三模讀后續(xù)寫：“泳”往直前學(xué)案

01問題導(dǎo)讀

我對于教練讓我參加蛙泳比賽是什么態(tài)度？為什么？

是什么讓我改變了主意決定參加蛙泳比賽？

我一開始訓(xùn)練情況如何？后來有了什么改變？為什么？4.

文章的主旨是什么？

02續(xù)寫題目

Ohno.CoachCaffertyjustsaidmyname.Forthatevent.Thetwo-hundred-metrebreaststroke(蛙泳)forthecomingmeet!Notthebackstroke(仰泳)Ihadwishedandpracticedforsolong!

Beadsofsweatpoppedoutovermyupperlip.Morganpressedherelbowintomyside,tryingtooffermemoralsupport.Butitdidn’thelp.Mystomachsanktomykneeslikeabrickinwater.Morgantriedtoconvincemeitwouldbefine.“MaybeCoachhasmoreconfidenceinyouthanyouthink.”O(jiān)rmaybeCoachCaffertyjustwanttogivetherestalaughwhenIsinktothebottomofthepool,”Ithoughtdesperately.IwalkedtowardsCoachCaffertyandtoldheraboutmyinabilityandmydesiretoquitthisevent.ShefrownedandaskedifitwaswhatIreallywanted.

Ihesitated.Placingherhandonmyshoulder,shestartedsmilingandencouragedmetopushmyselfoutsideofmycomfortzone.

Thefirstpracticewasadisaster.Ilostrhythm(節(jié)奏)onmystrokes.Imessedupmyturns.Ievenhadtostopandcatchmybreathafewtimes.Ifelteveryonewaslaughingatmeandmystomachtwisted.HowcouldImakeitwithinjusttwoweeks?ButonceIdraggedmyselfoutofthewater,exhaustedandfrustrated,CoachCaffertythumbeduptome,sayingIdidreallywellandjustneededmoreconfidenceinmyselfandmoretimetopractice.

Onthewaybackhome,Morgancomfortedme,“Dear,justignoreothers.Raceagainstyourself.Countyourownstrokes.Provetoyourselfthatyoucandoit.”Withthesewordssaidtomealmosteveryday,beforeoraftereachpractice,somethinggraduallychanged:bothhowIswamthebreaststrokeandhowIfeltabouttheeventaswellasmyself.

Themeetfinallycame.Iarrivedatthepoolhall,stillalittlebitworried.Aseacheventclickedclosertomine,mykneesshook.Ibitmylipandlookedoutovertheotherswimmers.Morganleanedforward.“Justswimyourrace.Remember,youcan!”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Thenthetwo-hundred-milestonebreaststrokewasannounced.Paragraph2:Therewasonly50meterstogo.背景故事：我擅長仰泳（backstroke），教練卻把我分在我最不擅長的蛙泳(breaststroke)隊(duì)。怎樣逼迫自己走出舒適區(qū)（pushoneselfoutofthecomfortzone），突破自我，故事由此展開。故事以語言對話為主，其中一些人物的動(dòng)作和肢體語言（bodylanguage）生動(dòng)地反映了人物角色的情感和情緒，很值得學(xué)習(xí)。1.我聽到宣布名單結(jié)果，緊張得上唇冒汗Sweat

brokeout

over

myupper

lip.

Ofcourse,

thatcouldhavebeenfrom

the

humidity(潮濕)

ofthe

poolhall.2.朋友用肘部捅捅我，表精神支持Morgan

pressed

her

elbowintomyside,tryingto

offermemoralsupport.3.我失落難過，心情沉到谷底Itdidn'thelp.

Mystomach

sanktomyknees

like

a

brick

inwater,andnoamountof

treading（踩水）

wasgoingto

bringitback.4.一些隊(duì)員雙臂交叉胸前，譏笑，看笑話Callie

folded

herarms

acrossherchest

and

grinnedwickedly（邪惡地）.

Afew

girls

snickered（竊笑）.5.朋友翻白眼，打抱不平"Shutup,callie,"

Morgansaid,

rollinghereyes.

6.我無聲抗議，摔儲物柜門，表達(dá)憤怒

Isaid

nothing,just

slammedmy

lockershut

andmade

forthe

showers.7.母親聽我消極言論，皺眉，不贊成

"OrmaybeI

should

justquit

theswimteam."

Mom

frowned."Isthatwhatyouwant?"8.我嘆氣，反映我的真實(shí)思想I

sighed,

"No."Itookabiteofmypizza.9.教練抬頭，微笑，詢問Coach

Cafferty

lookedupandsmiled,"Hi,Jamie.Allsetfortoday?"10.我很緊張，手捏壓著背包帶

,

拒絕參加集訓(xùn)Myhands

squeezed

thestrap（捏擠帶子）ofmyduffelbag(桶裝帆布包).

"Actuallythat'swhatIwanttotalktoyouabout.Idon'tthinkIcandothemeettomorrow."參考范文1：Paragraph1:

Thenthetwo-hundred-milestonebreaststrokewasannounced.

Nervousandworried,IhadtogivemypullandshootmybodyintothewaterasfastasIcould,startingthefirstbreaststrokeraceofmylife.“Pull.Breathe.Kick.”Whilekeepingtherhymeinmyhead,Isparednoeffortinextending

myarmsforward,makingfrog-likekicks,andbreathingoutandinwithmyheadupanddown.Cheersechoingaround,Itriedtoconcentrateonmyownstrokesdespitemyexhaustion,constantlytellingmyselftoignoretheotherswimmers.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,whackedanddesperate,Imademythirdturn.(97)Paragraph2:Therewasonly50meterstogo.Ikickedmylegs,

asiftheywerefilledwithlead.Asmyheavybodymovedforwardinchbyinch,myeyescouldn’thelppeepingat

theothercompetitorssplashingintheotherlanes.Iwasleftfarbehind!WouldIbethelaugh-stockofthewholerace?ThemomentIthoughtofthis,Morgan’swordsresoundedinmymind,“Raceagainstyourself.Remember,youcan.”“Yes,Ican!”Ibitmylip.Onemetre,twometres…Finally,Ireachedthewall–asthelastswimmer.CoachCaffertyandMorganwerealreadywaitingthere,cheeringmeon.Ifelttrulygratefultothemforlettingmeknowthatoneshouldnotcareaboutothers’opinions,butfocusonself-development,steppingoutofthecomfortzone,andracingagainstone'sself.(129)參考范文2：Paragraph1:Thenthetwo-hundred-milestonebreaststrokewasannounced.

Iandotherswimmersbentdowninareadyposture.Eveninthisposition,Icouldfeelmyheartwasbeatingwildlyandmylegsfeltshaky.Then,thewhistleblewandwejumpedintothewater,strokingforwarddesperately.ThoughIhadpracticedthousandsoftimes,thetwohundredmilestonesseemedendlessandallIfeltwasthesplashingsoundfromotherswimmersandmyself.Suddenly,therefereeblewthewhistlewhichsignaledwewereonthelastlegofourrace.Paragraph2:Therewasonly50meterstogo.

Mylimbsfeltburningwithsoretirednesspermeating