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高考新題型之概要寫作Summary《普通高等學(xué)校招生全國統(tǒng)一考試英語科考試說明》概要寫作：提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的短文，要求考生基于該短文寫出一篇60詞左右的內(nèi)容概要。（滿分25分）本題總分為25分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。評分時(shí)，先根據(jù)所寫概要的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要去來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。詞數(shù)少于40的和多于80的，從總分中減去2分。評分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從以下四個(gè)方面考慮...拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)重要方面，評分時(shí)，應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次。1概要寫作評分解讀評分原則本題總分為25分，分5個(gè)檔次給分第五檔

(21-25)理解準(zhǔn)確,涵蓋全部要點(diǎn)。

能準(zhǔn)確使用相應(yīng)的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯。

有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所完成的概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

完全使用自己的言語。﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏﹏completecorrectcoherentconcise:nocopying4C原則completecorrectHowtopolishyoursummarytomeetthe4Crequirementsofcriteriacompletecorrectcoherentconcise

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學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤1:

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ofcriteria(tobecomplete)學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤1:

Incomplete要點(diǎn)遺落Thefirst:thephenomenon---thepopularityofcellphonesThelast

:properuseWritingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobecoherent)學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤2:

Cellphonesareoneofthegreatestinventionsofmoderntechnology.Butjustastherearealwaystwosidesofacoin,theyhavemanyadvantagesanddisadvantages.Theirmainadvantageistomakeourlifeeasierandmoreconvenient.Ontheotherhand,theyhaveabadeffectonourlife.Tobehonest,whethertheyareausefulinstrumentoradangerousweaponisdecidedbyushuman.Incoherence過渡不自然Transitionalwords:學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤3:

Painandpleasurearearesultofmoderntechnology.(FromZH,Class6)Theadvancedtechnologyhascausedadangerthatwekeepignoring.GetcheaperandcheaperNotconcise引用原文詞句Nocopying不得直接引用原文的句子Writingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobeconcise)學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤3:

Technologyhasadvantagesanddisadvantages,suchascellphones.(FromWQ,Class5)Weshouldmakefulluseofcellphones---Notconcise內(nèi)容理解有誤2)Tobeexact概括內(nèi)容要準(zhǔn)確Tobebrief概括內(nèi)容需精要學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤3:

Suchas---ToomanyexamplesNotconcise使用太多細(xì)節(jié)，語言不夠概括3)Tobebrief概括內(nèi)容需精要Waystomakethesentencesconcise(4skills)

Arecellphonesausefulinstrumentoradangerousweapon?Theanswerliesinourhands.同義替換法Arecellphonesahelpfultooloraharmfuldevice?Itdependsonourselves.正話反說或反話正說法It’suptoourselvestousecellphonesinaproperway.句式變化法▲Willcellphonesbringconvenienceordangertous?

▲Willcellphonesbenefitorharmus?▲

Itdependsonourselveswhethercellphoneswillbenefitorharmus.

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Whethercellphonesareusefulordangerousdependsonourselves.詞性轉(zhuǎn)換法

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤4:

Wedon’tallowmobilephonestoinsteadofourlife.(FromWT,Class6)UsecellphonesmodestlyIncorrect語法詞匯不準(zhǔn)確1)VarietiesofgrammaticalmistakesWritingstep3:Meetthe4crequirements

ofcriteria(tobeconcise)學(xué)生習(xí)作常見錯(cuò)誤4:

Itisharmfulforchildrenandleadtoworsethings,suchasroadaccidents.Soitneedsourselvestoletthecellphoneausefultechnology.

(FromZLT,Class4)Incorrect漢式表達(dá)2)Chinglish

中國式不地道英語Howtopolishyoursummarytomeetthe4CrequirementsofcriteriaCompleteCorrectCoherentConcise1.nocopying2.tobeexact

3.tobebrief

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WritingStep5:ClearlycopyyourdrafttothepaperCellphonesareoneofthegreatestinventionsofmoderntechnology.Butjustastherearealwaystwosidesofacoin,theyhavemanyadvantagesanddisadvantages.Theirmainadvantageistomakeourlifeeasierandmoreconvenient.Ontheotherhand,theyhaveabadeffectonourlife