寫作新題型續(xù)寫與概要寫作省公開課金獎(jiǎng)全國賽課一等獎(jiǎng)微課獲獎(jiǎng)?wù)n件

新高考英語寫作幾點(diǎn)注意事項(xiàng)1/29讀后續(xù)寫評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：1.本題總分25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。2.評分時(shí)，先依據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最終給分。3.詞數(shù)少于130，從總分中減去2分4.評分時(shí)應(yīng)從以下四個(gè)方面考慮：1）與所給短文和段落開頭語銜接程度2）內(nèi)容豐富性和對所標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞語應(yīng)用情況3）應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性4）上下文連貫性5.拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性一個(gè)主要方面，評分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對交際影響程度給予考慮。6.如書寫較差以至影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次2/29注重故事情節(jié)的結(jié)尾出人意外情理之中描寫景物發(fā)人深省的結(jié)尾景情相關(guān)景中帶情留白提供想象空間意猶未盡的結(jié)尾若隱若現(xiàn)藕斷絲連讀后續(xù)寫幾個(gè)基本形式理性分析思想拔高的結(jié)尾緊扣主題立意高遠(yuǎn)情緒宣泄讓人共鳴的結(jié)尾合理鋪墊水到渠成浙江省衢州一中3/29讀后續(xù)寫關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)續(xù)寫呼應(yīng)細(xì)節(jié)意境修辭浙江省衢州一中4/29Example5/29Paragraph1:What’sworse,myteachercalledmyfatheraftertheexamandtoldhimaboutmycheating._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Hearingmywords,myfatherdecidedtogivemeanotherchance._______________________________________________________________________________________________6/29意境設(shè)計(jì)缺點(diǎn)：平淡沒懸念和高潮情感渲染不夠，不能引發(fā)讀者共鳴結(jié)尾拔不高，限制了文章高度人物角色不明，語氣不符合角色以自我為中心，缺乏一些人文素養(yǎng)在內(nèi)，如：愛傳遞，貢獻(xiàn)，善良，正義，寬容等。7/29新高考概要寫作幾點(diǎn)注意事項(xiàng)8/29概要寫作指導(dǎo)1概要寫作評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)解讀2

概要寫作案例分析9/29本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。評分時(shí)，先依據(jù)所寫概要內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次要去來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最終給分。詞數(shù)少于40和多于80，從總分中減去2分。評分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從以下四個(gè)方面考慮...拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性一個(gè)主要方面，評分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對交際影響程度給予考慮。如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。1概要寫作評分解讀10/291）對原文關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)了解和展現(xiàn)情況2）應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯準(zhǔn)確性3）上下文連貫性4）對各關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)表示獨(dú)立性情況11/29④評分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從以下四個(gè)方面考慮：對原文關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)了解和展現(xiàn)情況；應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯準(zhǔn)確性；上下文連貫性；對各關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)表示獨(dú)立性情況。檔次描述第五檔(21-25)—了解準(zhǔn)確，涵蓋全部關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)?！軠?zhǔn)確使用對應(yīng)語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯?！行У厥褂昧苏Z句間連接成份，使所完成概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊?！耆褂米约赫Z言。

第五檔評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)啟示

12/29寫作重難點(diǎn)：關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)完全準(zhǔn)確提取用自己語言有效概括13/29概要寫作疑難點(diǎn)：怎樣進(jìn)行概要寫作改寫句子怎樣用自己語言來概寫句子14/29疑難一：怎樣概寫Example:1)Hiscourageinbattlemightwithoutexaggerationbecallediron-like.→Hewasverybraveinbattle.2)Hewashardupformoneyandwasbeingpressedbyhiscreditor.→Hewasinfinancialdifficulties.3)SheboughthomeseveralChineseandEnglishnovels,afewcopesofTimeandNewsweekandsometextbooks.Sheintendedtoreadallofthemduringthewintervacation.→Shebroughthomealotofbookstoreadduringthevacation.15/29疑難二：怎樣在不改變題材原句意義上改寫關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)（example摘自全國統(tǒng)一考試英語科考試說明P24

）16/29[例7]（選自全國統(tǒng)一考試英語科考試說明P24）

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫學(xué)家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.17/29Transitionalwords:

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫學(xué)家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.18/29

關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)1

nothingfixed;attitudestodirt

19/29

Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.P-W之

keywords

20/29

關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)2

dirtontheskin;blockoutdisease;alongtime;Europe;livedwithdirtPeople,suchasEuropeans,thoughtdirtdefendedtheirbodiesagainsttheattackofdisease.People,suchasEuropeans,hadlongconsidereddirtontheskinhelpedresistillness.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.（選自考試說明范文）People,suchasEuropeans,usedtoregarddirtontheskinasabarrieragainstdisease.21/29P-W之

keywords

Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?

22/29

關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)3

cleaningawaydirt;good;standardsofcleanliness;movedbeyondscience

Itwasnotuntilthe18thcenturythatpeolecametobelievewashingoffdirtbenefitedhealth,butovertimetheyhavebecometooparticularaboutcleanliness.Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.（選自考試說明范文）Centurieslater,peoplecametoadoptascientificviewondirt,andconsidereditahealthypracticetoremovedirtofftheskin,whichlater,however,leadstoanobsessionwithcleanliness.23/29P-W之

keywords

Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫學(xué)家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.

24/29W-S之

關(guān)鍵點(diǎn)4

playinthedirt;buildupastrongimmunesystem;gainingsomegroundSomebelievekidsshouldbeencouagedtoplaywithdirt,whichmayhelpstrenghthentheirimmunesystem.Somesocietiesbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.（選自考試說明范文）Somepeoplesharethebeliefthatexposingkidstodirt

mayboosttheirimmunesystem.25/29

transitionalwords

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫學(xué)家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.26/29S-PPeoplehavemixedopinionstowardsdirtonourskin.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwash