高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫寫作方法指導(dǎo)-易錯(cuò)問(wèn)題分析(以續(xù)寫買花為例)課件

1、作者：八音魔琴讀 后 讀 寫 技 巧 之易錯(cuò)問(wèn)題分析作者：八音魔琴讀 后 讀 寫 技 巧 之銜接程度 （與短文及兩段段首句）內(nèi)容銜接程度（與原文情境的融洽度）、內(nèi)容的豐富性及完整性應(yīng)用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)及詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性上下文的連貫性要求考綱銜接程度 （與短文及兩段段首句）內(nèi)容銜接程度（與原文情境的融故故事反映的思想善有善報(bào) 好心有好報(bào)故故事反映的思想善有善報(bào) 好心有好報(bào)續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題1.審題不認(rèn)真Suddenly, still thinking about Moms deeds, I heard something burst loudly. It was our car that broke

2、down! Nothing could be worse, because neither my mom nor I understood how to repair it, and we didnt know where the garage was. It also seemed impossible to wait for any passerby, since we had seen so few along the way.My mum repaired the car.We entered a shop and bought some tools to repaire the ca

3、r.讀懂文章內(nèi)容，把握故事脈絡(luò)，構(gòu)思故事發(fā)展趨勢(shì)， 合理銜接所給句子。續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題1.審題不認(rèn)真Suddenly, still1I am very happy to saw my mum.2I tell my mum that she laughed at my confusion It was late spring When my mom and I were driving through the countryside. Back then I was 13 years old and always felt unhappy with Mom. However, little di

4、d I know that this trip was going to be a special one.續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題2.時(shí)態(tài)混亂把握原文時(shí)間確定寫作人稱與時(shí)態(tài)。 1I am very happy to saw my mum1 I was very happy that the car was be repaired, now I can phone. no description of repairing the carr3.與首句銜接，及第一段段尾與第二段首句銜接程度差2 I set up the sigh in order to make others know the thing

5、s. I recognised receptionist and thanked him.續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題What happened to mother and daughter?How did they solve the problem?Who helped them and how?What would they do when they saw the shop? What happened in the shop?Who would buy flowers and for whom?1 I was very happy that the c這里輸入您的文字1Then we push

6、the car in front of a repair car place.n we push the car in front of a repair car lace.2Receptionist ran away and asked my mum, What did you happened?3車?yán)镉惺?邏輯混亂4續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題取之不盡，用之不竭理清原文中的關(guān)系：人與人，人與物mother daughter receptionist flowers這里輸入您的文字1Then we push the car 5故事人物重現(xiàn)receptionist 怎么幫助？ I run towards

7、 to them, but I didnt know the receptionist was following me. Receptionist: I saw you are in trouble, so I think what could I do to help you”. Receptionist ran away and asked my mum: What did you happened?續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題合情合理合乎故事發(fā)展5故事人物重現(xiàn)receptionist 怎么幫助？ I 6.基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)欠缺hope-holpto my surprisedwave ones handI a

8、m surprising to saw her.shanke ones handHe gave a flower for me.know-knowed drive-drivedstand-standedshake-shaked續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題常見動(dòng)詞的不規(guī)則形式常用詞用法knowndrovestoodshook重視報(bào)紙關(guān)注作文版面記好句、背范文合理利用筆記勤復(fù)習(xí)、多積累注重練習(xí)實(shí)踐多練筆、勤寫作6.基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)欠缺hope-holpknow-know7. 抄寫原文段落或閱讀理解續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題7. 續(xù)寫中出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題添加標(biāo)題二添加標(biāo)題四評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第五檔（21-25分） 與所給短文融洽 度高，與所提供

9、各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜 接合理； 內(nèi)容豐富； 所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu) 和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn) 確，可能有些許 錯(cuò)誤，但完全不 影響意義表達(dá)； 有效地使用了語(yǔ) 句間的連接成分， 使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié) 構(gòu)緊湊第四檔（16-20分） 與所給短文融洽 度較高，與所提 供各段落開頭語(yǔ) 銜接較為合理； 內(nèi)容比較豐富； 所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu) 和詞匯較為豐富、 準(zhǔn)確，可能有些 許錯(cuò)誤，但完全 不影響意義表達(dá)； 比較有效地使用 了語(yǔ)句間的連接 成分，使所續(xù)寫 短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。 第三檔（11-15分） 與所給短文關(guān)系 較為密切，與所 提供各段落開頭 語(yǔ)有一定程度的 銜接； 寫出了若干有關(guān) 內(nèi)容； 應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu) 和詞匯能滿足任 務(wù)的要求，雖有 一些錯(cuò)

10、誤，但不 影響意義的表達(dá)； 應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的語(yǔ)句 間的連接成分， 使全文內(nèi)容連貫。 添加標(biāo)題二添加標(biāo)題四評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第五檔（21-25分） 第四檔添加標(biāo)題二添加標(biāo)題四評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第二檔（6-10分） 與所給短文有一定的 關(guān)系，與所提供各段 落開頭語(yǔ)有一定程度 的銜接； 寫出了一些有關(guān)內(nèi)容； 語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)、詞匯 項(xiàng)目有限，有些語(yǔ)法 結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò) 誤，影響了意義的表 達(dá)； 較少使用語(yǔ)句間的連 接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺 少連貫性。 第一檔（1-5分） 與所給短文和開頭語(yǔ)的 銜接較差； 產(chǎn)出內(nèi)容太少； 語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)、詞匯項(xiàng) 目很有限，有較多語(yǔ)法 結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤， 嚴(yán)重影響了意義的表達(dá)； 缺乏語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，

11、 全文內(nèi)容不連貫。 0分 白卷、內(nèi)容太少無(wú)法判 斷或所寫內(nèi)容與所提供 內(nèi)容無(wú)關(guān)。添加標(biāo)題二添加標(biāo)題四評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第二檔（6-10分） 第一檔（作文展示Para 1 I let out a sigh while my Mum rooted herself against the car worrying about what could be done. Both my mother and I were so worried that we didnt know how to do and where to find any help. However, at the moment a perso

12、n suddenly appeared and shouted for us:“Are you the woman who gave me flowers and didnt leave your name?” When we turned our bodies, we were surprised to see the receptionist was standing in front of us now. From her words, I knew that she was very thankful to my mother because of the flowers to who

13、ever needed them. And with the help of the receptionist, our car could be driven again!作文展示Para 1作文展示Para 2 As we drove along, a flower shop came into sight on the road. The flower shop was where we bought these flowers. And then my mother stopped her car in front of it. I know what my mother would

14、do. Just like I thought, she walked into the flower shop again and bought some flowers again. When my mother appeared in my eyes,we looked each other and smiled. Suddenly, I finally realised why my mother gave flowers to the receptionist in order to give them to especially those who have not receive

15、d any in a while. When we drove home, the pleasant smell filled the car again. I felt very happy and learned a lesson:kindness will be paid for at last!作文展示Para 2范文Paragraph 1： I let out a sigh while my Mum rooted herself against the car worrying about what could be done. But after waiting in vain f

16、or a considerable time, Mom and I decided to walk back the road to the nursing home and seek help. God knows how far we had driven! When we arrived, the receptionist was surprised, but warmly helped us contact the garage. There, the old men who had received the flowers were excited to meet us, talki

17、ng about how great that day was. It amazed us what random actions of kindness could mean to the people who received them. While we were laughing and talking merrily, we received the news that the garage had got our car repaired. 范文Paragraph 1： I let out a Paragraph 2: As we dove alone, a flower shop came into sight on the road. I asked Mum to pull up and paced quickly into the flower shop, where a bunch of flowers glowing red in full bloom caught my eye. Having witnessed the effect of kindness, I decided to send Mom the sweet