurchillinManitoba,CanadaConflictarousedwithahungrypolarbearElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears.Thebearwasattractedbygarlicbread.Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡1.ReadforinformationParagraphHowPara.1&2Para.3,4&5Para.6&7ElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears,butitwasdangerous.Wetriedourbesttorepelthebearattractedbyfood,butinvain.Weturnedtothecampmanager,whoinstructedustousepepperspraytorepelthebearuntilhelparrived.Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡2.ReadforplotsA.Thebearcamebackangrilyandtheyhadtotrynewideas.B.ThecouplewenttoatowninCanadatotakephotosofpolarbears.C.Thehelicopterarrivedtotheirrescue.D.Frightened,thecoupletriedallthemeansofdefensetheyknewbutnoneofthemworked.E.Abearcameunexpectedlywhilethecouplewascookingdinner.①BeginningPlot:

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Step2細讀首句，構思框架第一段首句譯文：幾分鐘后，北極熊回到了我們的營地。第二段首句譯文：就在這時，直升機到了。1.讀懂兩段首句第一段框架：“我”和Elli想盡辦法驅(qū)趕北極熊。第二段框架：“我”和Elli最終被直升機救起并再次拍照。Step2細讀首句，構思框架第一段首句后的銜接句：Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.2.寫好三個銜接句第一段尾句（須與第二段首句銜接）：Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!第二段首句后的銜接句：Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Step2細讀首句，構思框架第二段的尾句，即結尾句，可以是體現(xiàn)故事圓滿的句子，也可以是故事給我們的啟示的句子：Atthisonce-in-a-lifetimemoment,Ireachedintomybackpackandpulledoutthecamera,photographingthatimpressivescene.3.寫好一個升華句Step3增加細節(jié)，開始寫作第一段：熊的動作描寫（這次他咆哮得更兇了，瘋狂地用爪子撞鐵絲柵欄，想用他鋒利的爪子抓“我們”）→“我們”的情感和動作描寫（Elli和“我”驚慌失措，扯著嗓子尖叫，向他揮舞著拳頭，試圖嚇跑他）→“我們”的情感描寫（因徒勞無功而感到失望）→熊的動作描寫（熊猛烈地撞向木樁，木樁顯然快要倒了）。第二段：“我們”的情感描寫（從懸停的飛機出來的陣陣大風立刻驅(qū)散了“我們”的恐懼）→飛行員的動作描寫（從直升機上放下一根繩子把“我們”拉上來）→“我們”的情感和動作描寫（“我們”既興奮又松了一口氣，抓住繩子，安全到達直升機上）→“我”的情感動作描寫（當“我”從高處看著這只粗壯的熊時，“我”驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)這個固執(zhí)的家伙已經(jīng)打破了圍欄，朝“我們”的營地走去，要吃誘人的食物）→“我”的動作描寫（在這個千載難逢的時刻，“我”拿出相機，拍下了這一幕）。Step4檢查優(yōu)化，整潔謄寫Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere,ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs,andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!Step4檢查優(yōu)化，整潔謄寫Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopullusup.Thrilledyetrelieved,wegrabbedtheropeandeventuallylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.While