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讀后續(xù)寫—助人型
急救篇一、脫險(xiǎn)類續(xù)寫大框架:1.第一步:救人之前(惡劣環(huán)境+負(fù)面情緒)2.第二步:救人之中(努力+救人動(dòng)作+如釋重負(fù))3.第三步:救人之后(感激+升華)二、好句積累:
(一)第一步:救人之前(惡劣環(huán)境+負(fù)面情緒)1.惡劣環(huán)境(1)Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.立刻,一片漆黑籠罩了整個(gè)森林。(2)Theairwasfilledwiththick,blacksmoke.空氣中充滿了濃濃的黑煙。(3)Theworldwasburdenedwithaseaofdarkness,asenseofhorrorcreepinguponme.世界被無(wú)邊的黑暗所籠罩,一股恐怖的感覺向我襲來(lái)。2024/4/19二、好句積累:
(一)第一步:救人之前(惡劣環(huán)境+負(fù)面情緒)2.負(fù)面情緒:害怕(1)Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullofhorror.他轉(zhuǎn)向我,眼里充滿了恐懼。(2)Afloodoffearwelledupinhim.一陣恐懼涌上他的心頭。(3)Ifeltsoscaredthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.我感到非常害怕,喉嚨發(fā)緊,膝蓋發(fā)軟。(4)Herfaceturnedpaleandshookallover/trembled.她臉色蒼白,渾身顫抖。2024/4/19二、好句積累:
(二)第二步:救人之中(努力+救人動(dòng)作+如釋重負(fù))1.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.雖然她很虛弱,但她掙扎著站起來(lái),繼續(xù)尋求幫助。2.Ihuggedhertightlyinmyarms,tryingtocalmherdown.我緊緊地把她抱在懷里,試圖讓她平靜下來(lái)。3.Shebentdown,pattedhimontheshoulderandsaidgently,“Thingsaregoingtobefine.”她彎下腰,拍了拍他的肩膀,輕輕地說(shuō):“一切都會(huì)好起來(lái)的?!?4.Hequicklycalledtheemergencyphoneanddraggedustoasafeplacewherewewaitedfortheambulancetoarrive.他迅速撥打了緊急電話,把我們拖到一個(gè)安全的地方,在那里我們等待救護(hù)車的到來(lái)。5.Onhearingthegoodnews,Isighedingreatrelief.
聽到這個(gè)好消息,我如釋重負(fù)地嘆了口氣。二、好句積累:
(三)第三步:救人之后(感激+升華)1.“ThankyouforhelpingmeoutoftroubleandIwillalwaysrememberwhatyouhavedoneforme.”Hesaidtomegratefully.“謝謝你幫我擺脫困境,我會(huì)永遠(yuǎn)記住你為我所做的一切?!彼屑さ貙?duì)我說(shuō)。2.Iexpressedmyheartfeltgratitudetothemanwhosavedme.我向救我的人表示衷心的感謝。2024/4/193.Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfeltgratitude.眼睛中充滿淚水,她表達(dá)了誠(chéng)摯的感謝。二、好句積累:
(四)通用主旨句1.Thatday
wassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemoryforever.
那一天是如此的難忘以至于它將永遠(yuǎn)留在我的記憶中。2.OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatcanovercome/conqueranydifficulties.直到那時(shí),我才意識(shí)到,正是勇敢才能克服一切困難。3.Itwasthisuniqueexperiencethatmademeunderstandwhateverdifficultywemayface,wemustn’tgiveupourhope.正是這種獨(dú)特的經(jīng)歷使我理解了我們所面臨的任何困難,我們不能放棄我們的希望。4.綜合型
(結(jié)果+難忘的經(jīng)歷+感悟)Finally,we
didsth.
(結(jié)果)
Whatanunforgettableexperience!Itturnsoutthatthere’salwaysawayoutofanytroubleaslongaswe
neverlosehope/nevergiveup.(感悟)三、其它素材積累1.情緒類素材積累(害怕/恐懼)害怕地inpanic恐懼地
interror感到害怕fearcreepsoversb.臉色變白faceturnspale充滿恐懼befulloffear/bestruckwithhorror2.動(dòng)作類素材積累全身顫抖tremblefromheadtotoe因?yàn)楹ε露煅蔯hokewithhorror心跳得厲害heartbeatviolently深呼吸takeadeepbreath揮舞手臂waveone’sarms一躍而起springtoone’sfeet搖搖晃晃站起來(lái)staggertoone’sfeet加快腳步quickenone’ssteps拖著疲勞的雙腿dragone’slegs2024/4/192024/4/19閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文
AyoungandsuccessfulmanagerhadanewJaguar,whosesidedoorwasdented(凹陷的).Thedamagewasverynoticeable,butthemanagerneverbotheredtorepairit.Hekeptthedenttheretoremindhimofoneafternoonaswellasthismessage:Don'tgothroughlifesofastthatsomeonehastothrowabrickatyoutogetyourattention!Themanagerwastravelingdownaneighborhoodstreet,goingabittoofastinhisnewJaguar.Hewaswatchingforkidsrushingoutfrombetweenparkedcarsandsloweddownwhenhethoughthesawsomething.Ashiscarpassed,nochildrenappeared.Instead,abrickcrashedintotheJag'ssidedoor!HebrakedsharplyanddrovetheJagbackwardtothespotwherethebrickhadbeenthrown.Theangrydriverthenjumpedoutofthecar,grabbedthenearestkidandpushedhimupagainstaparkedcar,shouting,“Whatwasthatallaboutandwhoareyou?”2024/4/19閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文
Theyoungboyapologized."PleaseMr....please,I’msorry...Ididn'tknowwhatelsetodo,"hebegged.“Ithrewthebrickbecausenooneelsewouldstop..."Withtearscorningdownhisface,thelittleboypointedtoaspotjustaroundaparkedcar.“MyelderbrotherfelloutofhiswheelchairandIcan'tlifthimup.hesaid.Stillcrying,theboyaskedtheastonishedmanager,"Wouldyoupleasehelpmegethimbackintohiswheelchair?He'shurtandhe'stooheavyforme.”Movedbeyondwords,hehurriedtothespotwiththeboy.Anotherboywaslyingonthe,groundbleeding.Hetookouthiscleanhandkerchiefandtouchedlightlyatthefreshscrapes(擦傷)andcuts.Aquicklooktoldhimthatthewoundwasserious,thedisabledmustbetakentothehospitalatonce.2024/4/19閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文
注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Luckily,hehadafirst-aidkitinthecar._________________________________________________________________
Infifteenminutes,theyarrivedatthenearesthospital._________________________________________________________________AyoungandsuccessfulmanagerhadanewJaguar,whosesidedoorwasdented(凹陷的).Thedamagewasverynoticeable,butthemanagerneverbotheredtorepairit.Hekeptthedenttheretoremindhimofoneafternoonaswellasthismessage:Don'tgothroughlifesofastthatsomeonehastothrowabrickatyoutogetyourattention!Themanagerwastravelingdownaneighborhoodstreet,goingabittoofastinhisnewJaguar.Hewaswatchingforkidsrushingoutfrombetweenparkedcarsandsloweddownwhenhethoughthesawsomething.Ashiscarpassed,nochildrenappeared.Instead,abrickcrashedintotheJag'ssidedoor!HebrakedsharplyanddrovetheJagbackwardtothespotwherethebrickhadbeenthrown.Thesidedoorofthemanager’scarwasdented,maybebecausesomeonethrewabricklight-heartedTheangrydriverthenjumpedoutofthecar,grabbedthenearestkidandpushedhimupagainstaparkedcar,shouting,“Whatwasthatallaboutandwhoareyou?”
Theyoungboyapologized."PleaseMr....please,I’msorry...Ididn'tknowwhatelsetodo,"hebegged.“Ithrewthebrickbecausenooneelsewouldstop..."Withtearscomingdownhisface,thelittleboypointedtoaspotjustaroundaparkedcar.“MyelderbrotherfelloutofhiswheelchairandIcan'tlifthimup.hesaid.Stillcrying,theboyaskedtheastonishedmanager,"Wouldyoupleasehelpmegethimbackintohiswheelchair?He'shurtandhe'stooheavyforme.”Theyoungboythrewabrickatthecarfuriousapologetic
Movedbeyondwords,hehurriedtothespotwiththeboy.Anotherboywaslyingonthegroundbleeding.Hetookouthiscleanhandkerchiefandtouchedlightlyatthefreshscrapes(擦傷)andcuts.Aquicklooktoldhimthatthewoundwasserious,thedisabledmustbetakentothehospitalatonce.Thereasonofhisthrowingabrickisthathiselderbrotherfelloutofwheelchairandhethrewabricktostopthemanager.movedThemanagerdespitethedent,helpedthemkindly.Manager:Kind;helpfulTheyoungboy:quick-witted動(dòng)作描寫;語(yǔ)言描寫;心情描寫描寫DesigntheplotPara1:Luckily,hehadafirst-aidkitinthecar.__________________________________________________Para2:Infifteenminutes,theyarrivedatthenearesthospital.____________________________________________________兩段首句定一段二段二首正能量DesigntheplotPara1:Luckily,hehadafirst-aidkitinthecar.__________________________________________________Para2:Infifteenminutes,theyarrivedatthenearesthospital.____________________________________________________兩段首句定一段對(duì)傷者進(jìn)行急救動(dòng)作鏈:拿出急救設(shè)備(綁帶)—包裹傷口—止血了啟程去醫(yī)院和告知父母幫助傷者坐上輪椅和坐上汽車DesigntheplotPara1:Luckily,hehadafirst-aidkitinthecar.__________________________________________________Para2:Infifteenminutes,theyarrivedatthenearesthospital.____________________________________________________二段二首正能量送往急救中心感激(心理描寫)+升華醫(yī)生進(jìn)行救治+告知傷者無(wú)危險(xiǎn)(心理描寫relief)動(dòng)作鏈:拿出輪椅-幫助其坐上-推到急救中心助人型故事構(gòu)造Paragraph1:Luckily,hehadafirst-aidkitinthecar.Immediately,hetookoutabandagefromthekit,wrappeditlightlyaroundthewoundandstoppedthebleeding.Slowly,heliftedthewoundedupinhiswheelchairandhimintothebackseatofthecar,whiletheyoungerbrothersatbesidetotakecareofhim.Thenthemanagerfoldedthewheelchairandputitintothetrunk.Startingthecarquicklyagain,herushedtowardthenearesthospital.Ontheway,hehandedhissmartphonetotheyoungerbrothertocallthe
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