2021年高考英語二輪精講精練講義-專題-書面表達(dá)二經(jīng)典精講(下)-

書面表達(dá)二經(jīng)典精講（下）主講老師：林斌北京八十中學(xué)英語高級老師開篇語（一）情景作文---以內(nèi)容和語言定檔定分2011老師受傷稿件敘述2010支配旅游周記敘述，開頭寫好2009植樹活動稿件敘述2008春游 稿件敘述2007競選班長 信敘述，開頭結(jié)尾寫好2006王珊 個(gè)人簡介 2005夏Jeff中國生活支配信 描述，開頭寫好2005春李明的變化稿件 敘述，開頭寫好2004夏課余活動 圖表 描述，看法2004春過去現(xiàn)在生活變化稿件 敘述，開頭寫好2003夏樹的故事 稿件 敘述，開頭寫好2003春學(xué)雷峰活動日記 敘述，開頭結(jié)尾寫好題一：假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高二(1)班的同學(xué)李華，下面四幅圖描述了近期發(fā)生在你們班的一個(gè)真實(shí)故事，請依據(jù)圖片的先后挨次，為校刊“英語園地”寫一篇短文，詞數(shù)不少于60。1.老師滑倒2.同學(xué)送老師看病3.同學(xué)探望老師4.老師回班上課______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________情境作文一、審題要到位：兩個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞：近期/?？?、評分原則：要點(diǎn)+細(xì)節(jié)+語言質(zhì)量一檔：18-20二檔：15-17三檔：12-14四檔：6-11五檔：1-50要點(diǎn)四個(gè)要點(diǎn)不行缺少，如缺少一個(gè)要點(diǎn)就直降到四檔。（6—11）老師滑倒/摔倒同學(xué)送老師看病同學(xué)探望老師老師回班上課細(xì)節(jié)

每個(gè)要點(diǎn)下面都要有至少一個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)的支撐。

圖一：粉筆飛出；同學(xué)吃驚/擔(dān)憂；老師穿高跟鞋（不宜多說）

圖二：同學(xué)們的陪伴/背著老師扶著老師/給老師把鞋脫掉

圖三：鮮花和水果；談天；右腳打繃帶

圖四：老師坐輪椅；右腳打繃帶；同學(xué)們的反應(yīng)（鼓掌歡迎）幾點(diǎn)說明

圖二：從clinic到圖三hospital的地點(diǎn)轉(zhuǎn)換，不交代也認(rèn)可。

圖四：只要表明老師返回班里甚至是學(xué)校就可以了。不強(qiáng)調(diào)回來上課也可以接受。對于細(xì)節(jié)的認(rèn)定較寬泛。同學(xué)的普遍問題◆要點(diǎn)幾乎都可以寫全，不會漏掉。但要點(diǎn)下面細(xì)節(jié)的支撐少。◆語言的質(zhì)量不高。◆同學(xué)擅長抒發(fā)感情，但動作描寫欠缺（在第四幅圖后，寫一堆的情感套話，如贊揚(yáng)老師或者師生和諧）開放作文---以內(nèi)容和語言定檔定分2011跨河摘蘋果describeandexplain2010樹與建筑describeandexplain2009文化差異describeandexplain2008圓規(guī)與鉛筆describeandexplain2007大鳥小鳥describeandexplain2006城市雕塑describeandexplain2005夏照鏡子describe2005春交通建議 2-3suggestions2004 夏丟錢的可能性 3-4possibilities2004 春找路 2-3differentways2003 夏暑期方案 ≥1examples，fun立意明確，規(guī)律清楚(立意-----細(xì)節(jié)描述）語言達(dá)意請依據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。InyourspokenEnglishclass,yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture.Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit.立意1：勇于克服困難（小樹在不規(guī)章大樓中間堅(jiān)韌生長）立意2：成功來自于不懈的努力（小樹努力克服各種困難，最終獵取了陽光）立意3：多給孩子成長的空間（樓房的不規(guī)章造成了小樹的扭曲）題二：請依據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。InyourspokenEnglishclass,yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture.Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________立意1：要學(xué)會選擇（隔著河摘蘋果很累，旁邊有橋，應(yīng)學(xué)會選擇）立意2：創(chuàng)新，嘗試新方法（有橋不走，嘗試隔河摘蘋果，更省事）立意3：不要冒險(xiǎn)（隔著河摘蘋果很危急，做事要穩(wěn)妥）開放作文描圖+釋圖評分原則：是否扣題/切題規(guī)律是否清楚內(nèi)容是否充實(shí)語言是否精確一檔：13-15二檔：9-12三檔：4-8四檔：1-30是否扣題描述要源自畫面中，是基于畫進(jìn)行的描述,對于圖畫的理解和對于畫面的主題沒有特殊的規(guī)定。不刻意強(qiáng)調(diào)哪個(gè)立意對，哪個(gè)立意不對，最重要的是能自圓其說。同學(xué)們的主題：懶散；頭腦機(jī)敏，富于創(chuàng)新；不要冒險(xiǎn)；要富于冒險(xiǎn)精神，增加挑戰(zhàn)性；學(xué)會選擇；不要走捷徑…規(guī)律是否清楚后面的釋圖是從前面的描圖引申出來的。描述為談?wù)摯蚧A(chǔ)（埋下伏筆：What’sinthepicture?What’sgoingoninthepicture?與下文闡述產(chǎn)生關(guān)聯(lián)性），談?wù)摰幕A(chǔ)是描述的內(nèi)容，否則談?wù)摼褪菬o源之水。關(guān)注謀篇布局的整體把握，形成語篇的連貫性。描述和闡述是一個(gè)有機(jī)的整體。Theboywantstosavetimeandenergy,butactuallyhewastestime.Hemakesastupidchoice.Sowhenwedosomething,weshouldthinkitoveranddon’tbelazyanddowellpreparation.內(nèi)容是否充實(shí)論述部分要看闡述時(shí)是否能圍繞中心開放，不是簡潔的句式變換或表層的思維，更不要停留在一句話上說來說去。Whenwefindapropermethod,wewillsucceed.Withoutapropermethod,wewillfail.Onlywhenwefindapropermethod,canwesucceed.語言是否精確留意詞匯的選取，適當(dāng)用簡潔句直接闡述中心，滿足主題和規(guī)律的雙重考察(句子多樣性）,看句與句之間能否形成意思。

Inourlife,weshouldworkhard.Facedwithdifficulties,weshouldfindaproperwaytosolvetheproblem.Itisimportantforustothinktwicebeforewetakeaction.同學(xué)的普遍問題

◆套話過多，影響寫作質(zhì)量（不能投機(jī)）

◆規(guī)律不清楚：逐層深化

◆內(nèi)容不充實(shí)

◆語言不精確名師寄語書面表達(dá)二經(jīng)典精講（下）講義參考答案題一：媒體公布范文LastMonday,wewerehavingourChineseclasswhentheteachersuddenlyslippedandfell.Wewereallworriedabouther.Oneoftheboyscarriedherontheback,withthehelpofsomeothers,totheclinicimmediately.Itturnedoutthatherrightlegwasbrokenandshehadtostayinthehospital.Thefollowingday,wewenttovisitherwithflowersandfruit.Seeingherlyinginbedwithherlegwrappedinbandages,wefeltsorryforherandhopedthatshewouldrecoversoon.ThisThursdayshereturnedtotheclassonawheelchairtogiveuslessons.Wewerealldeeplymovedandproudofhavingsucharesponsibleteacher.（119）同學(xué)作文LastFriday,anaccidenthadhappenedsuddenlyinourclass.WhilewewerehavingourEnglishclassattentively,ourteachermissedastepandfelltotheground.Oneofmyclassmatesshouted“Watchthestep!”butit’stoolate.Withoutanydelay,ourmonitorandtwootherstudentscarriedhertotheschoolclinic.Toourgreatrelief,theproblemwasn’tserious.Sincewewerealllovedourteacher,allofmyclassmateswenttoseeourteacherafterclasswithsomebeautifulflowers.Wechattedhappilyandweallhopedthatourteacherwillsoonbeallright.Afterafewweeksinthehospital,ourteacherfinallycamebackinawheelchair.Weclappedourhandsandgaveherawarmwelcome.Seeingtheteacher,weallhadasenseofhappiness.Whataunitedclassweare!(141)同學(xué)作文Webelieveinthephilosophythatofferingothershelpmakesourselvessatisfiedandhereiswhathappenedrecentlyinmyclass.Whenourteacherwasgivingaclass,shesuddenlylostherbalancebytheedge,felldownandhurtherlegs.Everyonewasastonishedatthattime.However,wequicklycalmedourselvesdown,andswiftlycarriedhertotheclinic.Ontheway,weaskedanxiouslywhetherithurtalotandtoldhernottoworry.Havingbeendiagnosedasaseverebonehurt,shehadtostayinhospitalforweeks.Inordertoeaseherfeelingofloneliness,wepaidavisittoher.Severaldayslater,therewesentherflowers,wishingheraquickrecovery,someheldherhandsanddeliveredourcareforher,whileotherspromisedtostudyhard.Wechattedhappily,andIsawhertearsofsatisfactionandpleasure.Yesterdaywasthebigday—ourteacherreturned“home”fromthehospital.Seeinghersmilingface,weclappedourhandsasawarmwelcome.She,thoughsittinginawheelchair,showedherpleasantsmilelikeanangel,asifshewasexpressingherthanks.AgainIsawtearsshininginhereyes,theywerethesymbolsofhappinessratherthantiredness.Thiswasjustasimplethinginourschoollife,butsomethingmeaningful.Ourteachersneverfailtoofferustheirmeticulous(當(dāng)心翼翼的；一絲不茍的)care,sowhentheyneedhelp,it’sourdutyaswellashonortolendahelpinghand.Inthisway,wecancreateaharmoniousteacher-studentrelationship!（261）題二：媒體公布范文：Inthepicture,therestandsatreefulloffruitononesideofthestream.Acrossthestream,amanistryingtoreachoutontheedgeofthebankforthefruitwithanetattachedtoapole.Notfarawaythereisabridgethatcanleadhimtothetreeformorefruit.Themessageconveyedinthepictureisclear.Inpursuingadream,wemightfocusononlyonewayofmakingitcometrue,forgettingthattheremaybealternatives(可供選擇的事物).Asindicatedinthepicture,ifthemaniswillingtolookforotherpossibilities,hecanfindabetterandmorerewardingwaytoachievehisgoal.Allhehastodoistoturnaround,crossthebridgeandwalktothetree.（140）同學(xué)作文Inthepicture,thereisavalleybetweenthetwosteepmountains.Inthevalley,thereisariverbeatingthemountainfiercely.Onthemountainliesatreewithlotsofapples.Ontheothersidestandsaman,tryingtoreachtheappleswithaknottiedtoalongstickabovethevalley.Althoughhetrieshard,hecan’tgetoneapplebecausehedoesn’tfindabridgeacrossthevalley,whichleadstotheappletree.Ithinkwhatthispicturewantstoconveytousisthatweshouldfindthemostefficientandeasiestwaytotackletheproblems.Themaninthepicturetakesgreatpaininvainbecausehedoesn’tthinkofallthepossiblewaysorthesituationheisin.Inourdailylife,wemaymeetallkindsofproblemsandweshouldknowamongthenumerouswaysthereisalwaysasolutionthatismostefficientandeasiest.Aslongaswefindit,solvingtheproblemwillbecomeapieceofcake.Confronted(面對)withchallenges,wearerequiredtouseourbraintothinkthoroughlybeforetakingactionratherthanconduct(實(shí)施，處理)thefirstideaappearinginourmind,whichmayenduptobethemostdifficultsolution.Choosingthemostefficientsolutioncanpreventusfromdoinginvain,whichcanalsosaveourvaluabletimeandenergy.（232）同學(xué)作文Asisvividlyshowninthepicture,themanissparingnoefforttoreachforthefruitsonthetreeacrosstheriverwithalongnet,neglectingabrid