關(guān)于朱自清《匆匆》的兩種英語(yǔ)譯文對(duì)比與分析

1、關(guān)于朱自清匆匆的兩種英語(yǔ)譯文對(duì)比與賞析組員介紹：vPPT前期制作：。前期制作：。vPPT制作：。制作：。vPPT演講：。演講：。譯文作者：譯文作者：譯文一作者：朱純深譯文一作者：朱純深譯文二作者：張培基譯文二作者：張培基 12一一 、題目的對(duì)比、題目的對(duì)比譯文一：譯文一：Rush （translated by Zhu Chunshen）譯文二：譯文二：Transient Days (translated by Zhang Peiji) rush：a situation in which you are in a hurry and need to do things quickly倉(cāng)促行事，行

2、事匆忙，做事草率倉(cāng)促行事，行事匆忙，做事草率 Transient :continuing for only a short time短暫的，轉(zhuǎn)瞬短暫的，轉(zhuǎn)瞬即逝的倏忽即逝的倏忽 相比之下，相比之下，rush形容時(shí)間略帶貶義，張培基的形容時(shí)間略帶貶義，張培基的transient更符合時(shí)更符合時(shí)間的特性，也符合作者表達(dá)時(shí)間匆匆溜走的原意。間的特性，也符合作者表達(dá)時(shí)間匆匆溜走的原意。二、燕子去了，有再來(lái)的時(shí)候；楊柳枯了，二、燕子去了，有再來(lái)的時(shí)候；楊柳枯了，有再青的時(shí)候；桃花謝了，有再開(kāi)的時(shí)候。有再青的時(shí)候；桃花謝了，有再開(kāi)的時(shí)候。譯文一：譯文一：Swallows may have gone, bu

3、t there is a time of return; willow trees may have died back, but there is a time of regreening ; peach blossoms may have fallen, but they will bloom again.譯文二：譯文二：If swallows go away, they will come back again. If willows wither, they will turn green again. If peach blossoms fade, they will flower

4、again. （1）die back: if a plant dies back, it loses its leaves but remains alive 葉凋而不死葉凋而不死 wither: if a plant withers or sth withers it, it dries up and dies 枯萎，凋謝枯萎，凋謝 張譯的張譯的wither只是單純描繪樹(shù)枯只是單純描繪樹(shù)枯 ，而，而die back卻讓我們感受到生命在卻讓我們感受到生命在輪回中的交替更新。輪回中的交替更新。 （2）朱純深的譯文句式表達(dá)很好，正好與漢語(yǔ)的句式相當(dāng)，并且把句子的內(nèi)在含朱純深的譯文句式表達(dá)很好，正好

5、與漢語(yǔ)的句式相當(dāng)，并且把句子的內(nèi)在含義表轉(zhuǎn)折的意思表達(dá)出來(lái)。若將最后一句修改為和前句句式相同，這樣譯文就更義表轉(zhuǎn)折的意思表達(dá)出來(lái)。若將最后一句修改為和前句句式相同，這樣譯文就更顯工整。顯工整。三、三、但是，聰明的，你告訴我，我們的日子但是，聰明的，你告訴我，我們的日子為什么一去不復(fù)返呢？為什么一去不復(fù)返呢？譯文一：譯文一：Now, you the wise, tell me, why should our days leave us, never to return? 譯文二：譯文二：But, tell me, you the wise, why should our days go by n

6、ever to return? （1） 原文中雖有原文中雖有“但是但是”一詞，但朱自清并非有表示轉(zhuǎn)折的一詞，但朱自清并非有表示轉(zhuǎn)折的意思，張培基此處直譯，使得譯文略遜一籌。意思，張培基此處直譯，使得譯文略遜一籌。 （2）leave一詞有擬人的意義在里面，形容時(shí)間如人般離去，蘊(yùn)含了一詞有擬人的意義在里面，形容時(shí)間如人般離去，蘊(yùn)含了時(shí)間的惋惜和感嘆之情，而時(shí)間的惋惜和感嘆之情，而go by表示單純表示時(shí)間的流逝，單調(diào)乏表示單純表示時(shí)間的流逝，單調(diào)乏味，缺乏生動(dòng)與美感。味，缺乏生動(dòng)與美感。四、是有人偷了他們吧：那是誰(shuí)？又藏在何四、是有人偷了他們吧：那是誰(shuí)？又藏在何處呢？是他們自己逃走了吧：現(xiàn)在又到了

7、哪處呢？是他們自己逃走了吧：現(xiàn)在又到了哪里呢？里呢？譯文一：譯文一：If they had been stolen by someone, who could it be? Where could he hide then? If they had made the escape themselves, then where could they stay at the moment?譯文二：譯文二：Perhaps they have just run away by themselves. But where could they be at the present moment? 朱純深的

8、譯文忠實(shí)于原文，而張培基譯文更顯連貫，多使朱純深的譯文忠實(shí)于原文，而張培基譯文更顯連貫，多使用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，更顯客觀。用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，更顯客觀。五、五、我不知道他們給了我多少日子；但我我不知道他們給了我多少日子；但我的手確乎是漸漸空虛了。的手確乎是漸漸空虛了。譯文一：譯文一：I do not know how many days I have been given to spend, but I do feel my hands are getting empty.譯文二：譯文二： I dont know how many days I am entitled to altogether, but m

9、y quota of them is undoubtedly wearing away. wear away :to become, or make sth become, gradually thinner or smoother by continuously using or rubbing it 磨光磨光 、磨薄，也可以指時(shí)間的流逝、磨薄，也可以指時(shí)間的流逝 ，以此烘托出作者內(nèi)心的空虛，以此烘托出作者內(nèi)心的空虛與無(wú)奈與無(wú)奈 。 Empty：have nothing inside empty貌似忠實(shí)于原文貌似忠實(shí)于原文 ，實(shí)則缺乏內(nèi)涵意義，實(shí)則缺乏內(nèi)涵意義 ，更容易產(chǎn)生歧義。，更容易產(chǎn)生

10、歧義。六、六、在默默里算著，八千多日子已經(jīng)從我手在默默里算著，八千多日子已經(jīng)從我手中溜去；中溜去；譯文一：譯文一： Taking stock silently, I find that more than eight thousand days has already slid away from me. 譯文二：譯文二： Counting up silently, I find that more than 8,000 days have already slipped away through my fingers. take stock （of sth.)：to think carefu

11、lly about the things that have happened in a situation in order to decide what to do next (對(duì)某事物對(duì)某事物)作出估計(jì)評(píng)判作出估計(jì)評(píng)判,判斷，估量判斷，估量 Counting up：to calculate the total number of people, things, etc. in a particular group. 原作中，原作中， 朱自清在下文對(duì)日子還做了比喻，即引發(fā)了對(duì)時(shí)間的思考。朱自清在下文對(duì)日子還做了比喻，即引發(fā)了對(duì)時(shí)間的思考。結(jié)合上下文，可知朱純深的結(jié)合上下文，可知朱純深的“t

12、aking stock即即(對(duì)某事物對(duì)某事物)作出估計(jì)作出估計(jì)評(píng)判評(píng)判,判斷，估量判斷，估量”恰恰符合對(duì)時(shí)間的思考，而恰恰符合對(duì)時(shí)間的思考，而count up較多強(qiáng)調(diào)對(duì)較多強(qiáng)調(diào)對(duì)日子的計(jì)算，并未體現(xiàn)出朱自清對(duì)時(shí)間的感慨。日子的計(jì)算，并未體現(xiàn)出朱自清對(duì)時(shí)間的感慨。七、像針尖上一滴水滴在大海里，我的七、像針尖上一滴水滴在大海里，我的日子滴在時(shí)間的流里，沒(méi)有聲音，也沒(méi)日子滴在時(shí)間的流里，沒(méi)有聲音，也沒(méi)有影子。有影子。譯文一：譯文一：Like a drop of water from the point of a needle disappearing into the ocean, my days

13、are dripping into the stream of time, soundless, traceless.譯文二譯文二:Like a drop of water falling off a needle point into the ocean, my days are quietly dripping into the stream of time without leaving a trace. 兩位作者采用了不同的用詞，disappearing into，falling into兩詞中，disappearing into 更好的表現(xiàn)了間的來(lái)去匆匆，消逝的不留痕跡。而張培基旳譯文中，用了的falling into和后文的disappearing into也略顯重復(fù)意味。七、七、我不禁汗涔涔而淚潸潸了。我不禁汗涔涔而淚潸潸了。譯文一：譯文一：Already sweat is starting on my forehead, and tears welling up in my eyes.譯文二：譯文二：At the thought of this, sweat oozes from my forehead and tears trickle down my cheeks. 朱純深譯文中朱純深譯文中 start只是簡(jiǎn)單