針對九年級幾次作文問題的分析和改進(jìn)建議.ppt

1、大作文,Hugh C.Wang 22-12-2015,中西思維對比圖,中式螺旋式思維，繞圈繞到中心。,西式線性思維，（一般）開始即給出主題。,按線性思維寫作示意圖,Title,Topic,Body,Conclusion,Say what youll say.,（1）主題句（Topic Sentence） 寫主題句的訣竅是針對題目想出一個關(guān)鍵性的形容詞、名詞或副詞。比如寫“在我們學(xué)校有一個圖書館，我們從里面借書”就缺乏重點(diǎn)，很難展開。如果寫“在我們學(xué)校我最喜歡的地方就是圖書館，”有了關(guān)鍵詞“最喜歡的”，接下來便可以寫為什么。,Say it.,（2）發(fā)展句 寫主題句下面的每一句發(fā)展句都必須問自己它

2、與主題句有何關(guān)系，以上段為例，每個發(fā)展句都必須用來說明老師最喜歡的理由，陳述理由時可以舉例。 范例片段 My favorite place in school is the fantastic library from which I borrow books. In a quiet reading room, I can better focus on what I learn. Besides, her are all kinds of books, （當(dāng)然如果你寫不出什么，或者想寫的“太多”，就說明你找出那個“關(guān)鍵詞”并不是你真正的可以寫出作文關(guān)鍵詞，那你就得換主題句或關(guān)鍵詞了。）,Sa

3、y what you have said.,（3）結(jié)論句（Conclusion） 舉例之后就可以寫結(jié)論句了。結(jié)論句與主題句息息相關(guān)，可以說是主題句的另一種表現(xiàn)。比如還是上面的例子，結(jié)尾就可以寫成“The library is really a wonderful place to study school work and to expand my knowledge. Sometimes I can even make new friends who loves reading too.”,四種文體（記敘文、說明文、議論文、描述文）簡介,記敘文 用以解說一個故事或事件。包括真實(shí)或虛幻的故事。

4、 敘述故事時，也要描寫。 記敘文寫的是在特定情況下發(fā)生的實(shí)踐及體驗(yàn)。,I find Chinese folk music, Jessamine (Moli Flower)to be my favorite music. It was made by the Chinese people and at the beginning of 20th century it was the first piece introduced to Western world by Italian composer Puccini. In 1920, Puccini found the music when h

5、e listen to the music box of his ambassador friends(大使朋友). Then he put the music in to his opera Turandot(圖蘭朵）.Since then, Jessamine has been known all over the world. As a national and international piece of music, Jessamine can be loved by people always.,NarrativeStyle,My Favorite Music,議論文,是作者根據(jù)事

6、實(shí)針對某個方面發(fā)表自己的見解看法，起說服作用的一種寫作方法。 夾敘夾議 敘述（熟悉的）生活片段、細(xì)節(jié)，但要求對其進(jìn)行一定的思考、評述和分析，即要對敘述的事情發(fā)表自己的看法。,I find Chinese folk music, Jessamine (Moli Flower)to be my favorite music. I like it because the music is strangely beautiful. When I listen to it, I sense a strong joy and courage, imagining I came back to my chi

7、ldhood and enjoyed myself among the beautiful Jessamine flowers. It was made by the Chinese people and at the beginning of 20th century it was the first piece introduced to Western world. It has been playing a very important role in the history of music. I think you should listen to it because it ca

8、n help feel the fresh springtime of life and the beautiful garden of heart.,My Favorite Music,Narrative& Argumentative Style,列提綱確保“總分總”三段式標(biāo)準(zhǔn),1. 記敘文 行文模式：介紹（主題句） 描寫（發(fā)展句） 評價（總結(jié)句） 寫事（時間、地點(diǎn)、人物、事件，發(fā)生、發(fā)展、結(jié)束）,現(xiàn)在學(xué)校英語校刊要征集文章，內(nèi)容是有關(guān)你最喜歡的音樂電影或其他，請你寫一篇文章投稿。詞數(shù)，不少于80。,Outline Topic: my favorite Body: 1. I like bec

9、ause 2. It/He/She 3. When I listen to/watch it, I feel Conclusion: I think ,在生活和學(xué)習(xí)中你一定有很多個人經(jīng)歷，現(xiàn)在有一個經(jīng)歷分享會請你參加，談?wù)勀愕囊粋€經(jīng)歷，并說明這次經(jīng)歷給你帶來的感受。（題目自擬，或不用題目）詞數(shù)，不少于80。,Outline Topic: got bad math grade Body:1. got back home, went into room without a word. 2. father knocked on the door, told me, understand, belie

10、ve me, always be with me. Conclusion: moved, know his love, thank him, （decide to )find out mistakes,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. My mind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I walked through the door, my father asked me what was wrong. I told him nothing was

11、 wrong. Then I went into my room without another word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. You mum and I are always with you” My fathers words made me moved, wh

12、ich let me know how deeply he loves me and hopes I can grow happily no matter I win or lose! I opened the door and said thanks to my father and then came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper. Ill do my best not to let him down.,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. M

13、y mind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I got home, I went into my room without a word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. Im al

14、ways with you.” His words moved me. This made me know he loves me no matter I win or lose, and he hopes I can grow happily! I opened the door, saying sorry and thanks to him. Then I came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper.,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. My m

15、ind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I got home, I went into my room without a word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. Im alway

16、s with you.” His words moved me, which made me know he loves me no matter I win or lose, and he hopes I can grow happily! I opened the door, saying sorry and thanks to him. Then I came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper.,總結(jié),習(xí)慣線性英語思維，一切圍繞主題，通過適當(dāng)連接詞使文章不但表面完整，內(nèi)部更加緊密。 按總分（總）三段式，寫提綱、打草稿，檢查無誤，最后謄寫。 可以收集一下教科書上的好詞好句和你已經(jīng)能比較熟練使用的所謂“高級詞匯”。 務(wù)必在考前精進(jìn)書寫，并每次注意文章格式（每段前讓三個或四個字母）。,在生活和學(xué)習(xí)中你一定有很多個人經(jīng)歷，現(xiàn)在有一個經(jīng)歷分享會請你參加，談?wù)勀愕囊粋€經(jīng)歷，并說明這次經(jīng)歷給你帶來的感受。（題目自擬，或不用題目）詞數(shù)，不少于80。,Outline Topic: What event? Body: 1. (F