2021年高考英語全國卷1的讀后續(xù)寫指導：給媽媽做早飯(附文題詳解及范文展示)

2021年高考英語全國卷1的讀后續(xù)寫指導：給媽媽做早飯總評：全國I卷的讀后續(xù)寫和去年山東卷的賣爆米花續(xù)寫基本一樣，都是關于幫助和愛，涉及到大人和孩子之間?？忌豢赡茈x題了，況且標題都給了，情節(jié)線特別明顯?？纪旰?，學生也反映，有話可寫，能用上平時的相關語料。有學生說，這篇和以前練習的某某篇很相似，寫起來更有信心。可見，平時練習如果練到位了，確實好很多。但話又說回來，讀后續(xù)寫涉及到的話題其實相當有局限的，如同本篇，平時只要稍微練習，都有一半的概率碰到類似話題。無論怎么說，功夫還在平時。同時，我深切感受到：續(xù)寫題目的選擇特別重要，高考不大偏向于選擇那種續(xù)寫情節(jié)曲折的，而是情節(jié)非常簡單但同時細節(jié)可以豐富的。所以，我覺得我一向提倡的極簡原則是非常符合高考要求和趨勢的。第二節(jié)（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右：2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答分析：—篇讀后續(xù)寫必然經(jīng)過以下的步驟：第一步：找線索(Readforclues)，定主題人物：twins:Jeff,Jenna;fatherandmother想法：thesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay,broughtherbreakfastinbed.(續(xù)寫對于想法的線索的照應：實現(xiàn)了想法)情感：Thetwins:-->excitement,pleasedandproud-->Jennapanicked.-->Jeffstayedcalm-->ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.本文的主題就是標題了：AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE。如果還要進一步升華，那就是體現(xiàn)了孩子們對媽媽的愛。實際上這個升華也可以不用，因為孩子做飯給媽媽吃，本身就體現(xiàn)了love，這是不言自明的。第二步：推理情節(jié)(readforplots)根據(jù)極簡原則，我們直接根據(jù)提示句推測出一個場景即可，越直接越能接近作者的寫作目的。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.場景一：根據(jù)fatherappeared推測下一個場景：father的反應(說什么？做什么)場景二：根據(jù)carriedthebreakfast推測上一個場景：breakfast已經(jīng)做好這兩個場景是不難推導出來的，那么father做了什么，必然是幫助他們做飯。所以接下來重點就是：father到底怎么做？用極簡就是：父親幫我們收拾殘局并且教我們做早那么要不要寫具體的做飯過程？不需要，說實話，你不會做這種飯啊，而且還涉及到很多做飯做菜的詞匯，更麻煩了。這個具體教學過程完全可以簡化為，他們聽了父親的指導后，成功了讀后續(xù)寫中如何把繁瑣的動作簡化是一個很重要的技能。Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.場景三：根據(jù)woke..up推測下一個場景：媽媽的反應場景四：thetwins的反應主題結(jié)束實際上去年山東卷賣爆米花和今年都一樣的，第一段就把問題解決了，第二段只是寫各自的感受和動作，最后主題結(jié)束。指導：Athetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don'tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.Father說一說，動一動：安慰孩子，幫他們Afterthat,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,heraceflushing.Jeff的反應：說一說，感情描寫However,Fatherlaughed,“Soundsgreat!Icanteachyoutocook.”Father的回答Atthis,JennaandJeffalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Jenna和Jeff的反應Underhiscarefulguidance,itdidn'ttakelongbf>Feenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.串聯(lián)孩子和父親的場景：學會了Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.銜接句Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid“HappyMother'sDay”.銜接句：媽媽的反應Mothergavethematighthug,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It'sthebiggestsurpriseIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.媽媽說一說“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers.”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJef.-VsAA、乂、X4爸爸說一說Theycouldn'thelpgiggling.Itwasasecretonlysharedbetweenthem.主題結(jié)尾：孩子笑一笑完整的：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.“Don'tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.Afterthat,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,hisfaceflushing.However,Fatherlaughed,“Soundsgreat!Icanteachyoutocook.”Atthis,JennaandJefalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Underhiscarefulguidanee,itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid“HappyMother'sDay”.Mothergavethematighthug,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It'sthebiggestsurpriseIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers.”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJef.Theycouldn'thelpgiggling.Itwasasecretonlysharedbetweenthem.(150words)提示：本文基本和原文作者一樣，，請注意時間過渡和人物互動的寫法。參考2021高考英語讀后續(xù)寫出處及原文：/other/mothers-day-celebration-with-twin-child-an-open-speech.htmlMother'sDayCelebrationwithTwinChildThetwinsrubbedtheirhandswithgleeastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaydawnedatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepaircreptdownthestairstothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinminutes.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedthepotcoverstartingtomove.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegas.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftowipeupthestickystuffsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveayelpofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandunderthetap.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindismay,theirfatherappearedinthedoorway.Onelookandheknewwhattheywereupto.Seeingtheircrestfallenfaces,hetoldthemtocl