新高考英語一輪復習練習考向41 讀后續(xù)寫之外貌性格環(huán)境描寫(原卷版)

考向41讀后續(xù)寫之外貌、性格與環(huán)境描寫在讀寫續(xù)寫過程中，在沿用原文語言特點的情況下，圍繞原文主旨，續(xù)寫部分可利用恰當?shù)脑~語描述人物的外貌、性格和周圍的環(huán)境，豐富續(xù)寫情節(jié)，從而進一步提升續(xù)寫語篇的可讀性。第一部分外貌性格描寫一、外貌性格描寫的3個原則①進行外貌描寫時，可寫對一個人的總體印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特點進行描述。如攻略3例題原文中第一段對媽媽性格的描寫，采用了loving,sweet,absent-minded和forgetful等形容詞，使一個可愛又健忘的媽媽的形象躍然紙上。②可以具體描述人物的五官、著裝，甚至可以配上動作描述。③在描寫人物片段時，可寫你對人物印象最深的一兩點，再加上一兩句人物評價。二、外貌與性格描寫的高分素材（一）外貌描寫(1)她圓圓的臉上有一雙藍色的眼睛，還有兩個可愛的酒窩。①Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples.(倒裝句型)②Sheisagirlwithapairofblueeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.(with引導的介賓結構作后置定語，補充說明人物信息)(2)李老師三十多歲，身材適中，常梳著馬尾辮。①MissLiisinherthirtieswithamediumbuildandhasherhairinaponytail.(由and連接的并列句；with短語用作狀語，表示伴隨狀態(tài))②MissLiisamedium-sizedwomaninherthirtieswhooftenwears/tiesherhairinaponytail.(定語從句補充介紹人物特征)③MissLi,inherthirties,isofmediumsize,andoftenhasherhairtiedinaponytail.(“beof＋adj.＋n．”結構表示人或物具有某種特征。常用的名詞有：size,height,weight,build,age,shape等)（二）性格描寫①SuchisMs.Han,aneasygoing,kindandwarm-heartedwoman.韓老師是一個隨和善良又熱心腸的女人。②Thoughhecomesfromapoorfamily,heisapersonofgreatdeterminationandcourage.他雖出身貧寒，但擁有堅強的意志和勇氣。第二部分環(huán)境描寫一、環(huán)境描寫的4個原則①選擇與主題和情節(jié)設置一致的環(huán)境要素，以營造故事發(fā)生的特定環(huán)境。②細致深入。所選的景物一定要運用所學的詞匯和句法進行細致深入的描寫。③添加附加信息，如天氣變化和周邊的景物等，如昏暗的路燈、搖曳的樹影等。④環(huán)境細節(jié)描寫一定要與動作和心理活動等相結合，才能更好地完成續(xù)寫任務。例如：攻略3第一段續(xù)寫中可適當描寫一下在帳篷中過夜時周圍的環(huán)境，突出作者內心的祥和、快樂。二、環(huán)境描寫的高分素材①Itwasbeginningtosnow,andsnowflakeswereblindingmyeyes.天開始下雪了，雪花讓我看不清了。②Thesunwasbreakingthroughtheblanketofmist.太陽穿過薄霧。③Summerseesthemountainsturnbrightgreenwithgrowingrice.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsareflashgold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.夏天，水稻生長群山綠意盎然。秋天漫山鋪金，冬天銀裝素裹。④Alittlewayoffwasalittlebrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.不遠處有一條小溪，在綠色的兩岸之間奔流不息，波光粼粼?！镜淅纠?2017·浙江高考11月卷改編)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—eq\a\vs4\al(loving)，eq\a\vs4\al(sweet)，andyeteq\a\vs4\al(absent-)eq\a\vs4\al(minded)andeq\a\vs4\al(forgetful).OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingalleq\a\vs4\al(thesights)alongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept.“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupthetentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.【描寫刻畫】1．細讀原文，明確敘述意圖原文基調輕松、溫暖。通過介紹一次出游經(jīng)歷，描述媽媽健忘、心不在焉、善良、愛孩子的性格特征。第一段概括媽媽的性格特征；第二段以媽媽遺落錢包的事情來說明媽媽健忘；由第三段擔心媽媽遺忘孩子的事，說明媽媽心不在焉，同時側面反映孩子的靠譜、沉穩(wěn)；由最后一段倒數(shù)第二和第三句可看出媽媽很善良。根據(jù)人物性格特征，結合續(xù)寫第二段首句可推測，續(xù)寫時應設計一件有趣的事來體現(xiàn)“快樂、母愛、溫情、親情”。2．根據(jù)段落開頭語，確定續(xù)寫方向※根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段首句中的關鍵詞“werememberedthebrand-newtent”可知，該段應著重描寫圍繞帳篷發(fā)生的有趣的eq\a\vs4\al(故事)?！鶕?jù)續(xù)寫第二段首句中的關鍵詞“alongtheway”可推斷第二段可描述一路上媽媽對孩子的關愛。結合首句中關鍵詞“greatsights”，可簡單進行環(huán)境描寫與原文呼應。3．圍繞原文主旨，進行人物性格和環(huán)境描寫①在描寫母親時，以原文對母親性格的描寫為依據(jù)，描述一件小事突出母親的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一些描述性的詞語，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描寫旅途中母親所表現(xiàn)出的母愛。這些描寫能使母親的形象更加豐滿、高大，“母愛”溢于言表。②根據(jù)原文標題中的關鍵詞vacation，和原文第二段中的“allhersightsalongtheway”，可推斷出續(xù)寫部分可適當進行環(huán)境描寫，體現(xiàn)和母親共度假期的快樂，一家人的親情?！緟⒖挤段摹縋aragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Mominsistedthatweshouldmakefulluseofitsincewehadbroughtit.DavidandIlookedatDad,hopinghecouldrefusehercrazyideaagain,buttoourgreatdisappointment,heagreedwithMom'sidea.Sowesetupthetentatthefootofthemountainbyariver.“Oh,Iforgotthepillows！”Momscreamedoutbeforeweslept.Finally,wehadtocollectsomegrassasourpillows.Despitetheacheofmyneck,Ienjoyedthenicenightwithfreshairandmillionsofstars.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thetentbecameaclosefriendthen.Everytimewecamped,Momreadabookorsangasoftsong.Thewarmthofherarmsletusfeelcomfortableandsafe.Thoughshewasforgetfulandabsent-minded,laughteraccompaniedusalongtheway.Finallywemetourtwosetsofgrandparentsandenjoyedfamilyhappiness.Thistripmademeexperiencemymother'sandfamily'slove.【檢測訓練】1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。MynameisManan,andIaminthesixthgrade.Ofallthefestivals,DiwalisaHindufestivalthatiscelebratedinautumn,ismyfavoritebecauseIcansetofffireworksandeatdeliciousfoodsduringthefestival.Oneday,Iwentshoppingforfireworkswithmygrandfather.IwaslookingatthebrightlycoloredfireworkswhensuddenlyIbumpedintoalittleboy.Allmyfireworksscatteredoutofthebag.Iquicklybentdowntopickthemup.ThenInoticedtheboy’sfacewasfullofwonderandamazementashestaredatmyfireworks.Itappearedasthoughhehadneverseenanythisclosely.Whenhebentdowntopickthemup,Isnatchedthemfromhimandquicklyputthembackinmybag.AsIstoodtherelookingathim,Irealizedtherewassomethingdifferentaboutthisboy.Hisclotheswereoldandtorn;helookedasthoughhehadnoteatenforafewdays.Onreachinghome,Ifinishedmydinnerquicklyandranouttosetoffthefireworks.Iwasfascinatedbythevarietyofcolorsthatburstopenfromthefireworksandlitupthesky,butmywonderwasshort-lived.Inoticedthatmygrandfatherhadgoneinsidethehousecoughing.Wonderingwhy,Ilookedaroundandnoticedallthesmokethatmayhavebeenirritatinghisthroat.Feelingbadforonlyasecond,Icontinuedlightingthefireworksoneafteranother.But,insideme,itfeltdifferent—Ifeltguiltyabouttakingpleasurefromburstingthefireworks.Icouldfeelmyconscienceprickingme,“Manan!Howcanyoudothis?Itjusttakesafewminutesforallthemoneytodisappearinsmoke,buttheboyyoumettodaylookedlikehedidnotevenhavethebasicnecessitiesoflife.Thechildreninorphanagesalsoneedloveandhelp.Didn’tyouseehowyourfireworkshaveaffectedGrandpatoo?Canyoustillignorethesethingsandindulgeinthiskindoffun?”Realizingtheworthlessnessofthistemporarypleasure,Ireallywantedtousethemoneyinamorerewardingway.IstartedthinkingaboutmyownwaytocelebrateDiwali.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Iwentuptomygrandfatherandtoldhimaboutmyplan.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Soonenough,theorphanagewasfilledwithlaughterjoyandcelebration.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Sometimesthingsmayseembeyondourefforts,butkeeponandyouwillfindbeautifulviewsinfrontofyou.Iwasonmysecondoutdoorexperiencetripthateverystudenthadtogoon.Thatyear,wehadachoiceofwhatdifficultylevelwewanted:onethroughfive.MyfriendsandIhadagreedthatonewouldmakeusseemlazyandthatchallengingourselveswouldmakeforagoodstory.Inchoosingleveltwo,webelievedthatitwouldstillbeafunexperience.Wewerequicklyprovenwrong.ThefurtherwedroveintotheWhiteMountains,thehigherthewallsoneithersideofthewindinghighwaygrew.IwasstillinaweofthemountainsIhadseensomanytimesbefore,butIcouldn’thelpfeelingmyheartshakingwithanxiety.SoonIwouldhavetoleavetheschoolbusthatbrought50studentsoutintothewildernesslikeeveryyearbefore.Mygroupconsistedofmyfriends,RileyandAnn,andsixextremelyathleticboys.Wearrivedatbasecamplodge(木屋)first.Afterputtingthingsasideandrearrangingourbags,wemadeourwayoutintothewilderness.Thethreeofusgirlswerequestioningifthiswasreallyaleveltwo.Thepathwasunbelievablysteep(陡峭)androckytowardthetopofthemountainwherethefirsthutwaslocated.Wewerepracticallyjogginginanattempttokeepupwiththeboysaheadofus.Beforethetrip,weweretoldtotakebreaksasoftenasweneededtodrinkwater,butthatwasn’thelpingourpoundingheartsandheavybreathingasmuchasitshouldhave.Then,30minutesintothemostdifficulthikethethreeofushadeverdone,Rileyslippedandlandedonherknee.Afterafewmoments,weturnedbackdownthemountainasitwasdecidedthatRileycouldnotmakethetripwithus.WesatonthegrassoutsidethelodgewherewehadstartedwhileRileywasbroughtinsidetojointhelevelonegroup.AnnandIexchangedbreathlessglances,ourcheeksredandwetwithsweat.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答?！癉oyouthinkweshouldaskifwecouldjointhelevelonegrouptoo?”IaskedAnn.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextdays,althoughextremelytired,wekepton.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文?！癆tthebeginningoftheCOVID-19,IwentthroughsomepainfulpersonalstuffandwouldoftengooutatnightforlongwalksbecausenoonewasaroundandIcouldn'tsleepany-way,”KellywroteonTwitter.“OnenightIwaswalkingdownmystreetandnoticedthatsomeonehadsetupafewlittleobjectsinatreeplanteranduponcloserinspection,Irealizeditwasafairygardenwithalittlenoteaboutthe4-year-oldgirl,Eliana,whofeltlonelyinquarantine(隔離期)andwantedtospreadsomecheer.”KellywroteanotetoElianapretendingtobeafairynamedSapphirethathadcometoliveinthetree.“IsaidIwouldgiftheramagicalfairydice(骰子)ifshedid3thingsforme,”Kellysaid.Kellyputthenoteinasmallbottlefilledwithglitterandplaceditinthegarden,unsureifshewouldgetaresponse.Thenextday,shefoundahandwrittenletterfromElianaexplainingshehadcompletedallofSapphire'stasks.Kellysaidsheimmediatelyburstintotears.“SoIleftabunchofmydicethathadsmallimperfectionsandleftheranothernoteandalsoalittleextranoteforherparentswithmynameandphonenumbersotheycouldcontactmeandknowIwasn'tsomebadpersonleavingnotesfortheirsmallchild,”Kellysaid.“Doingthiseverynightgavemepurposeinahorriblypainfulandlonelytime,”Kellysaid.“Ilookedforwardtomydaysagainandstartedorderingartsuppliesandlittletoystoleaveher.”“Wewrotebackandforththroughoutthelast9months,helpingeachotherfeellesslone-lyandIgottochatwithhermomviatexttomakesuremygiftswerealittlemorepersonal.”注意:1.續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Thegirl'smothertoldKellythattheyweremovingtoanothercity.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thegirl'smotherpreferredKellytoactasafairytosaygoodbyetoherdaughter.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。IwasbornandgrewupinthenorthofScotland,whichwasnotfarfromthesea.WhenIwaslittle,Ienjoyedtheseasidesceneryverymuch.Ioftensatontherockbytheseaandwatchedtheviewofthesea.Iwasfondofplayingwiththesandonthebeachandchasedthewaveswithmyoldsister,Alastair.Acrossthebeachtherewasatidal(潮汐)island,whichmeansthatwhenthetidegoesout,youcanwalktoit,butwhenthetidecomesinagain,youcan’tgettoit.MumandDadneverletusgothere.Theytoldusthatitwasdangerous.However,thetidalislandwasfullofmysterytome.Isaidtomyself,“Theremustbesomefascinatingsceneryworthexploring.HowIwishIhadachancetolandonit!”O(jiān)nalittlecolddayinOctober,whilemyparentswereawayforafriend’swedding,mysisterwasdeterminedtotakemetothebeachnearourhouse,wherewewouldhaveagoodtime.Iwantedtobuildsandcastles.Whenwearrivedatthebeach,thetidewasout.Weranonthebeachbackandforthandenjoyedourselvesverymuch.Withthehelpofmysister,Imadeseveralsandcastlesofdifferentshapes.Feelingalittletired,Isatonthebeachforabreak.Isawthetidalislandopposite,whichlookedveryniceintheautumnsunshine.“Let’sgotoexplorethetidalisland,Alastair,”Isaidtomysister.“That’sagoodidea.ButMumandDadsaidwecouldn’t.Maybewewon’treturnsafely!”Alastairsaid.“Don’tworry!We’lltrytoreturnbeforethetidecomesinagain.”IbeggedAlastair.Finallysheagreed.Wereturnedhomeandbroughtsomepeanutbuttersandwichesandabottleofmilkwithus.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Thenwesetoffforthetidalisland.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetidecameinandcoveredthebeachandthewaterwastoodeepandcoldforme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Finally,thebellrang.“Don’tforgettopracticeyourclasspresentationathome!”MissBellacriedaseveryonestartedtalkingandpackingtheirschoolbags.Jessyfeltsick.Shehatedhavingtoreadaloudinclass.Shewassureeveryonegotreallyboredlisteningtoher.Once,whenJessywasreadingoutherholidaydiary,Leewasevenlookingathiswatch,asilverandblueonewhichseemedjustmagical.JessywatchedLeewalkaheadofherastheyleftschool.Heseemedsoclever,andhehadacertainsortofshiningconfidence.Hewasjustoneofthosepeoplewhoweregoodateverything.Jessysighed.Assheturnedthecorner,shesawLee’swatchlyingrightinthemiddleofthepath.Jessyknewsheshouldjustpickitupandreturnittohim,butshedidn’twanttorunafterhim.Jessybentdownquickly,pickedupthewatchandranhome.Onarrivinghome,Jessyputitonalmostwithoutthinking.Shewassurpriseditfittedsowell.Shewalkedtothemirrorandstartedpracticingherspeech.Wordsjustfloodedoutofher.“I’mgoingtotalkaboutswimming.Ihavebeenlucky.I’vewonlotsofcompetitions.ButwhenI’minarace,I’mnotreallythinkingaboutwinning.I’mjustlovingthefeelingofbeinginthewater…”Jessylaughedwithexcitement.Shewalkedacrosstheroom.Shesuddenlyseemedtohaveacertainsortofconfidence.Turningbacktothemirror,Jessysawaflashoflightfromthewatchintheglass.Theflashesofsilverseemedalmostmagical.SomaybeLee’swatchreallyDIDhavesomethingmagicaboutit.Thenextday,asthelessonbegan,MissBellaaskedwhowasgoingtobebraveandgofirst.Nobodymoved.Jessyslowlyraisedherarm.BeforeMissBellacouldsayanything,therewasashoutfrombehind.“She’sstolenmywatch!”Leesaidangrily,“Itwentmissingatschoolyesterday.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。EverybodywasfixingtheireyesonJessy,waitingforanexplanation.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MissBellasmiledandaskedtheclasstolistentoJessy’sspeechfirst.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Itwastheswimseason,butElizabethdidn’tlikeswimmeets.Shegothorriblynervousbutnotbecauseshewantedtowin.Hernervescamefromthepossibilitythatshewoulddosomethinghorriblywrongandleteveryonedown.Thedayofameet,shewouldbescaredallday.Recently,Elizabeth’steamannouncedaspecialswimnight:Members11andolderwouldswimatimed50metersinallfourstrokesandthenhavepizza.Itwasn’texactlyameet,becauseitwouldinvolveonlyteammembers.Elizabethcounteredthatitabsolutelywasameetbecausetherewouldberacesandtimersandsoon.Buthermotherreallywantedhertogo.Shefoughtbackfuriouslybutfinallyagreed.Whenthedayofthespecialswimnightarrived,Elizabethwasnervous.Whenshegottothepoolwithherparents,shebecameevenmorenervous.Herfirstracewasthe50-meterfreestyle.Sheswamherbackstrokeandbreaststrokewithoutincident.Itwasn’tfunforElizabeth.Herbutterfliesjustkeptflapping.ThenitwastimefortheT-shirtrelay,whichworkslikethis:OnepersonfromeachrelayteamputsonaT-shirt,apairofsocks,andaswimcap;swims50meters;andgetsoutofthepool.Shetakesofftheclothesandputsthemonthenextperson,whothenswims50meters.Thiscontinuesuntileveryoneontheteamhascompletedalap.Forsomeunknownreason,Elizabeth’srelayteamchosehertoswimtheanchorleg（最后一棒）.TheteamdressedherinsocksandaT-shirt.Andthenshewasoff.SheseemedtoswimfasterintheT-shirtandsocksthanshedidwhenshewasn’twearingthem.Approachingthehalfwaymark,shewasstillinthelead.ThensomebodynoticedthatoneofElizabeth’ssockshadfallenoffandwasfloatinginthepool.“Shehastogetthatsockonbeforetheendoftherace,”aswimmingofficialtoldElizabeth’steam,“oryouwillbedisqualified.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Everybodyonherteamstartedscreaming,“Elizabeth!Elizabeth!Stop!Getthesock!”______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Bynow;thegirlinlanetwowasabouttopassElizabeth.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.閱讀下面材料