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1、'.162 Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.Nowadays, the annual incomes of many sports stars and film stars come to millions of dollars. Some peop

2、le claim that their salaries are too high. Yet, in my opinion, such salaries are well deserved. They work hard to;.'.become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries. (50)First,famousathletesandentertainers makepainstakingefforts to achieve fame. Fame isa wonderful

3、 thing to have, but itseldomappearsovernight.Famous people haveworkedhard for years to achieve theirfame today and they have tocontinue to their good work tomaintain it. For their hard work,sports andentertainingstars;.'.deserve to be generously rewarded. Unfortunately, people tend to focus on t

4、he huge amounts of money made by them. They rarely appreciate the efforts that athletes and entertainers have to make in order to achieve the fame they have today. For example, in order to win the first place in a 100-metre dash, an athlete has to cover hundreds of miles during training. Famous star

5、s deserve their high salaries because they have worked hard. (129);.'.Second, sports and entertaining stars provide us with good entertainment. On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dio

6、n. These people help us make good use of our free time by entertaining us.As a result, we feel inspired as well as relaxed. In other words, we feel energetic again after attending the events. We even;.'.feel that we have more to enjoy in life and have new aspirations. For such reasons, these peo

7、ple are worth their high salaries. (98)Third, athletes and entertainers win honors for their countries. For example, after four years hard work, many athletes win gold medals at the Olympics Games. They are able to make millions of dollars a year after the games. Such high salaries are justified, be

8、cause these;.'.athletes have won honors for their countries in the most competitive arena and have made their people proud, something few people can even dream of. This is true for entertainers as well. Many actors and actresses receive high salaries after they have won Oscars or prizes at Canne

9、s Film Festival. These people also deserve high salaries, because they have made a name in films for their country and have made their country better known by;.'.people elsewhere in the world. (125)All in all, famous athletes and entertainers merit their high salaries, for their hard work, enter

10、tainment they provide, and their contribution to their country. If I had a chance, I would be a famous star who can make millions of dollars a year.(43) (475)1.總體分析 :;.'.觀 點 文章扣題緊密，首段明確表展開 態(tài)，主體段都有明確的主題句，主題句后都給出了恰當(dāng)?shù)睦雍徒忉?。組 織 經(jīng)典五段式，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，體結(jié)構(gòu) 現(xiàn)了統(tǒng)一、遞進(jìn)和連貫。選詞恰當(dāng)，詞匯多變；句型語 言 豐富，且有一定復(fù)雜度，句運用 子長短交替（第四段尤其明顯），

11、長度合理（共475 詞，27 句話，平均每句話17.6個詞）。;.'.2.文章結(jié)構(gòu)：首段：使用了“漏斗魚鉤”。第一句介紹背景，第二話介紹別人觀點，過渡到題目話題，第三句話表明作者觀點，第四句話預(yù)示下文內(nèi)容。主體段：主題句 +例子和解釋末段：銜接詞+ 復(fù)述本文主題+ 簡明總結(jié)主要論點 + 作者的期待3.語言積累：3(1).精華詞匯和短語;.'.中 文大意明星薪水（高薪）文中表達(dá)sports stars and film stars athletes and entertainers famous peoplesportsandentertainingstarsfamous sta

12、rsactors and actresseshigh salaries are well-deserveddeserve to be generously rewardedareworththeirhigh;.'.salarieshigh salaries are justified merit their high salaries成名become famous achieve fame make a namemake their country better knownbe a famous star提供 provide entertainment娛樂by entertaining

13、 us;.'.為 國爭光努力感 到振奮win honorsmake their people proud contributionwork hardmake painstaking effortsfeel inspired as well as relaxedfeel energetichave new aspirations;.'.3(2). 亮點句型：句型 1：On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion.點評：注意平行結(jié)構(gòu)的使用。這樣有美感的句型寫起來雖然很難，但是至少是努力的方向。文中類似的平行結(jié)構(gòu)： They workhard to become famous, provideentertainment for us, and winhonors for their countries.;.'.句型 2：S