六級(jí)寫(xiě)作--現(xiàn)象型+高分作文

1、六級(jí)作文六級(jí)作文出題內(nèi)容關(guān)于大學(xué)生的話題關(guān)于大學(xué)生的話題常見(jiàn)的社會(huì)問(wèn)題常見(jiàn)的社會(huì)問(wèn)題出題形式六級(jí)考試作文的出題方式有：六級(jí)考試作文的出題方式有：命題作文，看圖畫(huà)或圖表作文，命題作文，看圖畫(huà)或圖表作文，根據(jù)所給文章根據(jù)所給文章（英文或中文）寫(xiě)出文章摘要或大意，給出關(guān)鍵（英文或中文）寫(xiě)出文章摘要或大意，給出關(guān)鍵詞作文等詞作文等 五個(gè)類(lèi)型 對(duì)立觀點(diǎn)型，社會(huì)現(xiàn)象型，諺語(yǔ)警句型。圖表圖畫(huà)型，應(yīng)用寫(xiě)作型。時(shí)間與字?jǐn)?shù)六級(jí)考試作文要求在30分鐘內(nèi)寫(xiě)出一片不少于150詞的文章，只不過(guò)是比四級(jí)多30多個(gè)字就行了。有的同學(xué)太擔(dān)心字?jǐn)?shù)以至于在考場(chǎng)上就開(kāi)始數(shù)數(shù)。在答在答題卡上平均一行的合理字?jǐn)?shù)為題卡上平均一行的合理字?jǐn)?shù)

2、為8-108-10個(gè)單詞，六級(jí)寫(xiě)個(gè)單詞，六級(jí)寫(xiě)作最合理字?jǐn)?shù)作最合理字?jǐn)?shù)180180左右。左右。3030分鐘的合理安排分鐘的合理安排 5 5（審題和構(gòu)思）（審題和構(gòu)思）+ 20+ 20（正文）（正文）+ 5+ 5（檢查）（檢查） *不建議打草稿，你沒(méi)有時(shí)間也沒(méi)有地方* 可以寫(xiě)出一些關(guān)鍵詞和大綱來(lái)* 最后五分鐘要自查硬傷-檢查語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，連接錯(cuò)誤，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。 重新定義六級(jí)作文寫(xiě)六級(jí)作文不是像寫(xiě)日記那樣把事情表達(dá)清楚就好，而是要想盡辦法使用比較復(fù)雜的詞和句子結(jié)構(gòu)去寫(xiě)出一篇符合要求的文章。大綱解讀：兩大原則書(shū)寫(xiě)工整、卷面整潔、語(yǔ)言第一位、結(jié)構(gòu)第二位、內(nèi)容第三位：語(yǔ)言：基本正確， 無(wú)重大語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤豐富多變

3、（詞匯+句型）結(jié)構(gòu)段數(shù)：3-4段落結(jié)構(gòu)：總分總主題句：翻譯提綱，1句論證：2句小結(jié)：1句金玉良言寫(xiě)好第一句話寫(xiě)好第一句話 多用長(zhǎng)句，少用短句 結(jié)構(gòu)要清晰 多用銜接性的詞組或單詞 詞匯的使用上多使用復(fù)雜詞匯，尤其是六級(jí)詞匯 如有可能，適當(dāng)加上一兩句名言或是諺語(yǔ)，以顯示你見(jiàn)識(shí)的廣博。 文章不要寫(xiě)得太長(zhǎng)。 課后可以這樣練 每天三十分鐘的free writing兩三天后的修改找一個(gè)比你水平低的人，幫他改作文 作文的修改寫(xiě)完兩三天后修改1.語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤2.合并簡(jiǎn)單句3.換詞評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1. 滿分為15分（15%/710分106分）。2. 評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分及14分。各有標(biāo)準(zhǔn)樣卷一至兩份。3

4、. 閱卷人員根據(jù)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，對(duì)照樣卷評(píng)分，若認(rèn)為與某一分?jǐn)?shù)（如8分）相似，即定為該分?jǐn)?shù)（即8分）；若認(rèn)為稍?xún)?yōu)或稍劣于該分?jǐn)?shù)則可加一分（即9分）或減一分（即7分）。但不得加或減半分。4. 4. 評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1414分分 切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性較好?；旧蠠o(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤，僅有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)。較好?；旧蠠o(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤，僅有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)。1111分分 切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。8 8分分 基本切題。有些地方表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文基本切題。有些地方表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文字勉強(qiáng)連貫；語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤相當(dāng)多，其中有

5、一些是嚴(yán)重字勉強(qiáng)連貫；語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤相當(dāng)多，其中有一些是嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。錯(cuò)誤。5 5分分 基本切題。表達(dá)思想不清楚，連貫性差。有基本切題。表達(dá)思想不清楚，連貫性差。有較多的嚴(yán)重語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。較多的嚴(yán)重語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。2 2分分 條理不清，思路紊亂，語(yǔ)言支離破碎或大部條理不清，思路紊亂，語(yǔ)言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，且多數(shù)為嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，且多數(shù)為嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。 注：白卷注：白卷, , 作文與題目毫不相關(guān)，或只有幾個(gè)孤立的作文與題目毫不相關(guān)，或只有幾個(gè)孤立的詞，無(wú)法表達(dá)思想，則給詞，無(wú)法表達(dá)思想，則給0 0分。分。現(xiàn)象解釋現(xiàn)象解釋/ /漫畫(huà)漫畫(huà)第一段：引入現(xiàn)象（好現(xiàn)象居多）， 補(bǔ)充例子第二段： 分析問(wèn)題 給

6、出原因第三段：闡述影響 預(yù)測(cè)趨勢(shì)問(wèn)題解決型基本上是提出一個(gè)壞的社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，讓你分析原因或者影響，然后提出對(duì)策第一段：引入現(xiàn)象，補(bǔ)充例子第二段：分析原因， 闡述影響第三段：提出對(duì)策， 加以解決第一段可借鑒的模板The prevalence ofThe prevalence of _has been a grave has been a grave problem in our society. Almost every day problem in our society. Almost every day newspapers carry articles pertaining to(newsp

7、apers carry articles pertaining to(關(guān)關(guān)于于)_)_. For example ,_. Although Although measures have been implemented to deal with measures have been implemented to deal with this problem, it still remains a serious threat.this problem, it still remains a serious threat.第二段闡明危害The consequence of _ is obviou

8、s. (_ can no doubt generate/trigger/bring severe consequences if we hear no evil, smell no evil. ) For one thing, _. For another thing, _. Whats more,_(if needed)結(jié)尾段1. 提出對(duì)策。三個(gè)萬(wàn)能措施：呼吁政府、加大懲罰、提高意識(shí)、In conclusion, it is imperative for us to take effective measures to reverse the disturbing phenomenon. T

9、o begin with, we should appeal to our authorities to make strict laws to control A. Furthermore, Punishment should be enhanced to give enough warning to _ A. Finally,. we should enhance the awareness of people about Only in this way can we _. With tough With tough laws and an educated public,laws an

10、d an educated public, _ will become a will become a thing of the past.thing of the past.DRUNKEN DRIVING 1 醉酒駕車(chē)日益增多 2 醉酒駕車(chē)的危害 3 如何減少醉酒駕車(chē) The prevalence ofThe prevalence of drunken driving has has been a grave problem in our society which been a grave problem in our society which arouse public concern

11、. Almost every day arouse public concern. Almost every day newspapers and TV alike carry articles newspapers and TV alike carry articles and news pertaining to accidents of and news pertaining to accidents of drunken drivingdrunken driving. For example ,in Hangzhou, a drunken driver deprived 9 peopl

12、es lives. Although measures have Although measures have been implemented to deal with this been implemented to deal with this problem, it still remains a serious blem, it still remains a serious threat.It is obvious that drunken driving can no doubt generate severe consequences if we hear

13、no evil, smell no evil. For one thing, and the most important, it could easily trigger accidents which often result in the death of people and broken of families, with parents loosing their only child, children loosing their dependable supporters, and lovers loosing their beloved ones. For another t

14、hing, it is also no easy for the driver and his family. The reason is obvious-financial burden , inevitably involved in this phenomenon because economic compensation to the victims is necessary. In conclusion, it is imperative for us to take effective measures to reverse the disturbing phenomenon. T

15、o begin with, we should appeal to our authorities to make strict laws to control drunken driving. Furthermore, Punishment should be enhanced to give enough warning to this phenomenon. Finally,. we , as a citizen who has consciousness, should enhance the awareness of people about the hazards of drunk

16、en driving. Only in this way can we minimize the negative effects of this phenomenon， reduce the frequency and ultimately eliminate this threatening behavior.高分作文高分作文詞匯準(zhǔn)確多樣詞匯準(zhǔn)確多樣句式復(fù)雜有力句式復(fù)雜有力用詞準(zhǔn)確多樣用詞準(zhǔn)確多樣一、準(zhǔn)確性一、準(zhǔn)確性比如在圖表類(lèi)作文當(dāng)中比如在圖表類(lèi)作文當(dāng)中, , 我們會(huì)經(jīng)常表達(dá)我們會(huì)經(jīng)常表達(dá)“有很有很大的增長(zhǎng)大的增長(zhǎng)”， 很多會(huì)寫(xiě)成很多會(huì)寫(xiě)成-a big increase.-a big i

17、ncrease.不夠準(zhǔn)確，我們應(yīng)當(dāng)寫(xiě)成不夠準(zhǔn)確，我們應(yīng)當(dāng)寫(xiě)成 a sharp increase.a sharp increase.平時(shí)多注意收集準(zhǔn)確、地道、多樣的用詞，尤其平時(shí)多注意收集準(zhǔn)確、地道、多樣的用詞，尤其注意收集和使用搭配。當(dāng)然是從閱讀中收集。具注意收集和使用搭配。當(dāng)然是從閱讀中收集。具體來(lái)說(shuō)，可以收集以下三種搭配。體來(lái)說(shuō)，可以收集以下三種搭配。形容詞形容詞+ +名詞名詞 如如a sharp increasea sharp increase動(dòng)詞動(dòng)詞+ +名詞名詞 如如make a mistake, commit a crime, make a mistake, commit a cr

18、ime, commit mit suicide.動(dòng)詞動(dòng)詞+ +副詞副詞 如如expand sharply/dramaticallyexpand sharply/dramatically多樣性多樣性 A. A. 用同義詞替代用同義詞替代例例1: A 1: A 對(duì)對(duì) B B很重要很重要. . 1 1）A is important to B.A is important to B.2 2）A plays an important rolepart A plays an important rolepart in B. in B.3 3）A is of importance to B.A is of

19、importance to B.4 4）B cannot livedevelopgrowB cannot livedevelopgrow survive without A. survive without A.5 5）A is to B what the foundation is to a skyscraper A is to B what the foundation is to a skyscraper water is to fish.water is to fish.6 6）A is essential/significant/A is essential/significant/

20、 crucial/critical /vital to B. crucial/critical /vital to B.7 7）The importance of A to B can never be The importance of A to B can never be exaggerateddenied ignored.exaggerateddenied ignored. 例例2 2 ，不同國(guó)家不同背景的人在不同，不同國(guó)家不同背景的人在不同場(chǎng)合有著不同的觀點(diǎn)。場(chǎng)合有著不同的觀點(diǎn)。 Different people with different personal backgrounds

21、 in different countries have different opinions on different occasions.Different在不同場(chǎng)合的同義詞有unlike、dissimilar（不同的，不一樣的），distinct、separate（個(gè)別的，單獨(dú)的），various、assorted（各種各樣的，多樣的）這句話可以改為：Different people with unlike personal backgrounds in various countries have varying opinions on changed occasions.其實(shí)表達(dá)類(lèi)似

22、意思還可以寫(xiě)成：Peoples opinion differ/vary/diverge as to 例例3 3：如今，越來(lái)越多的人將越來(lái)越多：如今，越來(lái)越多的人將越來(lái)越多的時(shí)間花在了看越來(lái)越多的電視節(jié)目的時(shí)間花在了看越來(lái)越多的電視節(jié)目上上Nowadays，more and more people are spending more and more leisure time watching more and more television programs.建議改第一個(gè)more and more為a rising/increasing/growing number of，第二個(gè)more an

23、d more 為a liona lions share ofs share of（最大的份額），最后一組more and more 可以改為：a kaleidoscope/a kaleidoscope/ kladskop / of / of (萬(wàn)花筒一般的)。例四、First-year students may encounter discouraging problems when they enter universities on the very first day. For example, first-year students are very likely to get los

24、t as to where first-year students can find cafeterias.these new-comers / these freshmen (同義詞) they (代詞)使用上義詞或代詞避免重復(fù)使用上義詞或代詞避免重復(fù)上義詞就是表示類(lèi)概念的詞，下義詞表示屬概念，上義詞和下義詞之間的關(guān)系是：下義詞屬于上義詞 The flower blooms inside the greenhouse, but the flower withers when the flower is put outside. 這句話出現(xiàn)了三個(gè)flower，可以將第二個(gè)flower改為它的上

25、義詞plant，第三個(gè)改為it.把小詞變成大詞在所有可能的同義詞的詞群中挑選出更有難度的詞，拔高用詞等級(jí)詞匯高級(jí)化范本The development of 21st century has seen a big change in social, cultural and technological fields.The advent of 21st century has witnessed a profound change in social,cultural and technological arenas/ rin /競(jìng)技場(chǎng).例1：He broke the window in his

26、 anger. 他一怒之下砸碎了窗戶(hù)。He broke the window in his rage/furry表達(dá)就更加豐富了例2Your suitcase is rather heavy-what have you got in it? 你的手提箱很沉，里面都放了些什么啊？heavyweightyponderous例3It is a very cold night. 這天晚上很冷。It is a freezing night.It is a icy night.It is a frosty night.最長(zhǎng)用的單詞例：認(rèn)為 Think, believe, insist, maintain,

27、 assert, conclude, deem, hold, argue, be convinced, be firmly convinced, be fully convinced優(yōu)勢(shì) ：Advantage, merit, virtue, benefit, upside, strength重要的：Key, crucial, critical, important, significant, vital, substantial, indispensable, imperative急劇地：Dramatically，drastically，sharply，hugely，enormously，st

28、eeply， substantially，considerably，significantly，markedly，surprisingly， strikingly，radically，remarkably，vastly，noticeably 句型閃光句型閃光被動(dòng)優(yōu)先句子復(fù)雜（定從，狀從）一個(gè)強(qiáng)調(diào)一個(gè)倒裝一個(gè)虛擬被動(dòng)優(yōu)先大家要養(yǎng)成習(xí)慣隨便寫(xiě)做個(gè)主動(dòng)的句子都要考慮能不能改成被動(dòng)句 原句：We should take effective measures to stop various forms of pollution.變?yōu)镋ffective measures should be taken t

29、o stop various forms of pollution.漢語(yǔ)中的無(wú)主句1）What should one do in a case like this?What should be done in a case like this?句子擴(kuò)展句子擴(kuò)展你老用簡(jiǎn)單句沒(méi)有錯(cuò)。但是如果一點(diǎn)復(fù)雜句都沒(méi)有那么肯定不會(huì)有高分。-Reading makes a full man; Writing makes an -Reading makes a full man; Writing makes an exact man exact man ，閱讀造就了一個(gè)完備的人，寫(xiě)作造就閱讀造就了一個(gè)完備的人，寫(xiě)

30、作造就了一個(gè)準(zhǔn)確的人了一個(gè)準(zhǔn)確的人。添油加醋法添油加醋法 我畢業(yè)于交通大學(xué)，寫(xiě)成：I graduated from Jiaotong University這樣的句子只是一個(gè)SV結(jié)構(gòu)的簡(jiǎn)單句， 怎么辦？I graduated with honors from Jiaotong I graduated with honors from Jiaotong University, one of the most prestigious University, one of the most prestigious universities in China, in 1999, when I unive

31、rsities in China, in 1999, when I became an English teacher.became an English teacher.英語(yǔ)句子寫(xiě)作的基本思路：英語(yǔ)句子寫(xiě)作的基本思路：將中文信息還原為簡(jiǎn)單樸實(shí)的基本結(jié)構(gòu)按英語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)完成英語(yǔ)按照英語(yǔ)修飾習(xí)慣進(jìn)行擴(kuò)展。拉長(zhǎng)主謂賓，加上定狀補(bǔ)例：I love you.I, ,love you.I, ,love you .I, , love you .I, with all my heart and soul, which is never going to change until the end of the ti

32、me, love you , whose eyes are filled with love and encouragement , which has supported me all the way here ,truly, Rose.練習(xí)一The firm gave Sam a watch.The firm gave Sam a watch.The well-established privately-run American The well-established privately-run American trading firm generously gave Sam, a s

33、ixty-year-trading firm generously gave Sam, a sixty-year-old gray-haired electrician with three sons and a old gray-haired electrician with three sons and a daughter, a gold Swiss watch on his retirement. daughter, a gold Swiss watch on his retirement. 那家聲譽(yù)卓著的私營(yíng)美國(guó)貿(mào)易公司在六十歲的那家聲譽(yù)卓著的私營(yíng)美國(guó)貿(mào)易公司在六十歲的SamSam退

34、休的時(shí)候慷慨地將一塊金質(zhì)瑞士手表贈(zèng)給了這位退休的時(shí)候慷慨地將一塊金質(zhì)瑞士手表贈(zèng)給了這位頭發(fā)花白、有三個(gè)兒子和一個(gè)女兒的電工。頭發(fā)花白、有三個(gè)兒子和一個(gè)女兒的電工。練習(xí)二I learned my English.In Quzhou University, one of the most beautiful universities in China, I learned my English, essential in both modern life and in our jobs. people prefer to live in the big cities. An increasing

35、number of people with a wanting of better education or trying to develop their personal career prefer badly to live in the big cities because they can provide people with better living conditions including job, housing ,medical attention, nursing and educationJEFF WAS SHOCKEDJacken, a man with short

36、 black hair and strong build, teaching Englishone of the most popular languages in the world was deeply shocked by the news that one of his students is going to get married with a black man born in a rich family, with her expecting to immigrate to Africa定從的魅力The girl is a senior student.She is elected as the Campus Beauty in QZU.定從The girl, who is elected as the Campus Beauty in ZUST, is a senior student.She h