英語(yǔ) 沖刺高考之讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)滿(mǎn)分手冊(cè)專(zhuān)題06 導(dǎo)學(xué)案-如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”

導(dǎo)學(xué)案——如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”語(yǔ)言表達(dá)“空乏平淡”是同學(xué)們?cè)谧x后續(xù)寫(xiě)中存在的典型問(wèn)題，究其原因就是：不會(huì)根據(jù)文章主題和情節(jié)發(fā)展進(jìn)行精彩生動(dòng)的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)是其中主要原因之一。今天，學(xué)會(huì)5招，提升讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)技巧——讓續(xù)寫(xiě)中的人物變得“靈動(dòng)”起來(lái)！學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)：1.Learnwaystodescribevividlyincontinuationwriting.2.Promotewritingskillsthroughpractice.StepI：輸入——夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)“看”a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思catchaglimpseof____________takeaquicklook_____________

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up____________________gazeat_____________________stareat____________________glareat____________________peepat_____________________glimpse/glanceat____________gapeat____________________blinkat____________________one’seyesfallonsomeplace___lookatsbstraightintheeye____one’seyesfix/focus/concentrateon_one’seyesscan________________b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)偷瞄一眼_______________________瞥見(jiàn)；不注意看到_________________向里看，調(diào)查_(kāi)___________________抬起頭向上看____________________

凝視____________________________盯住____________________________怒目而視________________________偷窺_____________________________瞥一眼___________________________吃驚地看________________________朝…眨眼_________________________某人的目光落在___________________直視某人的眼睛___________________某人的目光緊盯著_________________某人的眼睛掃視___________________“走”的精彩描寫(xiě)a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思tiptoe________________________stride________________________Sneak________________________limp_________________________stumble______________________stagger_______________________slipintotheroom_______________stormoutofthedoor____________dashback_____________________rush/hurrytothestation__________pacerestlessly__________________wanderaimlessly_______________b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)躡手躡腳

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大步走_(dá)________________________

鬼鬼祟祟地走

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瘸著走

__________________________跌跌撞撞地走_(dá)___________________蹣跚

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溜進(jìn)房間________________________沖出房門(mén)_________________________沖回____________________________沖到車(chē)站_________________________不安地走動(dòng)_______________________無(wú)目的地漫步_____________________“手”的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思graspatsth____________________seizesth(fromsb)______________drag_________________________reachforone’shand___________raiseone’shands____________slidone’shandsinto____________catch/holdofone’sarm_________cupone’shandover____________withone’sheadinone’shands__foldone’sarms_______________catch/grabone’sarm__________pullsb.intoone’sarms________b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)盡力抓住某物____________________（常指通過(guò)暴力突然）奪取________拖拽；吃力地往前拉______________伸手抓住某人____________________舉手____________________________將手插進(jìn)......___________________抓住某人的手臂________________捂住......_______________________雙手抱著頭......_________________某人雙臂交叉___________________抓住某人的胳膊________________拉某人進(jìn)懷___________________StepII：學(xué)會(huì)“5招”使續(xù)寫(xiě)“靈動(dòng)”——讓你的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”Suddenly,Amovingdot(點(diǎn))onthehorizonwasspotted.Exhaustedbuthopeful,Janejumpedtoherfeettocatchaclearsightofit."Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.Thistimeshewasspotted,whichmadeherfeelmoredelighted.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"第1招：三聯(lián)動(dòng)——連續(xù)使用三個(gè)動(dòng)詞并列做謂語(yǔ)例如：（上文中紅色句子）"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterof............JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom......第2招：非謂動(dòng)——非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞與主句的謂語(yǔ)搭配使用例如：（上文中藍(lán)色句子）"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"第3招：副助動(dòng)——句子前后或動(dòng)詞前后使用恰當(dāng)?shù)母痹~增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)效例如：Suddenly,Amovingdot(點(diǎn))onthehorizonwasspotted.......wavingheryellowblousedesperately.....第4招：介賓動(dòng)——介詞短語(yǔ)修飾限定，尤其是with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)例如：JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow......Withbutterfliesinhisstomach,hewalkedtowardstheentrance.第5招：無(wú)主動(dòng)——無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)往往是時(shí)間或地點(diǎn)名詞后接see或witness等動(dòng)詞例如：Thelittleriverandwoodsinmyhometownwitnessedmygrowth.StepIII：Practicemakesperfect!句子訓(xùn)練：1.Helefthistent________________________.他一頭霧水地離開(kāi)他的帳篷2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,we______________________.聽(tīng)說(shuō)他得救了，我們松了口氣。3.Helookedatme______________________________.他以可怕的眼神看著我。4.Theyleftthecave_______________________.他們驚慌地離開(kāi)了那個(gè)山洞。5.Shestared_________________________atthestranger.她驚愕地盯著那陌生人。6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jack___________________________.一看到那條蛇，杰克跳起來(lái)、抓起一塊石頭就扔過(guò)去。7._________________________,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,_____________.飛機(jī)急劇下降，機(jī)上的人們開(kāi)始恐慌,全都尖叫起來(lái)。8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,_________________________.我們終于回到了營(yíng)地，又渴又餓筋疲力盡。9.______________,fearoverwhelmedme,__________________.夜幕降臨，我感到極度害怕，使我渾身哆嗦。10.________________________,weran____________.惡狼在后面緊追，我們拼命地逃跑。StepIV：語(yǔ)篇輸出——學(xué)以致用閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。(2021·江蘇如皋第二次適應(yīng)性考試)Onedarknightduringthesummerholidays,IwalkedovertomyfriendJeremy'shousetostayover.Weweregoingtohaveamoviemarathonofourfavoritesci-fiadventurefilmseriesandstayuplatewithsomesnacksanddrinks.Ihadnotbeentohishousebeforebecausehehadonlyrecentlymoved,soIaskedhimtotextmeoverhisnewaddress:64CherryTreeRoad.Jeremy'snewstreetwasanicepartoftown,linedwithtalltreesandmostofthehouseshadahedgeorfenceatthefront.Someofthehouseshadtheirnumbersonthegate,someonthehouse,andsomedidn'tseemtohaveanumberatall.IthadstartedtocloudoverasIleftmyhouse,andasIturnedontohisroad,itbegantorain.Astheraingotheavier,Irushedtofindnumbersixty-fourandeventuallyfoundit...orsoIthought.Iwalkedpastnumber62,soassumeditwasthenextone,whichappearedtohavenonumber.Yousee,usuallytheoddnumbersareononesideofthestreet,theevennumbersontheother.Iwalkedquicklyupthedrivewaytothefrontdoor.Itwasverydarktooandtherewerenolightsoninsidethehouse,whichdidseemstrange.However,Iwasgettingdrenched(濕透的)andwantedtogetinside!Irangthebell,butnobodycame,soIrangandknockedagain.ThenInoticedtherewashousenumberafterall.Aridiculoussmallonethatsaid63.Therewasasuddenthud(呯的一聲)insidetheapparentlyemptyhouse,andamomentlaterthefrontdooropenedviolently.Ahooded(戴兜帽的)manwithabeardandblueglasseshurriedpastmeandranintothestreet.Therewasashoutfrominside:“Waitforme,Rob！”Anothermanrushedout,buthedroppedwhathewascarryingandtrippedonthedoorstep.Theothermanshoutedfromtheroad“C'mon,Kev！”hepickedhimselfupandlookedatmebeforeracingafterhisfriend.注意：1．續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Youwerebravefortryingstopthem，”saidtheofficer._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________導(dǎo)學(xué)案—如何使續(xù)寫(xiě)中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)富有“電影鏡頭感”答案StepI：輸入——夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)“看”a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思偷瞄一眼瞥見(jiàn)；不注意看到向里看，調(diào)查抬起頭向上看

凝視盯住怒目而視偷窺瞥一眼吃驚地看朝…眨眼某人的目光落在..直視某人的眼睛某人的目光緊盯著......某人的眼睛掃視......b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)catchaglimpseoftakeaquicklook

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upgazeatstareatglareatpeepatglimpse/glanceatgapeatblinkatone’seyesfallonsomeplacelookatsbstraightintheeyeone’seyesfix/focus/concentrateonone’seyesscan“跑、走”a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思①躡手躡腳

②大步走

③鬼鬼祟祟地走

④瘸著走

⑤跌跌撞撞地走

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⑦溜進(jìn)房間⑧沖出房門(mén)⑨沖回⑩沖到車(chē)站?不安地走動(dòng)?無(wú)目的地漫步b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)（1）tiptoe（2）stride（3）sneak（4）limp（5）stumble（6）stagger（7）slipintotheroom（8）stormoutofthedoor（9）dashback（10）rush/hurrytothestation（11）pacerestlessly（12）wanderaimlessly“手”的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)a.根據(jù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出漢語(yǔ)意思盡力抓住某物（常指通過(guò)暴力突然）奪取拖拽；吃力地往前拉伸手抓住某人舉手將手插進(jìn)......抓住某人的手臂捂住......雙手抱著頭......某人雙臂交叉抓住某人的胳膊拉某人進(jìn)懷b.根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示默寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)graspatsthseizesth(fromsb)dragreachforone’shandraiseone’shandsslidone’shandsintocatch/holdofone’sarmcupone’shandoverwithone’sheadinone’shandsfoldone’sarmscatch/grabone’sarmpullsb.intoone’sarmsStepIII.句子訓(xùn)練：1.Helefthistentinconfusion/confused.他一頭霧水地離開(kāi)他的帳篷2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,wesighedin/withrelief.聽(tīng)說(shuō)他得救了，我們松了口氣。3.Helookedatmewithfrighteningeyes.他以可怕的眼神看著我。4.Theyleftthecaveinapanic/,panicked.他們驚慌地離開(kāi)了那個(gè)山洞。5.Shestaredinastonishmentatthestranger.她驚愕地盯著那陌生人。6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jackjumpedtohisfeet，graspedastoneandthrewatit.一看到那條蛇，杰克跳起來(lái)、抓起一塊石頭就扔過(guò)去。7.Withtheplanefallingrapidly,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,allscreaming.飛機(jī)急劇下降，機(jī)上的人們開(kāi)始恐慌,全都尖叫起來(lái)。8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,hungry,thirstyandexhausted.我們終于回到了營(yíng)地，又渴又餓筋疲力盡。9.Nightsettingin,fear