2023年1月高考英語浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題解析及范文賞析（蜂鳥報恩）

讀后續(xù)寫真題2023年1月浙江卷蜂鳥報恩1試題再現2試題分析3寫作思路4范文賞析目錄CONTENTS2023試題再現歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析01真題再現第二節(jié)(滿分25分)

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.She

ceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthe

window.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain..Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

.2023試題分析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析02梗概

故事講述了主人公“我”發(fā)現一個廢棄房子里面有一只蜂鳥被蜘蛛網困住了。“我”把蜂鳥救了出來。在“我”要離開時，這只蜂鳥停在了我的面前，似乎在和我告別。

主題：人與自然——講述了人與動物之間的趣事，體現了人與自然和諧相處。

視角：第一人稱讀故事兩句段首句1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.占位符標題05故事線IwenttoafarmIfoundatrappedhummingbirdandsaveditItcamebacktomewanttosaygoodbyeIcamebacktothefarmThehummingbirdappearedclimaxrevesalresulotion文章語言表達WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.蜂鳥表現出類似人類的情感：感謝野生鳥類盯著人類野生鳥類盯著人類，發(fā)出叫聲文章語言表達Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”主人公對蜂鳥行為進行猜測話語：烹飪對蜂鳥的行為進行猜測2023寫作思路歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析03兩種構思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應“兩法六句”第一步依據首句，構思框架兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)讀懂兩段首句第一段首句后的銜接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的銜接句。即第二段的尾句——能體現故事圓滿結局的句子或故事給我們啟示的句子。(2)寫好三個銜接句(3)寫好一個升華句動作描寫增加細節(jié)所見所聞、所說所思所做環(huán)境描寫人物描寫語言描寫心理活動描寫第二步增加細節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)一：brokenwindowWhenpassingthefamiliardesertedmilkinghousewhereIlastmetmyhummingbird,Iinstantlynoticedthebrokenwindowhadbeenreplacedaspromised.Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)二：thoughtaboutthehummingbirdIcouldnothelptofondlyrecallthelovelyhummingbirdthatcharmedeveryoneofuswithitsdeterminationtobidfarewell.Whatacuteandintelligentcreatureitwas!Para1：Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain情節(jié)三：wanttoseethehummingbirdagain.Asamatteroffact,IsecretlymadeawishtoseeheronceagainsomehowandsomewhereinthisexpeditionthoughIknewdeepdowninmyheartitwasanextravagantidea.Thingswentasplannedandasusual,cheerfullybutnotsurprisingly.Para2：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.主要預測：thehummingbirdexpressedhergratitude.Theamazinglittlebirdwithshockingmemoryuseditsuniquewaytoexpresshergratitudetoahumanfriend.Naturewassoadorableandmysteriousthatweallfeltawedandhumblewhenfacedwithit.2023范文賞析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析04

Afewweekslater,Ivisitedthefarmagain.

Thesamedilapidatedhouse,thesamegiganticspiderweb,thesamegreenblackberrypath."Willthehummingbirdbethesame?Willthislovelyandhumanisticcreaturebetrappedinthewebagain?Notlikely,sincetheholeinthewindowhadbeenfixed."Thesequestionsandthoughtspoppedintomyheadlikestrandsofspiderthread.Withsmellofroastedfoodwaftingintheair,myfriendsandIchattedandlaughedmerrilyaroundthepicnictable.Itseemedthehummingbirdwastemporarilythrowntothebackofmymind.Soon,t