讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo)講義-高三英語復(fù)習(xí)寫作備考

讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Theschooldayrolledslowlyaway.Themomentthebellindicatingtheendingoftheclassrang,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassroom,amongwhowasAndy.Afewmomentslater,Andywasonhisbike,ridingonhiswayhomeandday-dreamingaboutthefishingtripthathisfatherhadpromisedhim.Hewassogluedtodreamingaboutallthefishhewouldcatchthathewasunawareofeverythingelsearoundhim.Herodealonguntilastrangesounddrewhimtothepresent.Hecametoastopandlookedcuriouslyuptotheheavens.Whathesawshockedandterrifiedhim.Ahugefloodofbeesfilledtheskylikeablackcloudandthebuzzingmassseemedtobeheadingangrilytowardshim.Withnotimetowaste,Andyspedoffintheoppositedirection,ridingasfastashecould—butwithoutknowinghowtoescapetheswarm.Witharapidlybeatingheartandhislegsshaking,hespeddowntheroughroad.Asthebeescamecloser,hispanicincreased.Andyknewthathewassensitivetobeestings（蜇）.Thelaststinghadlandedhiminhospital—andthatwasonlyonebeesting!Hehadbeenforcedtostayinbedfortwowholedays.Suddenly,hisfather'swordscametohim.“Whenyouareinatightsituation,keepyourheadandthinkyourwayoutofit.”O(jiān)nanearbyhill,hecouldseesmokewavingslowlyskywardsfromthechimneyoftheNelsonfamilyhome.“Beesdon'tlikesmoke,”hethought.“Theycouldn'tgetintothehouse."AndyracedtowardstheNelson'shouse,butthebeeswereapproaching.Andyknewhecouldnotreachthehouseintime.Heestimatedthatthebeeswouldcatchupwithhimsoon.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,outofthecornerofhiseyes,AndysawasmallpoolusedbyMr.Nelsontowaterhisvegetablegarden.......Inashortwhile,Andy'smothershowedup.......如何續(xù)寫該文：原文概要：下課鈴一響，Andy騎上自行車飛奔回家，一路上，他的腦海里只有第二天他和爸爸的釣魚約定，而他是多么地癡迷于釣魚??！他全然沒料到，一群黑壓壓的蜜蜂朝他飛過來。心頭一驚，他嚇出一身冷汗，上一次一個(gè)蜜蜂盯了他一口，讓他住院二天二夜，如果這次被蜂群蟄到，那后果不敢想象。他于是調(diào)轉(zhuǎn)車頭，瘋狂逃串，但蜂群緊咬不放，就在千鈞一發(fā)之際，他來到了Nelson家附近，他家的煙囪里冒出的股股黑煙讓他想起了煙熏驅(qū)蟲法。可是，蜂群咬的太緊，留給他的時(shí)間不多了……寫作思路：1.分析原語篇和要續(xù)寫段落的所給提示首句后，知道接下來，Andy應(yīng)該是放棄了跑到附近小山邊的Nelson家。只能就地取材：池水隔絕法。那么第一段就應(yīng)該寫他見到水池后，Andy的心理活動(dòng)和及時(shí)采取的行動(dòng)。這個(gè)行動(dòng)后被證明是行之有效的。但是，之后還是要寫到通過某種方式（如打電話）與自己的媽媽取得聯(lián)系，讓她接他回家。為了節(jié)約本部分的篇幅，最好不在電話里說明發(fā)生在自己身上的一切故事。2.媽媽趕到后，見到的最好是一副一切均好的場(chǎng)面：如他坐在客廳沙發(fā)上看釣魚電視節(jié)目，吃著餅干喝著熱咖啡，旁邊的Nelson夫人在給他烘烤濕衣服……感謝之余，感動(dòng)不已，Andy是怎么做到這一切的？原來驚慌失措的兒子哪里去了？通過對(duì)話了解到，他自己的潛水技能、父親平時(shí)的教導(dǎo)等讓他的兒子長大了、長智了。但是，為了作文的風(fēng)格前后一致，可以取原文Andy鐘情于釣魚的一節(jié)放開放大來寫，加上一些細(xì)節(jié)的構(gòu)造，讓媽媽開始擔(dān)心小孩Andy感冒而建議取消他第二天與他爸爸的釣魚之旅活動(dòng)，而俏皮活潑的Andy完全忽視了他媽媽的嘮叨，獨(dú)自沉浸在自己的白日夢(mèng)里……3.原文作品里有很多精彩的句子，如第一段末句Hewassogluedtodreamingaboutallthefishhewouldcatchthathewasunawareofeverythingelsearoundhim.(他全神貫注地幻想著他會(huì)釣到所有的魚，而沒有注意到周圍的一切。)我們可以在原文的結(jié)尾巧妙地用上類似的句子，突出Andy的淘氣孩童本色。第二段末句Ahugefloodofbeesfilledtheskylikeablackcloudandthebuzzingmassseemedtobeheadingangrilytowardshim.(一大群蜜蜂像烏云一樣布滿了天空，嗡嗡作響的蜂群似乎正憤怒地朝他飛來。)我們可以借用作者的這一擬人手法寫蜂群沒有吸到Andy的血而悻悻離去。第三段末句Suddenly,hisfather'swordscametohim.“Whenyouareinatightsituation,keepyourheadandthinkyourwayoutofit.”(突然，他想起了父親的話?！爱?dāng)你身處困境時(shí)，要保持頭腦清醒，想辦法擺脫困境?！?我們可以利用Andy想起他爸爸平時(shí)教育他的話來回應(yīng)續(xù)寫時(shí)媽媽再見平靜的他時(shí)的驚鄂。另外，由于續(xù)寫時(shí)的第一段結(jié)尾要提到Andy在Nelson家求救避難，故續(xù)寫第二段一定要對(duì)Nelson一家表示感謝。典型錯(cuò)誤：1.Andy直接跑進(jìn)了Nelson家里求救，他們合理趕跑了蜂群；2.Nelson聽到呼救后跑出房子揮動(dòng)樹枝前來救援；3.Andy的媽媽在自家詢問。參考答案：Suddenly,outofthecornerofhiseyes,AndysawasmallpoolusedbyMr.Nelsontowaterhisvegetablegarden.Anideasprangtomind.Offhisbikeandintothecoolwaterhedived,disappearingbelowthesurfaceandawayfromtheinsects.Afterholdinghisbreathforaslongashecould,Andycameupforairandnoticedthebeeshadgone.Dragginghimselfoutofthepool,hestruggledupthehillyslopeandrangthedoorbell.Mrs.Nelsontookhiminside,askedhimtotakeoffhiswetclothesandwrappedhiminablanket.WhenAndycamebacktohissense,Mrs.Nelsonranghismother.(92)Inashortwhile,Andy'smothershowedup.Atthesightofhismother,Andywaspossessedwithcomfort,andtearsstreameddownhischeeks.“You’llreallyneedthatfishingbreaktohelpyourecover,"comfortedhismotherwithrelief,adding“thankgoodnessyoudidn'tpanic!“HavingthankedMrs.Nelson,theywenthome.Ontheway,hismotherpraisedhimagain,butAndydidnothearher.Hewasdreamingonceagainofthefishhewouldcatchtomorrow.(68)下水文：Suddenly,outofthecornerofhiseyes,AndysawasmallpoolusedbyMr.Nelsontowaterhisvegetablegarden.Suddenlyanideastruckhim.“Icandiveintothewaterandholdbreathforaminute!”Justbeforethebeesswarmedoverandstunghim,hethrewasidehisbikeandjumpedintothepool.Havinghoveredoverwherehewashidingforhalfaminute,thebeesleftwithregrets.Guessingthebeeshadgone,Andystuckhisheadoutofthewaterforair.Asexpected,thecrisiswasover.Butnowhewasallwet,coldandhungry.HedashedtotheNelsons’forhelp,whereMrs.Nelsonbroughthimacupofhotcoffeeanddrieduphisclothes.AndAndyhimselfranghismother.(110)Inashortwhile,Andy'smothershowedup.Findingherson,safeandsound,watchingTVovercoffee,shewasgreatlysurprised.Knowingabouthisexcitingexperience,shecouldn’thelppraisinghimforhiswits.Imme