2009一年級(jí)11班英語作文中出現(xiàn)的錯(cuò)句與改正.doc

- 十一班5 -作文題目：1.What I Do on Weekly Saturday Outing 2. My Dream1.132.5梁英豪：I wish next weekly Saturdsay outing come to us early. 糾正: come前加to （祝愿句式錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: For example, someones dream is that working as a teacher, but someone also wants to be a doctor. I plan that before 45 years old making some grades in science. 糾正: that去掉；someone后加elses; also去掉; that去掉；makingto make; gradesachievements （that用法錯(cuò)誤；不定代詞別人的表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤；不定式表目的錯(cuò)誤）2.118.5胡首鵬： In Saturday afternoon as usually we can go out do something we like。Sept.23: I will look after each people who has illness. 糾正：people-person3.128.5李亞鑫：When the final bell goes off, I stand up at once. The street is very crowed and noisey ; 糾正: final去掉， the bell后加announcing the end of the class/goes-went/ standstood/iswas （漢語習(xí)慣影響錯(cuò)誤；動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤）The people who have dreams are beautiful. The life that is filled with dreams is colorful. 糾正: the people-the去掉；the life-the去掉 （有定語表泛指的用法錯(cuò)誤）4.123周高磊：among the 7 days of week. Sept. 23 Some people want to be rich, some people hope to have a happy family, others prefer to make contribution of their talent to the human being. 糾正：others 前加and。/Travel all kinds of countries: 糾正：travel后加to 5.125.5冀燁：Make my parents be proud of me. I put my heart in study as nothing happens. 糾正:去掉be/as nothing happensas if nothing has happened （make賓語+賓補(bǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)錯(cuò)誤；as, as if混合錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I havent have a certain objective yet. 糾正：I havent had a certain objective yet. （完成時(shí)錯(cuò)誤）6.128王京京：So I went to the library firstly; we ate some food and drinked some cola; we were surprised; we saw two old men playing chess and their faces were very strict; 糾正: So I went to the library first, ate some food, and drank） some cola. Later, we were surprised to see two old men playing chess with serious expressions. （連續(xù)動(dòng)作表達(dá)法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: The world is facing with hardships and challenges. I will raise much money for the poor, the sick man, and the disable. 糾正: facing-faced; the sick manthe sick; disabledisabled （動(dòng)詞固定表達(dá)法錯(cuò)誤；the加形容詞指一類人）7.125關(guān)凱彬：It makes me feel relaxing. I walk out school. I go to bookshop. 糾正：relaxing-relaxed; out后加of; bookshop前加a（ing與ed形容詞用法錯(cuò)誤；動(dòng)詞介詞及名詞介詞搭配錯(cuò)誤）Sept: They can make people happier and convenient. 糾正:and后加their life （convenient用法錯(cuò)誤）8.108.5苗俊杰：The price of things also be very cheap. We all are very happy. 糾正：We are all very happy that the prices of goods are also very low. (便宜表達(dá)法錯(cuò)誤；欠缺英語句式思維) Sept.23 A person have different dreams at different age. /The dream was I wanted to be the richest man in the world.Now, I have also a dream, its to be a doctor when I grow up. 糾正：havehas/was后加that/itwhich （動(dòng)詞單復(fù)數(shù)錯(cuò)誤；it與which用法錯(cuò)誤）9.120王俊燕：Im waiting the next weekly Saturday outing. 糾正: waitingexpeting, the 去掉 （心中的等待和動(dòng)作等待用法）Im waiting the next weekly Saturday outing. 糾正: waitingexpeting, the 去掉 （心中的等待和動(dòng)作等待用法）to personal糾正: habitshabit/ has-have/there is; personalmyself. （存在句型錯(cuò)用）Sept.23: He will lose the direction that guiding people success. In the other hand, there was no TV, computer and car without science.糾正: that去掉；success前加to; there wasthere woul be; and car-or car （that錯(cuò)用；介詞用法錯(cuò)誤；虛擬語氣用法錯(cuò)誤；否定詞并列連詞用法錯(cuò)誤）10.114黃典哲：I had to go back to classroom. Sept.23: I think my dreams can come true, there is a saying there is a will, there is a way. 糾正：I think my dreams can come true. There is a saying there is a will, there is a way.11.128姜琳琳：I go to snack street. There are many delicious food. I like river. Sept.23: I should keep informed. 糾正: keep后加well12.112陳垟陽：People could know lots of important news by me. 糾正：through me. /As a reporter is my dream, I think my dream can come true one day. 糾正：Being a reporter is my dream. I think my dream will come true one13.117王璐璐：I got a lot of happy from them. It was tired. （好的句子）I got over it. Its my favorite sports. These were all the things I have done during my weekly Saturday outing, so that we can study happy. 糾正: happy-happiness;tiredtiring; sportssport; were-are; happy-happily （形容詞與名詞用法錯(cuò)誤；過去分詞與現(xiàn)在分詞用法錯(cuò)誤；名詞單復(fù)數(shù)錯(cuò)誤；時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤；形容詞副詞錯(cuò)誤）Sept: We have no much times. 糾正：We have not much time. （no與not用法錯(cuò)誤）14.128張隆基：By the end of we left there, we bought some useful books. We also had some schoolwork need to be finished. Sept.23: I have dreamed of becoming a richer, a scientist, a useful people and so on. 糾正：I have dreamed of becoming a rich man, a scientist, a useful person and son on.15.117程萌萌：I went with my friend went to the other high school to saw my classmate. I didnt find him, he may go out I felt very sad. Sept.23: I want to go to Beijing to across the Great Wall. 糾正: across-see16.116姚佳佳：We eat dumplings, they are very delicious. Sept.23 I like help others./I also want to be an actor 糾正：help-helping/actor-actress17.119黃君軻：獨(dú)句Because I think they are difficult for me; We talked about something they interested18.118.5菅夢(mèng)林：The afternoon belong to me. Sept.23: In spite of the dream is different to come true, 糾正: In spite ofThough; come true-realize19.135.5呂鵬愷：That are the things what I do during my weekly.Sept.23: The most important reason is my grandpa was died of bad illness. 糾正：is后加that; was去掉20.95焦玉茹：I had a interesting; it spend an hour, I have many clothes need to be washed; Looked at the time, I had an hour Poor grammar糾正：I had an interest. It took an hour. I have many clothes that need to be washed. Looking at the time, I had an hour left. （interest不同形式用法錯(cuò)誤；花費(fèi)用法錯(cuò)誤；謂語動(dòng)詞與非謂語動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I am a responsible citizen, I can use courage, enthusiasm, and love make my country strong. 糾正：As I am a responsible citizen, I can use courage, enthusiasm, and love to make my country strong. (單句與主從句用法錯(cuò)誤；未用不定式表目的)21.105史帥舉：I bought a piece of newspapers; I hoped Saturday come soon 糾正: piececopy; newspapersnewspaper / I hoped Saturday would come soon. （一份報(bào)紙與一種報(bào)紙區(qū)別；過去將來時(shí)用法）Sept.23: I wanted to a great hero. But I dont want to be it now. 糾正: it-one （one與it用法錯(cuò)誤）22.122.5張瑩瑩：write my exercises and draw picture. Sept.23: I think it can come true someday. 糾正: can-will; somedaysome day23.107孫德方24.113.5穆德樂Because we can listening music. Sept.23: I hate take the medicine. 糾正: take the-taking25.120.5賈仕豪：in Saturday afternoon, I swimmed in the big river. I backed with my father. 糾正：inon; swimmedswam；backedreturned （某天的上下午晚上介詞用法錯(cuò)誤；不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤；動(dòng)詞錯(cuò)用）Sept.23: If I want my dream come true, I have to work hard from now. 糾正：If I want my dream to come true.（want動(dòng)詞的賓語和賓補(bǔ)用法錯(cuò)誤）26.117.5郭要?jiǎng)?chuàng)：Although today is tired, but I feel very happy because it made me relaxing. Sept.23: I will take my family travel around the world. 糾正：travel前加to /I believe I must can come true my dream. 糾正：must can 改為will。 my dream will come true. 27.119.5栗亞芳：during the two and half hours; We live on the sixth floor, usually has no water. I went out to buy some thing to use. 糾正：half前加a; usually前加and, I前加So （邏輯思維錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: Ill go on my study if I have a chance after university. 糾正：on后加with; after后加graduating from（動(dòng)詞短語介詞搭配錯(cuò)誤）28.114吳玥瑾：We have a outing to do ourselfs things; the first, we buy ourselvess own things; we go to the bookstore to look the books, 省略號(hào)的用法; we will rleturn school; 糾正: We had an outing to do our own things. First, we bought things for our daily use. Then we went into a bookstore to look through the books. /省略號(hào)/we would return to school. （動(dòng)詞過去時(shí)用法錯(cuò)誤；動(dòng)作排序錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: It doesnt only my thinks but also my familys thinks. My family wants me to become a doctor as my aunt.糾正: doesntisnt; thinksidea; thinks-thinking; wants-want; aslike （動(dòng)詞與名詞用法錯(cuò)誤；助動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤）29.113揚(yáng)亞明：I would like to go bookshop and read interesting book; I may be walk along the center street; This is my action on every Saturday afternoon糾正: go后加to the; book-books/ may be改為 may 或者M(jìn)aybe放前面；center streetmain street. /This is my actionThose are my activities. （名詞的特指錯(cuò)誤；maybe與may的用法；action與activites用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: The healthy body is my premise to work hard for my success. 糾正: premiseprecondition （結(jié)論的前提與做事情的前提的區(qū)別）30.115.5朱亞靜：Reading is a good habits; I has no time to do that; I wish there is more time that belongs 31.116關(guān)夢(mèng)哲：in every Saturday afternoon; do some personal thing. Such as go shopping; we came back school. We went to classroom; on last Saturday糾正: inon; thing-things, for example, going shopping. After we came back to school, we went to our classroom last Saturday. （邏輯思維表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I hoped I can fly So that I can fly around the world to see beautiful sights. Every one all have their own dream.糾正：I hoped I could fly so that I could fly around the word to see beautiful sights. I am sure that I must became a singer./Every oneEveryone; havehas; dreamdreams; must becamewill become （邏輯思維表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: There is one dream I would like to come true best. I will keep working for making money. 糾正: to后加make; best-most. / for makingto make （最想與最喜歡用法錯(cuò)誤；實(shí)現(xiàn)come true與realize的用法錯(cuò)誤） in糾正: Because-,because./they后加were. （從句單獨(dú)成句錯(cuò)誤；句子缺謂語）Sept.23: This must come true. 糾正: must-will （漢語影響錯(cuò)誤）32.120.5王帥舉33.104.5趙佳磊: Luckily, my school allowed us to have a Saturday afternoon off to have a rest. I saw a lot of students doing what they want to do, for example, Some students played basket at playground, others went shopping like me. We found many books on shelives, 糾正: allowed-allows; （時(shí)態(tài)都變成一般時(shí)）want to do中的do去掉；aton the; wentgo; shelivesshelves （一般時(shí)用法錯(cuò)誤；背誦功底太差）Sept.23: As long as I can keep it, I think the success will be closer and closer from me. 糾正: keep后加at, be-get; fromto （keep的堅(jiān)持與保存的用法）34.113呂夢(mèng)麗：I will go out to bookshop. Sept.23: Their dream is different. 糾正: dream isdreams are 35.111孫璐娟：the students can going out; We went to the shop to bought shoes. I can make myself to do things that I like. Sept.23: I wanted to be a dancer. I think they are very beautiful, and can showing themselves on the TV. 糾正：I wanted to be a dancer. I think they are very beautiful, and can show off themselves on TV.36.120.5朱亞強(qiáng)：Because when the weeekly Saturday outing comes, we will have two hours to go out of school. Sept.23: 朱亞強(qiáng)：I should be confidenc, strong, and encouage. So that, I am able to come true my dreams. 糾正：I should be confident, storng, and full of couage. If so, I am able to make m dreams come true.37.118.5鄭蘇晗：There were kinds of books. Sept.23: I I want to be a doctor when I grow up. I think its very proud. Because I can save patients.Design many hard and high buildings. 糾正: its very proudit makes me feel quite proud to be one. BecauseThis is because. hardstrong. 38.114付曉彎：there food were delicious and the service were good. Sept.23: I think I would be relaxed if I was a teacher. And I feel it is a good way for us to study all life. 糾正： I were a teacher. /Somehow, my dream get changes. 糾正：Somehow, my dream may get changed.39.86高先卡：We have a way to leave away school to into the society; study goods, 糾正：away去掉（漢語習(xí)慣影響錯(cuò)誤）；to 后加step/go; society前the去掉：（抽象名詞泛指前不加冠詞）study goodsthings for study use（漢語思維影響錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: My dream have a lot. 糾正: I have a lot of dreams. （漢語思維影響錯(cuò)誤） Ill try my best to keep my patients In health. 糾正：to keep my patients in healthkeep my patients free from illness. （邏輯思維錯(cuò)誤）40.98.5張一波：go out school, do everything that we would, y, g,的書寫，it bring many happy for me糾正: I go out of school and do everything that we want to. It brings much happiness to me. （動(dòng)詞與介詞搭配錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23. Listen careful糾正: carefulcarefully （形容詞付詞用法錯(cuò)誤）42.120郭亞蒙：I go to the library see her. 糾正: I went to the library to see her. I see the people around me who is ill. 糾正: the去掉；is-are（時(shí)態(tài)與不定式表目的用法錯(cuò)誤；關(guān)系代詞的單復(fù)數(shù)錯(cuò)誤）41.98.5楊肖肖： I went to school with happy. 糾正：with happyhappily Sept.23 : I want to be a artist, then I can do something that I want to do in my life. 糾正：a-an; , then-. If so; want to do中的do去掉。（斷句錯(cuò)誤；漢語影響錯(cuò)誤）43.104.5雪夢(mèng)迪：I was very enjoy the CDs. Sept.23: Have a dream is very important for everybody. 糾正: Have-Having44.109尚培培：the first time, I wash my black hairs; come to schooldoor out along; these have many things; I hang out with her（好）；we talk about learning ways and encourage others to study well; its the first time I have been come out along. I am full of happy. 糾正：First, I wash my black hair. Then I come out of the school gate alone; these havethere are; otherseach other; the first time I have come out alone. I am full of happiness. （first與frist time用法錯(cuò)誤；hair與hairs用法錯(cuò)誤；是某人做某事的第幾次用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: Youre sure to come true your dream as long as you keep your dream all the time. 糾正: come true-realize; keep后加working at （實(shí)現(xiàn)用法錯(cuò)誤；堅(jiān)持或不斷做某事用法錯(cuò)誤）45.116李鳳娟：We have our own time to do anything what we like. Such as, wash our clothes, play sports, go shopping and so on; 糾正: whatthat; such as washing our clothes, playing sports, going shopping and so on. （what與that用法錯(cuò)誤；such as介詞用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: Everyone has dream, of course I also have dream. 糾正: has dreamhas a dream; of courseOf course; have dreamhave one （可數(shù)名詞表泛指用法錯(cuò)誤）46.109陳哲：We all very happy; 糾正：We后加are. （句子缺謂語）Sept.23: I want to be a doctor, I can help many people out of danger. I hope the world will be filled with happy, not sad.糾正：I前加so that; happy-happiness; sadsadness （主從句邏輯思維錯(cuò)誤；形容詞與名詞用法錯(cuò)誤）47.114.5 劉煒博48.86任廣明：I taked shawer first. There has many things.Sept.23: They all are doctors. A doctor can only help a little of people.糾正: all areare all; a little ofa few49.104周俊召：I returned to school with happy and tired. Sept.23 The most important thing after I finish my college is make lot of money. 糾正：make前加to50.102余佳鶴：Then we going into library, There were many useful books, we saw fifty minutes, final, I bought a dictionary. 糾正: Then we went into the library, where there were many useful books. We read fifty minutes. Finally, I borrowed a dictionary. （謂語動(dòng)詞與非謂語動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤；名詞的特指；主從句之間邏輯關(guān)系；動(dòng)詞混用）Sept.23: I will told me I become a doctor. 糾正: me-myself; told-tell （反身人稱代詞用法錯(cuò)誤；動(dòng)詞形式錯(cuò)誤）51.127郭田田：At six fourty; my begain Sept.23: I can make them knowledgble. 糾正: knowledgbleknowledgable. 52.107.5劉蘭蘭：I really would to stay there for a long time. 糾正：would to-want to （情態(tài)動(dòng)詞后多加to）Sept.23: I change ideaI changed my mind. （動(dòng)詞搭配錯(cuò)誤）53.99宋孟龍：I find out a book is called Qing Hua.; it helps me to get succeed; 糾正: I found a book which is called ; it can help me to get success. （定語與謂語用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: Become a great people is my first dream. 糾正: Become-Becoming; people-person54.80閆世航：We have two hours time for do my thing. 糾正：two hours timetwo hours time或者把time去掉；for do my thingto do my things. （時(shí)間所有格錯(cuò)誤；表目的不定式錯(cuò)誤） Sept.23: The police is a danger work. 糾正: To be a policeman is a dangerous job. （表職業(yè)與個(gè)人的用法錯(cuò)誤）55.82焦露雨：last my weekly Saturday, I spent an hour traveling to Ru River. 糾正: During my last weekly Saturday outing, I spent an hour touring the Ru River. （travel與tour用法錯(cuò)誤）56.92孫帥奇：I chated with parents; there is all things糾正：chatedchatted; Thats all. （動(dòng)詞形式錯(cuò)誤；固定表達(dá)法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I think doctor is great. 糾正：doctor前加a （冠詞用法錯(cuò)誤）57.103.5鄭飛鵬：I take my dirty clothes ready go home. I take phone for my mother, but not anyone, I eat food when after take a shower 糾正: I took my dirty clothes ready to go home. I took a photo of my mother, but not everyone. I had food after taking a shower. （過去時(shí)用法錯(cuò)誤；給某人照像和為某人照像混用）Sept.23 Well done. 58.96胡文韜：Others going out surf on internet. We have two hours, dont be allowed being late糾正：going out-go out; we have two hours free time and are not allowed to be late. （謂語動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤；allow句型錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I always listen to music, although the study is very important. 糾正: the study-study （抽象名詞用法錯(cuò)誤）59.103李江：I begin to have eating because no have meat at school. 糾正：I begin to eat because there is no meal at school. （吃有法混用“有”句型混用）60.114.5董朋軒：And the teachers also can let students make good progress. 糾正：And the teachers can also help students make good progress. 61.100.5王寧寧：We bought some things what we need. Else, we bought some bananas. 糾正: whatthat或some things 去掉; elsebesides （what與that混用錯(cuò)誤；過渡詞用法錯(cuò)誤）62.103方利男：We can do things that we want to do. A small of students choose to stay at school; 糾正：we want to do改為we want to. /A small后加number (不定式避免重復(fù)保留to; 少數(shù)表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤) Sept. 23: Some places are used to going sightseeing. 糾正：Some places are kept for sightseeing. （漢語思維影響錯(cuò)誤）63.94.5王曉廣64.109郭泫洋：I have almost three hours that can go out of school. I dont go out of school sometimes. I may have some time that I can play ping-pang ball. 糾正：thatwhen（定語從句連詞用法錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I think the sights must be different from Chinese. 糾正：I think the sights must be differnet from those in China. （指代中的those用法錯(cuò)誤）65.88揚(yáng)亮亮66.100張夢(mèng)曉：I met my middle classmate. 67.66.5尚子麗：I eat a noodles. I bought a jeans. 糾正：a noodlesa bowl of noodles; a jeansa pair of jeans(量詞用法錯(cuò)誤)68.101單梁：I always hav two hours for free. I always fell hungry. Sept.23: Playing basketball can make me relaxing. 糾正: relaxingrelaxed. 69.65.5李浩：I finded my sister. 糾正：findedfound （不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞形式錯(cuò)誤）Sept.23: I looked many people meet difficult. 糾正：I saw many people meeting with difficulties. （英語句式表達(dá)錯(cuò)誤）. 70.56孫孩：I was played computer game use me one hour. Sept.23: Though my dream not true, I can live up to study hard. 糾正: not true-may not come/live up to后加it; to study hard-by studying hard. 71.87程亞洲：Through I could change my dream, I will go all out for to succeed. Though I could change my dream, I will go all out for it to try to succeed. (動(dòng)詞搭配錯(cuò)誤)72.100郝藝江73.67.5聶文佳：I go to shopping buy some foods take school. We always very happy go to school糾正: I go shopping to buy some food to bring to school. Were always very happy to go to school. （情感形容詞與不定式連用錯(cuò)誤）I can nose out the culture in the world and study a lot of knowledges. 糾正: study-learn; knowledges-knowledge（學(xué)習(xí)與學(xué)會(huì)的用法