書面表達(dá)讀后續(xù)寫2021年高考英語(yǔ)【熱點(diǎn)·重點(diǎn)·難點(diǎn)】解析版

熱點(diǎn)01書面表達(dá)讀后續(xù)寫

【命題趨勢(shì)】

新高考英語(yǔ)科目考試題型有重大變化，其中英語(yǔ)寫作分為兩部分：第一節(jié)為應(yīng)用文寫作；

第二節(jié)為讀后續(xù)寫或概要寫作。2015年8月，在教育部考試中心發(fā)布的《普通高等學(xué)校招生全國(guó)統(tǒng)

一考試英語(yǔ)科考試說(shuō)明》（高考綜合改革試驗(yàn)省份試用）（第一版）中，提出了寫作新題型：讀后續(xù)寫或概

要寫作。

【讀后續(xù)寫題型介紹】

1.任務(wù)要求：提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求學(xué)生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語(yǔ)和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵

詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，將其發(fā)展成一篇與所給材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文（150詞左右）。

2.考查目標(biāo)：讀后續(xù)寫是一種將閱讀與寫作緊密結(jié)合的綜合性語(yǔ)言測(cè)試。教育部考試中心劉慶思、陳康老師

于2016年指出，讀后續(xù)寫主要關(guān)注學(xué)生以下四個(gè)方面的能力：

①把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)的能力。學(xué)生需要了解所給短文的主要內(nèi)容，清楚其關(guān)鍵詞和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)的

使用情況，并通過(guò)續(xù)寫短文表現(xiàn)出來(lái)。

②語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性。學(xué)生能準(zhǔn)確、恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂盟鶎W(xué)詞匯和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)，還能夠根據(jù)內(nèi)容需要使用

較多、較復(fù)雜的詞匯和語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)。

③對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力。學(xué)生需要掌握上下文邏輯關(guān)系，所續(xù)寫的短文與所給短文及段落開頭語(yǔ)之間要

有連貫性，所續(xù)寫的短文內(nèi)語(yǔ)句要連貫、有序。

④創(chuàng)造性思維能力。學(xué)生所續(xù)寫的短文要具有較豐富的內(nèi)容，包含詳細(xì)和生動(dòng)的情景、態(tài)度和感情描述。

【題型分析】

1.在題型設(shè)計(jì)方面：本題是一個(gè)圍繞某一具體的主題語(yǔ)境，基于書面語(yǔ)篇記敘文連續(xù)性文本的文體形式，在

根據(jù)語(yǔ)境線索理解語(yǔ)篇內(nèi)容、分析語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)，并續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇內(nèi)容的過(guò)程中，運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言技能獲取、梳理、整合

語(yǔ)言知識(shí)，同時(shí)運(yùn)用所學(xué)語(yǔ)言知識(shí)創(chuàng)造性地表達(dá)意義，并通過(guò)運(yùn)用各種學(xué)習(xí)策略，提高理解和表達(dá)效果的

題型。

2.在閱卷要求方面，需考慮所續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容：

（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；

（2）內(nèi)容的豐富性和對(duì)所給關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)的覆蓋情況；

（3）應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；

（4）上下文的連貫性。

3.在評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)方面，需把握的具體原則為：

（1）本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分；

（2）評(píng)分時(shí)，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)衡量、確定或

調(diào)整檔次，最后給分；

（3）詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分；

（4）拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮；

（5）如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。

不難看出，該題型在考查學(xué)生運(yùn)用所學(xué)語(yǔ)言知識(shí)（如語(yǔ)法知識(shí)、篇章知識(shí)）進(jìn)行書面語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的同時(shí)，也

在考查學(xué)生對(duì)書面表達(dá)策略的勝任力?？梢哉f(shuō)，該題型尤其對(duì)英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng)中的“語(yǔ)言能力”和“思維品

質(zhì)”的發(fā)展可以起到很好的促進(jìn)作用。

【滿分技巧】

讀后續(xù)寫以讀為輔，以寫為主,其目標(biāo)是考查學(xué)生的綜合語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力，主要包含以下四個(gè)方面：

1.把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)的能力:

2.語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性;

3.對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把握能力;

4.創(chuàng)造性思維能力。

【熱點(diǎn)話題】假期生活；生活小故事；哲理故事；寓言故事；學(xué)生生活。

【限時(shí)檢測(cè)】

A

（2020年新高考全國(guó)1卷山東英語(yǔ)試卷）

讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）

話題：幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的故事難度：★★★建議用時(shí):25分鐘

47.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhad

losttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeet

thechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknew

theyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,his

wife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-had

interestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseehim,“shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.

Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.<6Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearn

money,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”

“SodoIJsaidHarry.4tWereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,haveagreatidea!Ihave

asolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyou

whatwecando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米

花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

【答案】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothe

localsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,

theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard'shome.Theytold

Bernardhowtosell（hepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltvery

happytohelpthisfamily.

WitheverythingreadyBernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehouses

andsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.

Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamand

salttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.Hedidnotforgetthehelpof

Meredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.

【解析】

【分析】本文是根據(jù)短文進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之成為一個(gè)完整的故事。

【詳解】1.認(rèn)真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個(gè)小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個(gè)貧困的家庭。

那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無(wú)法外出賺錢，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生

活十分困難。后來(lái)，Meredith的孩子想出了一個(gè)主意——制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣爆米花。

2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過(guò)制作和實(shí)爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的。

3.續(xù)寫部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合

乎情理。

4.根據(jù)第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.（當(dāng)Meredith太太

聽到John的主意時(shí)，她也認(rèn)為這是個(gè)好主意）可以針對(duì)如何實(shí)現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個(gè)提議展開構(gòu)思：根據(jù)第二段

首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.（一一切準(zhǔn)備就緒后，Bernard開始了他的新生

意）可以針對(duì)Bernard如何通過(guò)賣爆米花讓家庭擺脫困境展開構(gòu)思。

【點(diǎn)睛】續(xù)寫的語(yǔ)言要盡可能與原文的語(yǔ)言保持風(fēng)格上的一致。文章時(shí)態(tài)以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主。應(yīng)使用自己

熟悉的句型和短語(yǔ)進(jìn)行寫作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒?jí)句式和高

級(jí)詞匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合題干要求，句子

結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。

B

（2020廣東省調(diào)研測(cè)試）

讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）

話題：急救知識(shí)難度：★★★建議用時(shí)：25分鐘

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

“Ada!Milk!”Mamacalled.

Milk.ItwasAda'sturntogetit.Adasighedandshutherfirst-aidbook.Herheadhurtfromreadinginthedim

morninglight,buthowelsewasshegoingtolearn?

Adatiedthecowclosetoatree.Somewheredownthemountain,somevolunteerdoctorswereteachingmedical

skillstovillagenurses.AdaheardBettydriveoffhoursago."Sheshouldhavetakenmewithher.ShethinksI'mtoo

young,butshe'swrong.Iamalready16!”Adathought.

AdacarriedthemilkbacktoMama,thenwandereduptheroad.Roy,avillageboy,hadgottenadonkey,and

somekidshadgatheredaroundtoseeit.Roywasalwaysdoingsomethingtogetattention.Likenow:hewastryingto

standontheanimal'sbareback.

“Nowondertheydon'ttrustkidswithanythingimportant”,Adathought,sighing.Shehadjustturnedaway

whensheheardathudandafewscreams.Roylayonthegroundnearbymoaninginpain.Thedonkeystoodseveral

metersaway."Roy!”Thekidsnearbyrantowardshim."GetBetty,“onesaid.Adashookherhead."Betty'sgoneto

thecity.^^Theotherkidsseemedfrozeninplace.

AdarantowhereRoywaslying.Shedroppedtoherkneesonthedustyroad.uRoy!Canyouhearme?^^Roy

moanedinagony.Adasawthatoneofhislegswascrooked,bentalittlesidewaysbetweenthekneeandtheankle.A

brokenleg!

Sherememberedwhatthefirst-aidbookhadsaidaboutbrokenlegs:ifthereisnoambulance,straightenthebone

beforemovingthevictim.Therecertainlywouldn'tbeanyambulancehere.Adalookedbackuptheroad.Theother

kidswerestillstandingthere,watching.uVictor!?,Adacalledtooneoftheboys."GogetRoy'smama,andfind

someonewithatruck.^^Sheturnedtotheothers.<4Givemeyourshirts.Weneedsomethingtotiehislegwith.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Adathenfoundastrongstick,whichshewouldusetokeephislegstraight.

Thenextday,BettycametoAda'shome.

【答案】Adathenfoundastrongstick,whichshewouldusetokeephislegstraight.Shegentlyexplainedwhat

shewasgoingtodothencarefullywrappedtheshirtsaroundRoy'slegandthestick.Roycriedoutinpain."1know

ithurts,“Adasaidsoftly."Butthiswillholditstilluntilyougettothehospital."WhenAdawasdone,shelooked

upandsawRoy'smamawatchingfromafewmetersaway.Behindherwasaneighborinapickuptruck.When

Adasteppedaway,Roy'smamaranoverandheldRoy'sfaceinherhands."Thankyou,Ada,"shesaid.Adahelped

themliftRoyintothetruck,thentheydrovedownthehillsidetowardsthehospital.

Thenextday,BettycametoAdashome."Iheardwhatyoudid,“Bettysaid."Youkeptyourheadinan

emergency.That'sanimportantskill."Ada'sfaceturnedred.tcIwasafraid...”Bettyshookherhead."It'sOKfora

nursetobeafraid,aslongasshehasaclearhead.Thevolunteerdoctorsarecomingtomorrowwithvaccines.We

needsomemorehands.Canyouhelp?”'Tdloveto."Adarepliedatonce."Comeearly,then.Thereisalotto

learn?*Adasmiled."I'llbringmyfirst-aidbook.”

【解析】

【分析】

本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講述了Amy運(yùn)用自己在急救書上學(xué)的知

識(shí)頭腦冷靜地救助了一個(gè)從馬背上摔下來(lái)的小男孩的故事，從這個(gè)故事中“我們”可以學(xué)到：書本上的知識(shí)是

可以被運(yùn)用到現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中去的。

【詳解】續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：然后，Ada找到了一根堅(jiān)固的棍棒，她將用它來(lái)保持他的

腿伸直....所以應(yīng)該寫Ada對(duì)Roy進(jìn)行急救的過(guò)程，Roy的媽媽對(duì)Ada表示感謝，最后上車前往醫(yī)院等。

第二段開頭是：第二天，Betty來(lái)到Ada的家。本段應(yīng)該寫B(tài)etty對(duì)Ada的認(rèn)可，在志愿者醫(yī)生來(lái)注射疫苗

時(shí)希望得到Ada的幫助，Ada答應(yīng)提供幫助等。文章最后指出一個(gè)道理——書本上的知識(shí)可以被運(yùn)用到現(xiàn)

實(shí)生活中。

【點(diǎn)睛】文章結(jié)構(gòu)合理，思路清晰，使用了恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞及詞組使行文連貫，如“which,until,when”，

也運(yùn)用了一些高級(jí)詞匯和表達(dá)，如“gently：towards：emergency；afraid；reply；step”以及狀語(yǔ)從句“Butthis

willholditstilluntilyougettothehospital.""WhenAdasteppedaway,Roy'smamaranoverandheldRoy'sface

inherhands.”等，增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)，體現(xiàn)了學(xué)生較高的英語(yǔ)學(xué)科素養(yǎng)。

c

（山東省濰坊市2012屆高三十月聯(lián)考）

讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）

話題：如何發(fā)展一段友誼難度：★★★建議用時(shí)：25分鐘

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

FortuneCookieFriends

Jennyfrowned（皺眉）asshehelpedhermotherandfathersetoutthecookingsuppliesintheshinysteelkitchen.

HerfamilyhadjustmovedherefromSanFrancisco,havingboughtasmallrestaurant,whichwassettoopeninthe

nextfewdays.

“Movingherewasadumbidea/Jennycomplainedmostlytoherself.

“What'sthat?”Hermotherasked,openingaboxandliftingoutseveralpots.

"Nothing,"Jennymumbled（咕噥）.Thegirlhadbeenangryaboutthemove,butherparentshadmadethe

decisionandwerenowtoobusygettingreadyforthegrandopeningtolistentohercomplaints.

Thefirstfewdaysathernewschoolhadn'tbeeneasy,either.Shefoundithardtotalktopeopleshedidn'tknow,

anditseemedlikethestudentshadn'tevennoticedher.Jennysighedandgotbacktowashingdishes.

Onthedayofthegrandopening,Jenny'sparentswereallsmiles,welcomingcustomersintotherestaurant,

brightlydecoratedingoldandred.EvenJennywasinagoodmoodassherushedaround,seatingguests,handingout

menus,andpouringtallglassesofwater.Thiswasabigdayforherfamily.

AtoneofthetablessatafamilywithtwodaughterswhowereaboutJenny*sage.Asshefilledtheirglasses,

Jennyrealizedthetwinswereinherclass.Jennyduckedherheaddownsoherlonghaircoveredherface,andshe

turnedawayfromthetable.

Jenny'smotherfoundhersoonafter,inthekitchenloadingthedishwasher.

"Honey,whatareyoudoingbackhere?Weneedyououtfrontwiththecustomers."

"Mom,Idon'twanttobeoutthere.Therearekidsfromschool!"

"So?"hermotherasked."That'sgood!Gototakethemsomefortunecookiesandsayhello!"ShesaidtoJenny,

pointingatthefortunecookiespaperwhichread:"Manyfriendsarefoundwithasingle^^.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按照如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Jennyabsentlyreadthefortunecookiepaper._______________________________________________________

Sheplacedthecookiesdown,andbravelylookedthegirlsintheeyes.

【答案】：

Jennyabsentlyreadthefortunecookiepaper.Shesuddenlyrealizedsomething.Shegrabbedahandfulof

fortunecookiesthattheygaveoutaftereverymeal,butfirstshetoreopenawrapperandcrackedacookieopenfor

herself.Shepoppedasweet,crunchypieceinhermouth.Then,sheputahandfulofcookiesintoasmalltrayand

leftthekitchen.Jennysighed.Musteringuphercourage,sheapproachedthetablewherethetwinsandtheirparents

werefinishingtheirmeal.

Sheplacedthecookiesdown,andbravelylookedthegirlsintheeyes."Thankyouforcomingtoour

restaurant!,9Jennysaidwithasmile."Oh,fortunecookies,Ilovethese!”Criedoneofthegirls,reachingforthetray.

TheothersisterlookedatJenniecarefullyandhereyeslitupwithrecognition.Thentheyintroducedthemselvesto

eachother.Everyonewasveryhappyandtheytalkedalotabouttheirschoolandclassmates.Latertheymadean

appointmenttohangouttogether.Jennytriedtodownplaytheswellofhappinessshefelt,butshewasn't

succeeding.

【解析】

【分析】

本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講述了學(xué)校中一位新來(lái)的小孩面對(duì)的交友困

難，以及她的母親如何幫助她的過(guò)程。她家的父母親在她的學(xué)校附近新開設(shè)了一段一家餐館，在餐館開

張的第一天，小孩的同學(xué)來(lái)到r餐館，小孩礙于情面，不敢到餐廳服務(wù)，孩子的母親提供r很好的建議。

【詳解】續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是，Jennyabsentlyreadthejbrlunecookiepaper:小女孩心不在焉的

讀著幸運(yùn)甜點(diǎn)的說(shuō)明。考生可以從這里展開自己的想象，圍繞主人公，將其發(fā)展成一篇與所給材料有邏

輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的段落。

續(xù)寫第二段開頭是，Sheplacedthecookiesdown,andbravelylookedthegirlsintheeyes.小女孩把甜點(diǎn)放下，并

且勇敢的看著她的新同學(xué)。這里的關(guān)鍵詞是勇敢的，因此，考生應(yīng)該按照這個(gè)邏輯續(xù)寫本段，其本段結(jié)

尾應(yīng)該是皆大歡喜的，也就是說(shuō)，小女孩應(yīng)該收獲屬于她的友誼。

【點(diǎn)睛】本篇作文要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，條理清晰，應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，比如，Shegrabbedahandful

offortunecookiesthattheygaveoutaftereverymeal,butfirstshetoreopenawrapperandcrackedacookie

openforherself.本句是一個(gè)長(zhǎng)難句，并且里面包含了一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，和五個(gè)動(dòng)詞，使得文章生動(dòng)具體。

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話題：一場(chǎng)舞蹈競(jìng)賽難度：★★★★建議用時(shí)：30分鐘

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Marywaitedanxiouslyforherturnintheemptydressingroom.Neverhadshebeensonervousbefore.This

competitionwasofvitalimportancetohercomeback（復(fù)出）?！癐fIcanwintoday,nshesaidtoherself“Icandance

onthenationalstagenextmonth.,,Threemonthsago,herleftannwasseriouslyinjuredinacaraccident.Afterthe

medicaltreatment,shebegantorecoverslowly.Shepracticedoverandoveragaininordertoregainherdancing

skills.

“Hi,Mary,^^inrushedherfriendJessica.€tHowisyourarm?Isitgoingtoinfluenceyourperformance?”

**IguessitcanbetoleratedforIamtowinthematch,nsaidMarywithadeterminedlook.

"Admirable!ButIhearthatagirlcalledLindaisreallygiftedandstrong.Shecanbeyourrealwell-matched

competitor.Comeon!”

AfterJessicaleft,Marydecidedtopracticehermostdifficultspin."IfIdon'ttryharder,Iwon'tgraspthis

chance."Shethought.Butherarmbegantohurt,makingherworried.uMary,whatmakesyouthinkyouhavea

chancetonight?”shesaidtoherself.Afterthepainwasgone,shecontinuedtowarmup.

Aslimgirlhurriedinandputdownanequipmentbagonthechair.Then,shetookoutherdancedressquickly

andputitonskillfully.SeeingMary,shesmiledpolitelyandsaid"Hi,I'mLinda.Iamthenextone!”Marynodded

inreplybutfeltuncomfortable."Thisisjustmycompetitor.Becauseofher,Imaylosetonight."Hermindwas

wanderingwhenLindaletoutascream,"Oh,God,Ican'tfindmymusictape!"Lindasearchedherbagbutinvain.

"Itmaybemissingontheway."Withthesewords,shethenrushedout.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Suddenly,MarycaughtsightofablackboxunderthechairwhereLindaputherbag.

Hearinghernamecalled,Marywalkedonthestagewithherheartbeatingfasterandfaster.

【答案】

Suddenly,MarycaughtsightofablackboxunderthechairwhereLindaputherbag.Shewentoverand

thenopenedtheboxtofindLinda'stapewasjustinside.Atthattime,shewasinadilemma,"Thisismychanceto

defeather.^^Butonasecondthought,shechangedhermind,“IfIhideit,IwillwinthecompetitionbutImaylose

something.^^Sheplaceditonthechaircarefully,leavinganotesaying“Takeiteasy,wearethebest.^^Soon,it'sher

turntocomeonthestage.

Hearinghernamecalled,Marywalkedonthestagewithherheartbeatingfasterandfaster.Shekept

remindingherself“Ihavebeenpracticingforsolong,andIwillcertainlymakeit."Buttheseriouspaininherarm

cameagainwhenshewasperformingthemostdifficultspin.Shefelldownonthestage.Atthatmoment,Linda

camebackinlowspirits.Tohersurpriseandrelief,shesawthetapeandMary'snote.WithMary'skindnessand

encouragement,Lindafinishedherperformancecalmlyandskillfully.Finally,Marylostthegamebutshebelieved

shehadwoneverything.

【解析】

【分析】

本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講述了舞蹈演員Mary參加了一場(chǎng)選

拔比賽之前發(fā)生的故事。欣7T幾個(gè)月之前出了一次意外，摔傷了她的左手，每次跳舞，左手就會(huì)疼痛，特

別是在她做高難度的旋轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)作的時(shí)候，尤其難以忍受。她的唯一的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)對(duì)手Linda也在本次舞蹈比賽之前出

了小意外，其跳舞用的配音錄音帶不見了。

【詳解】續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是，Suddenly,Marycaughtsightofablackboxunderthechairwhere

Lindaputherbag：突然,Mary看到了在L譏面放包的座椅下面有一個(gè)黑色的盒子?？忌鷳?yīng)該圍繞本段中心

句續(xù)寫其如何處理這件事情?比較合乎邏輯的故事發(fā)展應(yīng)該是，Mary在發(fā)現(xiàn)了這個(gè)黑色盒子里面裝的錄

音帶后會(huì)有一段內(nèi)心斗爭(zhēng)的過(guò)程，但是本文行文一定要堅(jiān)持主旋律正能量的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)，小女孩Mary應(yīng)該

以某種方式給她的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)對(duì)手以幫助。

第二段開頭是，Hearinghernamecalled,Marywalkedonthestagewithherheartbeatingfasterandfaster.Mary

在聽到輪到她上場(chǎng)后，她十分緊張地走上了舞臺(tái)。此處，按照前文邏輯，既是意料之外，也是情理之中，

Mary在舞蹈比賽中左手會(huì)疼痛，她會(huì)失去本場(chǎng)比賽，但是，她會(huì)收獲比贏得比賽更重要的東西。

【點(diǎn)睛】本篇作文要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，條理清晰，應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，比如，Sheplaceditonthe

chaircarefully,leavinganotesaying,這里有個(gè)現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)。再比如，Ihavebeenpracticingforso

long,andIwillcertainlymakeit.本句中運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí)。

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話題：Roman在家發(fā)現(xiàn)一條蛇的故事難度：★★★建議用時(shí)：30分鐘

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150

左右。

'Usualboringday!'ThiswouldbetheanswerfromRomanifsomebodyaskedhimhowhisdaywas.Thesedays

hefoundeverythingboring,nothingexcitedhim.

Onedayhewaslyinginhisroomasusual.Suddenlylightwentoff.Hisroomwasratherhotwithoutanair

conditioner.Thoughhedidnotwanttoleavehisroom,hehadto.Unwillingly,helefthisroomandcametoliving

room.Livingroomwasslightlycoolasithadtwohugewindows.

Hisyoungbrotherwasplayingwithhisfriend.Theywererollingonthefloor.HewaslookingoutfortheTV

remote,butcouldn'tfind.Hegotupandsearchediteverywhere,butremotewasnowhere.Helookedathisbrother

whowasstilllyingonthefloorplaying.

Heaskedhim,"Whereistheremote?',

nUndertheSofa,"hisbrotheryelled.

Hetriedtolookthrough,butitwasdark.Heputhishandunderthesofa.Hetouchedsomething,grabbeditand

tookhishandout.OMG!Itwasasnakeinhishand!

Afterseeingthathisbrotherstartedtoyell,"Snake,snake!”Momcameassoonassheheardtheirshouting.She

toowashonifiedtoseeasnake.Shewassoscaredthatsheevencouldn'tspeakaword.Twokidsweretryingtohide

intoeachother'sback.<4Whatanoldtrick!”Romanthoughtandthrewitoverkids.

Asthesnakelandedonthefloorneartothekids,itstartedmovingfromleftsidetotheright.Onlythendid

Romanrealizethatthesnakewasreal,notatoy.Hethrewthesnakeoverkidsbecausehethoughtitwasafakesnake

andkidswereplayingsometricks.

ThistimeMomalmostgotheartattack.Nowhewasscaredtoo.Thesnakewasonly10metersawayfromkids

andwasstaringatkids.Theyevencouldn'tcallarescueteam.Theremightbesomedeadlydamagebeforetheir

arrival.Therewasnotmuchtimetothink.Itwasthetimeforaquickaction.

Paragraph1：

AsRomanwasfartherfromthesnake,hejumpedtothewindowandgrabbedthecurtain.

Paragraph2：

Aftertherescueteamcaughtandtookthesnakeaway,everyonewentinsidethehome.

【答案】

Possibleversion1:

AsRomanwasfartherfromthesnake,hejumpedtothewindowandgrabbedthecurtain.Hepulleditsohard

thatcurtainendeduplandinginhishand.Thenwithoutwaitingasecond,hethrewthecurtainoverthesnake.When

thesnakecameunderthecurtain,hegrabbedtwokidsbytheirhandsandbroughtthemoutoftheroom.Heagain

wentinsideandtookhismothertothefrontyard.Momwasshakinglikealeafandkidsweresweatinghard.Later,he

calledtherescueteamfromhiscellphone.

Aftertherescueteamcaughtandtookthesnakeaway,everyonewentinside