讀后續(xù)寫+父愛(ài)無(wú)聲浪子回頭：蒂姆的故事+講義 高二上學(xué)期12月月考英語(yǔ)試題

1/9閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenTimwasalittleboy,heandhisfatherwereverycloseandTimalwaysaskedabouteverythinghedidn’tknow.Hisfather,atypicalChinesepeasant,wasverysilentanddidnottalkmuchwithothers,whilehewasagoodtalkerforhisson.Thoughtheywereinadistantcountryside,theylivedahappylife.Tenyearslater,Timwasastudentofboardinghighschoolinthecity,whowascrazyabouttheInternet.Healwayssneakedoutofhisschooltoplayonlinegameswhenotherstudentswereintheirdreams.Asaconsequence,hisgradesbecamemoreandmoreterrible.Hedidnotcareaboutthat.Histeachersandclassmatesofferedhimalotofsuggestions,buthenevertookthemseriously.Hisparentswerealsoinvitedtohisschoolseveraltimes.Nothingchanged.ThoughTim’sfamilywasnotwellofffinancially,hisfatherwasneverlatetogivehimlivingcosts.Everytimehisoldfathercametotheschool,inordertotakethereturnbus,hehardlyhadtimetohavealongchatasbeforeexceptforaskinghissontostudyhard.Oneday,hisfathercametogivehimthelivingcostsagain,butthistimetheoldfatherarrivedalittlebitlaterthanusual.Therewasnoreturnbus.Hehadtostayforanightinthecity.Attheschoolgate,theoldfatherwouldliketotalkwithhisson.However,Timrefusedtotalkandsaid“Youarenotwell-educatedandshouldhavenothingtoteachme.”Aftertakingthemoney,hewentbackthroughtheschoolgate,leavinghisoldfatheralonethere.1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。Paragraph1:Thatnight,asusual,heclimbedoverthefence.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:InOctober,Tim’sfatherreceivedareportcardandsmiled.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、文章大意小時(shí)候，蒂姆和父親關(guān)系親密，盡管生活在偏遠(yuǎn)鄉(xiāng)村，但十分幸福。十年后，蒂姆到城里上寄宿高中，沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)，成績(jī)?cè)絹?lái)越差，對(duì)老師、同學(xué)的建議和父母的教導(dǎo)都置之不理。父親雖不富裕，但從不拖欠生活費(fèi)，每次來(lái)送錢都因要趕車而沒(méi)時(shí)間與蒂姆長(zhǎng)談。一次父親送錢晚了沒(méi)車回去，想和蒂姆聊聊，卻被蒂姆以沒(méi)文化為由拒絕，拿了錢就走，留下父親獨(dú)自在學(xué)校門口。二、故事山分析開(kāi)場(chǎng)：描繪蒂姆小時(shí)候與父親的親密關(guān)系以及鄉(xiāng)村的幸福生活，為后續(xù)的轉(zhuǎn)變做鋪墊，形成鮮明對(duì)比。上升：蒂姆進(jìn)入高中后沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)、成績(jī)下滑，且不聽(tīng)勸，家庭矛盾逐漸顯現(xiàn)，情節(jié)開(kāi)始緊張。高潮：蒂姆拒絕與父親交流并說(shuō)出傷人的話，將矛盾推向頂點(diǎn)，引發(fā)讀者對(duì)蒂姆行為的不滿和對(duì)父子關(guān)系的擔(dān)憂。下降：蒂姆被學(xué)校保安抓住，父親趕來(lái)，沒(méi)有責(zé)罵，這讓蒂姆開(kāi)始反思，情節(jié)有所緩和。結(jié)局：蒂姆改過(guò)自新，成績(jī)提升，父親收到成績(jī)單露出笑容，故事走向圓滿，給人以希望和溫暖的感覺(jué)，同時(shí)也引發(fā)讀者對(duì)親情和成長(zhǎng)的思考。三、伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)伏筆：父親是典型的中國(guó)農(nóng)民，沉默寡言，與蒂姆小時(shí)候形成交流者和傾聽(tīng)者的關(guān)系，暗示父親可能不擅長(zhǎng)用言語(yǔ)表達(dá)情感，但對(duì)蒂姆的愛(ài)深沉。續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：在蒂姆被保安抓住后，父親沒(méi)有責(zé)罵，只是用失望的眼神看著他，這符合父親不善言辭的性格特點(diǎn)，同時(shí)讓蒂姆深刻感受到父親無(wú)聲的愛(ài)和自己行為的錯(cuò)誤。伏筆：蒂姆在寄宿高中瘋狂沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)，不顧學(xué)業(yè)，體現(xiàn)他的叛逆和缺乏自律，為后續(xù)的轉(zhuǎn)變埋下伏筆，暗示他需要經(jīng)歷一些事情才能認(rèn)識(shí)到錯(cuò)誤。續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：被保安抓住以及看到父親的反應(yīng)后，蒂姆開(kāi)始反思自己的行為，從而改過(guò)自新，努力學(xué)習(xí)，完成了從叛逆到懂事的轉(zhuǎn)變，呼應(yīng)了之前沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)的情節(jié)。伏筆：父親每次送生活費(fèi)都匆忙趕車，沒(méi)時(shí)間和蒂姆長(zhǎng)談，為后來(lái)父親因沒(méi)車回去想和蒂姆聊天卻被拒絕的情節(jié)做鋪墊，突出父子之間逐漸產(chǎn)生的隔閡。續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：蒂姆拒絕父親后，父親的反應(yīng)以及蒂姆后來(lái)的后悔，都與之前的交流不暢形成對(duì)比，強(qiáng)調(diào)了親情在經(jīng)歷波折后的回歸和珍貴。伏筆：蒂姆家庭經(jīng)濟(jì)不寬裕，父親卻從不拖欠生活費(fèi)，體現(xiàn)父親對(duì)蒂姆的關(guān)愛(ài)和默默付出，即使生活艱難也盡力滿足他的物質(zhì)需求。續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：蒂姆認(rèn)識(shí)到父親的不易后，更加珍惜父親的付出，努力學(xué)習(xí)回報(bào)父親，使父親的付出得到了情感上的回應(yīng)，升華了父子之間的情感。伏筆：蒂姆對(duì)老師、同學(xué)的建議和父母的教導(dǎo)都不重視，表現(xiàn)出他的固執(zhí)和自我，預(yù)示著他需要一個(gè)重大的事件才能打破這種狀態(tài)，實(shí)現(xiàn)成長(zhǎng)。續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：被保安抓住這個(gè)意外事件成為了蒂姆轉(zhuǎn)變的契機(jī)，他開(kāi)始聽(tīng)從父親的話，努力學(xué)習(xí)，實(shí)現(xiàn)了從自我到懂事的轉(zhuǎn)變，也體現(xiàn)了成長(zhǎng)往往需要經(jīng)歷挫折和教訓(xùn)。四、續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段：描述被抓后的場(chǎng)景和對(duì)話：詳細(xì)描寫蒂姆被學(xué)校保安抓住后的緊張心情，以及保安與他的對(duì)話，如保安的嚴(yán)厲斥責(zé)、詢問(wèn)他外出的原因等。接著寫父親趕到后的情景，包括父親的神態(tài)、動(dòng)作和簡(jiǎn)短的話語(yǔ)，體現(xiàn)父親的失望和擔(dān)憂。蒂姆的內(nèi)心感受和反思：著重刻畫蒂姆看到父親后的內(nèi)心活動(dòng)，如后悔、自責(zé)、對(duì)自己行為的反思等?？梢悦枋鏊貞浧鹦r(shí)候與父親的美好時(shí)光，對(duì)比現(xiàn)在的自己，從而產(chǎn)生強(qiáng)烈的愧疚感，意識(shí)到自己的錯(cuò)誤給父親帶來(lái)的傷害。第二段：蒂姆的轉(zhuǎn)變和努力過(guò)程：講述蒂姆從那以后開(kāi)始努力學(xué)習(xí)的具體行動(dòng)，如每天早起晚睡、主動(dòng)向老師和同學(xué)請(qǐng)教問(wèn)題、制定學(xué)習(xí)計(jì)劃并嚴(yán)格執(zhí)行等?？梢粤信e一些他克服困難的細(xì)節(jié)，如在學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)學(xué)難題時(shí)堅(jiān)持不懈，最終攻克難題，展現(xiàn)他的努力和決心。父親的反應(yīng)和情感表達(dá)：描述父親收到成績(jī)單時(shí)的欣慰笑容，以及他對(duì)蒂姆的鼓勵(lì)和肯定。可以寫父親眼中閃爍的淚花，表達(dá)他內(nèi)心的喜悅和對(duì)蒂姆成長(zhǎng)的驕傲。同時(shí)，也可以提及蒂姆與父親之間關(guān)系的修復(fù)，如兩人坐下來(lái)進(jìn)行了一次真誠(chéng)的交流，蒂姆向父親道歉，父親也表達(dá)了對(duì)他的愛(ài)和期望，體現(xiàn)親情的回歸和升溫。五、情感線起初，蒂姆小時(shí)候與父親親密無(wú)間，充滿幸福和溫暖的情感。進(jìn)入高中后，因沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)，對(duì)父親和他人的關(guān)心教導(dǎo)產(chǎn)生抵觸，情感變得冷漠和叛逆。在拒絕父親并傷害了他之后，蒂姆內(nèi)心開(kāi)始產(chǎn)生愧疚和自責(zé)，情感出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)折。隨著他的轉(zhuǎn)變和努力，對(duì)父親的感激和敬愛(ài)逐漸回歸，父子關(guān)系得以修復(fù)，最終感受到親情的珍貴和溫暖，完成了從叛逆到懂事、從冷漠到感恩的情感歷程，體現(xiàn)了他在情感和心智上的成長(zhǎng)與成熟。六、故事線蒂姆小時(shí)候與父親在鄉(xiāng)村生活，關(guān)系親密。蒂姆上寄宿高中后沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)，成績(jī)下降且不聽(tīng)勸。父親多次送生活費(fèi)，因趕車沒(méi)時(shí)間長(zhǎng)談。一次父親送錢晚沒(méi)車回去想聊天，蒂姆拒絕并傷了父親。蒂姆被保安抓住，父親趕來(lái)，蒂姆開(kāi)始反思。蒂姆努力學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)提升，父親收到成績(jī)單欣慰。七、主旨升華句（英文）Trueloveisnotalwaysexpressedinwords,butinthesilentsacrificesandunwaveringsupportthatourparentsofferus.（真正的愛(ài)不總是用言語(yǔ)表達(dá)，而是體現(xiàn)在父母為我們默默的犧牲和堅(jiān)定的支持中。）Sometimes,ittakesafalltomakeusrealizethevalueofthosewhohavealwaysbeenthere,holdingusupwiththeirlove.（有時(shí)候，需要一次跌倒才能讓我們意識(shí)到那些一直陪伴在我們身邊，用愛(ài)支撐我們的人的價(jià)值。）Themistakeswemakecanbecomethesteppingstonestoourgrowth,aslongaswehavethecouragetofacethemandlearnfromthem.（我們所犯的錯(cuò)誤可以成為我們成長(zhǎng)的墊腳石，只要我們有勇氣去面對(duì)并從中吸取教訓(xùn)。）Inthejourneyoflife,itistheloveandforgivenessofourfamilythatguideusbacktotherightpathwhenweloseourway.（在人生的旅途中，當(dāng)我們迷失方向時(shí)，是家人的愛(ài)和寬容引導(dǎo)我們回到正確的道路上。）Weoftenoverlookthetreasuresinourlivesuntilweareonthevergeoflosingthem.Letuscherishtheloveofourparentsandnevertakeitforgranted.（我們常常忽視生活中的珍寶，直到我們幾乎失去它們。讓我們珍惜父母的愛(ài)，永遠(yuǎn)不要認(rèn)為這是理所當(dāng)然的。）八、寫作示范第一篇Thatnight,asusual,heclimbedoverthefence.Butashisfeettouchedtheground,hewassuddenlygrabbedbyapairofstronghands.Itwastheschoolguards.Theytookhimtothesecurityoffice,andTim'sheartsank.Heknewhewasinbigtrouble.Whenhisfatherarrived,hisfacewaspaleandhiseyeswerefilledwithdisappointment.Insteadofyellingathim,hisfatherjustlookedathimsilently.Timcouldn'tbeartheweightofthatgaze.Inthatmoment,hesawthepainhehadcaused,notonlytohisfatherbutalsotohimself.Herememberedallthetimeshisfatherhadworkedhardtoprovideforhim,andhowhehadrepaidthatlovewithindifferenceanddisrespect.InOctober,Tim'sfatherreceivedareportcardandsmiled.Sincethatfatefulnight,Timhadturnedoveranewleaf.Hewokeupearlyeverymorningandstudiedlateintothenight.Hesoughthelpfromhisteachersandclassmates,determinedtomakeupforhispastmistakes.Hishardworkpaidoff,andhisgradesimprovedsignificantly.Whenhisfathersawthereportcard,tearswelledupinhiseyes.Itwasnotjustaboutthegrades;itwasaboutthesonhehadalmostlostandnowhadback.Timwalkeduptohisfatherandhuggedhimtightly.Heapologizedforhispastbehavior,andhisfatherjustpattedhisbackgently.Fromthatdayon,Timunderstoodthetruemeaningofloveandresponsibility.Hevowedtoneveragainlethisfatherdownandtocherisheverymomentwithhisfamily.第二篇Thatnight,asusual,heclimbedoverthefence.However,thistimehisluckhadrunout.Theschoolsecurityguardswerewaitingforhimontheotherside.Theyescortedhimtothedean'soffice,wherehesatinsilence,filledwithdread.Whenhisfathershowedup,hisshoulderswereslumped,andhiseyeswereredfromexhaustion.Hisfather'svoicetrembledasheasked,"Why,son?"Timhadnoanswer.Hehunghisheadinshame,realizinghowfoolishandselfishhehadbeen.Allthetimeshisfatherhadcometohisrescue,andhehadthrownitallaway.InOctober,Tim'sfatherreceivedareportcardandsmiled.Afterthatnight,Timwasachangedperson.Hethrewhimselfintohisstudieswithanewfoundpassion.Hecutoffalltieswithhisonlinegamingfriendsandfocusedonhisfuture.Hestudiedeverysubjectwithdedication,andhiseffortswerereflectedinhisgrades.Whenhisfathersawthereportcard,awidesmilespreadacrosshisface.Itwasasmileofrelief,ofpride,andoflove.Timsawthatsmileandknewhehadfinallydonesomethingright.Hewenttohisfatherandsaid,"Dad,I'msorry.I'llmakeyouproud."Hisfatherhuggedhimandsaid,"Ialwaysknewyoucoulddoit,son."Fromthenon,Timandhisfather'srelationshipgrewstronger,builtonthefoundationofforgivenessandanewunderstandingofwhattrulymatteredinlife.Samplewriting:Thatnight,asusual,heclimbedoverthefence.Afterhefoundtherewasasleepingmaninthecorner.Takingacloselook,hefounditwas