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1、162 Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.Nowadays, the annual incomes of many sports stars and film stars come to millions of dollars. Some people cla

2、im that their salaries are too high. Yet, in my opinion, such salaries are well deserved. They work hard to become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries. (50)First, famous athletes and entertainers make painstaking efforts to achieve fame. Fame is a wonderful thing

3、 to have, but it seldom appears overnight. Famous people have worked hard for years to achieve their fame today and they have to continue to their good work to maintain it. For their hard work, sports and entertaining stars deserve to be generously rewarded. Unfortunately, people tend to focus on th

4、e huge amounts of money made by them. They rarely appreciate the efforts that athletes and entertainers have to make in order to achieve the fame they have today. For example, in order to win the first place in a 100-metre dash, an athlete has to cover hundreds of miles during training. Famous stars

5、 deserve their high salaries because they have worked hard. (129)Second, sports and entertaining stars provide us with good entertainment. On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion. These

6、people help us make good use of our free time by entertaining us. As a result, we feel inspired as well as relaxed. In other words, we feel energetic again after attending the events. We even feel that we have more to enjoy in life and have new aspirations. For such reasons, these people are worth t

7、heir high salaries. (98)Third, athletes and entertainers win honors for their countries. For example, after four years hard work, many athletes win gold medals at the Olympics Games. They are able to make millions of dollars a year after the games. Such high salaries are justified, because these ath

8、letes have won honors for their countries in the most competitive arena and have made their people proud, something few people can even dream of. This is true for entertainers as well. Many actors and actresses receive high salaries after they have won Oscars or prizes at Cannes Film Festival. These

9、 people also deserve high salaries, because they have made a name in films for their country and have made their country better known by people elsewhere in the world. (125)All in all, famous athletes and entertainers merit their high salaries, for their hard work, entertainment they provide, and th

10、eir contribution to their country. If I had a chance, I would be a famous star who can make millions of dollars a year. (43) (475)1.總體分析:觀點(diǎn)展開文章扣題緊密，首段明確表態(tài)，主體段都有明確的主題句，主題句后都給出了恰當(dāng)?shù)睦雍徒忉?。組織結(jié)構(gòu)經(jīng)典五段式，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，體現(xiàn)了統(tǒng)一、遞進(jìn)和連貫。語言運(yùn)用選詞恰當(dāng)，詞匯多變；句型豐富，且有一定復(fù)雜度，句子長短交替（第四段尤其明顯），長度合理（共475詞，27句話，平均每句話17.6個詞）。2.文章結(jié)構(gòu)：首段：使用了“漏斗魚

11、鉤”。第一句介紹背景，第二話介紹別人觀點(diǎn)，過渡到題目話題，第三句話表明作者觀點(diǎn)，第四句話預(yù)示下文內(nèi)容。主體段：主題句+例子和解釋末段：銜接詞 + 復(fù)述本文主題 + 簡明總結(jié)主要論點(diǎn) + 作者的期待3.語言積累：3(1).精華詞匯和短語中文大意文中表達(dá)明星sports stars and film stars athletes and entertainers famous peoplesports and entertaining starsfamous stars actors and actresses薪水（高薪）high salaries are well-deserveddeserve

12、 to be generously rewardedare worth their high salarieshigh salaries are justifiedmerit their high salaries成名become famousachieve famemake a namemake their country better known be a famous star 提供娛樂provide entertainmentby entertaining us為國爭光win honors make their people proudcontribution 努力work hardm

13、ake painstaking efforts感到振奮feel inspired as well as relaxedfeel energetichave new aspirations3(2). 亮點(diǎn)句型：句型1：On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion.點(diǎn)評：注意平行結(jié)構(gòu)的使用。這樣有美感的句型寫起來雖然很難，但是至少是努力的方向。文中類似的平行結(jié)構(gòu)：They work hard to become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries.句型2：Such