高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫專題之人與自然類-從抵觸到熱愛(ài)：山林徒步的奇妙蛻變+講義

題目：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Edun

didnotwanttogoonahike.Sheespeciallydidnotwanttogoonalonghikeinthemountainsthatledtoatiny

cabin（小木屋）withnoelectricityandnorunningwater.Shewantedtostayhomereadingabookinsteadwhilewrappedinawarmblanket.“Ready?”

Mom

askedcheerfullyafterbreakfast.Edunlookedoutofthewindowandonlysawrain,lotsofit.“Weshouldgoanotherday,”Edunsuggested.“Maybeahundredyearsfromnow.”Sheworriedshewouldgettiredonthehike.Sheworriedaboutgettingboredatthedarkcabin.Momsaiditwastimetostopworryingandgetintothecar.Edun’sbrother,Will,waswaitinginthegarage,whoworea

camera

aroundhisneck.WillwasfouryearsolderthanEdunandhad

climbed

manymoremountains.He’dstartedhikingwhenhewastwoand

loved

it.Becauseitwasraining,Edunhadtowearherrainpants,herrainhat,herrainjacket,andherwaterproofboots.Herjackethadaroughmaterialontheinside.Shedidn’tlikehowitfeltagainstherskin.Afterabouthalfanhour’sdrive,theyparkedatatrailhead（登山口）.Therainhadstoppedbut

thegroundwasstilldrippingwet.“We’llbetherebyafternoon!”Mompromised.Theafternoonsoundedfaraway.Willidentifieda

bird

sittingonanearbybranch—“Foxsparrow!”—thenhe

raced

downthetrailandwassoonoutofsight.Edun

rested

underapinetree.

“Youcan’tforcemetowalk,”Edunsaid.“You’reright,”said

hermomsmilingly,standingunderthetree,too,

“Butyouwillneverknowwhatmaylieaheadand

amaze

us.”注意：1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；2.

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。Paragraph1:ThinkingMomwasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.

Paragraph2:Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.

文章大意Edun不想去山里徒步旅行，尤其是要去一個(gè)沒(méi)電沒(méi)水的小木屋，但在媽媽的堅(jiān)持下還是出發(fā)了。她的哥哥Will很喜歡徒步，已經(jīng)爬過(guò)很多山。天氣下雨，Edun穿著不舒服的雨具。到達(dá)登山口后，雨停了但地面還是濕的，Will很快就跑遠(yuǎn)了，Edun不想走，在樹下休息，媽媽告訴她前方可能有驚喜。幾處伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)伏筆：Edun不想去徒步擔(dān)心無(wú)聊，媽媽說(shuō)前方有驚喜?；貞?yīng)：在續(xù)寫中Edun看到了美麗的風(fēng)景，體會(huì)到了徒步的樂(lè)趣。伏筆：Will帶著相機(jī)，喜歡爬山?；貞?yīng)：可能在后續(xù)中Will會(huì)用相機(jī)記錄下美好的畫面。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)情感線：從Edun的不情愿轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)槠诖团d奮，最后感受到滿足和快樂(lè)。故事線：Edun開始跟著媽媽走，看到了美麗的風(fēng)景，包括各種動(dòng)植物等，最后到達(dá)小木屋。主旨升華句：Sometimes,weneedtostepoutofourcomfortzonetodiscoverthebeautyaroundus.Thejourneythatweresistatfirstmayturnouttobeawonderfuladventure.Naturehasthepowertochangeourmindsandbringusunexpectedjoys.Whatseemsboringatfirstcanbecomethemostmemorableexperienceifwearewillingtoexplore.Intheprocessofexploration,wefindnotonlythebeautyofnaturebutalsothecouragewithinourselves.寫作示范1Paragraph1:ThinkingMomwasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.Theairwasfreshandfilledwiththesweetfragranceofwildflowers.Astheywalked,Edunspottedacolorfulbutterflyflutteringamongthebushes.Itwassobeautifulthatsheforgothertiredness.Shealsoheardthechirpingofvariousbirds,whichseemedtobesingingaharmonioussongforthem.Thesunlightpeekedthroughtheleaves,creatingbeautifulpatternsontheground.Edunbegantoenjoythehikeandwonderedwhatothersurprisesawaitedher.Paragraph2:Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.Itwassurroundedbytalltreesandasmallstreamflowednearby.ThesoundoftheflowingwaterwaslikemusictoEdun'sears.Willwasalreadythere,takingpicturesoftheamazingscenery.Edunrealizedthatthisplacewasfarfromboringasshehadimagined.Shefeltasenseofaccomplishmentandcouldn'twaittoexploremorearoundthecabin.Thisexperiencetaughtherthatnewadventurescouldbringgreatjoy.寫作示范2Paragraph1:ThinkingMomwasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.Thewetgroundmadeasquelchingsoundunderherboots,whichwasnotasannoyingasshethought.Astheymovedforward,Edunnoticedsmallmushroomspoppingupamongthefallenleaves,theircapsglisteningwithraindropsliketinyjewels.Thetreesonbothsidesofthetrailseemedtoformagreentunnel,andthesunlightfilteringthroughtheleavescreatedamagical,dappledeffect.Shestartedtofeelasenseofcuriosityandexcitementgrowingwithinher.Maybethishikewouldn'tbesobadafterall.Paragraph2:Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.Itstoodtherequietlyinaclearing,almostblendingwiththesurroundingnature.Afamilyofrabbitshoppedaroundnearby,theirfluffytailsdisappearingandreappearingamongthegrass.Thecabinhadarusticcharmwithitswoodenexterior.Edunfeltastrangesenseofbelonging.Sherealizedthatifshehadstayedathome,shewouldhavemissedthisbeautifulsight.Thisjourneyhadopenedhereyestothewondersofnatureandmadeherunderstandthatsometimes,weshouldembracetheunknown.參考范文：

Thinking

Mom

wasright,Edunfollowedherdownthetrail.

Theypassedawaterfall,tiny

yetclear.

Thetricklingofwatermade

Edun

feelbetter.To

her

amazement,astheywalkedon,

therewasalwayssomethingtolookforinthewetgreenwoods:

animaltracks,wildflowers,little

creeks.

Soontheycaughtupwith

Will,who

eagerlyshowedthemthephotoshetookoftheFoxsparrow

resting

on

a

branch.

Togethertheywent

on,

strolling

pastscratchybushes,

climbing

over

grayrocks

and

hikingthrough

dwarftrees.Edunloomedabovethose

little

trees,exclaiming,

“Look,Mom,I’magiant.”

Unknowingly

theyhadalready

done

mostoftheclimb.

Twentyminuteslater,theysawthecabin.

EdunandWillstarted

racing

upthehill.

Finally,theretheywereinthe

smallbutcozy

cabin.Through

its

window,

Edun

sawfarawaymeadowsandlakes,andmanymoremountains,awholenewworldemergingbeforeh