【讀后續(xù)寫】2018年6月份浙江省新高考讀后續(xù)寫課件

2018年6月份浙江省新高考讀后續(xù)寫敘事類記敘文讀后續(xù)寫寫作技巧思維導(dǎo)圖續(xù)寫六要素時間，地點(diǎn)，人物（一致）

情節(jié)（完整性，合理性）： 事情的起因 事情的經(jīng)過 事情的結(jié)果場景描寫心理描寫動作描寫人物描寫有效對話內(nèi)容一致：照應(yīng)關(guān)聯(lián)詞匯復(fù)現(xiàn)

結(jié)尾：哲理式結(jié)尾（立意）自然結(jié)尾情感結(jié)尾以景結(jié)情寫作手法

Itwassummer,andmy

dad

wantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.

UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast."Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,"hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTina

feed

thechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethe

sheep

outtograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains."Don’tbe

late

forsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!""OK!"mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutof

sight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)

blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse..Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.

.

201806浙江高考如何讀？InterpretationoftheText文本解讀AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatUnclePaulInterpretationoftheText文本解讀(Who)brotherIDadStep1:解讀前文一：體裁______人稱_________時態(tài)______二：5WWho:________________________When:_______________________Where:______________________Whatisthemainideaofeachparagraph?(sbdidsth)Why:____________________________________________ Lesson：___________________________________________Para1Para2Para3Para4MydadtookmeavacationtotheWildWestinsummer.Mydad’sfriend,UnclePaultookustohisfarm.IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorseonthefarm.Intheafternoon,myfatherandIrodeahorsetowardsthemountain.記敘文第一人稱過去式Mydad,UnclePaulandIOnesummerOnUnclePaul‘sfarmhouseWecameacrossalittlerabbitandgotlostbecauseitwasdark.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened.InterpretationoftheText文本解讀(When)(background)onesummerday(Para.1)(the1stday)inthelateafternoon,spentthenight(Para.2)(the2ndday)veryearlyinthemorning,afterthebreakfast,intheafternoon,afterawhile(Para.3)InterpretationoftheText文本解讀(How)★故事情節(jié)線：根據(jù)以上的時間線，我們可以梳理出各個時間點(diǎn)的故事情節(jié)。大背景：父親帶一家人去UnclePaul的農(nóng)場過暑假。第一天：下午uncle到機(jī)場接我們，晚上在農(nóng)場聽青蛙叫和潺潺的水聲。第二天：一早吃過早飯，體驗(yàn)了農(nóng)場的生活，和Tina一起喂雞，看著父親和uncle一起放羊，同時看到父親騎馬覺得很酷，也想試一試。在“我”的請求之下，父親答應(yīng)陪“我”一起去騎馬。出發(fā)前，uncle叮囑“我們”要沿著足跡走并在晚飯前趕回來，不然會迷路。于是，“我”和父親就出發(fā)了。Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation劃線詞和續(xù)寫首句解讀(G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解讀：Para.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.GivenInformationIaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.（Para.4)Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation劃線詞和續(xù)寫首句解讀（G-N策略）NewInformation①Whatwastherabbitlike?②Whatwasmyreactiontotherabbit?③Whatwouldweseewhilechasingtherabbit?④Whathappenednext?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解讀：Para.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation劃線詞和續(xù)寫首句解讀（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解讀：Para.2Wehavenoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Intheafternoon,...ificouldtakeahorseride.(Para.4)GivenInformationInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation劃線詞和續(xù)寫首句解讀（G-N策略）NewInformation①HowdidIfeelandwhatdidDadreact?②Didwefindthewayout?How?③Whomaycometoourrescue?④Howaboutthesurroundingsinthedarkness?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解讀：Para.2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.2.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下劃線詞解讀：dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,feed,sheep,late,track,getlost,sightInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation劃線詞和續(xù)寫首句解讀Characters人物類dad,UnclePaul,sheep,Places地點(diǎn)類farmhouse,river,trackTime時間類lateAction動作類feed,getlost,sight如何寫？UnclePaul

Interpretationofwritingideas寫作思路解讀1Ihadtoldussuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlesslyDadTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之環(huán)境描寫篇讀后續(xù)寫的語言表達(dá)要生動形象，離不開對人物動作的準(zhǔn)確描寫，情緒、神態(tài)的生動刻畫，以及環(huán)境的渲染烘托。特別是環(huán)境的描寫，它服務(wù)于文章的主題和人物刻畫，不僅給讀者一種身臨其境的感受，有時候還可以推動故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，烘托人物的心理活動，讓文本的語言更豐富，讀者的體驗(yàn)更深刻。真可謂“一切景語皆情語”（王國維）。借景抒情、寓情于景是寫作中常用的手法。環(huán)境描寫也可分為客觀環(huán)境和主觀環(huán)境。這里主要聚焦客觀環(huán)境（自然環(huán)境）的描寫。1.描述天氣的形容詞stormy,warm,hot,rainy,cloudy,snowy,windy,foggy,misty,frosty,damp,wet,humid,freezingcold,clear,changeable,wild,moderate,calm,terrible,awful,sweltering2.天氣描述的名詞fog,snow,drizzle,lightrain,shower,storm,downpour,blizzard,snowstorm,thunder,typhoon,tornado,hurricaneTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之環(huán)境描寫篇3.自然環(huán)境詞塊(在一般的自然環(huán)境的詞前加入描述性的詞，讓環(huán)境描寫更加具體)high/steep/snowed-cappedmountains/hillsgrand/wide/deep/lowvalleyrunning/shallow/deepwater/stream/creekspectacularsunriseandsettingsun

thethunderingcloudsthe

fragile/fragrant

flowers

thedark,rainingevening

thegreengrass

thefragrantrosesTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表達(dá)微技能：之環(huán)境描寫篇如何得高分？Haveatry牛刀小試：句子翻譯與句型轉(zhuǎn)換1.受到驚嚇，馬突然跑了起來，跑的如此之快，以至于我什么也看不見只能聽見風(fēng)在耳邊呼嘯。__________________________________________________________________________________________________Frightenedbytherabbit,thehorsebegantorace.ItransofastthatIcouldhardlyseeanythingbutheardthewindwhistlinginmyear2.時間一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)過去，夜幕開始降臨，天空開始出現(xiàn)一閃閃的星星，同情地看著我們。。_____________________________________________________________________________________________Astimewentby,thenightbegantofallandthestarsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyeatuswithsympathy.4.隨著太陽下山，天色漸暗，巖石和松柏都看不清了。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________當(dāng)黑暗追逐著最后一絲陽光，那些巖石和松柏也漸漸被夜色吞噬。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.隨著夜幕的降臨，風(fēng)吹得我有點(diǎn)冷。______________________________________________________________________當(dāng)黑夜籠罩了大山，風(fēng)開始吹得凍骨了。_____________________________________________________________________3.時間一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)過去，夜幕開始降臨，天空開始出現(xiàn)一閃閃的星星，同情地看著我們。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Astimewentby,thenightbegantofallandthestarsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyeatuswithsympathy.Asthesunset,itwasgettingdarkerandIcouldhardlyseetherocksandpinetreesclearly.Asthedarknesswaschasingthelastrayofdaylight,thebrownrocksanddeeppinetreeswereswallowedbythenight.Asthenightfell,Ifeltabitcoldwhenthewindblew.Whenthedarknessenveloped/ruledthemountain,thewindbegantocreepintoourbones.7.更糟糕的是，樹林里開始起霧了，周圍的一切都被蒙上了一層紗，這無疑增加我們的困難，讓我們更加無助。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.為了取暖，父親生了一堆火。一切萬籟俱寂，只有呼呼的風(fēng)聲和噼噼啪啪的火苗聲相伴。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Tokeepwarm,fatherbuiltacampfire.Everythingwasinsilence,onlythehowlingofthewindandtheflamesofthefireforcompany.What’sworse,fogcreptinwithoutbeingnoticed.Everythingarounduswasveiled,whichundoubtedlyaddedtoourdifficultyandleftusevenmorehelplessPossibleversion1Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thusimmediatelystimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlessly.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement.Entirelyforgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwasquicklydisappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.

Possibleversion1Paragraph2

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thebone-chillingwindhowledfiercelylikeawolf,makingthedarknessevenmoresuffocating.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,quiveringandseizedbystarkhorror.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,calmandmollified.Wewanderedinthescaryforestanddidn’tknowwhathorriblethingswouldhappentous,hopingtofindthewayback.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofwaterrollingdownthe

river.Wewereoverthemoonanddecidedtofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundof

sheep

andthencaught

sight

ofthe

farmhouse.Thefamilywerewaitingforusinthedistance.Seeingthis,aradiantsmilelitupbothofourfaces.評點(diǎn)：光線的消退暗示了時間的流逝和黑夜的到來，推動了故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，與下文的gettingdark銜接；bone-chilling,scary,horrible詞的運(yùn)用以及比喻修辭的運(yùn)用，渲染了陰森恐怖的氣氛，也烘托了主人公內(nèi)心的害怕、恐懼；同時，河流和羊的聲音也為故事的結(jié)局提供了線索和出路，給故事畫上了圓滿的句號。Possibleversion2Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Myhorsewassoafraidthatitbeganrunningferociously.Icouldfeeltheairhittingmyfaceheavilyandhearmy

dad’s

hystericalcryfromadistance.Myheartwaspumpingwildlyandmybloodwaspulsingthroughmyveins.Ipulledbackthereins,distractedthehorseandtriedeverymeanstostopthehorsebutinvain.Afterwhatseemedaneternity,mydadcaughtupwithmebreathlesslyandmanagedtostopmyhorse.Butwefoundthatwewereindistress,withno

trackbesideus.Possibleversion2Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.The

riverbesideuswasstillandsereneunderthelastrayofsunshinebutwedidn’thavethemoodtoenjoyit.Suddenly,itoccurredtousthattherewasalsoarivernearbythe

farmhouse.Realizingtherivermaybeaguideback,ourspiritssoaredandwebegantotrotbrisklyalongtheriver.Justafewminuteslater,catching

sight

ofthesilhouetteofthehouse,Ifeltafeelingofreliefandrelaxationsurgedthroughme.Icouldpicture

UnclePaul’s

smilingfaceandourdelicioussupperandIthoughttomyselfthatourbeinglostaddedaspecialtastetomyadventurousvacationwhichIwouldrememberallmylife.評點(diǎn)：這篇文章的環(huán)境描寫較少，但是出現(xiàn)的幾句卻在文章里起到了畫龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。比如空氣擊打著臉充分表現(xiàn)了馬跑之快和當(dāng)時情況的緊急。河流的平靜和作者內(nèi)心的不平靜形成對比，凸顯了主人公迷路后的焦慮不安，后來農(nóng)場房子的出現(xiàn)又讓主人公頓時柳暗花明。因此，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)這些環(huán)境描寫看似漫不經(jīng)心，其實(shí)在推動故事情節(jié)的展開，并和主人公的言行和心理息息相關(guān)。

人物描寫；場景描寫；

心理描寫；動作描寫；有效對話；細(xì)節(jié)描寫：文中的細(xì)節(jié)描寫：場景描寫：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.場景描寫：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouse

listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.心理描寫：IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.動作描寫：MydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.有效對話："Don’tbe

late

forsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!""OK!"修辭：Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)

blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Step2：分類劃線關(guān)鍵詞Characters:_____________________________Noun:_________________________________Verb:__________________________________Adj/Adv________________________________Dad,UnclePaulFarmhouse,river,sheep,track,sightFeed,getlostlateStep3：Considertheplotdevelopmentswithquestions（情節(jié)推理）dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,sheep,track,sight,feed,late,getlostPara1:Suddenly,alittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhouse.1.Seeingtherunningrabbit,howdidthewriterorthehorsefeel/react?2.Howdidthewriter’sfatherreacttothewriter’ssituation?3.Howdidtheygetlost?Whatwastheirfeelingsaboutbeinglost?Para2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.

1.Whentheygotlost,whatweretheirfeelings?2.Whatdifficultiesdidtheymeet?Howtoovercomethem?3.HowcouldP2beendedreasonablyandhappily?step4讀后續(xù)寫模式之八法（1）情緒：消極情緒（有時積極）（2）細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫（3）轉(zhuǎn)折：個人的努力或借助外界（4）轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰（5）失望：但是問題還是沒有解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題（6）新法：突然有了一個想法（一句話說明這個想法）（7）結(jié)局：過了一段時間；事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折（8）總結(jié)：點(diǎn)題，呼應(yīng)前文Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

續(xù)寫思路1.Itwassoquickthatmyhorsewasscared.Awaveofnervousnesssweptovermeespeciallywhenthehorseranlikecrazy.（情緒）2.Myheartpoundingandmypalmssweating,aninnervoicetoldmethatIhadtocalmdown.（細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫）3.Thoughinapanic,Ipluckedmycouragetopullonthereins.（轉(zhuǎn)折：個人努力）4.Luckily,itdidn’ttakelongbeforeIsettleddownthehorse.（轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：成功，希望來了）5.Justatthatmoment,Dadranover,gaspingforair.（失望：但是問題還是沒有解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題）有效對話（銜接）6.“Boy,wearewayoffthetrack.”Hesaidseriously,alookofconcernspreadingacrosshisface.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.續(xù)寫思路1.Hungryandfrustrated,wetriedtofindawayoutbutinvain.Icalledhardandloudly,buttheonlyanswerwastherustlingofthewindinthetrees.(努力失敗)2.Suddenlydadsaid,“Doyouheartherivernearby?Wecanbackalongit”（突然有了辦法）(修辭手法)3.Unexpectedly,theriverbroughtustothefamiliartrackatlast.（開始做）4.Afterwhatseemedtwohours,UnclePaul’sfarmhousedidcomeintosight.（成功了）5.Myfather’sfacebrightenedup,sodidmine.Howwisemydadwas!（感受）6.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened,thenyoucanovercomeeverything—that’swhatIlearnedfrom.哲理結(jié)尾6.Weeventuallyheardthefamiliarfrogs，andsawthecomfortingsightoftheoldfarmhouse.自然結(jié)尾6.Whatathrillingbutmemorableexperienceitwas.情感結(jié)尾6.AswegotcloserwesawUnclePaulintheyardwithaflashlightwavingusover.Atthatmoment,allofusburstintoasweetsmile.以景結(jié)情(總結(jié))

1.Itwassoquickthatmyhorsewasscared.Awaveofnervousnesssweptovermeespeciallywhenthehorseranlikecrazy.

2.Myheartpoundingandmypalmssweating,aninnervoicetoldmethatIhadtocalmdown.

3.Thoughinapanic,Ipluckedmycouragetopullonthereins.

4.Luckily,itdidn’ttakelongbeforeIsettleddownthehorse.

5.Justatthatmoment,

Dad

ranover,gaspingforair.

6.“Boy,weareawayfromthe(keeptothe

track)track.”Hesaidseriously,alookofconcernspreadingacrosshisface.

1.Hungryandfrustrated,wetriedtofindawayoutbutinvain.Icalledhardandloudly,buttheonlyanswerwastherustlingofthewindinthetrees.

(thedeepgreenpipetrees)

2.Suddenlydadsaid,“Doyouheartherivernearby?Wecanbackalongit”

3.Unexpectedly,theriverbroughtustothefamiliartrackatlast.

4.Afterwhatseemedtwohours,UnclePaul’sfarmhousedidcomeintosight.

(hisfarmoutofsight)

5.Myfather’sfacebrightenedup,sodidmine.Howwisemydadwas!

6.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened,thenyoucanovercomeeverything—that’swhatIlearnedfrom.照應(yīng)，關(guān)聯(lián)，詞匯復(fù)現(xiàn)隨堂演練PPT2021-9-10一、翻譯下列詞或詞塊。（每題3分，共36分）1.潺潺的水聲___________________________ 2.呼呼的風(fēng)聲__________________________3.刺骨的風(fēng)_____________________________4.恐怖的森林__________________________5.最后的一縷陽光_______________________ 6.風(fēng)在耳邊呼嘯________________________7.被黑夜吞噬___________________________ 8.黑夜籠罩了大山______________________9.夜幕降臨_____________________________ 10.一切都被蒙上了紗___________________11.情緒高漲_____________________________12.輕快地小跑_________________________13.侵入骨髓____________14.激發(fā)了我的興趣_____________2018年6月浙江省高考真題讀后續(xù)寫4thefaintsoundofthewaterthehowlingofthewindbone–chillingwindscaryforestthelastrayofsunshinethewindwhistledintheearbeswallowedbythenightThedarknessenvelopedthemountainThenightfellEverythingwasveiledspiritsroar

besurprisedtodo

creepintobones

stimulatemyinterest二、用所給詞的正確形式填空。（每空2分，共44分）1.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyes___________(glitter)withterrific_________(excite).2.Dadwasalso___________(震驚)bythespecialrabbit,___________(gawk)atit___________(motion).3.EntirelyforgettingwhatUnclePaultoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,frantic_____rapture.4.Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,___________(quiver)and_______(seize)bystarkhorror.5.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,_______and_______(平靜的).glitteringexcitementstunnedgawkingmotionlesslywithquiveringseizedcalmmollified6.Myheartwaspum